AdzPower's fanfic "Charmed Reborn" an alternate season four

[adzpower]

Soooooooooo, I've done it, I've published the very FIRST chapter of my new fanfic, "Charmed Reborn". I won't lie, I'm nervous, fanfic has never been my strong point, but I'm willing to take any kind of criticism, how else will I improve? Any questions? Just ask.
Some background info, I began working on this fic maybe around a year ago? I got about ten chapters in but never published them, I was way too anxious, and then my laptop hardrive blew and I hadn't backed them up anywhere (I'm an idiot), so I lost all motivation to continue, but recently I got back into it, finding the ambition to one again create a cool fanfic for those of us who think Charmed should have continued with the original P3.

Anyways, here are the links:
Chapter One: "Unexpressed Fury".
Chapter Two: "Rescue Strategy".
Chapter Three: "A Day in the Life".
Chapter Four: "Operation: Rescue Cole".
Chapter Five: "South Bay Social Services".
Chapter Six: "When In London".
Chapter Seven: "All Seeing Eye".
Chapter Eight: "Hurricane Shax".
Chapter Nine: "In Which it all Goes to Hallihell".
Chapter Ten: "Phoebs?"
Chapter Eleven: "The Sting of Betrayal".
Chapter Twelve: "Guilty or Not Guilty?"
Chapter Thirteen: "Phoebe Finds her Thing".
Chapter Fourteen: "What if The Seer Won?"
Chapter Fifteen: "Chris' Reveal".
Chapter Sixteen: "The Plan".
Chapter Seventeen: "Prudence Halliwell".
Chapter Eighteen: "Piper Halliwell".
Chapter Nineteen: "Phoebe Halliwell".
Chapter Twenty: "Paige Matthews".
Chapter Twenty-One: "Hell Has Broken Loose".
Chapter Twenty-Two: "The Power of Three".
And if anyone is interested I can post them on here as well.

[sol]

Usually I don't read fanfic, but I'm glad that all our talk about how the season'ld have been nice if there had been the original CO generate new stories!

I read it willingly

[adzpower]

Thank you for reading Sol. It means a lot. Yes, I was very inspired by all the conversations we've all had.

[Deleted]

Glad to see that you've decided to revive this idea.

Oh, and this time remember to back up

[adzpower]

Haha, yes, definitely backing it up this time.

[Deleted]

So now we have three alternate Season Four storylines going on here.  Good to see that our conversations have started up so many creative juices.

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Apr 5, 2016 16:55:32 GMT -5 @rexandhannah1 said:

So now we have three alternate Season Four storylines going on here.  Good to see that our conversations have started up so many creative juices.

I know.   We've now got two Prue/Piper/Phoebe Season 4s and a Prue/Piper/Paige one.  Both of those combos are what I would've preferred to see over Piper/Phoebe/Paige.  Looking forward to seeing how all three develop.

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Kinda fun to get these looks at what Season Four might have been, had Shannen not been fired.  

These stories gel much better with the end of S3 that the show did.

[Deleted]

I see you pulled a JJ Abrams here, creating an alternate time line and setting your stories there.

And, you have Rex and Hannah in your story, and they're actually doing something good! I nearly dropped my drink when I saw that.

Looking forward to the next chapter.


PS.  I've just added you to my Favourite Authors list at FF.net.

[adzpower]

Thanks Tim, means a lot to get your seal of approval. I knew I had to bring Rex and Hannah into it somehow, they were so underused in the show and I wanted to give them a shot at redemtpion.

[Deleted]

Thanks Tim, means a lot to get your seal of approval.

You're welcome.

I knew I had to bring Rex and Hannah into it somehow, they were so underused in the show and I wanted to give them a shot at redemtpion.

I'm glad I'm not the only one who feels this way

[val1993]

Although I really liked the first episode the idea of Prue drowning her sorrow in alcohol seems really untrue to the character. I mean after Prue constantly haunting demons for the whole S3 we see her being so desperate and inert when it actually came to saving her sisters? But keep it up, I have to hand it over to you: you've done a really good job.

[adzpower]

Wow, thanks for the feedback val, I do really appreciate it, yeah the alcohol thing, I wasn't going to make it a big deal but I remembered Paige's problem with alcohol and thought maybe I could try and do it justice to another character but I think I may ditch it, like you said, it wasn't really until after I'd published the story that I thought maybe it was a big out of character.

[val1993]

Apr 6, 2016 12:17:03 GMT -5 adzpower said:

Wow, thanks for the feedback val, I do really appreciate it, yeah the alcohol thing, I wasn't going to make it a big deal but I remembered Paige's problem with alcohol and thought maybe I could try and do it justice to another character but I think I may ditch it, like you said, it wasn't really until after I'd published the story that I thought maybe it was a big out of character.

You are welcome, again, the overall story is really great!

[adzpower]

Chapter two is now available everyone.

[Deleted]

Hated to see Rex and Hannah die again.  They didn't get their full 24 hours.

Are they back in the Wasteland, or, maybe, just maybe, the Elders stepped in and arranged for them to go somewhere nicer?  Can you make that happen (just a throwaway line would do it).

[adzpower]

hAHA! Tim have you hacked into my saved files? That's EXACTLY what I had planned.

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Tim have you hacked into my saved files? That's EXACTLY what I had planned.

Just another case of great minds thinking alike

[adzpower]

Chapter three now out everyone.

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This chapter had almost a Supernatural vibe to it.  I mean the Demons being people the sisters knew for some time, posing as humans. 

Of course, the sisters kicked butt.  And they're acting like the sisters I know and love