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Post by oddball7 on Jan 7, 2005 22:05:55 GMT -5
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here are part one and part two of my charmed chris fics hope you enjoy them!
Beginning- Part One
Revelations- Part Two
also, if anyone's interested, here's a Charmed Ones' fic.
The Wyatt Quest
hey everyone, here is Part Three of my Alternate Universe of Charmed. hope y'all would like this...here's a little something..
Two men wearing long, black robes are walking briskly, side by side, in a dark cave. Each one has a long wand in their right hands, a gem of crimson red on its tip. They walk faster, an intense feeling of fear growing in their chests.
“We must hurry, Koska,” one of the men intones nervously, “The master is not well known for his patience.”<br>
The other named Koska hastens his pace and turns to his companion, “I know…forgive me, Bismarck, for the delay.”
“Do not ask for my forgiveness, Koska, it is not up to me to decide our fate. Let us hope that the master will have mercy on us,” Bismarck shudders.
They walk hastily, the sounds of their boots echoing throughout the catacombs. They raise their wands, and a red light flashes, guiding them as they find their way in the cave. They quickly take a sharp turn, and finally enter the largest room in the Underworld-Throne Room. They are greeted by a scantily-clad woman, a crystal ball in her hand.
“The master has been waiting for you, fools! Come!” the woman orders, leading the way deeper into the Throne Room.
Bones and skulls of different creatures line the walls of the Underworld. Flames from torches illuminate the way, the dancing flames creating shadows of different lengths and sizes. The three figures move along silently, the only sounds audible are the flames licking the air and the sounds echoing from their feet. They stop by a huge boulder that seemingly blocks the way.
Bismarck and Koska take a step back, and watch in amazement, as the Oracle waves her hand in front of the boulder. The towering boulder magically disappears, and a stairway suddenly emerges from where the boulder once is standing. The threesome continue to march, a feeling of impending doom building in their chests, as they climb the stone flights up to the master’s lair.
Finally, the threesome has reached the end of the stone steps. They begin walking again, and stop in front of a huge wooden door. The Oracle once again waves her hand, and the door magically opens, a hair-raising *creak* reverberating all over the Underworld.
The Oracle continues to lead the way, and after a few minutes of walking, stops. An enormous golden throne sits in front of her, a figure that is cloaked in shadows sitting on it.
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Oh yay! You posted it really quickly!Oh, the tension in the cave, you could cut it with a knife.
Can't wait to see how you portray Wyatt! Continue soon!
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YAY!!! This is turning into a trilogy!!! ALL RIGHT!!! First, tho, before I get too far away from Revelations--I hope you read my review for it and hope you liked it, Red!
Then onto this one. I'll admit I got a giggle out of the name Bismarck for a demon (I *love* eating Bismarcks, one of my favorite pastries!), it was just the right moment for a touch of humor! Coz Roxy was right; you could cut that tension with a knife!!! Very, very *very* well done, description-wise; I'm so jealous of people who can write descriptions so well!!!
I also liked your using the Oracle--I always liked her better than the Seer. The Oracle truly seemed to be a servant of the Source; I never thought the Seer was--she only pretended to be!!
Please update soon--such a great start!!!
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charmedroxy- oh wow! thanks for the review! yeah, i agree. writing this part sent some shivers down my spine
esmeralda- oh that's why the name Bismarck sounds so familiar! i know that ive heard that somewhere!!! LOL! i didnt realize that it's a name of a pastry... thanks for the wonderful review,by the way, for both this and Revelations. i am so honored that you loved part two and im glad that you like the Oracle better than the Seer... the Oracle seems more mysterious and loyal to the Source... thanks for the complement, esmeralda...
“My liege…the Mind Sorcerers are here…” the Oracle speaks in a meek voice. She bows her head, waiting for other instructions.
The figure stands from his throne, an aura of power burning from his presence. “You’re late!” He shouts, and without warning, hurls a fireball at one of the Mind Sorcerers. The fireball hits the Mind Sorcerer on the chest, and red and yellow flames begin licking at his body, consuming his very being. The Mind Sorcerer screams, “Aaaaaiiii,” and within seconds, Koska is reduced to nothing but a pile of ash. Bismarck bows his head, fearing the worst, expecting the same fate that has greeted his fellow sorcerer. “I HATE LATE!”<br>
Bismarck could feel his master’s eyes staring at him- his gaze sending pinpricks of heat on Bismarck’s scaly skin.
“YOU!” the figure steps out of the shadows- revealing the face of Wyatt Matthew Halliwell. He turns to his minion, Bismarck, the remaining Mind Sorcerer, “How goes the ritual? Is she one of us yet? Has she ‘decided’ to join our side?”
“N…N…No…master…sh…she…” Bismarck stutters; he couldn’t find the right words. He is terrified that his master would kill him for his failure. “Sh…she is t…too strong for our magicks, my…my lord…”
“WHAT?!? Aaaarrrgghh!!! You useless imbecile!” Wyatt screams, his voice causing shards of rocks to fall and shower on top of the trembling sorcerer. A fireball suddenly forms in Wyatt’s hands, and Bismarck looks at his master in fear, his eyes quivering in dread, anxiety and terror swimming in his red eyes- the realization of his impending vanquish dawning on him.
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“M…Master, h…have m…mercy…Plea….aaiiii,” Bismarck shrieks in agony as slowly, his body is being consumed by dark red flames, eating away at his scaly body. Within seconds, his ashes join those of his fellow Mind Sorcerer.
“Useless fools!” Wyatt says, as he steps down from his throne, stepping on the two piles of ashes that have once been his minions. He walks over to the Oracle, who has her head bowed. He lifts her head with his hands, and smiles as he sees the Oracle’s terrified eyes.
“My…my liege,” she whispers.
“Show me Paige Matthews, Oracle,” Wyatt commands.
The Oracle opens her left palm, and her crystal ball appears magically. “Reveal,” she mutters. The face of Paige Matthews, bleeding and pale, suddenly emerges from the misty surface of the crystal ball.
“My dear Auntie Paige…ever the defiant little witch, you’ll join me soon, my dear aunt…” Wyatt declares, looking intently into the crystal ball, “Soon…”
im sorry to disappoint you,...but i wont be able to update much this week, after this one. stupid homework
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Oh, Red!!! You can't leave us like this for a whole week!!! I feel *so* bad for Paige, being trapped by Wyatt!! (By the way, although Piper chose his middle name to be named after his brave Auntie Paige, according to the spoilers and the scripts, Wyatt's name is actually Wyatt Matthew Halliwell, not Matthews!) But how strong she is to be able to withstand the Mind Sourcers!! I'm so proud of her!! But *please*, Chris, now that you're back, SAVE YOUR AUNTIE PAIGE RIGHT NOW!!! (I'm perturbed at Piper for not warning Chris about her baby sister!!)
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whoops! i didnt see that error! wow, thanks again for spotting my typo's esmeralda!!! i'll try my best not to leave you hanging..i am so sorry..but i'll be posting soon...really really soon... thanks for the review
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Oh, go Paige!! Don't give in!!Red, it's fantastic...Wyatt's so evil. Can't wait for the next update!
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Ohhhh im going to finish reading pt. 2 then come and read this!! So IM BACK!!
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Wonderful Job so far Red!!!! Keep up the wonderful work!!!!
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charmedroxy- im about to post it soon hehe
ethan!!! hey welcome back!!!!!!!!!!! how was your trip! lemme say, i missed you so much! ive missed your reviews and im so glad that you're back- safe and sound i hope everything went well on your trip? anyway. thank you for your reviews- here and in part two
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WOW! Why didn't I see this sooner?!?! YAY, I had forgotten all about Paige being Prisoner of Wyatt. Well, not YaY that she is a prisoner, but YAY that I remebered she is alive! Anyway, GREAT job so far, I am looking forward to reading more!!!!!! As soon as you can post anyways, I know how it is with school and stuff, so I'll wait patiently for another update!
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 7, 2005 22:07:14 GMT -5
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YAY! thanks for posting your review prue21 thanks for understanding me, ive written a small deal of chapter 1, and here it is hope y'all would like it
Chapter 1
“Mmmm…” Chris lets out, as he and Bianca finally pull free from their passionate kiss. “I love you…” he smiles at his wife, who was lying on their bed.
“I love you, too, with all my heart,” Bianca replies as she takes Chris’ hands in hers.
Chris and Bianca have been lying on their bed for the last two hours, kissing each other, caressing each other’s bodies intimately. Ever since his return from the “dead” and his discovery of his wife’s pregnancy, Chris has been spending more time with his wife- taking a break from vanquishing duties and his witchy responsibilities.
Chris leans in again, kissing his wife on the cheeks, and then finally kissing her on the lips. “So how are you feeling, honey? Are you okay?” He asks as he rubs Bianca’s stomach.
“Everything’s fine, Chris,” Bianca smiles warmly and looks at her husband lovingly. “Stop being a worry-wart, honey, you’re starting to sound like your mom!” She laughs gently.
“Hey,” Chris bites Bianca’s arms playfully, making Bianca laugh harder.
“Hey, stop that!” The couple both end up bursting into laughter. They continue to kiss and touch each other, when they suddenly hear a *slam* from downstairs, indicating Steven and Sarah’s return from their demon-hunt.
“And there goes our privacy,” Chris mutters, shaking his head.
“There’s always tonight,” Bianca whispers seductively as she nibbles on Chris’ earlobe.
Chris giggles as the sensation sends tickles to his spine, and pulls Bianca in for another kiss. “Mmm…” he mutters.
They finally pull back and Chris grabs his shirt and puts it on, his eyes looking at Bianca warmly. When Chris and Bianca are fully dressed, they descend the stairs, hand-in-hand.
“Chris! Chris!” Steven calls out urgently to the Manor.
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Aw Chris and Bianca are such a cute couple! Oh what's wrong with Steven?! Red, thanks for the update! Maybe...another one soon...?
Once again, great!!
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WO that was so AWESOME!!!!!!!! i agree with Roxy Chris and Bianca are a really cute couple. Oh and Wyatt Evil! (narrows eye's at Wyatt) anyway that was REALLY good really well written out i could picture it. please!!!!!!! update really soon!!!!!!!
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Awww! I just love Chris and Bianca together, they are so cute! I hope nothing happens to Bianca and the baby, that would just crush Chris! Hmmm, wonder what is up with Steven? Hopefully nothing too serious! Great update, More Please!!!!
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It's so good! Loved the Mind Sorcerers -- a bit of trivia, Bismark was also the name of a WWII German Battleship that was supposed to be unsinkable. Of course, the British sank it, so the name fits so well here!
And the Chris and Bianca intimate scene is just so well done. Like everybody else, I love them together -- well of course I do!
Update as soon as you can!
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oh my gosh that was a great update!!!!! You are a really good Writer!!! Keep up the wonderful work and please update soon!!!!!
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 7, 2005 22:07:46 GMT -5
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charmedroxy, horsefreak, and prue- i so agree. Chris and Bianca are soooo cute!!! thanks for the comments
scifi- wow, that name sure is famous! Bismarck...LOL, thanks for that wonderful piece of trivia, scifi..
ethan- oh wow, thanks for the wonderful complement ethan
here's the next update guys hope you'll like it
Chris and Bianca hurry down, responding to the pressing call of their teammate.
“Wha…” Chris trails off as he sees Steven carrying Sarah in his arms, bleeding and unconscious.
“Sarah!” Chris yells as he jumps down the stairs, ignoring the remaining steps of the rickety stairway. “Put her on the couch, Steven. Hurry!” he instructs hastily.
Once Steven has carefully laid the unconscious tele-empath on the couch, Chris kneels down beside her. He places his hands on top of Sarah’s chest, where there is a scorch mark surrounded by small puddles of warm, sticky blood. He closes his eyes in concentration, gathering his strength and focusing his healing magicks into his hands.
Bianca and Steven watch from behind, and see as Chris’ hands glow a golden white. Steven closes his eyes and mutters his prayer; he soon smiles as he hears Sarah cough, signifying her “return.” He whispers a “thank you” to the Wind and rushes over to his friend’s side.
“Sarah! Thank goodness you’re awake! Are you okay? Is there anything I can get you? Water, tea?” Steven hugs Sarah and bombards her with questions.
“Ow! Steve, you’re crushing my ribs,” Sarah winces as Steven tightens his grip on her.
Chris and Bianca try their best to stifle their laughs as Steven pulls back and Sarah playfully punches Steven’s shoulder. The couple watches in glee as the two neophyte witches finally develop a stronger bond with each other.
“So what happened during the hunt, guys?” Bianca speaks first; her brows knitted in intrigue. “Who attacked this time, and what happened to Sarah?”
Steven helps Sarah to sit on the couch properly, and looks at Bianca sheepishly. “Well, we went out to hunt demons, like you and Chris had told us…So Sarah here scans the area for demons and other random evil, since both of us really can’t do the scrying thing…”
“Oops, sorry about that, I haven’t trained either of you in scrying…” Chris cuts in and looks at them apologetically.
“Right…” Steven continues. “So we set out to the high school, where according to Sarah, ‘the feeling was strongest.’ We go there, we scout the area, you know, the usual drill. So we walk around, talking, trying to get over our anxiety. Suddenly, out of nowhere, a band of rogue…what was it again?” Steven stops and scratches his head. He turns to Sarah, “What were they called again?”<br>
“Bounty Hunters,” Sarah answers. “A group of them suddenly shimmered from out of nowhere and began shooting lightning bolts at us. We were outnumbered.” Sarah shakes her head, recalling the event that has occurred almost an hour ago. “We were surrounded, forced into a tight corner. Steven began to fight them off, blow them up one by one,” Sarah says, “but there were just the two of us…”
“Sarah tried to cast spells, and was successful in fending some of them off,” Steven continues. “But soon, we grew tired. My blasts soon turned into harmless sparks, which the Bounty Hunters shrugged off. Sarah’s spells turned into bubbles of light…We were backed up, trapped…”
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The New Charmed Ones just fascinate me more and more, Red! I love the fact that there's now an attraction between Steven & Sarah! But I think Chris and Bianca blew it by sending them off demon-hunting by themselves! Hopefully they don't make that mistake again!!
Also, I'm so glad that Chris has figured out how to heal (by finally admitting that he's more like his father than he wanted to admit??!!). Hopefully that means when he finds Paige, he can heal her, too!!
Speaking of, CHRIS, GO SAVE YOUR AUNTIE PAIGE RIGHT NOW!!! Piper, appear to your son and tell him about your baby sister, RIGHT NOW!!!!
Please update soon!!!
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Oh Red that was a wonderful update!!!!! Please update again soon!!!! I also agree with Es!!
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Red, AMAZING update! Poor kids trying to fend of that many demons on their own *smacks Chris for being to busy with Bianca to help them out*! Hopefully Bianca won't be doing any demon hunting b/c she is pregnant, but come on Chris, you can't stay in bed with her all day, LOL! So should I assume Wyatt sent these bounty hunters after them? Evil little Wyatt....errrrr. Anyway, PLEASE UPDATE SOON! I LOVE IT!!!
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 7, 2005 22:08:38 GMT -5
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thanks for the wonderful reviews everyone! here's a hug for each of you im so sorry i couldnt reply to each of your posts...im terribly sorry..im currently nearing breakdown because of some confusing problems...but here's a short update..please forgive me if im unable to update regularly in the future..ive tried writing new chapters...but my brain seems to fail me...
“Then, with one final gesture, Steven blew three demons in front of, clearing a way for us…” Sarah recalls. “To ensure our safety and to buy us a couple of minutes, I cast a final spell, the “Fire Wall” spell that I read from the Book of Shadows.”
“We ran as fast as we could, dodging stray lightning bolts as best as we can. But then suddenly, without warning, Sarah pushed me out of the way…the next thing I saw was her flying in another direction. She...she…” Steven pauses and looks at Sarah admiringly, “…took the lightning blast that was meant for me…I looked back, and saw that the demons couldn’t get past the flames, so I carried her and ran and ran…till I got here…”
Chris nods at Steven and Sarah, both of whom are sitting in silence. “Bright side? At least no one followed you home.” He tries his best to make the two smile, but suddenly jumps in surprise as Sarah screams out in pain.
“Ahhhh,” Sarah shrieks, holding her head in pain, “Incoming!”<br>
Three Bounty Hunters suddenly shimmer inside the Manor, energy balls in their hands. “Witches!” one of them roars, “Kill them!” The Bounty Hunters begin to throw energy balls around, causing splinters of wood and shards of glass to fly about the living room.
The four witches immediately react on instinct. Steven and Sarah directly dive off the couch, and use it for cover. Bianca shimmers out, and reappears behind a female Bounty Hunter, stabbing her with her athame. Chris flings his hands out, causing a stray energy ball to telekinetically fly back to its sender, vanquishing him instantly. Sarah lifts her head up from their hiding place and sees the third Bounty Hunter shimmer out, and materialize inches away behind an unsuspecting Bianca.
“Behind you!” she screams. Sarah looks in terror as an energy ball flies toward the Phoenix. Suddenly, she feels the demon’s anger; Sarah blinks her eyes, forcing the demon’s anger back to him. She opens her eyes in surprise, as the energy ball suddenly flies to the opposite direction, returning back to the Bounty Hunter, causing him to erupt in flames. Sarah blinks again in surprise and whispers to herself, “Whoa, did I just do that?”
Chris looks at the living room and sees the destruction that has been caused by the attack. “Damn it! Is everyone okay?" Chris asks the group, scanning them for any injury.
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First, Red, I'm so sorry to hear that you're having problems!! I pray that things will be OK for you very, very soon!! I'm very impressed that despite your problem that you're still able to post--I know I never could!!
But, no, no, please don't have anything be wrong with Bianca or with their baby! It would kill both of them!!
I'm impressed with how well Sarah & Steven did on their own, and I love Sarah taking the bolt for Steven. But I still think Chris better go with them on the next demon-hunt!!
Please take good care of yourself, Red, and when you can, update soon!
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i also agree with es again, i doe hope the baby is fine!!! And i hope you feel better or whatever is wrong!!! Also take your time if you cant update then you cant update!
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Yes, I agree I hope the baby is fine. Bianca needs a good talking to, no demon fighting while pregnant unless the baby has a force field like Wyatt did. As for the younger two, well it seems like they can take care of themselves but they need to be more careful! Poor Chris! He's just got way to much to handle, I feel so sorry for him! Hope you update soon Red, this is a FANTASTIC story! And I hope everything is going okay for you too!
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first off, i edited something from my previous update (just a minor one)...
second, thank you esmeralda, demonboy (yay, a new reader, or are you ethan?), and prue, for your concern... , you three are the best darn it, these problems are doing a serious damage to my writing and i cant seem to concentrate. but i love writing so much that's why im finding ways to block out the sadness when im writing. and as they say, let's get the show on the road...
here is the next update for the world's greatest readers/ reviewers/ critiques thanks again everyone
“I’m okay,” Steven replies as he scratches his head.
“So am I, I think” Sarah says as she rubs her aching temples. She is still taking in the fact that she has been able to deflect an energy ball back to the Bounty Hunter.
“I…I’m fine…” Bianca replies shakily, clutching her stomach. Feeling a bit dizzy, she suddenly sinks weakly to a chair, “But…but I…I think I need to sit down for a while...”<br>
Chris rushes to his wife’s side and kneels before her, taking her trembling hands in his. “Honey, what happened? Is there…are you…is the baby…?” There are many questions floating around in Chris’ head, and anxiety begins to flood his systems.
“I…I’m fine, honey…no need to worry,” Bianca grasps Chris’ hands firmly and smiles at her husband reassuringly, “It’s…it’s just that…I never realized that shimmering took a lot out of me…” Bianca stops and gasps for breath, sweat beads rolling down her cheeks.
Sarah disappears into the kitchen, and seconds later returns with a glass of ice cold water in hand. “Here, drink this,” she hands the glass of water to her friend and stands beside a worried Steven.
“Thanks, Sarah, for this. And for saving me earlier,” Bianca beams thankfully at the tele-empath. She takes in the water and breathes rhythmically for a couple of seconds, steadying herself, gathering her strength. “It looks like your powers are growing.”
“Wow,” Sarah stares at everyone around her in disbelief, “you really think so?”
“Yes,” Bianca replies with certainty. She tries to get up, but is stopped by her husband.
“Whoa, what do you think you’re doing, honey?” Chris asks worriedly.
“Well, I’m planning to go to our room to get some rest. Demon vanquishing is not as fun as I can remember,” Bianca says in between gasps.
“That’s because you’re pregnant now. Here, at least let me help you up,” Chris says, and offers his hands to his wife. He helps Bianca up and lets her body lean on his.
The couple walks hand in hand up the stairs, a tired and weakened Bianca leaning on a worried Chris for support; while, Steven and Sarah remain in the living room and begin to engage in conversation.
“Hey, umm, Sarah…” Steven turns to Sarah and grins sheepishly, “Thanks for saving my life earlier. I owe you one…”
Sarah smiles at Steven and shrugs, “It’s nothing, I’m sure you would’ve done the same thing for me.”<br>
Steven and Sarah share a very intimate smile, when Chris suddenly come bounding down the stairs. “Hey, guys…” He pauses as he sees the two witches look at each other intimately. “Ummm, am I interrupting anything?”<br>
“Wha? Oh..” Sarah is the first to react, she looks at Chris, her cheeks a deep red, “Oh…no…no”
Steven laughs out loud, hiding his embarrassment, and rubs his neck, “Ah…no, we’re cool, right?”<br>
“Right!” Sarah responds in false cheerfulness, still rubbing her flushed cheeks.
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Yes red im demonboy too!!! i forgot to change over usernames!!!! I dont have any time right this second to read the update but i will later tonight!!! Im going to see spiderman 2!
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Great updates, Red! Poor Bianca, to be used to being so strong, but now weakened by her "condition." I'm liking the sparks between Steven and Sarah, though!
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Awww! Steven and Sarah! Cute, very cute! So realistic about them being embarrassed when walked in on by Chris! Bianca... wow! I'm just glad the baby is okay for now. It must be very hard for Bianca to feel so weak and not be of any help to her *family*. Hopefully she will find away to both be able to fight and defend herself in case of an attack like the last one, and be able to protect the baby at the same time! Update when you can, I can't wait to read more, but if you can't then I'll just have to wait patiently I guess! I do hope everything is getting better for you, or at least will get better soon! Great Update as usual, by the way!
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Oh that was really good!!! i hope that you are feeling much better now!!! Keep the great updates coming!!
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Very, very nicely done, Red!! I loved the scene between Steven & Sarah, especially when Chris walked in, and I loved Bianca having to be weak for her child, when she's so used to being strong--like Piper must've felt while she was carrying Chris and had to be shuffled off to Magic School, as compared to when she was invincible while carrying Wyatt!
Again, I hope you feel better very, very soon!!! Please update when you can!!
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Red. sorry I haven't reviewed in god-knows-when, but this was brilliant!(again) Poor Bianca...
And I have to agree with Esmeralda, I loved the Steven/Sarah scene
Update again soon!!
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hi everyone, first of all, thanks for the support, i just wanna let you all know that im feeling a lot better, and im just glad that im almost over all the in my life. sigh i dont know how i get myself into these predicaments, but c'est la vie!
ethan- hey! so how was spiderman2? better than the first one right? hehe thanks for the kind words!
scifi- thanks for the review, im glad you're liking the Steven-Sarah relationship
prue21- thank you so much for your wonderful review! wow, everyone's liking the Steven-Sarah relationship...
esmeralda- thanks for the review, esmeralda! im feeling better, thanks! thank you so much for your concern
roxy- its okay! im just glad that you reviewed
here's the next update! thank you so much...
“Oh-kay,” Chris replies, a sliver of doubt visible in his eyes. “Umm, if you’re not too busy, can I ask both of your help?”<br>
“Sure, anything,” Sarah answers quickly, her cheeks returning to their usual color.
“Yeah, sure, Chris, what can we do for you?” Steven replies.
“Thanks, you guys,” Chris smiles as he descends from the stairs, carrying a brown box in his hands. He walks over to Steven and Sarah and opens the box, revealing huge pieces of clear quartz crystals.
“Quartz crystals?” Steven peeks into the box and asks in curiosity, “What are those for?”<br>
“For protection. These crystals have the power to repel evil,” Chris says as he hands the box over to Sarah and pulls out two sheets of paper from his pocket. He hands the crumpled sheets of paper to Steven and Sarah. “Here, chant this spell while holding the crystal in your right hand. Wait for the crystals to glow, then place them on every window and door in the Manor, okay? There’s more than enough for the entire Manor,” Chris instructs.
“Got it,” Steven says enthusiastically as he takes the sheet of paper from Chris’ hands.
“No problem,” Sarah seconds as she grabs her sheet of paper from Chris. She hands some crystals to Steven and starts to walk to the front door.
“I’ll be upstairs when you need me, okay?” Chris calls out to the two as heads up the stairs.
Steven holds the crystal delicately in his right hand, and looks down at the spell that Chris has given them. “Okay, let’s see,
White crystals glow with power,
repel evil in this very hour.”<br>
He can feel a slight tingle in his right hand, and when he opens his right hand, the crystal glows a bright yellow color. “Cool!” He positions the crystal on a nearby window and proceeds on to the next.
While placing the crystals all over the Manor, Steven tries to strike yet another conversation with Sarah. “Chris has the worst timing, huh?”<br>
“Hmm?” Sarah turns around to face Steven as she finishes chanting the spell over another crystal. “Oh, I guess,” Sarah blushes again, recalling the tender moment that she and Steven have shared earlier.
“Um, so, I’ve been studying natal charts and Astrology from the books that Chris had given us to review…” Steven tries his best to keep the conversation flow smoothly. “What’s your star sign?”
“Me? Well, I’m a Virgo,” Sarah replies as she picks yet another crystal from the box. “How about you?”<br>
“I’m a Pisces,” Steven says, “Umm, did you know that according to the book, Astrology: Magick and Practice, Virgo and Pisces are very much compatible?” Steven beams coyly at Sarah.
Sarah’s face turns into a dark red color, and she could feel the heat rise up to her face. “R…really?”
“Yeah,” Steven says as he grasps another crystal in his right hand.
The two continue to talk about their star signs, and resume their task of distributing the crystals all over the Manor; as they complete their task, a golden veil envelops the entire Manor, encasing it in a golden shield.
Unbeknownst to the occupants of the Manor, a cloaked figure watches from a distance, witnessing the veil as it washes over the Manor. The figure stares at the Manor angrily, and with a nod, disappears out, leaving only a thin puff of smoke ominously in the air.
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Loved that update! I don't know much about astrology, but the funny thing is my mom is a Virgo and my dad is a Pisces, so I think they are a very good match!! LOL. Great idea to have them put crystals around the manor for protection, Way to think about Bianca's safety!! Now, who is this Cloaked Figure, Wyatt maybe? Or a random demon he has sent after them? Oh I can't wait to find out!! Glad to hear things are going well for you Red! Please update whenever you get the chance, I am loving this story WAY to much!!! LOL!
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I also love this update, Red! I continue to love the relationship that is developping between Sarah & Steven; it does sound like they're soulmates, the way Piper & Leo are and Chris & Bianca are.
I'm also wondering about Mr. Creep-in-the-Cloak. Wyatt? One of his demons? Some other creep? Can't wait to find out!!
Please update soon!!
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Wow wow wow that was AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
poor Bianca i feel so bad for her oh and the Steven Sahrah is really sweet. and Chris i feel bad for him too.
(PS) I am really sorry that i haven't rewued i a reallly really long time i can relate to the parcdicments. hope you update soon!
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Great update Red!!!! But i do have a question for you, are you a girl or a guy, im leaning more towards a girl!! lol Sp2 was great, yes it was better than the first one!!!
I agree with Es, i like how the relationship between Sarah and Stephen is growing, are we looking at a posible realationship growing???
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oh wow! what a coincidence!!! hehe thanks for the wonderful review, prue!!!
esmeralda- thanks for the review also! im glad that ive got everyones attention on mr creep! hehehe *mysterious laugh*
horsefreak- oh its alright, i just hope that you're fine. take lotsa rest okay??? im glad that you're able to review, despite your situation.
ethan- yep, you're right, im a gal! hehe totally loved SP2, i even watched it twice!! LOL! yey! im glad that you're loving the whole Steven and Sarah thing as much as everyone is! will there be something for them in the future? let's hope so! hehe
here's a little from Ch.2 to whet your appetites. hope you'll like it
Chapter 2
A thin cloud of smoke hovers around a dark cavern, drifting above three shadowy figures. One of the figures turns and waves his hands, and suddenly, the cloud of smoke swirls around, finally materializing back into its human form, revealing a Smoke Demon.
“Speak,” the male figure orders.
The Smoke Demon bows her head, and looks up, “Yes, my lord. My lord, it seems that your bro…” the demon hesitates, and then continues, “it seems that the Halliwell offspring is still alive. I sensed his presence while I was surveying the Manor. And, my liege, they have also put up the infamous crystal protection around the Manor, I’m afraid my magicks will not be able to penetrate their defenses.” The Smoke Demon bows her head again, awaiting further instructions from her master.
“Useless imbecile! Begone!” her master yells angrily.
“Yes, lord Anon,” the Smoke Demon turns into a cloud of smoke and swirls out of the cavern.
Anon, or Wyatt, turns back to the two figures behind him. “Oracle,” he beckons, as he walks toward the two other figures. “Can you see past the shield?”
“Reveal,” the Oracle whispers, staring at her crystal ball and waiting for images to form. She squints in concentration, and frowns in defeat, as nothing but mists appear. “I’m sorry, my liege, but, as it is, their Manor is guarded, even from my divinations.”<br>
*edited by RedPhoenix. last line omitted, it wasnt meant to be written there. i am so sorry. i am such a scatter-brain lately.*
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Paige!!!!(I think..) Chris go save you Aunt Paige right now..without getting yourself killed preferably. Ah, So Mr-Creep-in-the-cloak(As Esmeralda put it) is a smoke demon... Yay! I should of said it sooner, but the Oracle = better than the Seer!! Aw and Sarah and Steven! Cute!
Update soon!!!
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charmedroxy- yay! im glad that you also like the Steven and Sarah thing going on! im sorry if i posted such a short update. but ive been becoming a scatter-brain lately..
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YAY! Love the update Red!! But Boooo to evil Wyatt, the smoke demon, the Seer, and everyone else evil in the room!! LOL! Yep, I agree with Roxy, Chris GO SAVE PAIGE!! I just wonder if Chris knows about Paige at all? Maybe he thinks she is dead? Anyway Red, great update, great story, and don't worry we are ALL a little scatterbrained sometimes, you should have saw me during my Finals week LOL! Can't wait to read more! Update as soon as you can!
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LOL, Red!! With your screen name, I tend to think of you as a redhead (I am--medium brown with strong red highlights--you notice the brown when I'm inside, but it goes red when I go outside--like Paige's when she *first* went red, before it was blondish red), but I'm beginning to think of you more as a blonde--or as Marcy! I get a giggle out of you being scatter-brained!
But more seriously. YAY! The crystal protection is working!!! Take that, Anon, I mean Wyatt! And don't even want to admit that Chris is your brother, huh? Definitely a creep you are!!
Please update soon, Red!!
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Anyway Red, great update, great story, and don't worry we are ALL a little scatterbrained sometimes, you should have saw me during my Finals week LOL! Can't wait to read more!
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thank you so much for understanding, prue sometimes when im typing the rest of the story, i type in senseless phrases and sentences and then i go back and edit them, and then type the same things over and over again! LOL! i think i need to return my brain to the grocery and buy a new one!!!
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i once was! hehe well actually half brunette half redhead, coz i had the front part of my head dyed red! hehe wow, i would so love to get highlights into my brunette locks, but i dont know if my parents would approve (LOL, they got the shocks of their lives when i told them that i wanted to color my hair, hahaha boy was there a big drama after they agreed! )
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me? A blonde? LOL! marcy? oh my Goddess! you should have seen me four to five years ago! i was worse than Marcy! imagine me chanting all types of spells, mostly Charmed, and dancing in circles so that i can "activate my powers". LOL!! looking back, i can empathize with Marcy
yay im glad that you're liking the way the story is progressing Esmeralda. thank you so much i'll try to update as much as i can, as soon as i get a new brain or at least have this one fixed. also i want to thank you, you've helped me get better...im almost fully recovered from my problems
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no update for now, but i'll be adding more soon! thanks again
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That's the fun of being an old broad, Red, you don't have to ask for permission--you just do what you want!! I've always had reddish-brown hair, but now it's grey, so I color it.
I'm trying to imagine you with red in front and brown in the back--WOW! Puts a different image in my head for sure!!
My favorite line about my own brain is I just washed my brain and can't do a thing with it!! That happens to me, too, a LOT!!
So get your brain together and update soon, OK?
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LOL! i just did that and my brain got stuck in the washing machine, now i have to wash it by hand! haha
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i will, thanks for cheering me up esmeralda. i will be posting as soon as i can ..
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here's a little something. sorry. i still have writer's block
“Good for nothing idiots!” Wyatt barks at the Oracle, “Leave us!”
The Oracle bows and with a thought, shimmers out of the Torture Chamber.
“Argh! Useless imbeciles!” Wyatt continues to shout, red lightning flying from his clenched fist. Wyatt stares angrily at the figure that is bound by chains and an iron ball on the wall in front of him; it suddenly shrieks out in pain, an electric shock coursing throughout its body.
“Arrrrghhh!” the bound figure shrieks in agony.
“Ah yes! Scream more for me, Paige,” Wyatt smirks, his tone changing from angry to sarcastic.
“Nggguuhh…W…why,” asks Paige, “Why…are y…you…doing this…to…to us?” She looks weakly at her nephew, feeling an ache in her chest. She still could not believe that this person, this evil monstrosity, in front of her is the same person who she has carried and cradled around in her arms years ago. A tear rolls down her cheeks, and she coughs. She can feel a warm, sticky liquid flowing down her mouth- her blood.
“Why? WHY?!?” Wyatt bellows, his voice echoing throughout the room, causing jagged shards of stone to fall on Paige. He punches the wall and looks at his aunt menacingly, “WHY??? Let me tell you ‘why’, Auntie Paige. Because ever since that half-Whitelighter came into my life, it has always been ‘Chris is good with this, Chris is good with that.’ ‘Why can’t you be more like Chris?’” He glares angrily at the weakened witch, “Well guess what, I got sick of it and I finally decided to do something about it.”
“H…How?” Paige stutters, her blood continues to flow from her mouth. She coughs once more and persists on pressing her nephew for answers. “Wh…what happ…happened to…to you?”<br>
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Oh, Red!!! First, I'm glad I was able to cheer you up. I got a *huge* kick out of you getting your brain caught in the washing machine and having to wash it by hand!!! BEEN THERE, DONE THAT, PLENTY!!!
And then, my heart is breaking for poor Paige, but a little bit for Wyatt, too. If indeed, this group of Charmed Ones continued to compare him with the Chris they remembered who came back to the past to save them (unlike the ones in SciFi's A Normal Life, but I can definitely see that happening!) and whom I'm sure they only remember the best qualities of, I can see where he may have become the way you describe him. And, of course, he's probably angrier than ever that his little brother has grown up to be just like that other Chris!! (I hate time travel--it *does* give me a headache--just like Phoebs!), so I'm sure that's why he's doing whatever he can to torture him.
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But unlike me, I'm afraid that Paige might finally be truly dying. I would think that if Wyatt really wants to torture his younger brother, he'd let Chris know, using Paige as a trap, that *maybe* might backfire on Wyatt! Well, I can certainly hope!!!!
I hope you get passed your writer's block soon, so you can update soon!!!
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Hey red im sorry i havent read any of your updates, i have been having some problems with some people on this board, so i might not be on much.
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esmeralda- wow thanks for the review!
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ethan- oh im sorry to hear youre having problems with the members. what happened? is there anything i can do to help out?
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well i really dont want to say anything right here but it was in the chat with....
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oooh better not mention names, ethan just holler if you need my help, okay?
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 7, 2005 22:11:49 GMT -5
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finally read this series ---
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Awesome updates, Red. I loved this:
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It's just so funny that he's using this classically cheesy pick-up line in all seriousness!
And yes, boo to the Smoke Demon and to Anon. I do hope "The Charmed Ones" find out about Paige soon!
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soulessfreaks- yay a new reader! thanks for reading my series
scifi- LOL, yeah, i loved that line too! hehe thanks for the review
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Red you let me miss another update! I don't know when you updated but I just now found it! You people are just going to have to bring your butts in the chatroom and DRAG me out EVERY time you update! I can almost bet you that is where I'll be! Anyway Red, that was a FANTASTIC update! LOVED IT!!! Poor Paige, like Esmeralda, I thought she was on her last breath there at the end, OH hopefully she isn't! Hopefully Chris can save her (Phoebe is with her? Am I correct, or is Phoebe dead? Now it's my turn to be a scatter brain... Must be the new purple hair dye, lol) Anyway, I dooo hope Chris can find a way to get her back alive and in one piece, and I do wish they would just vanquish Wyatt! He's making me oh so angry at the moment! DO update soon if you can! And Find some way to alert me when you do!!
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*Is sad* I keep missing updates , but I have caught up onw so now I'm happy again...PAIGE!!!! *Realises it would be better to shout at Chris*...CHRIS!!! I've said it twice!!! Go and get Paige *Puppy dog eyes* Pweety pwease?
Forgive me-I'm a little hyper. I want more soon!!! *Wants Paige to get more answers out of Wyatt/Anon* Go Paige, Go!!
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prue21- yay! im glad that you liked the latest update!
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LOL! whats happening to this thread? its turning everyone into scatterbrains! Cool purple hair!!! yeah! hehe thanks for the wonderful review prue21 i'll be updating and posting the rest of chapter 2
charmedroxy- heya! im glad that you're able to catch up! thanks for the marvelous review!
“Nothing happened to me, witch!” he spits out angrily. “I just found my new destiny.”
“NO! You…you weren’t like this…you ca…can’t be like this,” Paige stutters, and blood comes out of her mouth, “…you were good. You ARE good! You’re…you’re the twice blessed child of a Charmed One..and…and a…a. Whit…whitelighter….that…is your de..destiny.”<br>
Wyatt screams out in anger and his voice echoes throughout the entire Underworld, he raises his hands and Paige shakes uncontrollably again. “HOW DARE YOU!”
“Whuu…” Paige stares weakly in her nephew’s eyes, straining all her strength just to look at him in the eyes. “Yo…You must…*cough* listen to…to me…you are…are go…good…you ar…are twice…b..blessed…”
Wyatt screams once more and Paige’s body shakes more violently.
“Tell…tell me what ha…happened to you, Wyatt…”
“Argh!” Wyatt shouts. He walks over menacingly to his aunt and kneels down. He grabs her by her hair and stares Paige deep in the eyes. “You really want to know? ‘'esprit a moulé! [mind meld]’” He chants an ancient French spell, and suddenly both Wyatt and Paige slump down, unconscious. Wyatt falls to the ground limply, and Paige’s head lolls lifelessly to one side.
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Oh Red!!! Great update! Poor Paige! ERRRR, Chris come now and VANQUISH his sorry butt! He's currently unconscious! UPDATE SOON!!!
And yes, I did say PURPLE HAIR, what can I say, I've been quite bored this summer, LOL!
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Oh, Ethan!! I'm so sorry to hear that you're having troubles with people on the board! I've admit I've had a few tussles of my own, which is why I tend to just hang around Fan Fic--it's a lot safer and friendlier! Hope you decide to hang around here, too; I love your stories and your comments!!
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Um, Red, warn me right now!! Why do I get a feeling that this is going to be another section I'm not going to want to read until it's done and unless I"m home???!!! You know they're among my favorites and you write them so well, but PLEEEEEEEEEEEASE warn me, and then PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEASE update soon!!
P.S. Congrats on all of your votes!! I nominated yours a number of times along with others for each category, and I still think all of those are ties!!
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Oh, this is going to be a very interesting experience, finding out just why Wyatt has turned his back on his destiny as the Twice Blessed Child. Of course, we'll have to remember to take his memories with a grain of salt, since he will probably have interpreted any little thing as favoritism toward Chris. Funny how TCO sort of did a flip-flop in their favoritism: in the original timeline, Chris was probably jealous of Wyatt getting all the attention. Well, I guess we see the difference in their dispositions in how they each dealt with that jealousy, huh.
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HorseFreak91 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 204 (7/19/04 3:20 pm) Reply Re: Seduction -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- :Ok does any body else hate family reunions with a bunch of people that you have NO idea hoe they are and they all seem to know you?  ?? Anyways how is every body? don't mind me and my rant. ok this is getting really interesting i wonder what Wyatt's spell was for? oh and i feel really and for Paige and Wyatt......to anywayz your hole story is totally AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! please post more soon (or whenever you feel like it lol Edited by: HorseFreak91 at: 7/19/04 3:22 pm RedPhoenix Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 506 (7/19/04 9:21 pm) Reply to esmeralda: WARNING -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- First of all, everyone thanks for reading the update! prue21- coolie! purple hair hehe thanks for the review! esmeralda- umm yep..this story is a bit like Revelations. so yeah, this is a WARNING. yay thank you so much for voting for my fic im so honored scifi- i totally agree. i wonder how Wyatt's gonna twist the story into his own favor? hmm... i guess its now time for Wyatt to be the jealous one hehe horsefreak- well, as long as you're feeling fine just continue ranting if you want to, as long as you still review LOL! thanks for the awesome review and im glad that you like my fic...Wyatt's spell is for..well, you're gonna find out in Chapter 3, which im gonna post some time this week Esmeralda Posts: 1216 (7/19/04 10:51 pm) Reply Re: To Esmeralda: WARNING -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Thanks for the warning, Red!! PM me when I can read the whole bad part at once! I'll be sure to read it at home!!! Prue21 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 366 (7/21/04 6:24 am) Reply Re: Seduction -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Hey Red, just wanted to say you DESERVE all the votes you've gotten! This is a FABULOUS Trilogy (is it a trilogy or will there be more??) Had I known at nomintion time this WAS a trilogy (did I know that and forgot?) I would have nominated it for best Trilogy as well! Just wanted to say Keep up the Good Work!! (PS, thanks for the vote on my lil story) PEACE AND LOVE Prue21 Edited by: Prue21 at: 7/21/04 6:25 am charmed2008 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 1710 (7/21/04 10:07 am) Reply ezSupporter Re: Seduction -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Oh that was wonderful updates, i just read 4 of them. Each one was great and i hope you keep up the wonderful job Red! RedPhoenix Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 510 (7/21/04 10:23 am) Reply Re: Seduction -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- prue21- thank you so much for that wonderful comment! here's a hug for you i'll try my best to live up to your expectations and write more for you guys (PS your story is one of the best here in the board yay for us) ethan- first of all, let me say, YAY! YOU'RE NOT LEAVING! reading your thread "BYE" made me so sad, but now im happy coz you're staying yay!!! thank you so much for the review and im glad that you liked them i'll be updating soon everyone. thanks for bearing with me charmed2008 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 1711 (7/21/04 10:45 am) Reply ezSupporter Re: Seduction -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Ok Red, im glad you like that im staying! And update as sooon as you can but take you time too! RedPhoenix Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 516 (7/21/04 9:32 pm) Reply Re: Seduction -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Chapter 3 Paige slowly opens her eyes and blinks rapidly, adjusting her eyes to her new environment. She gasps in surprise as she finds herself floating aimlessly in thin air. She looks down at her arms and legs, and realizes that she is no longer bound by chains. She rubs her arms gently, deliberately touching them and enjoying her momentary freedom. As she continues to massage her arms and legs, Paige turns around; surveying her new surroundings, but all she can see is waves of visible blue energy crackling all around her. “I hate you!” She turns around, “What?” she wonders. She jumps in surprise as she sees ripples form in front of her, adding to the waves of energy encircling her- her thoughts echoing very audibly around her. “I loathe you!” she turns again. “I despise you!” she whirls around. “Where?” she jumps in astonishment as she hears her own thoughts again, traveling in ripples around her. “Where…where…where?” Her thoughts resonate all around her, merging with the crackling energies. “Surprised?” a voice-ripple echoes behind Paige. She spins around, the tone of the voice very familiar to her. She floats to where she thinks she has heard the voice. “Where are you?” Ripples appear out of nowhere again and her thoughts reverberate everywhere. “It’s no use following, my dear aunt,” another voice-ripple resounds around Paige. “I’m all around you…I’m everywhere.” “Where are we?” she asks, “Where have you taken me?” “Welcome, Paige,” says the menacing tone, “to the Astral Plane, the repository of all…” “…all memories, now I know,” Paige continues, following after her nephew. “But why bring me here? Why now?” Prue21 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 369 (7/21/04 11:52 pm) Reply Re: Seduction -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Oh Red! Such a wonderful Idea! So is this going to be Wyatt's memories now?!?! I can't wait to find out what it is that made him this way!! How he could be so cold and just plain evil! Can't wait to read the next update! PEACE AND LOVE Prue21 Edited by: Prue21 at: 7/23/04 4:28 pm scififantasychic Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 750 (7/22/04 12:14 am) Reply Re: Seduction -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Oh, that's so creepy for Wyatt's voice to be all around her. It gives me chills! |
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prue- yap, this is going to be about Wyatt/anon. thanks for the wonderful review
scifi- gave me the chills too
here's more
“Because,” Wyatt’s voice booms throughout the Astral Plane, “you and I are so much alike. We’re kindred souls, you and I. You wanted to know what happened to me, and now I’m telling you.” Wyatt pauses and adds cryptically, “But remember, knowledge comes with a price.”
Before Paige could respond, her body turns into a million tiny orbs and she is magically transported to a place where she has longed to return to for eternity- Halliwell Manor. Paige looks around, refusing to believe her eyes. She is back! She thinks wildly, “I’m back!!!” Paige tries her best to blink back the tears, but the emotion of seeing the one place that she has thought that she would never, ever see again weighs down on her like a ton of bricks, and all her pent- up emotions burst out of her. Her legs buckle under her weight; she drops to her knees and Paige cries, for the first time in years since Piper’s death, Paige cries once more. She accepts the tears and welcomes them, feeling her tired soul claw at her physical body. She weeps, letting all of her constrained emotions to come out, her chest heaving with each repressed sob.
Finally, after releasing all of her built-up depression and despair, Paige struggles to open her tear-rimmed eyes. She squints, her vision blurry with tears. With some difficulty, Paige regains composure and teaches herself how to walk, taking each stride one step at a time, her movements sluggish and robot-like. As soon as she stands up, she hears voices coming from the other room. She ambles slowly and follows the voices, until she reaches the conservatory. What she sees there makes her heart leap.
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YAY! I loved the update as usual Red! I can't imagine what Paige must be feeling right now. Hopefully she will find away to escape Wyatt's head and free herself as well! I can't wait to find out what she is getting ready to see, I'm assuming it's a memory for her (or Wyatt's) past! Please Keep the Updates Coming!
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Oh, yay, Red! Such a great description of Paige's elation at being home. But how are Wyatt and she kindred spirits? I would be all like, no way am I anything like you, you freak! Interesting that Wyatt would think they're alike.
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maybe he means kindred spirits because the feel there a distance second, Wyatt feels second to chris and Paige is second to Phoebe and Piper *shrugs* and second to prue?
i dunno what did she see ? Chris?
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YAY! I loved the update as usual Red!
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thank you so much Prue. i really appreciate it thanks so much
scifi and soulless- hehe soulless got pretty much correct. besides the fact that they're both magical hybrids, Paige and Wyatt were always under their siblings' shadows
i'll be updating soon thanks y'all
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Yelp I wubed it like i always do tooo!!!! Oh please update sooooooon!!!!!!
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PLEASE YOUR KILLING ME UPDATE SOOON!!!!! Unless your on vacation or something!! lol
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Red, I've been gone and haven't been online for a few days, and I just knew when I came back you'd have plenty of updates for me! Where are you?? I hope all is well and everything is okay with you! Hopefully you will get a chance to update soon! Pretty Please! Hey, at least I didn't miss anything while I was gone! Again, this is a GREAT STORY and I am VERY much addicted to it, so please update soon, of course if that isn't possible because of real life, I understand, but I'm still going to pout and beg for more!
This is me when you don't update:
This will be me when I see your next update:
PEACE AND LOVE
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ethan- i am so sorry for not updating!! darn modem conked out on me again!! sorry!
prue- hey!! i am so sorry!! darn modeM! i am so sorry Prue, for not being able to update soon, but here i am! yay for us!
Sitting right there in front of her is Piper, living and well, peering down at the Halliwell Cauldron. Paige squeals in joy as she sees her eldest sister, alive.
“Piper! Piper, oh my Goddess, you’re alive!” She runs over to her sister to give her a hug.
“Piper, are you done with the vanquishing potion yet?”<br>
She suddenly turns around when she hears another familiar voice also calling out to Piper behind her- Phoebe!
Paige’s heart jumps in delight to see her other sister again. Without hesitation, she extends both arms, greeting her sister with outstretched arms. To Paige’s surprise, instead of falling into her waiting arms, Phoebe simply walks through her, passing right through her. With a heart-wrenching realization, the actuality of her situation finally dawns upon Paige like a bucket of ice water- Piper is long dead, and Phoebe has left the mansion years ago, and she- she is alone in the universe, all alone.
“I’m all…alone…alone…” she gasps, as she sinks back into the ground. “Alone…” she whispers, her cries falling on deaf ears.
“Wyatt! Wyatt!” Paige could hear Piper say. She gingerly wipes her teary eyes and looks at the events unfolding in front of her. “Wyatt! Can you hear me?” Piper screams out. “I said, ‘give the damn toy to your little brother!’” Piper yells. Paige looks over her sister’s shoulders and sees her two nephews- a six year old Wyatt and a four year old Chris fighting over a small toy.
“But, mom, I just got my hands on it!” Wyatt says.
“Just give the toy to him, Wyatt! I’m having a headache already working on the vanquishing potion for this demon, so don’t add to it!”
“FINE!” Wyatt yells back. “TOY!” Wyatt gestures at the toy and teke-orbs it into his younger brother’s hands; only the toy has been torn into a tiny million shreds.
“MOM!” Chris cries out to his mother in distress. “Look at what Wyatt did to Mr. Snuffles!”<br>
Piper looks over to what Wyatt has done to the toy and shrieks out angrily, “WYATT MATTHEW HALLIWELL! Of all the…Go to your room right now!”
Wyatt throws a toy at Chris, which hits him on the head, before he orbs out, leaving a message- “Stupid Chris!”- before he completely disappears.
“Don’t you think you were a little harsh on little Wyatt?” Phoebe says with concern.
Paige turns her head to see where Wyatt has orbed into. She leaves Piper and Phoebe to converse about the Brute Demon that has apparently attacked a gypsy, and walks over to the stairs, hoping to catch a glimpse of her angry nephew. She walks over to the stairs, and stifles the urge to cry again as she catches a quick look at the picture of her, arm in arm with her two sisters. She stares at the three of them- she smiles, and remembers, how once, they had been legends, the Charmed Ones. She rubs her arms and gives herself a small embrace, knowing in her heart that she is still a Charmed One.
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OMG, RED you finally updated!! You're absolutely amazing!!!! Poor Paige, she's so alone, I feel so bad for her epecially having to relive all of these painful memories alone! I can't believe Wyatt would be so evil as to put her through all the pain this will obviously cause, oh wait, yes I can believe it. I want to just kick his evill a$$ right now! But hey, if Piper always yelled at him that way no wonder he turned to evil! PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!! Well, as soon as you possibly can!
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 7, 2005 22:13:53 GMT -5
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I do have to admit, I feel sorry for Wyatt here. Piper was under enormous strain, so I understand why she snapped at him. But for Wyatt to think this is the only way he was ever treated just gives us a great insight into why he is so terribly evil. Terrific job!
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Oh great update, i thought maybe you had left us or something!! Im glad you got your computer problems fixed!!! WOW that was a great update!! Please update soonn!!!!
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hey everyone, i am so sorry for not posting any sooner, here i am in school since computer doesnt work at home. i just want to thank everyone who has read my work from Part 1- the Beginning. uumm.
i have two things to say, first is: i am going on a hiatus from posting my story here in the board, because of (A) computer at home doesnt work and (B) finals week is *ugh* coming up, so i wont be able to go to the Net often. second thing i wanna say is: part 3 will undergo quite a few changes, after reading a few chapters of my work, i have decided to tweak some things in order to fit the other chapters.
please bear with me everyone. i am so sorry for not reviewing your stories sooner and posting my own...
Blessed Be
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Oh wow...I am hear at work refusing to work so I started surfing the messageboard to pass the time and I cam upon this story...boy I am so glad I did! I love it! I feel bad that Piper is dead...I wanted that Piper/Leo reunion with their sons but ah well. What can I say I am a incurable romantic...
Chris being the marytr and forming the new Charmed Ones, his finally getting to meet Prue, Patty and Penny as well as seeing his mother again...how can you not love this story...it's like a viewers fantasy come true.
I wasn't a big fan of the Chris/Bianca love story or Biance herself I am really liking her in this story as well as Steven and Sarah. I have just one question...Where is Melinda? Leo orbed her out and next thing I know is that Leo is working for Wyatt. Where is Phoebe? Wyatt constant torture of Paige is brutal....
WHY OH WHY is Leo evil and what the heck can he do to redeem himself for almost killing his son. I had to admit I was a little disappointed that Chris or Piper didn't mention that Leo sent him there...then I got to thinking maybe Leo "killed" him for the simple reason that he KNEW Piper would give Chris something that would protect him from any more darklighter threats.....anyhoo, it could be just my speculation...
Please continue..this is an excellent story and I for one can wait to see how it turns out.
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OMG I AM SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO SORRY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I HAVE been so busy it's unreel my horse had to be put down and she had a 2 moth baby i had to take care of. and i had a BUNCH!!!of family up here *sigh* and I have missed your fan fic soooooooooooooooo much. i hope you get your stuff sorted out so you can continue with your ABSOLUTELY!!!!!!!, INCREDIBLE!!!!!!!, FANTASTIC!!!!!!!! FAN FIC
~!~Brittany~!~
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phoenix- hey! fellow phoenix thank you so much for reading my stories, i am so honored.. to answer your questions. (1) Melinda will be popping out in the next chapters, maybe in Part 4, or somewhere in Part 3 hehe (2) Phoebe's somewhere with Melinda (3) Leo will remain a mystery, sorry, but that's the only answers that i can give you... thank you so much for the kind words. i hope you enjoy the revised version of this part.
horsefreak- i am so sorry that your horse had to be put down.. its sad, but think of it as your horse meeting with her God (and/or Goddess) and she'll be in a good place and she'll be finally at peace. i am glad, though, that you're able to review my fic. i have revised it, so i hope you'll like the revised edition. thank you so much !
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Red I just read this fanfic.. It's absolutely amazing... I've been so caught up in writing mine, so I'm taken a small break from mine,, "The Ultimate Punishment - A world w/o Phoebe." I'm really glad I did, so I could read others.
This is absolutely amazing, and wonderful.. Your attention to detail is astounding.. and the characters flow so natural, it's like I can see them as they move and talk.. You are a really really good writer.. Please update soon.. I saw your having problems.. I'll definately keep watching and waiting, and KUDOS!!! Excellent, Excellent. lue
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hi charmed crazed! thank you so much for reading my fic! umm i am sorry but im revising this thread... comments, reviews, and criticisms are welcome at my other thread oh, and ive begun to read your fic. it is so wonderful. once im finished with my problems, technical and personal, i am going to post my reviews there. thank you so much for reading again
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