Transformation- part 3 (UPDATE November 28, 2004)

[oddball7]

Author: RedPhoenix


The Beginning- Part One - here's where it all begins, Part One of my series

Revelations- Part Two - the second part of my series

The Wyatt Quest - a Charmed Ones fic.


here's the revised edition of part 3 everyone.

Two men wearing long, black robes are walking briskly, side by side, in a dark cave. Each one has a long wand in their right hands, a gem of crimson red on its tip. They walk faster, an intense feeling of fear growing in their chests.

“We must hurry, Koska,” one of the men intones nervously, “The master is not well known for his patience.”<br>
The other named Koska hastens his pace and turns to his companion, “I know…forgive me, Bismarck, for the delay.”

“Do not ask for my forgiveness, Koska, it is not up to me to decide our fate. Let us hope that the master will have mercy on us,” Bismarck shudders.

They walk hastily, the sounds of their boots echoing throughout the catacombs. They raise their wands, and a red light flashes, guiding them as they find their way in the cave. They quickly take a sharp turn, and finally enter the largest room in the Underworld-Throne Room. They are greeted by a scantily-clad woman, a crystal ball in her hand.

“The master has been waiting for you, fools! Come!” the woman orders, leading the way deeper into the Throne Room.

Bones and skulls of different creatures line the walls of the Underworld. Flames from torches illuminate the way, the dancing flames creating shadows of different lengths and sizes. The three figures move along silently, the only sounds audible are the flames licking the air and the sounds echoing from their feet. They stop by a huge boulder that seemingly blocks the way.

Bismarck and Koska take a step back, and watch in amazement, as the Oracle waves her hand in front of the boulder. The towering boulder magically disappears, and a stairway suddenly emerges from where the boulder once is standing. The threesome continue to march, a feeling of impending doom building in their chests, as they climb the stone flights up to the master’s lair.

Finally, the threesome has reached the end of the stone steps. They begin walking again, and stop in front of a huge wooden door. The Oracle once again waves her hand, and the door magically opens, a hair-raising *creak* reverberating all over the Underworld.

The Oracle continues to lead the way, and after a few minutes of walking, stops. An enormous golden throne sits in front of her, a figure that is cloaked in shadows sitting on it.

“My liege…the Mind Sorcerers are here…” the Oracle speaks in a meek voice. She bows her head, waiting for other instructions.

The figure stands from his throne, an aura of power burning from his presence. “You’re late!” He shouts, and without warning, hurls a fireball at one of the Mind Sorcerers. The fireball hits the Mind Sorcerer on the chest, and red and yellow flames begin licking at his body, consuming his very being. The Mind Sorcerer screams, “Aaaaaiiii,” and within seconds, Koska is reduced to nothing but a pile of ash. Bismarck bows his head, fearing the worst, expecting the same fate that has greeted his fellow sorcerer. “I HATE LATE!”<br>
Bismarck could feel his master’s eyes staring at him- his gaze sending pinpricks of heat on Bismarck’s scaly skin.

“YOU!” the figure steps out of the shadows- revealing the face of Wyatt Matthew Halliwell. He turns to his minion, Bismarck, the remaining Mind Sorcerer, “How goes the ritual? Is she one of us yet? Has she ‘decided’ to join our side?”

“N…N…No…master…sh…she…” Bismarck stutters; he couldn’t find the right words. He is terrified that his master would kill him for his failure. “Sh…she is t…too strong for our magicks, my…my lord…”

“WHAT?!? Aaaarrrgghh!!! You useless imbecile!” Wyatt screams, his voice causing shards of rocks to fall and shower on top of the trembling sorcerer. A fireball suddenly forms in Wyatt’s hands, and Bismarck looks at his master in fear, his eyes quivering in dread, anxiety and terror swimming in his red eyes- the realization of his impending vanquish dawning on him.

“M…Master, h…have m…mercy…Plea….aaiiii,” Bismarck shrieks in agony as slowly, his body is being consumed by dark red flames, eating away at his scaly body. Within seconds, his ashes join those of his fellow Mind Sorcerer.

“Useless fools!” Wyatt says, as he steps down from his throne, stepping on the two piles of ashes that have once been his minions. He walks over to the Oracle, who has her head bowed. He lifts her head with his hands, and smiles as he sees the Oracle’s terrified eyes.

“My…my liege,” she whispers.

“Show me Paige Matthews, Oracle,” Wyatt commands.

The Oracle opens her left palm, and her crystal ball appears magically. “Reveal,” she mutters. The face of Paige Matthews, bleeding and pale, suddenly emerges from the misty surface of the crystal ball.

“My dear Auntie Paige…ever the defiant little witch, you’ll join me soon, my dear aunt…” Wyatt declares, looking intently into the crystal ball, “Soon…”

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Chapter 1

“Mmmm…” Chris lets out, as he and Bianca finally pull free from their passionate kiss. “I love you…” he smiles at his wife, who was lying on their bed.

“I love you, too, with all my heart,” Bianca replies as she takes Chris’ hands in hers.

Chris and Bianca have been lying on their bed for the last two hours, kissing each other, caressing each other’s bodies intimately. Ever since his return from the “dead” and his discovery of his wife’s pregnancy, Chris has been spending more time with his wife- taking a break from vanquishing duties and his witchy responsibilities.

Chris leans in again, kissing his wife on the cheeks, and then finally kissing her on the lips. “So how are you feeling, honey? Are you okay?” He asks as he rubs Bianca’s stomach.

“Everything’s fine, Chris,” Bianca smiles warmly and looks at her husband lovingly. “Stop being a worry-wart, honey, you’re starting to sound like your mom!” She laughs gently.

“Hey,” Chris bites Bianca’s arms playfully, making Bianca laugh harder.

“Hey, stop that!” The couple both end up bursting into laughter. They continue to kiss and touch each other, when they suddenly hear a *slam* from downstairs, indicating Steven and Sarah’s return from their demon-hunt.

“And there goes our privacy,” Chris mutters, shaking his head.

“There’s always tonight,” Bianca whispers seductively as she nibbles on Chris’ earlobe.

Chris giggles as the sensation sends tickles to his spine, and pulls Bianca in for another kiss. “Mmm…” he mutters.

They finally pull back and Chris grabs his shirt and puts it on, his eyes looking at Bianca warmly. When Chris and Bianca are fully dressed, they descend the stairs, hand-in-hand.

“Chris! Chris!” Steven calls out urgently to the Manor.

Chris and Bianca hurry down, responding to the pressing call of their teammate.

“Wha…” Chris trails off as he sees Steven carrying Sarah in his arms, bleeding and unconscious.

“Sarah!” Chris yells as he jumps down the stairs, ignoring the remaining steps of the rickety stairway. “Put her on the couch, Steven. Hurry!” he instructs hastily.

Once Steven has carefully laid the unconscious tele-empath on the couch, Chris kneels down beside her. He places his hands on top of Sarah’s chest, where there is a scorch mark surrounded by small puddles of warm, sticky blood. He closes his eyes in concentration, gathering his strength and focusing his healing magicks into his hands.

Bianca and Steven watch from behind, and see as Chris’ hands glow a golden white. Steven closes his eyes and mutters his prayer; he soon smiles as he hears Sarah cough, signifying her “return.” He whispers a “thank you” to the Wind and rushes over to his friend’s side.

“Sarah! Thank goodness you’re awake! Are you okay? Is there anything I can get you? Water, tea?” Steven hugs Sarah and bombards her with questions.

“Ow! Steve, you’re crushing my ribs,” Sarah winces as Steven tightens his grip on her.

Chris and Bianca try their best to stifle their laughs as Steven pulls back and Sarah playfully punches Steven’s shoulder. The couple watches in glee as the two neophyte witches finally develop a stronger bond with each other.

“So what happened during the hunt, guys?” Bianca speaks first; her brows knitted in intrigue. “Who attacked this time, and what happened to Sarah?”

Steven helps Sarah to sit on the couch properly, and looks at Bianca sheepishly. “Well, we went out to hunt demons, like you and Chris had told us…So Sarah here scans the area for demons and other random evil, since both of us really can’t do the scrying thing…”

“Oops, sorry about that, I haven’t trained either of you in scrying…” Chris cuts in and looks at them apologetically.

“Right…” Steven continues. “So we set out to the high school, where according to Sarah, ‘the feeling was strongest.’ We go there, we scout the area, you know, the usual drill. So we walk around, talking, trying to get over our anxiety. Suddenly, out of nowhere, a band of rogue…what was it again?” Steven stops and scratches his head. He turns to Sarah, “What were they called again?”<br>
“Bounty Hunters,” Sarah answers. “A group of them suddenly shimmered from out of nowhere and began shooting lightning bolts at us. We were outnumbered.” Sarah shakes her head, recalling the event that has occurred almost an hour ago. “We were surrounded, forced into a tight corner. Steven began to fight them off, blow them up one by one,” Sarah says, “but there were just the two of us…”

“Sarah tried to cast spells, and was successful in fending some of them off,” Steven continues. “But soon, we grew tired. My blasts soon turned into harmless sparks, which the Bounty Hunters shrugged off. Sarah’s spells turned into bubbles of light…We were backed up, trapped…”

“Then, with one final gesture, Steven blew three demons in front of, clearing a way for us…” Sarah recalls. “To ensure our safety and to buy us a couple of minutes, I cast a final spell, the “Fire Wall” spell that I read from the Book of Shadows.”

“We ran as fast as we could, dodging stray lightning bolts as best as we can. But then suddenly, without warning, Sarah pushed me out of the way…the next thing I saw was her flying in another direction. She...she…” Steven pauses and looks at Sarah admiringly, “…took the lightning blast that was meant for me…I looked back, and saw that the demons couldn’t get past the flames, so I carried her and ran and ran…till I got here…”

Chris nods at Steven and Sarah, both of whom are sitting in silence. “Bright side? At least no one followed you home.” He tries his best to make the two smile, but suddenly jumps in surprise as Sarah screams out in pain.

“Ahhhh,” Sarah shrieks, holding her head in pain, “Incoming!”<br>
Three Bounty Hunters suddenly shimmer inside the Manor, energy balls in their hands. “Witches!” one of them roars, “Kill them!” The Bounty Hunters begin to throw energy balls around, causing splinters of wood and shards of glass to fly about the living room.

The four witches immediately react on instinct. Steven and Sarah directly dive off the couch, and use it for cover. Bianca shimmers out, and reappears behind a female Bounty Hunter, stabbing her with her athame. Chris flings his hands out, causing a stray energy ball to telekinetically fly back to its sender, vanquishing him instantly. Sarah lifts her head up from their hiding place and sees the third Bounty Hunter shimmer out, and materialize inches away behind an unsuspecting Bianca.

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“Behind you!” she screams. Sarah looks in terror as an energy ball flies toward the Phoenix. Suddenly, she feels the demon’s anger; Sarah blinks her eyes, forcing the demon’s anger back to him. She opens her eyes in surprise, as the energy ball suddenly flies to the opposite direction, returning back to the Bounty Hunter, causing him to erupt in flames. Sarah blinks again in surprise and whispers to herself, “Whoa, did I just do that?”

Chris looks at the living room and sees the destruction that has been caused by the attack. “Damn it! Is everyone okay?" Chris asks the group, scanning them for any injury.

“I’m okay,” Steven replies as he scratches his head.

“So am I, I think” Sarah says as she rubs her aching temples. She is still taking in the fact that she has been able to deflect an energy ball back to the Bounty Hunter.

“I…I’m fine…” Bianca replies shakily, clutching her stomach. Feeling a bit dizzy, she suddenly sinks weakly to a chair, “But…but I…I think I need to sit down for a while...”<br>
Chris rushes to his wife’s side and kneels before her, taking her trembling hands in his. “Honey, what happened? Is there…are you…is the baby…?” There are many questions floating around in Chris’ head, and anxiety begins to flood his systems.

“I…I’m fine, honey…no need to worry,” Bianca grasps Chris’ hands firmly and smiles at her husband reassuringly, “It’s…it’s just that…I never realized that shimmering took a lot out of me…” Bianca stops and gasps for breath, sweat beads rolling down her cheeks.

Sarah disappears into the kitchen, and seconds later returns with a glass of ice cold water in hand. “Here, drink this,” she hands the glass of water to her friend and stands beside a worried Steven.

“Thanks, Sarah, for this. And for saving me earlier,” Bianca beams thankfully at the tele-empath. She takes in the water and breathes rhythmically for a couple of seconds, steadying herself, gathering her strength. “It looks like your powers are growing.”

“Wow,” Sarah stares at everyone around her in disbelief, “you really think so?”

“Yes,” Bianca replies with certainty. She tries to get up, but is stopped by her husband.

“Whoa, what do you think you’re doing, honey?” Chris asks worriedly.

“Well, I’m planning to go to our room to get some rest. Demon vanquishing is not as fun as I can remember,” Bianca says in between gasps.

“That’s because you’re pregnant now. Here, at least let me help you up,” Chris says, and offers his hands to his wife. He helps Bianca up and lets her body lean on his.

The couple walks hand in hand up the stairs, a tired and weakened Bianca leaning on a worried Chris for support; while, Steven and Sarah remain in the living room and begin to engage in conversation.

“Hey, umm, Sarah…” Steven turns to Sarah and grins sheepishly, “Thanks for saving my life earlier. I owe you one…”

Sarah smiles at Steven and shrugs, “It’s nothing, I’m sure you would’ve done the same thing for me.”<br>
Steven and Sarah share a very intimate smile, when Chris suddenly come bounding down the stairs. “Hey, guys…” He pauses as he sees the two witches look at each other intimately. “Ummm, am I interrupting anything?”<br>
“Wha? Oh..” Sarah is the first to react, she looks at Chris, her cheeks a deep red, “Oh…no…no”

Steven laughs out loud, hiding his embarrassment, and rubs his neck, “Ah…no, we’re cool, right?”<br>
“Oh-kay,” Chris replies, a sliver of doubt visible in his eyes. “Umm, if you’re not too busy, can I ask both of your help?”<br>
“Sure, anything,” Sarah answers quickly, her cheeks returning to their usual color.

“Yeah, sure, Chris, what can we do for you?” Steven replies.

“Thanks, you guys,” Chris smiles as he descends from the stairs, carrying a brown box in his hands. He walks over to Steven and Sarah and opens the box, revealing huge pieces of clear quartz crystals.

“Quartz crystals?” Steven peeks into the box and asks in curiosity, “What are those for?”<br>
“For protection. These crystals have the power to repel evil,” Chris says as he hands the box over to Sarah and pulls out two sheets of paper from his pocket. He hands the crumpled sheets of paper to Steven and Sarah. “Here, chant this spell while holding the crystal in your right hand. Wait for the crystals to glow, then place them on every window and door in the Manor, okay? There’s more than enough for the entire Manor,” Chris instructs.

“Got it,” Steven says enthusiastically as he takes the sheet of paper from Chris’ hands.

“No problem,” Sarah seconds as she grabs her sheet of paper from Chris. She hands some crystals to Steven and starts to walk to the front door.

“I’ll be upstairs when you need me, okay?” Chris calls out to the two as heads up the stairs.

Steven holds the crystal delicately in his right hand, and looks down at the spell that Chris has given them. “Okay, let’s see,

White crystals glow with power,
repel evil in this very hour.”<br>
He can feel a slight tingle in his right hand, and when he opens his right hand, the crystal glows a bright yellow color. “Cool!” He positions the crystal on a nearby window and proceeds on to the next.

While placing the crystals all over the Manor, Steven tries to strike yet another conversation with Sarah. “Chris has the worst timing, huh?”<br>
“Hmm?” Sarah turns around to face Steven as she finishes chanting the spell over another crystal. “Oh, I guess,” Sarah blushes again, recalling the tender moment that she and Steven have shared earlier.

“Um, so, I’ve been studying natal charts and Astrology from the books that Chris had given us to review…” Steven tries his best to keep the conversation flow smoothly. “What’s your star sign?”

“Me? Well, I’m a Virgo,” Sarah replies as she picks yet another crystal from the box. “How about you?”<br>
“I’m a Pisces,” Steven says, “Umm, did you know that according to the book, Astrology: Magick and Practice, Virgo and Pisces are very much compatible?” Steven beams coyly at Sarah.

Sarah’s face turns into a dark red color, and she could feel the heat rise up to her face. “R…really?”

“Yeah,” Steven says as he grasps another crystal in his right hand.

The two continue to talk about their star signs, and resume their task of distributing the crystals all over the Manor; as they complete their task, a golden veil envelops the entire Manor, encasing it in a golden shield.

Unbeknownst to the occupants of the Manor, a cloaked figure watches from a distance, witnessing the veil as it washes over the Manor. The figure stares at the Manor angrily, and with a nod, disappears out, leaving only a thin puff of smoke ominously in the air.

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Chapter 2

A thin cloud of smoke hovers around a dark cavern, drifting above three shadowy figures. One of the figures turns and waves his hands, and suddenly, the cloud of smoke swirls around, finally materializing back into its human form, revealing a Smoke Demon.

“Speak,” the male figure orders.

The Smoke Demon bows her head, and looks up, “Yes, my lord. My lord, it seems that your bro…” the demon hesitates, and then continues, “it seems that the Halliwell offspring is still alive. I sensed his presence while I was surveying the Manor. And, my liege, they have also put up the infamous crystal protection around the Manor, I’m afraid my magicks will not be able to penetrate their defenses.” The Smoke Demon bows her head again, awaiting further instructions from her master.

“Useless creature! Begone!” her master yells angrily.

“Yes, my lord,” the Smoke Demon turns into a cloud of smoke and swirls out of the cavern.

Wyatt turns back to the two figures behind him. “Oracle,” he calls out as he walks toward the two other figures. “Can you see past the shield?”

“Reveal,” the Oracle whispers, staring at her crystal ball and waiting for images to form. She squints in concentration, and frowns in defeat, as nothing but mists appear. “I’m sorry, my liege, but, as it is, their Manor is guarded, even from my divinations.”<br>
"ArgghH!!" Wyatt yells in anger and in frustration; he hurls an energy ball at the nearby wall, causing shards of rocks to fall down on the Oracle and on Paige. "You've won this round, little brother," he sneers, "but the war isn't over yet!" He turns to the Oracle, an idea forming in his mind.

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thanks a lot. and AWESOME!!! its good to see you back red! the revised part is really good I cant wate
for the next update!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


Edited by: HorseFreak91 at: 8/31/04 10:23 am

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YAY!!!!!!!!!OMG you almost gave me a heart attack, i saw the close this thread and i was like wtf! Any Im looking forward to read more of your story!!!! And i hope everything is better for you! And must i say update soon!! and are you staying or you still on a break?


-Mr.C

edited to say that im only 15 even though i signed as Mr. C

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horsefreak- its good to be back!!! boy, ive really missed you so much ... here's a big hug for you thank you for your support, horsefreak

ethan- OMG! thank you so much for reading my fic. im so sorry to have surprised you like that!! ive really missed you!! here's a big hug for you~~~ im definitely staying.. ive kissed my problems good-bye and im back for good!!

ive missed you so much, guys!!! and to make it all up for the weeks that ive been gone, here's another update

"Oracle!" bellows Wyatt,"bring me...the Mind-Eater!!!" The Oracle gasps and her eyes grow wide with fear, knowing full well the monstrosity and evil that is the Mind-Eater.
The Oracle, though evil herself, still shivers, for the history and evil of the Mind-Eater goes back in centuries, pre-dating even that of the Hollow's. its name strikes fear in the hearts of even the most evil of demons.

The Oracle shivers as she remembers an entry from the Seer’s Grimoire about the history of the Mind-Eater:

The Mind-Eater was created eons ago by the twelfth Source's Alchemist, T'Charra. The Source, like her ancestors and those who had come before her, was very much obsessed with controlling every magical creature, good and bad, and subverting them for her own twisted needs, that she ignored all rules and precautions, and the dangers and destruction that the Mind-Eater could wreak. She was too blinded by her ambition and greed, damn her, and she unleashed her accursed creature upon the unsuspecting world and caused havoc in the magical community.

The Mind-Eater, an uncontrollable, primal energy, mindless and void of consciousness, spread swiftly throughout the magical community like wildfire, consuming the minds of denizens of demons, faeries, witches, warlocks, and even Elders. By the Dark Goddess, it went around the different planes and dimensions, weaving itself in and out of the Underworld, the Astral Plane, even to the Heavens themselves, hovering around ominously like the Angel of Death, devouring and draining the minds and essences of the innocent creatures strewn into its path. It roamed around for years, traversing the various planes of existence of the Earth, sucking the minds of its defenseless and unfortunate victims. Factions in the magical community soon went into hiding, leaving the world empty, without magic. By the Dark Mother, I bore witness as the Earth refused to bear fruit, as the Seas dried up, and the Winds grew silent and hollow. The world soon became desolate and empty as the magical creatures disappeared.

Without any more minds to sustain its ravenous and insatiable hunger, the murderous Mind-Eater soon turned on the Source, speeding through the Underworld, looking for its mistress. I was fortunate enough to hide under my Invisibilty Cloak, otherwise, it would have devoured my mind, just like what it did to the Source and her foolish Alchemist.

I watched in horror as the black gaseous form advanced on my pompous mistress. With a heart-piercing cry, raced through the Throne Room of my mistress. It swept through her hungrily and entered through her eyes, nose, and mouth. Without warning, my mistress levitated off the ground, carried through the air by the Mind-Eater’s own magics. I watched, terrified, shaking under my cloak, as my mistress’ body twisted and turned in the air, shaking violently under the Mind-Eater’s influence. Her eyes grew black, her skin deathly pale. Suddenly, a black liquid began oozing from my mistress’ ears, nose, and mouth- and then, her body slumped lifelessly into the ground, torn and violated, empty. I knew it was over- I have seen the Mind-Eater work, how it ate and consumed its prey.

My body froze, as the black gaseous demi-god hovered above my cloaked body. I panicked, had it seen me??? I held my breath for what seemed like eternity, praying to the Dark Mother for strength. The Dark Mother heard my prayers, for after a few moments of torment, a masked knight, whose arms were engraved with Norse runes and mystical sigils, appeared behind the dread demon and drew its attention away from me. I gasped in surprise, as the knight was carrying with him the most powerful legendary artifact in all the Seven Dimensions- the demon-sword Ragnarok. Muttering a Norse spell of protection under his breath, the knight bravely threw himself into the Mind-Eater, plunging the sword deep into the center of the demon. A blinding light, and then nothing. I fell to the ground, my knees buckling under my weight, was it truly over? A hollow Wind echoed throughout the Underworld, and after adjusting to the darkness again, nothing remained in the dimly-lit caverns, save for my frail body and…<br>


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Sorry.... for responding to a locked post!!!

BUT!!! This is a really really good story!!! I really love it!! I swear your details are outstanding.... BRAVO... keep it going.. I love reading this........

Absolutely marvelous!!!!

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RED!!!! I'm sooo glad to see you back! Very very very amazing writing for this one! I like the way you have changed it around. Wonderful idea, and I absolutely cannot wait to find out what happens next!! I've missed this fic sooo much! Update ASAP!!!

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charmedcrazed- its ok hehe thank you so much for your kind words!! im glad that you like the way i write the details so much..

prue21- hey!! i am so glad to be back! thank you so much for the encouragement!! im so glad that you liked the changes i made... whew, it feels so good to be back! here's a hug for ya! ]

here's the rest of chapter 2 for you guys

“THE BOX!” Wyatt screams out, shaking the Oracle out of her stupor. “NOW!” He yells, causing jagged pieces of earth to shower on the three of them.

“Y…yes, my lord,” the Oracle stutters nervously, “r..right away…” She blinks the rest of her fear away, and in the literal blink of an eye, her body disappears as she shimmers out of the Torture Chamber.

“Incompetent creature!!” Wyatt yells out after the Oracle. He then turns to face Paige, who is still chained and bound to the cavern wall. He looks down at his aunt, disgust and contempt burning in his eyes, and spits, “I’m surprised you’ve made it this far, witch…” he pauses and walks closer to her, “but I’m afraid that this is the end of the line for you.” He looks menacingly at the bound with before her; he bends down and grabs her face, holding it tightly, clutching it between his fingers. He sneers as he stares at his aunt face-to-face, taking in her fear.

“W…what are you p…planning to d..do with me?” Paige asks, her jaws are clutched tightly between Wyatt’s firm grip.

Wyatt releases his grip on Paige’s face and leers over her like a tower, and with all his might, thrusts his foot out and kicks her in the face, hard. “Soon, witch,” he whispers mysteriously, “soon…”

Paige’s head whips to her side- a single tear rolls down her cheeks, warm, red blood slowly trickling down her lips.







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OMG great updates!!!!!!! I agree with Prue21!!!! And im glad you missed me! and i missed you!!

I just wanted to let you know that i wont be reviewing much anymore, so dont think that i went away and stoped reading, its just school. Ill try to get on on the weekends and stuff!!!

-Mr. C

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WOW, Red! I don't believe it! You've found an enemy for the Charmed Ones that's even worse than the Source, worse than the Hollow! This Mind-Eating Demon sounds downright horrifying!!

I loved the fact that the twelfth Source was female, showing that the Seer could've indeed become so, despite her gender, even if that twelfth Source was greedy enough to have her Alchemist come up with such a horrible creature! And I like that the Oracle had seen it in the Seer's grimoire--good job!!

And then there's poor Paige. Even if she doesn't have to go through flashbacks, I hate her being tortured by Wyatt (or whatever he calls himself!) and Chris not knowing a thing about it! I'm so afraid that Wyatt is going to turn that Mind-Eater on Paige!!

As everyone else has said, it's *so* good to have you back, we sure have missed you *and* your story!!

Please update very soon!!!

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ethan- oh that's right! school there starts on September right? Darn it! i'll miss your reviews so much! well, i'll just stay here and pout and wait for your reviews till school gives you a break. study hard ok? (ohmyGoddess, did i just sound like a mom or what?) hehe

esmeralda- yay!!! you've posted a review on my fic *blushing* i always look forward to reading your reviews!!! the Mind-Eater is one horrible demon huh, yeah, i thought that there ought'a be one powerful woman character, besides TCO's (although she's evil).. im so glad that you reviewed... really really glad!! *happy happy joy joy* thank you so much. it feels so good to be finally back!!

here's a little something from Chapter 3, just for you guys


Chapter 3

“Behind you!” Chris yells out to Steven as he telekinetically hurls a stray fireball away from him; it strikes a nearby wall, burning it and creating black scorch marks around the aging wall.

Steven turns around as quickly as he can and throws his arms out; but he responds too late, the energy ball rockets toward him and hits him in the chest; the sheer intensity of the blast hit him full force, and he flies backward, landing into the living room table. It crashes under the sudden impact, breaking apart into tiny million splinters. Steven instinctively rolls to the right as he sees another energy ball flying toward him. Without waiting for another second, he thrusts his arms out, sending off waves of his remaining energy and blowing off the arm of the demon.

Chris waves his hand and a table leg telekinetically hits the demon, stabbing him in the chest, causing him to erupt in flames.

“Damn it!” Steven cusses as he pulls himself to his feet. “So how’d I do, Chris?”<br>
Chris waves his hands, and chants, “End!” A magical glow washes over the entire living room; it returns to its previous state, clean and damage-free. He looks at Steven and shakes his head in disappointment, “You want the truth? I think you sucked, big time, Steve. I expected more from you." He glares at Steven, "Quit slacking off, man!”<br>
“You think I’m not trying my best? Geez, Chris! Who died and made you king of the world?” Steven retorts exhaustedly. He takes off his shirt, revealing his muscles and sweaty six-pack abs, and uses it to wipe the beads of sweat on his forehead.

Chris’s breathing becomes jagged as he also removes his shirt and uses it to wipe the glistening sweat off his rock-hard chest. He turns to Steven and, controlling his anger, replies, “Well, apparently, my mom and the rest of the world did, or haven’t you noticed, Steven?” He looks at his companion, “The world’s dying, and we need to be there to protect it, but we can’t do that with you slacking off, now can we, ‘super-witch’?” He says the word “super-witch” sarcastically and elicits an angry growl from the younger witch.

“Back off, Chris, I haven’t forgotten about my responsibilities as a ‘Charmed One’, but don’t you dare insult me,” Steven growls, his biceps flexing in anger. “If you wanna fight, I’m more than ready to give you one.”

Chris’s own muscles begin to tense, “See, if you only had that kind of enthusiasm in training, we won’t be having this conversation.”

Both men glare at each other for moments, muscles tensing in anticipation.

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Red ---- BRAVO!!!!! Oh to only see Chris' and Steven's bodies... Ahhhhh.... Dreaming,, salivating... Okay reality... Rock on... Hotties without shirts are always always a good thing!!!! A++++++++++..

Can't wait to read more!!!!! btw:: love the spell "end" way cool! lue

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^^Ditto^^ that would be a seen and the tension between Chris and Steven oh!! and the mind eating Demon sounds really hmm.... i cant think of the word lol mean no terrifying maybe... nasty yeah nasty thats it but i agree with charmed A+++++++++

update soon PPPPLLLLLLLEEEEAAAAASSSSEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!



I love your story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

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Another great update Red! Thank goodness I have long breaks between classes so I have the chance to read this fic! I love the tension between Chris and Steven. It's very realistic, and very like something the original charmed ones would have went through with each other, kinda like a *brotherly* moment. I'm glad they don't always get along, otherwise it just wouldn't be as realistic. And oh to see them without thier shirts on! What an amazing thought, I'm still just sooooo glad you are back! Hopefully there will be more updates very soon! Can't wait to see what Wyatt and his mind eater are up too! Maybe it will just turn on Wyatt and his sorry butt will be gone! (Hey a girl can hope right?!?!) Anyways, keep up the great work!


Until Next Time

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I'm either reading wrong or I'm slow (probably both), but I can't figure out when Steven slacked off, so why Chris is mad at him. They both seemed to do a good job.

Funny, when you described him before, I never thought of Steven having a six-pack for abs. If anything, I thought of him as kind of whimpy. But this puts a whole different picture in my head--nummy!!

And Chris must be working out a lot more in this timeline than he did in the original (I figured that he must not have had the time to take care of himself that way), because by the way Drew Fuller's shirts fit, rock-hard??? I don't think so!! I was glad he kept his shirt on!!! One of the reasons I always counted him as cute, but not hot, like Cole or Bane!! But now, thinking of him that way in this timeline as both cute *and* hot??? Oh, yeah!!

As always, I love this, Red! Update soon!! AND CHRIS, DON'T FORGET ABOUT YOUR AUNT PAIGE!!! GO SAVE HER RIGHT NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW!!!!

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charmedcrazed- i totally agree with you, hot bods of Chris and Steve yumyum!! i actually was drooling while writing this part hehehe

horsefreak- hey!!! how have you been?? thanks for the review! yeah, the Mind-Eater's pretty nasty heh?

prue21- oh thank Goddess you have breaks, so that you can post your reviews for my fic thank you so much for this encouraging review.. im so glad to be back too hehe thanks

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hey esmeralda!! i'll be posting the reason here in my next update to clear things up hehe i was really planning to write Steven as the skinny, tall, acne-faced guy, but then, i wanted muscular guys more... yumyum! hehe and oh yeah, Drew FUller isnt really hunky, so i had to re-write his character's body. hehe thanks for the review

for you guys and gals, another update

“Guys, guys! Stop this!” Bianca and Sarah suddenly run from the Manor’s conservatory, standing and positioning themselves in between the two enraged men, trying to avert the ensuing fight between them. Bianca pushes Chris away from Steven, and Sarah eases Steven away from Chris.

“Please, all this negative energy is making my head hurt,” Sarah pleads as she pulls Steven away. Sarah holds Steven by the arm and starts to walk away with him, leading him to the conservatory. “Just drop it, okay?” Steven shakes his head off, and before leaving the living room with Sarah, glares at Chris angrily.

As soon as she is certain that they are all alone, Bianca speaks with her husband. “So what happened here? One minute you and Steven were training, the next you’re in a heated argument. I’ve never seen you like this before. What’s the matter, honey?” Bianca looks at her husband, concern filling her eyes. She gingerly wipes his forehead with the sleeve of her shirt, and touches his cheek. She stares deeply into her husband’s worn eyes, and kisses him passionately. She pulls back slowly, “Don’t you think you were being a bit harsh on Steve, there?”

Chris gazes lovingly at his wife and answers, “I guess I was a bit too harsh on him,” he pauses and looks down, “But...”<br>
“But what? Baby,” Bianca slowly lifts Chris’s head so they are talking face to face, “Talk to me.”

Chris stares at his wife, taking in her sharp features, her intense black eyes, and her loving smile. He gently strokes her arms and brushes a stray lock of hair away from her face. “Well, it’s just that…I… I have this feeling that…that, we…we’re gonna lose…” Chris’s eyes begin to well with tears, he cannot find the right words and he stutters incoherently, “ I…I…,” his chin quivers with doubt and hesitation.

Bianca pulls her husband in a loving embrace, stroking his hair soothingly.

Chris hugs his wife in return and forces himself to continue, “I… have this feeling, that…that I’m going to…to f…fail…that he…he’s going to beat…us.” Chris swallows hard, forcing the words to come out, “I’m afraid that…that I’m going to fail…my mother…” Chris falls silent and he sobs on Bianca’s shoulder, his tears rolling down his cheeks freely.

Bianca says nothing, but she wraps her hands around her husband tighter, and she gently kisses his forehead.


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Yep, typical Chris in any timeline--always afraid Wyatt is going to beat him and when he gets in that mode, watch out everyone else around! The Charmed Ones found that out when he first appeared, and now it's Steven's turn! Just so Steven doesn't find him the irritating brat that The Charmed Ones found him until they knew who he was! That could totally kill the rapport that the New Charmed Ones need to be successful, as proven by Sarah's headache. Again typical Chris in any timeline--by working everyone around him too hard, he's setting himself up for a putdown!! Will he ever learn??? I DON'T THINK SO!!! Good luck, Bianca, for getting that into his head!

Personally I'd prefer Steven as a physical whimp----that "skinny, tall, acne-faced guy", since that,would've garnered more sympathy from me when Chris went after him--pick on someone your own size! But I don't mind having hunky guys in my head, either!!!

Please update soon!!

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yup, thats typical Chris allright! i could change his body, but not his insecurity. poor little Chris, always living under the fear of his brother beating him up oh, im so sorry if Steven wasnt whom you pictured him to be, but i havent had my share of testosterone-filled boys lately, so i had to improvise, right? hehehe

anywho, where're the others?? *scratches head*

im so glad that you reviewed Esmeralda,

here's more

Meanwhile, in the conservatory, Steven’s voice echoes angrily as he paces back and forth. “Who does he think he is anyway? God? Pah!” He kicks a pillow out of his way, and continues to walk around, back and forth.

“Stop walking all over the place, Steven,” Sarah winces in pain, “You’re making me dizzy.” She rubs her throbbing temples, trying to block off Steven’s negative energy. “Will you just sit down and tell me what happened?” Sarah pleads, “And this time, don’t shout, my ears are still ringing.”

“Okay, okay,” Steven finally stops walking and sits on the floor across from Sarah. He inhales sharply, and tries to control his breathing. “Whew, okay,” he says as he calms down a little, “Chris and I were training, you know to hone my powers and stuff. He even used this super cool spell from the Book of Shadows.” He stops and grabs the Book of Shadows from the table in front of him, and flips through its yellowed pages. He stops as he sees the page he is looking for. He turns to Sarah and points at the book, “Here! Found it,” and hands the Halliwell tome to Sarah.

Sarah takes the book from Steven, and scans the page with interest. She reads silently, her eyes scrolling down the thick, coarse page of the book.

Cassandra Halliwell, a 10th century witch, was an expert in glamoury and mirage-based magicks. An Illusionist in one of her past lives, Cassandra Halliwell developed many spells regarding creating illusions- false images and environments. She used these techniques to deceive her opponents and escape from demons and warlocks.

“Pretty cool witch,” Sarah smiles in approval, “Wish I had her powers, then I’d create illusions of myself and let them do all the demon-fighting.” Sarah snickers at her little joke, and continues to read the entry in the Book of Shadows, her eyes skimming over the intricate calligraphy of the entire page.

Mirage Spell by Cassandra Halliwell:

Materials for the Spell:

1 mirror of any size
1 image of desired illusion

Taking the image of your desired illusion or glamour, face it on the mirror; make certain that the image’s reflection is clear and smooth. Whilst holding these two items together, chant in a low voice,

“Images distort and bend,
Mirror accept this energy I send,
Let thy magick wash over reality,
Turn it into what I want it to be.”<br>“Interesting…” Sarah says as she finishes reading the page about Cassandra Halliwell. “Okay, so Chris casts this super cool on the living room, then you go to train, and then what?” Sarah scratches her head, “What happened that made you blow off your top?”

“Okay, so we start training, and all these fake demons show up, right?” Steven replies, “So I begin to blow them up, one by one.” Steven begins to become very excited, his body re-animating the entire battle simulation. “But then, this one illusion was able to sneak up behind me, and before I knew it, I was flying to the other end of the room!” Steven motions his hands, swinging them from left to right. “And then Chris just chewed my head off for ‘slacking off.’ I mean, sure, I bombed the training, but,” Steven pauses, his face turning red with anger, “does that give him the right to insult me?”

Sarah looks empathically at Steven; she reaches her hands out and holds Steven’s tightly. “I know what you’re going through, and I can feel your pain, your anger,” she smiles. “But, I can also feel Chris’s pain, Steve. And you have to understand that he is in a lot of pressure, you know, with his brother terrorizing the world. He’s just on edge, because he feels that he’s going to lose, trust me, his pain is overwhelming.” She clutches her heart, feeling Chris’ pain; tears begin to well up in Sarah’s eyes. She wipes her red eyes and continues, “We’re the only ones he can depend on, Steve.”

Steven looks at Sarah and smiles sheepishly, “I’ve been acting like a big baby huh?”<br>
Sarah laughs at Steven’s joke, “Ha ha ha , yes you have, you big baby!”

Steven looks at Sarah one more time and squeezes her hands gently. “You’re amazing, did you know that?”

Sarah feels heat rise up her cheeks and she blushes, “So I’ve been told.” She beams meekly, and looks at Steven. “So, are you ready to grow up and apologize to Chris?”

Steven nods his head, “Yes, mom.” He laughs and pulls himself to his feet, “Let’s go.”<br>

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Very nice...more more more please

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OMG those were a great i think 6 updates!!!! I was like WOW this is sooooooooooooo goood!!!!!! Keep up the wonderful Job RP, thats what im going to call you know is RP!! well please update soooon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I also agree with Es on the storyline!!! FANTASTIC!!


Edit-COOL this is my 1800th post!!!!-


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I really like the revisions, Red. Lots more interaction with the New Charmed Ones, and a terrifying new threat.

I'm kinda like Es in having a hard time picturing Chris with a rock-hard chest -- I kinda liked the lanky version, lol. But, hey, to each her own, right!

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RED!! You're back!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Yay!!

So glad to see you back, missed ya! And the revised fic rocks! Oh the Mind Eating demon...creepy,nasty,evil personified , and I love the fact the the 12th source wa a woman. *Shudders* And Wyatt! Don't you dare use that thing on Auntie Paige! I'm with Es, Chris go save her. NOW!
And on the subject of Chris...the rock hard chest........

Moving on quickly,and like scifi said, I am loving the interaction between the new Charmed Ones. And Steven and Sarah . And pregnant Bianca is a lot like pregnant Piper, wanting to fight but realising it's not that simple any more
I'll try and review when you update but, ugh, school has commenced once again
Brilliant updates!!!


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MCharmed-oh yay! im glad that you're liking my story

ethan- oh thank you so much! RP? hehe sure ooh congrutulations on your 1800th post!

scifi- yehey! i am so glad that you liked the revisions! i think that this is way better than my previous *seduction* hehe maybe i should change the descriptions of his body...hmm

charmedroxy- hey!! i missed you and your reviews!! thanks for the wonderful words!! oh i totally agree hehehe oh, i know school kinda sucks, but just study hard okay? thanks !!

and now, the rest of Chapter 3 for all of you

Steven and Sarah walk out of the conservatory, arm in arm, laughing. They stop as they see Chris and Bianca, heading their way. Sarah could hear Bianca whisper, “Remember what we’ve talked about,” quite clearly with her empathic gifts, to Chris.

Steven scratches the back of his head uneasily; Chris stares at the ceiling awkwardly. Sarah nudges Steven in the rubs, while Bianca rubs Chris’ arms.

“Oh boy,” Bianca thinks.

“Oh-kay,” Sarah finally speaks up and breaks the silence. “Chris! Hey, hi, how’re you doing? Steven has a little something to say to you,” she looks at Steven with a disapproving glint in her eyes, “Dontcha, Steve?”

“Well,” Bianca beams, thankful for Sarah’s initiative, “isn’t that a coincidence? Chris has something to say to Steve, too!”

“Oh?” Sarah smiles at Bianca, “Well, why don’t you go first, Steven?”

“Umm, I…I…” Steven stammers, “I..I…I’m s…sor..sorry for…for slacking off.” He finally exhales, “There, I said it!”

“And how about you, Chris?” Bianca looks at her husband.

Chris is finally able to bring his gaze down from the ceiling and focus on the three people around him. “Uh…I…I want to apologize, too, Steve, if…” he stutters, but forces himself to continue, “if I was too harsh on…on you…”

“I understand, Chris,” Steven extends his hand to Chris, “No need for apologies.”

Chris grins at Steven broadly and takes his hand, “I must’ve been a pretty big jerk, huh.”

Steven shakes Chris’s hands and nods, “Yeah, you were,” and laughs heartily, glad to have this little argument over.

Sarah and Bianca share a triumphant smile. They share “high-fives” and leave the two men alone, snickering and laughing at their victory.

“We rule,” Sarah declares happily.

“Totally,” Bianca seconds the motion.

“What say we go to training again and leave our women to gloat over their little victory?” Chris suggests.

Steven nods his head in agreement, “Sure, but this time, I’ll show you what a super-witch like me can do, old-timer.” Steven laughs and walks into the living room, waiting for Chris.

“Super-witch, my ass,” Chris retorts, “Let’s see who’s better, shall we?” He walks over to the living room table and picks up a silver mirror. “Ready?” he asks. Not waiting for Steven’s reply, he chants the spell, and prepares himself as illusions begin to erupt in the living room.

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Are you kidding, Red? Don't change your vision for my or anyone else's tastes. You make your story and your characters anyway you very well please!

Glad Chris and Steven were able to swallow their pride and apologize in the typical male fashion of making the whole thing into a joke to keep some sense of dignity. Go Sarah and Bianca!

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I'm with Scifi--never change your story just to please your audience!! As I said, if this Chris has the time and decides to use it to work out this time around, I won't complain at all--I don't mind having a hunkier Chris in my head at all!

I'm also with the others--this was one of my favorites of your updates--I loved Cassandra Halliwell's spell (could be very useful later and might be a version of Paige's "Let the object of objection become but a dream; As I caused the seen to be unseen." spell that she likes so much.) and loved getting to find out what exactly happened to get the two guys mad at him. I loved the way Sarah explained what was up with Chris to Steven and "being Mom."

And of course, I love the way these two gals can manipulate their men--they're right; GIRLS RULE!!!--and the way the guys made up.

Very, very *very* good, Red! (You're still that to me, not RP) Please update soon!!!

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okay okay its two against one i wont change it anymore hehe

oh yeah, GIRLS TOTALLY RULE! I really enjoyed writing about this one, hehe thank you so much Esmeralda and Scifi for your wonderful reviews, they really make my day, no scratch that, they really make my week

PS- Red's A-Ok with me

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Red, sorry I haven't reviewed in a while, but I was out of town. FABULOUS, WONDERFUL, AMAZING, FANTASTIC updates you have! I'd love to do a long review but I just have so many fics to catch up on and so little time. I just want to say, I LOVE that you made Steven and Chris all muscular and stuff, it's a GREAT mental image for me. Please, update ASAP, I will be looking forward to it!



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oh prue! its so good to have you back reviewing my fic again!! yey!! here's chapter four for all of yah

Chapter 4

The Oracle shimmers in back to the Torture Chamber of the Underworld, carrying a small wooden box, ornately surrounded by Norse sigils and runes. She walks toward Wyatt; her hands are covered in blood. “My lord,” she offers the mysterious box to her master, and hurriedly slinks back into the shadows.
“What took you so long?” Wyatt asks impatiently.

“Forgive me, my lord,” the Oracle bows apologetically, “But I had to fight through the Box’s Guardians.”<br>
“Pah!” Wyatt dismisses the Oracle, “It doesn’t matter; I have what I need in this box.” He turns to Paige, who is lying unconscious on the ground, breathing heavily. He walks over to her, and watches her for a moment. Sneering, he kicks her hard in the stomach.

“Ugh!” Paige wakes with a start, coughing more of her blood out. She slowly opens her eyes, adjusting her eyes to her environment, taking in the images in front of her. Her body feels like lead, and it takes all of her remaining energy to sit up. “W…what do you want with me?”

Wyatt kneels down in front of his aunt, “My, I haven’t awoken you, now have I? Tsk, I am so rude.” He snickers, and continues, “But, I have a gift for you.” He taunts his aunt in a singsong voice, holding the mysterious box in front of her. Mocking his aunt’s condition, he slides his right hand onto Paige’s nape, and with one swift motion, pulls Paige coarse hair back.

“AH!” Paige winces in surprise, the scent of dried blood filling her nostrils. Paige’s eyeballs roll in her head as the pain overwhelms her frail body.

“What?” Wyatt leers triumphantly, “No witty retorts? I’m disappointed.” He releases his grip on Paige’s head and her head slumps forward. With both free hands, he gingerly runs his fingers over the metal lock of the box. “Are you ready for your surprise? After all, it is your birthday, or don’t you remember?”<br>
Paige stays limp; her eyes remain dazed and hard. She does not care. Her gaze lingers to the cavern wall in front of her, ignoring the redundant mocking of her deranged nephew.

“Oh,” Wyatt continues to taunt her, “Happy birthday to you, my dear, dear aunt.” He begins to sing the “Happy Birthday” song, his rough and scratchy voice reverberating around the Torture Chamber. After the little song number, he laughs. “Ready for your present?”




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WYATT, that EVIL %$@#!#$!!! I hope Paige finds a way out of this and kicks him in the head just so he can see how it feels!!! Ugh, they need to vanquish his butt!! But as always, fantastic update! Please update again soon!!


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I'm with Prue--fantastic update!! Oooooo, Wyatt!! I do hope that the New Charmed Ones pop up soon and kick your sorry a$$!!!!!!!!!!! Then I hope one of them can heal and can heal Paige's injuries, so *she* can do onto you as you did onto her!!!

I hope Chris remembers that it's his aunt's birthday and tries reaching for her. He's half-whitelighter; if he tries, he should be able to, especially if half-whitelighter Paige reaches out for him! C'mon, you two, DO IT!!

But as always, Red, don't change your story to suit me! I'm sure that whatever you have in mind is a lot better than what I'm thinking--it always is!!! Please update soon!!!

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BRAVOO!!!!! Excellenta!!! Way to go... I'm gonna kick Wyatt butt myself,, that well (ya know!!)!!!

Your are so talented!! Keep them coming RED!! This fic rockS!!!!!!!! lue

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thanks for the wonderful reviews, Prue, Esmeralda, and CharmedCrazed your reviews always encourage me to write more! thanks thanks and

here's a little more for you guys and gals

Clasping the box between his hands, he closes his eyes, and in a low whisper, recites an ancient Latin incantation. Wyatt waits in silence as he waits for the magic of the incantation to take effect. A satisfied grin crosses his face as the lock of the wooden box magically opens.

“Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhh!”

A blood-curling scream fills the entire Underworld, and the Oracle quickly scurries under the shadows, hiding deeper into the darkness. She instinctively wraps her ears with her hands, trying to block out the horrible sound.

Paige closes her eyes tightly, forcing herself to break the ear-wrenching scream reverberating around the Underworld.

Wyatt laughs, his voice echoing above the harsh scream of the black, gaseous cloud slowly emanating from the box. “Ha ha ha!!! Happy birthday, dear aunt! Ha ha ha!” He raises his hands up to the sky in victory as the Mind-Eater slowly makes its way through Paige’s shaking body.

The black, gaseous form of the Mind-Eater hovers above Paige’s frail body, and in a matter of seconds, plunges deep into her, forcing its way through her eyes, ears, nose, and mouth. It slithers within her and chokes her, hungrily making its way through her defenses.

Paige’s body writhes in pain, twisting and turning, her body being attacked by an intangible enemy. “AH!” Paige shrieks in agony as the Mind-Eater makes its way to her brain, sliding into every crevice and vein. Her body trembles violently, and without warning, levitates into the air. Her shackles and chain explode, sending tiny slivers metal in every direction. Her body ascends to the rocky ceiling of the Torture Chamber.

Paige’s deafening screams are drowned by Wyatt’s triumphant laugh. He looks on as Paige’s body twists and contorts, her body shivering uncontrollably under the Mind-Eater’s influence.



Edited by: RedPhoenix at: 9/9/04 10:12 am

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Oh, Red, you are *so* mean!!! How could you have Wyatt kill Paige in such a horrendous way on her birthday??? I'm going to have nightmares from this one!!! PLEASE tell me it ain't so!!! PLEASE tell me that *somehow* Chris is going to come and save his aunt! PA-LEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEZE!!!

Either that, or let the Mind-Eater eat Wyatt's!! No, on second thought, maybe not--after the Mind-Eater's done puking, the whole world might be destroyed! See what horrible thoughts you're planting in my head???

At any rate, please update soon.

Edited by: Esmeralda at: 9/9/04 11:29 pm

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HOW,,, HOW HOW HOW HOW HOW HOW HOW,, CAN WYATT BE SOOO CRUEL!!! Oh my,, I feel horrible for Paige!!! The details are like watching this in front of my eyes,,

You are a mastermind... Poor Paige,, but you are a mastermind..

Update Again. soon..

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esmeralda-
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you are such a riot! i couldnt stop laughing!! you are really funny! i am so sorry for putting such thoughts in your head, but i really cannot stop laughing with what you said!!! hahahaha

CharmedCrazed- hehe, thanks for the complement. i love the title Mastermind hehe what do you think, MastermindPhoenix anyone?

well, here's an update which im sure you'll love (i hope?) hehe
here's a little snippet from chapter 5!

Chapter 5

Paige screams in pain, every inch of her body feels on fire. She continues to wince in agony, until everything stops. Everything just stops- the pain, the burning agony. She opens her eyes, and shouts in surprise as she looks around her. Everywhere she turns, she sees blue crystal bubbles hovering around her.

Curious, she takes a step forward; she is shocked to find herself floating toward a crystal bubble. “Woah,” she blurts out. As she reaches one of the nearby bubble, she peers inside, and gasps. An image of her face and of her sisters appear inside the bubble. “Oh, Piper, Phoebe,” she sobs, as she sees her two sisters again. She stares deep into the bubble and recognizes the images- it is one of her memories.

“Then, that must mean only one thing,” she whispers to herself, “I’m in the Astral Plane.” She looks around her and recognizes the other crystal bubbles as fragments of her mind, a lection of her memories.

She gazes deep into the bubble in front of her and her heart leaps. “The day I became a Charmed One!” she squeals in delight, as the bubble in front of her shows her the exact moment she becomes a witch and meets her sisters. She beams proudly as she looks on, the thought-bubble showing her the three of them- Piper, Phoebe, and her- huddling around the Book of Shadows, reciting the ancient vanquishing spell for Shax, the Source’s assassin, the demon responsible for her eldest sister whom she has never met, Prue.

She watches proudly as the three of them destroys Shax with the spell. “Heh, fun times.” She continues to watch, seeing her younger-self run out of the Manor in shock.






Esmeralda
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Well, I was definitely glad to read that Paige hasn't died yet--give Wyatt a *little* credit for that--or does Chris get the credit??? Or one of the other New Charmed Ones? Can't wait to find out!!!

I also liked re-reading about Paige's memories, even if she wasn't originallly that happy when she first found out that she was a witch ("What did you guys do to me?")--not until she helped Leo heal Cole ("That was a good thing, right?") and when she got to meet Patty.

Please update soon.

scififantasychic
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How could he?!

Oh, I also hope Paige isn’t dead yet, and that this isn’t just an effect of the Mind-Eater. But, on the other hand, maybe death would be a release for her.

[oddball7]

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esmeralda- actually Paige has me to thank (God, that was so cheesy!) because i love her too much! hehe well actually, she saw the entire eppie of Charmed Again in the memory bubble, but i didnt write it in

scifi- yay! i missed your reviews!

here's the rest of Chapter 5 for ya !!!!!!!!

Paige sighs and floats over to another thought-bubble, enjoying the feeling of freedom that she now possesses after a long time of being chained and shackled. She gazes into the next thought-bubble and shudders in sheer pleasure- inside the thought-bubble lies an image of her and Richard, making love. She giggles, as she looks at the thought-bubble. “We had good times, didn’t we, Richard?” A tear begins to form in her eyes, as she remembers how and why she let Richard go. She cries freely, allowing the tears to roll down her cheeks unrestrainedly. “Why…” Paige screams out at her thought-bubbles, “Why me?” She drifts aimlessly around in the Astral Plane, not caring where she would land next. She resorts to crying, and she cries and cries. “What have I done to deserve this?” She cries for what seems like eternity, and she drifts around, watching the thought-bubbles swim around her. “I’m all alone…”

Paige’s tears stream down her face, and her teardrops flows down throughout the Astral Plane. She eventually stops crying, a final sob escaping her lips for the last time. She turns to another thought-bubble, anticipating to see a happy memory, when suddenly, she hears a faint rumble. The tremor becomes stronger and stronger, until finally, the entire Astral Plane trembles. Confused, she looks up, and is horrified to see a black shadow the size of a tsunami is rushing toward her. She watches and panics as the raging tidal wave washes over her thought crystals, shattering them like they are mere glass.

“NO!” Paige cries out in stark rage. Her head twists in pain as some of her memories are enveloped by the dark wave. She tries to fly out of the tidal wave’s way, to escape its wrath, but it crawls faster than she can even think. “I must escape,” she thinks desperately. When without warning, she hears a thought-crystal explode, and she howls in anger and in agony- the thought-crystal that has been shattered is the one that contains the very first memory she has of her sisters. Then, suddenly, she forgets everything, save for her name- she has forgotten everything about the Charmed Ones, Wicca, WitchCraft, demon-vanquishing, potion-brewing, everything that her sisters and her have lived for the last decade.

“Where am I?” she asks herself, “What am I?” She looks around, clearly having forgotten where she is. An ominous darkness slowly envelops Paige, and turning around, she screams. Her eyes freeze in horror as the tidal wave catches up to her. It engulfs her, eats her whole, and she screams and screams until her voice is muffled and smothered.

Then there is nothing.

Darkness.

Silence.


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RED!!!!!!!!! Great update! Oh my, I was really hoping Paige could get out of this one. Now I REALLY want to kick Wyatt's butt! Please update again soon though! I have to find out what this awful mind eater does next, and if Paige really is dead!!


Prue21

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thanks for reviewing PRue

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YIKES! Like Prue, I really thought you were going to let Paige be OK, and I'm really ready to clobber Wyatt for doing this to her!! I just hope that if the Mind-Eater has indeed killed her (and with you, we never know for sure), that her spirit can find peace--maybe by appearing to her other nephew and tell him how to take care of her killer!!!

BTW--you know how exasperated I get with people who beg for updates!! I keep updating CBL even when only you reply!!!

Also, it would truly help if you'd put in the date that you update in your header for the Fan Fic homepage--I thought you'd just updated; somehow I'd missed that you had before and I wonder if others have the same problem.

Please update soon, even if just for me and Prue and Scifi when she gets to read on the weekend!!!

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Oh, my gosh, Red. What a tremendous description of the death experience (assuming Paige really is dead), with her memories being destroyed one by one, until she is little more than a blank slate to be gobbled up. I am just speechless at the imagination that must have taken to write.

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esmeralda- yehey! thank you so much for reviewing it means a lot to me when people read my work. i am so sorry for being a bit too demanding, but its just been one hell of a week, and i wasnt quite myself when i posted that. im going to erase that little message and i wont do that again. *sigh* again, my sincerest apologies, esmeralda. that little mishap wont happen again and i'll take your advice about putting in the date of my update. again, so sorry.

scifi- yehey! a review! im glad that you liked the death experience of Paige hehe *my my im a saddist! i cannot believe i liked killing characters off! * hehe but thank you so much!!

here's a little tidbit from chapter six

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Chapter 6

The Oracle gasps as she sees Paige’s body slump back to the floor, falling lifelessly to the cavern’s floor. “The wretched demon’s finally done with its meal,” she thinks, disgust and contempt filling her eyes.

Without wasting another moment, Wyatt swiftly opens the box- the Norse runes and sigils suddenly glow with power, and the Mind-Eater is engulfed with a blinding white light. It howls in pain, and in a flash, the Mind-Eater disappears back into its wooden cage.

“And then, there was light…” Wyatt whispers, looking at Paige’s unmoving body, her eyes are frozen open with fear- empty and lifeless.

He gazes down triumphantly at Paige’s lifeless body and smiles, satisfied with his victory. He bends down and strokes Paige’s hair gently, “Poor, poor aunt Paige. We share a special bond. We’re kindred souls, you and I. Both unaccepted in the magical world. Overshadowed by our peers.” He slowly stands up and shakes his head, “But soon, you will rule by my side, my precious Paige. Soon.”

He whips his head and calls out, “Oracle!”

The Oracle slowly emerges from the shadows, shivering, still shaken up from what she has just witnessed. Her voice trembles, fear creeping into her lips, “Y…yes, m...my lord?”

“Here,” he thrusts the box to the Oracle, “Bring me the Vial.”

The Vial. The Oracle knows full well what the Vial is- its purpose, its dark history. Yet, she shimmers out, carrying out the orders of her master. Shimmering back in as quickly as she has left, she returns with a vial containing a black, bubbling liquid. She hands the vial to Wyatt, and returns to the safety of the shadows, awaiting her master’s next command.


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First, you missed the date again!!! Fortunately, I saw your name as the most recent replier, so I took a chance. But now that my name will be the most recent, I truly think you'll get more loyal readers if you add that date!!

OK, got *that* off my chest. WHEW! C'mon, Es, back to the update!! Coz WHAT AN UPDATE IT WAS!!! The Oracle so scared of Wyatt & the Mind-Eater. The Mind-Eater back in its box, maybe waiting to eat Chris' mind or Bianca's or their child's or Sarah's or Steven's!! (Hopefully, actually the Oracle & Wyatt's!! Oh, that's right, we decided we didn't want that so the Eater wouldn't puke and destroy the world!) Paige, truly dead, but maybe (in the so-typical fashion of Charmed!) not about to stay dead. I was hoping that as your self-professed favorite sister, although you enjoy torturing Paige, you couldn't keep her down!! My favorite paragraph of the entire revised version of seduction so far has to be:


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He gazes down triumphantly at Paige’s lifeless body and smiles, satisfied with his victory. He bends down and strokes Paige’s hair gently, “Poor, poor aunt Paige. We share a special bond. We’re kindred souls, you and I. Both unaccepted in the magical world. Overshadowed by our peers.” He slowly stands up and shakes his head, “But soon, you will rule by my side, my precious Paige. Soon.”<br>--------------------------------------------------------------------------------



Now maybe we'll find out that *this* is why Wyatt killed her, so he could have her as his queen!!! Something creepy about a man so much in love with his aunt! I know Paige felt overshadowed by Prue at the beginning, but I'm trying to imagine her still feeling that way when Piper's babies are men. And, Wyatt!! The twice-blessed child, the wielder of Excalibur feeling overshadowed??? Very, very interesting!!!

Please update as soon as you can!!!

[oddball7]

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Wyatt is one sick so-and-so. That's all there is to it.

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esmeralda- just followed your advice hehe thanks! oh, and thanks for the wonderful review!!! thank you so much! i am so glad that you liked that paragraph, its one of my favorites too!


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oh this never fails to crack me up! haha

scifi- one sick is right!

here's a little more for you guys



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“Ah,” Wyatt says proudly as he lifts the Vial above his eyes. “The Vial. Do you know what this is, Auntie Paige?” He asks an unmoving Paige, while shaking the Vial under the light of a torch.

He bends down again and shakes the black Vial in front of his aunt’s lifeless eyes. “Well, I’ll tell you, my dear Paige.” He stands up and begins to pace around Paige’s lifeless body, staring down at her dilated eyes. “Years ago, while I was still the…the,” he cringes, unable to form his next words, “the…Twice-Blessed child, I discovered the Nexus. Or rather, it discovered me. It sensed my potential- my…dark side- and reached out to me, to my power.” He pauses and raises his right arm dramatically, revealing several runes and sigils engraved on his skin. “Like attracted like. And the Nexus offered me more power than any of you Charmed Ones could ever imagine. A partnership was born, and soon, I shared the power of the Nexus.”<br>
“Sharing my blood with the Devil itself,” Wyatt continues, “sealed my bond with the Nexus. And soon, I became its student. The Nexus was a great teacher, greater than the three of you combined, I learned much from it. And it is from the Nexus that I learned how to make the Vial.”

“And now, you will be one of only two people who will experience full well the power of the Vial,” Wyatt sneers as he bends down yet again, placing the Vial under Paige’s nose. “Say good-bye, Auntie Paige,” he intones cryptically, as he pops the cork of the Vial off. A black steam, as black as the Mind-Eater, rises from the Vial and seeps toward Paige’s nose, engulfing her from within.

Wyatt smirks, waiting for the potion to work.

The Oracle has bore witness to the effects of the Vial the first time Wyatt has used it. She remembers the circumstances that have led them to use the Vial. She closes her eyes, and like her master, waits for the effects of the dread potion to work, the memory of its dark magic entering her mind involuntarily.


Esmeralda
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WOW, RED!! Congratulations!!! You wrote a paragraph (actually a couple of them!) that are even better than the last one!!!


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“Years ago, while I was still the…the,” he cringes, unable to form his next words, “the…Twice-Blessed child, I discovered the Nexus. Or rather, it discovered me. It sensed my potential- my…dark side- and reached out to me, to my power.” He pauses and raises his right arm dramatically, revealing several runes and sigils engraved on his skin. “Like attracted like. And the Nexus offered me more power than any of you Charmed Ones could ever imagine. A partnership was born, and soon, I shared the power of the Nexus.”<br>--------------------------------------------------------------------------------



How creepy is that???

HOW FANTASTIC IS THAT on your part??? I definitely bow to your genius for coming up with that!!!

But even tho Paige is your favorite sister (mine, too--she's *so* pretty right now--prettiest of the sisters--and smartest and funniest!), I tend to think that this would've made more sense for Phoebs. After all, like Wyatt, she's the only one of the sisters who was born in the Manor, on top of the Nexus, so like Wyatt, she'd be the most attracted to it and by it. A lot of people say that's why she's constantly attracted to evil.

But as always, it's your story, and if Wyatt's in love with his Auntie Paige, then this makes sense.

Please update soon.

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oh esmeralda! your reviews always make my day. thank you so much... aww you're making me blush! im so glad that you liked these chapters... they're some of my favorites too again!

well, yeah, i was thinking that too, but hehe i *really* like to pick on poor Paige hehe

thanks for the kind words and for taking the time to review my fic!

im going to update as soon as i get my brain out of the dryer! haha

[oddball7]

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here's another update! i hope you'll like this as much as you enjoyed the previous ones, esmeralda!

It was an uneventful night. The Oracle was in her chambers, reading her Tarot cards, honing her divinatory skills, when Wyatt summoned her. Sensing her master’s impatience, she shimmered out of her chambers, donning her cloak as she left.

Shimmering in her master’s chambers, she gasped in surprise as she saw a struggling Elder caged in Wyatt’s room. The Elder was quite strong, putting up a fight with her master, landing a punch at her master’s jaw.

“Ugh,” the Elder screamed, his robes flowing haphazardly as he fought with his captor. “Let me go, Wyatt!” The Oracle watched on the resisting Elder kicked violently from under Wyatt’s hold.

“Wuf!” Wyatt was taken by surprise, and accidentally released his hold on the Elder. The Elder quickly took the upper hand and pushed himself on top of Wyatt, effectively pinning him down, and landed a solid punch on his face. The weakened Elder tried to land another punch on his opponent, when he was suddenly thrown upward telekinetically. He landed on a heap beside Wyatt, bloody and dazed; yet he tried to remain conscious, and began to climb on his knees. He staggered and the Oracle could see the almost powerless Elder cough his blood out.

Wyatt hurriedly climbed to his feet and formed a small energy ball in his palms. Desperately, he shot it directly toward the Elder’s chest, causing the dazed figure to fly at the other end of the cage.

The Elder landed on the rocky floor, blood trickling down his face. The Oracle stared as the Elder shook with uncontrollable spasms, his body disappearing in white orbs and then reappearing again. His body soon stopped struggling and within seconds, the Elder slumped down on the floor, unconscious. His robe fell over his head, and his face was revealed.


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Okay RED... Your awesoome.. Hands down.. Soo awesome.. I've missed alot of the story the past two weeks and I come back to this!! OMG.

I'm dying to know what this black bubbling vial does to POOR Paige? Where is Chris,, do they not see she is missing? and who is the elder.. I will die if it's Leo.. Oh my gosh!!!!

Keep it coming, PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Oh, great job, Red! I've got a pretty good hunch I know who the Elder is--dear old Dad! Now that you had Wyatt pick on your favorite sister, time for him to pick on my favorite male character!!

Yeah, CCrazed, I also want Chris & the rest of The New Charmed Ones to hurry up and rescue the captives. I can understand why Chris wouldn't sense Paige--she's just his aunt--but he better sense his dad or his name is MUD! Especially, coz I'm *hoping* that in *this* future, Leo managed to be a good father to his sons so his sons love him (even if the nutzoid older son has a strange way of showing it!!) rather than resented him, as our Chris did.

I also want to know what that yucky stuff is going to do to poor Paige!

Please update soon, Red!!!

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CCrazed and esmeralda- thank you so much for your wonderful reviews! here is an update for you guys! your questions will be answered shortly in the next few updates!!!





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“LEO!” The Oracle gasped in surprise as she recognized the famed Elder who was once the Whitelighter of the Charmed Ones, and most surprisingly, the father of her master.

“Think you’re so tough, huh,” Wyatt whispered as he slowly licked the blood from the side of his mouth. He kicked his unconscious father in the chest, hard, and he rolled to the other side of the cage.

“Oracle!” Wyatt said, his breathing jagged, “Bring me the Vial.”

“Yes, my lord,” the Oracle hesitated, “My lord, forgive my insolence, but…”

“But what?” Wyatt roared.

“My lord, what about the…” the Oracle spoke in a hushed tone, her voice laden with fear.

“Ah, yes,” Wyatt smirked, “Indeed, the Mind-Eater is a powerful tool, yet somehow, this Elder has resisted its attack. His immunity is strong, but nothing can resist the magic of the Vial. Now give it to me!”

“Yes, my lord.” The Oracle shimmered out, leaving the fallen Elder and Wyatt alone. After a tense second, the Oracle shimmered back in, glass vial in hand, awaiting for his master’s orders.

“My dearest father, I pity you,” Wyatt walked around the unconscious body of Leo Wyatt. “All this time, you have chased me through countless universes, traversed through unnamed galaxies, followed me through the entire cosmos herself. And now, your quest ends here, my dear, foolish father. Your petty life ends here with your search.”


PS. Esmeralda, hehe now the Cat's out of the bag, it is who you were expecting hehe


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Edited by: RedPhoenix at: 10/5/04 7:05 am

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Oh, no, Red! Don't let that Wyatt kill Leo!

Great fight scene there. Here's hoping that Leo can resist the Vial as he did the Mind-Eater (boy that would have been an interesting experience to see)!

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thank you for the review scifi I missed you and your encouraging reviews!!! oh please come to the board after checking test papers and all

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Red, your Wyatt continues to be one of the most wicked, hateful ones around!!! First Paige, and now Leo! And, yes, that's exactly whom I guessed!! As I said in an earlier one, I can forgive Chris not picking up on his aunt's vibes, but if he doesn't pick up on his DAD's, his name is MUD!!! Hopefully the New Charmed Ones will be off to the rescue and SOON before Wyatt uses that Mind-Eater on Leo!!! Either that or hopefully an Elder will be too strong for that thing! What a laugh on Wyatt *that* would be!! And hopefully the Mind-Eater eats Wyatt instead, even if it does make it puke!!! (I know how much you love that, so I had to put it in here again!!)

Please update soon!!

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oh Esmeralda it is so great to have you back!! i have missed you and your reviews so much! how have you been? i hope everything's fine with you

oh i love it when you use that joke! now that is one classic Charmed fanfic joke!!!

oh it feels great to have you back Esmeralda!

Welcome back!

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I'm proud to have come up with a true Fan Fic joke--one that I still have hopes for becoming a reality!!!

And I'm very glad to be back!! Not totally--my heart still aches when I think of Mom or Cousin Karen, but a lot better than I was. And reading and answering Charmed fan fic, especially good Charmed fan fic like yours, truly helps a lot!!

Please update soon!!!

[oddball7]

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would you really want the world to drown with the Mind-Eater's puke? LOL!


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im honored that you think my fic is good

the next update's for you, esmeralda



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As if hearing his declaration, the Underworld shook with an intensity that brought boulders and stalactites crashing down on Wyatt and Leo. Wyatt raised his hands up in triumph and a lightning bolt struck the ground from out of nowhere. It was as if the Elements Themselves were trembling before Wyatt’s wrath. Winds howled in protest and the ground shuddered under Wyatt’s evil. Rocks and stones and rained down on them and scratched Leo’s face and arms. However, his healing powers worked, even while he was unconscious, and blue and white orbs sealed his wounds. Wyatt simply raised his hands, and he was soon protected by an invisible force field.

Muttering a silent incantation under his breath, Wyatt waved his hands and the Elements went back “to sleep.” The earth stopped trembling, and the winds stopped blowing- the Underworld once again turned into a crypt, void of life and color.
“The Vial,” Wyatt said curtly. “Bring it to me.”

The Oracle emerged from the safe veil of the shadows and presented a glass vial to her master; she recoiled as Wyatt snatched the Vial from her hands angrily. Watching from a safe distance, the Oracle saw Wyatt walk over to his father in three quick steps, bending down as he reached his quarry.

Straining to hear what her master would order her next, she vaguely heard him whisper “Good-bye, Leo Wyatt” to his unconscious father. Entering behind the curtain of shadows, the Oracle watched on as Wyatt, Lord of the Underworld, uncorked the Vial. Magically, a cloud of black smoke emanated from the Vial and seeped into the unsuspecting nostrils and ears, coiling around his face like a snake.

His body soon turned black, then white, then back to its natural shade. The skin on his smooth, muscled back ripped apart, and long, bony wings burst forth from his skin. His body glowed, disappeared into blue and white orbs, and reappeared back on the floor, wheezing and bleeding. His short, clean fingernails grew into sharp black talons, and his eyes suddenly opened, revealing red, bloodshot eyes with icy blue irises.



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All I can say to this one is YIKES!!!! LEO!!! LEO!!! NO!! NO!! CHRISTOPHER, YOU GET YOUR A$$ DOWN THERE AND SAVE YOUR DAD RIGHT NOW OR....OR....OR I'M NOT SURE WHAT, BUT IT SURE WON'T BE PRETTY!!!

As for the Mindeater and Wyatt--drowning the world would be worth it to see that guy put out of commission!! Well, maybe not, but...!!! How 'bout just toss some of that Vial Crap at him???!!!!!!

Please update soon!!!

Edited by: Esmeralda at: 10/14/04 11:03 pm

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What did that do to Leo??!!!

I'm with Es. Chris, go save your dad!

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esmeralda- LOL!! you never fail to crack me up with your Wyatt and Mindeater jokes, es! hhmmm howzabout that Vial crap on him? why not?? hahaha thanks for the review, es! but like what ive said, its just a memory so Chris really cant do anything bout this...

scifi- well, here's more!



RedPhoenix
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As his eyes snapped open, Leo uttered a low, menacing growl. He levitated off the floor, his newly acquired wings flapping angrily in the air. Leo scanned the room, and upon seeing Wyatt standing in front of him, uttered another heart-wrenching snarl, his bloodshot eyes glaring at the demented ruler of the Underworld with intense anger and rage.

The Oracle could see Leo’s clothes torn and ripped in many different places, and she cannot help but smile at the beautiful creature in front of her. Her master had just created a god, a force to be reckoned with.

“Kneel before me, slave!” Wyatt had commanded. “Kneel before your master, your creator!”

Reduced to a primal killer rage and bloodlust, Leo forsook all rationality, and making full use of his new wings, lunged forward at Wyatt, his bony wings beating swiftly. Dust flew around as Leo’s wings caused a whirlwind to fly at his captor. Using the dust as a distraction, Leo quickly dove forward, flapping his wings at a deafening speed, his claws outstretched, eyes fixed on his neck.
Wyatt braced himself for the approaching whirlwind, and with a wave of his hand, the whirlwind collapsed and dissipated, the dust scattering wildly around him. Momentarily blinded, he was unaware of Leo’s claws inches away from his neck, vulnerable and open to attack.

Seizing this opportunity, Leo dove faster, his bony wings propelling him at a blinding speed. Within seconds, Leo found his way to Wyatt’s vulnerable form and grabbed his neck, digging his black talons deep into Wyatt’s flesh. Feeling his building anger and angst flowing through his veins, the uncontrollable Leo shoved his claws deep into Wyatt’s neck, squeezing his air passage. With his sharp claws, Leo dug deep into his son’s flesh until it bled- a dark crimson color trickled down on Wyatt’s body. With an earthshaking wail, Leo flapped his wings again and hovered above the ground, carrying his opponent with him.

In between his jagged breath, Leo challenged his son. “What…have you…done…to me…!!! How…dare…YOU!!!” His nostrils flared as steam came out of them, his anger causing smoke to come out of his body. Leo’s blood boiled with anger, and his grip tightened around Wyatt’s neck.

Caught by surprise by the ferocity of his father’s attack, Wyatt’s eyes widened with panic. “His strength…overwhelming…I…I did…not expect…t…this…” he thought, as his head began to feel numb, the flow of oxygen into his brain cut short by Leo’s tight grip on his neck.

[oddball7]

rebkos
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Oi! You jacked my title dude!

Possessions - By Rebkos

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RedPhoenix
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actually, your title is possessionS with an "s", while mine is possession, without an "s". but if it means so much to you, i'll be more than happy to change mine. have a nice day, DUDE

Esmeralda
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I also noticed that the titles were pretty similar and wondered if you were aware of it, Red. All along, I was think Reb's story *was* Possession (without the S), so I really would've been confused. I don't think you'd want readers to get your story mixed up with hers--it's totally different from yours (and also very good!), and you wouldn't want to confuse your readers--like me! If you *are* going to include possessions or a possession, you might want to call it "The Possession of Whoever" (I haven't read this update yet, so that's why I don't know for sure--I just wanted to comment on the title first) to help keep them separate.

Now I'll actually go read it, and then reply on it.

P.S. This also shows why I don't like to start posting a story until I'm done writing it, and why I'm busy working on my next story, No Greater Love, even while I'm posting my first one, Charmed by Love, hoping that I finish NGL before I finish posting CBL. That way, if I find out things aren't going the way I wanted them to and I want to go back and change something, the only one who has to know that I changed it is ME!

Now, Red, I'm *NOT* saying that you should wait until you finish Seduction, Possession, The Possession of---, Last Story of the Trilogy, Whatever before you post it!!! Don't you *DARE* make us wait that long!!! But you *might* want to start working on your next story even while you're still working on this one!!

Now, I'm *finally* going to go back and read the update!

Esmeralda
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To tell you the truth, Red, between killing Leo like Wyatt did Paige and turning him into a monster, I'd prefer him being dead!!! Except that Wyatt is still alive, I didn't like this one bit!!! And what's this about this being a dream so Chris can't do anything about it? Has Paige been dead for a long time? Has Leo been a monster for a long time? No wonder Chris hates his father!

RedPhoenix
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(10/15/04 12:30 pm)
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Rebkos- sorry for being a little bit harsh, i had a rough day in school earlier this morning. i'll be changing it

es- thanks for the suggestion, i will keep that in mind. umm can you help me think of a title that is synonymous with Possession? Cause i really wanted my series to have a one-word-only title.. hehe.. and um, this aint a dream it's actually the Oracle's memory... she remembered how and what happened to Leo when Wyatt first used the Vial. so technically this happened in the past...

and oh yeh,, is Paige dead? let's see!

Esmeralda
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Hmmm. I'm afraid when it comes to titles, I'm not very good--Scifi helped me with No Greater Love and since Charmed by Love is Leo & Piper's love story and is based almost totally on the show, that was easy!! Especially if you want a one-word title, those are tough! If I were at home, I'd use my thesaurus (try thesaurus.com) for other words. Right now, I'm fresh out.

Man, you've got me confused. This is the *Oracle's* memory??? When did she start remembering??? At one point did her memory start? Coz is this whole story is a memory, that, Memory, might be a good title!!

RedPhoenix
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"The Oracle has bore witness to the effects of the Vial the first time Wyatt has used it. She remembers the circumstances that have led them to use the Vial. She closes her eyes, and like her master, waits for the effects of the dread potion to work, the memory of its dark magic entering her mind involuntarily."
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here is the part where the Oracle rememebered what had happened to Leo. see, the story is full of flashbacks and retelling of the past. but Paige "dying" happened in the story's present. i also used a shift from present tense to past tense to emphasize the recollection


oh man, i didnt think it would be this hard to think of a title! hehe how about "Inhabit?" nah...well, i think i'll just have to rack my brains. thanks for the suggestion Es


Edited by: RedPhoenix at: 10/16/04 1:55 am

MCharmed21
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Wondeful. Update again soon

Esmeralda
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WHOOPS! Shows you how out of it I've been that I missed the change in tense!! You're absolutely right! Sorry about that, Red!!! Now I get it a lot better!

"Inhabit" sounds like a good one. So would "Inhabiting" or "Inhabitation"

Please update soon!

scififantasychic
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Since I don’t know where you’re going to take us in further updates (you’re so good at the twists, Red), I’m not sure how much help I can be with a title. “Occupation” maybe? Or “Transformation,” which would tie together the Mind Eater/Vial part of the story with the development of “The Charmed Ones” as well as the life growing within Bianca. I don’t know.

Anyway, great updates! Even though this is just a memory, I was cheering for Beast-Leo all the way. I just love it when Wyatt gets more than he bargained for! It’s a shame that we know he somehow won this battle. Oh, well. We can always hope that Chris will finally get a shot at him!

RedPhoenix
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(10/16/04 9:34 pm)
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es and scifi, thank you so much for helping me think of a title, since "Possession" was taken (sniff sniff) but, hey, i think that the new one fits well, but i do like Possession (sniff sniff again, oh get over it Red ) but thanks again, both of you


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you’re so good at the twists, Red
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oh and thank you so much, scifi, for this heart-warming complement

i will be updating as soon as i can.

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Oh Red!!! I just got caught up on this and it's FANTASTIC!! Love the new titles to by the way LEO!!! I'm going to kill Wyatt myself for doing that to Leo!! How dare HE!!! So much has happened since my last review, so I'm just going to do a short review and tell you I LOVE all of it, and hopefully from now on I can keep myself caught up on all your updates so that I can do an individual review for all of them.

Please Update Soon.

Prue21

RedPhoenix
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Prue!!!!!!!! its so great to have you back! im so happyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy thanks for the wonderful review

P.S. i can't wait to hear more from your story!

Esmeralda
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YAY!! Somehow I *knew* Scifi would come up with a good title for you! Transformation sounds absolutely perfect! Can't wait to see what everyone is transformed into!!!

Please update soon!!!

[oddball7]

RedPhoenix
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i am so sorry that i havent updated this story yet.. i will try my best to update by the first week of November.

Esmeralda
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Speaking for myself, I can say I don't mind as long as you keep doing such a great job with Teacher's Pet!!! i like this one, but I *love* that one!!! But please update this one when you get a chance!!

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OMG Im so so so so sorry that I havent been reviewing but its a great story and I am reading it, its just my board is taking up most of my time!! But I dont want you to think that I stoped reading your stories, because I didnt I just dont have as much time with being a freshman in High School they load the Homework up and stuff! But you are a great writer and Update when you can, just make sure you update!!! LOL Keep up the great job Reddie!!!!!


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RedPhoenix
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es: im so *glad* that you love Teacher's Pet hehe... and im glad that you're enjoying it!

ethan: yay! you're back!! i missed you and your reviews, you! i can totally understand, and btw, your board rocks! *Charmed Cafe rocks too!* and i can totally empatize with schoolwork getting in the way. hey! you're a fresman now! so how does it feel in high school? besides the tons of homework, im sure there are other great things waiting for you! hehe *insert sarcastic laugh! LOL!* anyway, thanks for the heart-warming complement, ethan! here's an update for you and es enjoy!

RedPhoenix
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Caught by surprise by the ferocity of his father’s attack, Wyatt’s eyes widened with panic. “His strength…overwhelming…I…I did…not expect…t…this…” he thought, as his head began to feel numb, the flow of oxygen into his brain cut short by Leo’s tight grip on his neck.

“What have you done to me?!?” Leo bellowed through gritted fangs.

Finding it hard to breathe, Wyatt instinctively closed his eyes lifted his left hand forward. A sphere of crackling blue light appeared within Wyatt’s outstretched palm. Without waiting for a moment’s hesitation, Wyatt thrust the brilliant energy ball into Leo’s flexed wings.

“Aaaahhh!!” Leo’s body writhed in agony, as a mixture of burning fire and freezing ice spread throughout his body, causing him to loosen his grip on his son. His body twisted in pain, his wings curling inwards, then out, his eyes squeezed shut in intense agony. His hands curled into fists as he tried to dampen the pain shooting wildly through his transformed body.

The Oracle looked on as Wyatt flailed around, airborne, before disappearing in a swirl of black orbs, and reforming back onto solid ground. Gaining his balance, Wyatt stared at the floating Leo, fire burning in his eyes. The Oracle watched as her master shot ball after ball of crackling blue energy at Leo.

“Ahhhh,” the incessant screaming filled her ears, echoing through them loudly.

“Aaaahhh….” another ear-piercing scream fills the air, and the Oracle realizes it is coming from a female- Paige.
The Oracle gapes in horror, as once more, the evil of the Vial resurfaces. Her ears ache as Paige’s scream intensifies in pitch, causing stalactites to crash down on the three of them. Muttering an ancient incantation hurriedly under her breath, a transparent bubble materializes around the Oracle, protecting her from the falling rocks and stones. Through the raining rock formations, the Oracle continues to watch as Paige’s body begins to shake involuntarily, an unseen energy pulsating through her entire body.

“And so, it begins once more,” the Oracle whispers in fear.

She watches on as the Charmed One’s body levitates into the air, as if being lifted by invisible hands. A black mist pours out from Paige’s nose and mouth, and surrounds her entire body. Tiny, black wisps of vapor circles her face, and suddenly, her body contorts in pain. As with Leo, the Oracle stares as the soiled clothing that covers the Charmed One’s body erupts in blue and white flames. Her body falls down again on the cold, rocky floor of the Underworld, flames still surrounding her naked form.

Paige twists and turns, her body convoluting in pain. The mysterious flames lick at her body furiously, burning her flesh and hair. Black strands of hair turn into a fiery red, Norse runes and sigils begin to burn into her arms and legs, and her short fingernails transform into sharp talons. Suddenly, her wailing stops, and her eyes snap open, revealing tiny yellow slits inside icy blue irises. Unexpectedly, she smiles, and with but a thought, shimmers out of the caverns, and reappears as quickly as she disappears. Reappearing, she stands fully erected, her back straight, eyes staring defiantly at the two figures standing in front of her.

“My Queen,” Wyatt boldly steps closer to the transmogrified Paige. “Welcome to our kingdom.” Wyatt’s eyes glint in satisfaction as they sweep around her aunt’s naked body.
“Exquisite,” he whispers under his breath. He stretches his hands out, waiting for Paige to accept them into hers.

[oddball7]

Esmeralda
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Transformations is a great title for this, Red--first Leo's and now Paige's. I *knew* that sicko Wyatt had a thing for his aunt (EEEEEEEEEWWWWWWWWW!!!) and now he's proven it!

CHRISTOPHER VICTOR HALLIWELL, YOU GET YOUR A$$ AND YOUR NEW CHARMED ONES' A$$ES DOWN THERE AND SAVE BOTH YOUR AUNT AND YOUR DAD, RIGHT NOW!!! Or I'll sic your Mom's ghost after you!!!

Please update soon, Red!!

MCharmed21
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HEY U STOLE MY CHRIS'S MIDDLE NAME....LOL...WONDERWONDERFUL...PLEASE UPDATE SOON...THIS IS VERYYYY INTRESTING

RedPhoenix
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es- thank you for the review! eww, incest right? you know me, im a sicko, LOL! whew, will Chris and his Charmed Ones get the chance to? let's see!

MCharmed- thanks for reviewing! alas, ive never used the name Chris "VIctor" Halliwell anywhere in my fics!

here's another update for you guys!

RedPhoenix
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(11/6/04 11:21 pm)
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Chapter 7

Paige looks curiously at the one who has called her “Queen.” She squints, as intertwined feelings of excitement and anxiety coursed through her body. Intending to accept the stranger’s hands, she extends her hands out fiercely; then, without warning, streams of bright orange flames erupt from her hands.

The flames suddenly fly toward Wyatt, and he is suddenly engulfed by orange fire. However, instead of crying out in agony, Wyatt laughs heartily in pleasure, his deep voice echoing through the entire cavern. “Yes, yes, YES!!! You have been reborn, Paige. Welcome to your new destiny.” He laughs once more in satisfaction and approval as he looks on at his new creation. Wyatt waves his hands and the flames suddenly vanish.

“Paige, yes,” Paige answers in a different voice, deeper and more sensual, “That was the name of this body that I now inhabit. Paige is dead. Now, there is only Spite; your Mind-Eater has done its job well. Nothing remains, save for this body’s extensive knowledge of magic. Wait, what’s this?” She hesitates, feeling around her body as if sensing something amiss, and laughs shrilly. “Hahahaha. I can feel that there are little vestiges of Charmed residue living inside, an iota flailing around hopelessly inside. Pathetic.” Spite pauses, feeling once more her new body, flexing its arms and legs, using it for the first time, and walks over to Wyatt, apparently pleased with him. “But, this body is strong, young. I shall put this to good use.” Spite smiles seductively at him and extends her right arm out delicately.

Wyatt smiles back, a look of smug satisfaction on his face. He walks closer and takes his queen’s hand, gently bowing and kissing it tenderly. “Yes, Spite, a name befitting for one who is full of repressed malice and anger. Release your rage, Spite, upon the world above! Release your wrath and fury, upon the unsuspecting world, and let us conquer it together!” He laughs wickedly; his laughter is laced with malice and evil.

Paige laughs along with his King, a shrill voice rising in unison with the deep voice of Wyatt. “Yes, those foolish witches and weak mortals are nothing. We are power absolute! Together, we shall conquer all!” Their menacing laughter echoes loudly throughout the entire Underworld.

The heavy laughter finally stops and Wyatt looks at his queen in the eye. “But first, preparations must be met, my Queen.” Wyatt smiles. He closes his eyes, and with but a thought, a crimson cloak abruptly materializes upon his outstretched arms. The robe has a blood red color, and it seems to slither restlessly on Wyatt’s hands. “My Queen,” he presents his gift to Spite.

Spite looks at the robe and takes it from Wyatt’s hands. She feels the softness of the cloth, and smiles satisfactorily at the luxurious feel of the velvety cloak. Without a moment’s hesitation, she wraps the robe around her body. As soon as Spite dons the mysterious cloak, it suddenly makes its way around her body, clinging to her neck, shoulders, breasts, arms, and legs, encasing her in a black coat, the long, flowing robe hanging loosely on the rugged floor of the Underworld and moving on its own. “What?” she gasps in surprise, “What is this?”<br>

[oddball7]

MCharmed21
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Still a wonderful story...sorry Victor was said by Es...oh well your the bomb! Update soon

Esmeralda
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Sorry for stealing your middle name for Chris, MCHarmed!! But I really needed a middle name for him, and that's so perfect! If he's named Christopher after Leo's father, it makes sense that he's also named after Piper's!!

Please update soon, Red!!

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what did you guys think of Spite?

scififantasychic
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What’s happened to Paige is so very interesting, Red. So, there’s only the tiny iota of our Paige left, and Spite is a truly different person in Paige’s form? It’s hard to wrap the mind around what Wyatt has done; his feelings are sickeningly incestuous, but in another way, Spite is so different from Paige. In any case, he’s weird and evil. Love it.

RedPhoenix
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yay! yippee!! Scifi is back! yay thanks for the review, Scifi! im glad that you loved Paige turning into Spite! im not sure of how you guys would react, but im glad that you liked it!

here's an update for you, Scifi

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“I present to you, the Sentient Cloak. A cloak forged from a multitude of fairy wings, collected from a legion of fairy warriors, dyed with the blood of slain witches and warlocks alike. It is a cloak of magic, my Queen, and it moves under its wearer’s command.”

“Ah,” Spite comments, feeling the luxuriousness and power of her cloak. She closes her eyes and drinks in the dark power of the cloak. Suddenly, a whisper drifts uninvited into Spite’s mind. The cloak seems to speak with her, mind-to-mind, and mirrors the evil apparent inside her.

“I can feel you…” a whisper echoes through Spite’s mind, “I can taste your evil… Yes, you are the one I’ve been looking for…Yes, your power is great, my Queen…”

Looking eagerly for a target, Spite’s eyes falls on the Oracle. “Perfect,” she grins maliciously. Imposing her power on the Sentient Cloak, she wills the segment of the long cloak touching the ground to metamorphose into tendrils. The Sentient Cloak changes upon her command, and lashes out onto the Oracle, flying towards her at a blinding speed.

The Oracle shrieks in horror as she sees the sharp tendrils propel themselves towards her. With but a fraction of a second to react, the Oracle swiftly shimmers out, shimmering in quickly at the opposite end of the caverns. Her mouth drops in awe as the tendrils strike the stone wall behind where she has once been standing. Had the Oracle not reacted, she would have been reduced to mere rubble, much akin to what has happened to the stone wall.

“Marvelous,” Spite whispers in pleasure, as she looks at the destruction that has been caused by her new cloak. “Such power, such evil.”