The Ult Punishment - A world w/o Phoebe-Finished 9

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Author: CharmedCrazed

Disclaimer: Charmed and all of it characters and storyline prior, belong to Spelling Productions. The story is from me.

The Ultimate Punishment - A World without Phoebe

This takes place towards the end of the Crimes and Witch Demeanor,, except the Tribunal dishes out much harsher and a more vital sentence. After the sly trickery of Barbas trying to ban the witches from doing any magic because of there careless ways. The tribunal decides to strike Phoebe of all of her powers inactive and active, and with the harshest of punishment will lose her life. In order to continue the Charmed Ones legacy a charmed ones must take her place. Therefore, bring back from the dead Prue Halliwell. Therefore Reversing the memory of Prue death from the world, and now presenting the death of Phoebe, but the sisters will remember all. If magic is again revealed in the same careless manner in order to contact the Cleaners the punishment will the death of the charmed ones and there legacy. Daryl will be released and his memory will be clean. The tribunal vanishes, and Barbas is sent back to fires of hell for his part in the revealing of magic.



After hearing the devastating verdict. The girls shocked, confused, and taken a back. Come together as there automatically orbed to the Manor.

Sitting on the couch, crying and whimpering in absolute shock.

Piper: “How…. Why?” Crying between each word. Tears rolling down her face, holding onto Phoebe as she sobs in piper’s lap.
Paige: “I just don’t understand, I just don’t see how they can do this. I..I…” Curled up beside Phoebe.
Phoebe: “ I did this to myself, I’ve known from the beginning not to use magic for personal gain.” Sobbing immensely, and holding on tight to her sisters.
Piper: “This is crazy, this isn’t right. There has to be something we can do.” Finally getting past crying to pure rage. “LEO. LEO”<br>
Leo orbing in. Tears in his eyes, seeing the pain and anquish in his wife’s eyes and the sisters.
Piper: “No Leo, Nooo. We have to be able to do something,, I can’t lose another sister. I just can’t. It’s not natural. I’m just getting used to losing Prue, I can’t lose Phoebe, I won’t. Make this stop, Make it!” Holding on to Leo with sheer terror and remorse. Crying and screaming at Leo with tears rushing down her face, her eyes red and puffy her knuckles clinching turning white from clenching his arms.




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I usually don't read stories that ask me to "Plz read"--I'd rather read stories that sound interesting than because the author wants me to--but the title fascinated me enough, that I had to try it, and I *love* it! I also thought that Phoebe got off much too easily (and also thought that Paige should've shared her punishment--she's used magic for personal gain just as much, if not more, than Phoebe--see Mr. Right.) and being a Prue-fan, I love the idea of Prue coming back! But my heart is aching for Piper, Paige & Leo, especially because they have to remember.

I don't know exactly what you have in mind for this story. If by any chance Phoebe *does* get to live (but having to go through Prue's death again??? NOOOOO!!), I may ask you if I can borrow the ideas for my own story, No Greater Love, which will be a letter from Phoebe to Chris-of-the-Good-Future, telling him all about Chris Perry, which would follow Season Six, but also use fanfics to make it better. Obviously, if Phoebs dies, she couldn't write the letter, but if she doesn't, and if it will fit between this and Witch Wars, I'd truly love to use it!!

Please update soon!!!

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I have no problem with using my idea,, as long as you tell others about it being mine.. I'm soo excited you like it..

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Thanks so much for the permission!!

Oh, don't worry!! I plan on giving all the authors whose fanfics I use full credit, both in the disclaimor at the beginning of the story and in my "intro" at the beginning of the appropriate section. I may even add links, so readers can use them to get to the original stories.

So for both of our sakes, BEST OF LUCK!!



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Leo at this point is way to scared to tell him what he knows. Piper can see this in his eyes and through his face.

Piper: “God no, Leo, noo. You’re a whitelighter go talk to them. Have them re-evaluate this, you have to!” Now falling down Leo with no strength or hope. He sits her on the couch, and holds her.
Leo: “I.. I just don’t know what to say. I’ve done all I can do. The Tri..” And he is cut off by Paige who is now beside herself.
Paige: “Leo what good are you. You’re supposed to be almighty, and important. You have strings you can pull. How important are you if you can’t even talk a few idiotic elders into fixing this mess. Why do we risk our life day in and day out for a few bon bon eating elders and satin worshipping demons to tell us we are going to lose our sister. This is so stup…” Cut off once again by Phoebe.
Phoebe: “It’s enough, that’s it. It’s not Leo’s fault, we knew the risk when Gideon said there were risk that were far greater involved. We still went up there,, at least Darryl is safe. And Prue will be back.” Sobbing, still tears running down her face at the thought of losing her sisters and her life.
Paige: “No Phoebe. Quit talking that way. Gideon never told us to this extreme. I never ever would had gone up there if I knew. If I knew that…” And she just breaks down again. Phoebe grabs her and holds her really really tight.
Phoebe whispers to Paige “I’m so glad you came into my life,, I love having you as my sister” With this Paige begins to sob so hard she can’t even breath. Paige has lost so much in her life, and she can’t see why they didn’t take her. She doesn’t understand it all. She’s done way worse things in her life for personal gain, why should she not have to bear the punishment, why Phoebe.

Leo looks over the girls still holding his wife closely, knowing he has to tell them something, but this time the most important time in his life to say something of inspiration, he has no words of encouragement, he has no leaps of faith. He is speechless.

[Nite Owl]

At this point, everyone is speechless. No one says a word, constant sobs and tears and sniffles. Glances to each other. The feeling of doom and gloom spread throughout the room. From the corner of the room, mist of white glows appear and Chris orbs in. Not knowing of what has happen. He sees his whole family clumped on the couch; full of tears and terror filled looks on their face. Chris stumped “Mom, Dad, what…What is going on,, did something happen to Wyatt?”

Leo looks up to Chris, tears rushing down his face. “No, Wyatt is fine, he’s still at Magic School.” Chris confused, baffled, and overcome with the emotions in the room. “Then someone tell me what the hell is going on.” All the sisters look at Chris, not sure how to say what they have to say. Leo completely stumped not sure how to break it to him.

Piper looks up at her son, tears streaming down her face. She walks over to Chris and sits him down with her on the couch beside Phoebe, pushing Leo out of the way.. “Chris, the tribunal handed down a very very harsh punishment to us.” Chris looking even more confused, “But Mom, when I orbed out, the Phantasm was pulled out of Inspector Sheridan, it wasn’t our fault. It was Barbus, I thought that was clear.” Piper to Chris, looking down at the ground and holding Chris’s hand in hers and holding Phoebe’s other hand in her hand. “Well the tribunal didn’t see it that way. They said that Phoebe’s would be stripped of all over her powers. And..” Cut off by Chris “Well that is crap,, she needs powers to be a charmed one. Who do they think they are. I say we fight it..” Piper looking at Chris tears still welling up in her eyes. “Honey, that isn’t all, they said that Phoebe would have to die for abusing her powers.” Sucking back the tears as hard as it was. Chris looking stumped and dumb founded, like being hit by a Tractor Trailer.



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I like it!! Certain people on this board knew I would!!! Hehehe....

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oh my goodness! update update! i love this.

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Not too bad. Not too bad at all. I am curious to see where you will go with this
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I'm so glad you all like it.. Hopefully it's just get's better!


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Chris sits there in complete silence. Staring at his mom, and seeing Phoebe behind her.
Chris: “This just can’t be.” His words trailing off, while tears begin to fill his eyes. “This isn’t how it’s supposed to happen. It’s not your time yet.” Still looking completely struck and angry.
Phoebe looks over to Chris. “What do you mean it’s not my time yet?” more confused then ever.
Chris: “I… I… just…” Trying to think up a good lie, but can’t think straight.
Phoebe becoming very angry “Chris, now is not the time to hide the future from us, to keep lying. Tell me, tell me now.” Basically screaming at him through her anger and tears.
Chris: “It’s just that,, you die young, but your not this young. You have a child and a husband. My cousin. Who I love and adore” Trailing off because he’s said way too much.
Phoebe begins to sob again not even able to compose her thoughts or theories or ideas. “Chris, I just don’t…” and then she begins to cry on Paige.
Paige: “It’s okay Phoebe, it’s okay.”<br>Phoebe: "I want a children, and a husband, I want a happy life. I deserve that.. " Crying uncontrollably.
Piper looks at Chris who has now pulled away from her and is sitting in the big overstuffed chair across from the couch. Tears welling up in his eyes, just sitting there, still confused and ultimately lost.
Piper: “Chris,, honey our futures are never ever set perfectly, our destiny is, but our futures, well that always changes. You have to understand that.”<br>Chris looks at Piper annoyed and disgusted, “Mom, I’m completely aware of how our future can change, but something isn’t right here, something is wrong.” And with that he orbs out.
Piper: “Chris, Chris,, CHRIS,, don’t you dare leave your mother when she is talking to you.”<br>Leo grabs Piper, “Honey leave him be, he needs time to sort this out in his head. To get away from it all”<br>--
Chris orbs to his special place him and his fiancé Bianca once shared. The spot were he proposed to his one true love. He began to sob and cry harder then he has in a long time. He whispers to himself “Bianca, why did I do this again. Why? When I’m losing so much. I wish you were here with me.” His voice fading into his tears.

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Piper gets up from the couch looking at Phoebe, who is still sitting there laying against Paige. Both have settled down enough that there just now dazed, and not really reacting to anything.
Piper: “Leo”<br>Leo: “Yes honey.” Wiping away his tears.
Piper: “Leo, go up there now. Don’t come back till you find out what happens now.”<br>Phoebe and Paige, both look at Leo and then to Piper.
Piper: “We have to know, so go.” As she pushes him off.
Leo: “Honey, I just don’t think there g..”<br>Piper: “Go.. Don’t talk, just go.”<br>With that Leo Orbs off. Leaving Piper standing there, staring at Phoebe and Paige.
Phoebe: “Piper have you gone mad,, Why do you want to know,, what is going through your head. Why push them to do this. I don't wanna know. What is going through your head”<br>Piper: “The only way we can fix this, is if we know what is going to happen. I love Prue and would do anything I could to have her back, but I won’t give up one sister for another, I don’t want to go through this Hell again. I won’t allow these freaks of nature to do this to us. We are the most powerful and GOOD witches. We’re Legends, dang it. We can fight this, we have too.”<br>Both Phoebe and Paige were surprised. They didn’t say anything, more relieved that she has enough capacity to fix things.


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As Chris sat there on the concrete bench, his face red from crying, his head in hands, feeling alone and defeated and as if he was the cause of all the bad that was happening. He felt a hand on his shoulder. He looked up,, caught off guard. When he turned around. He saw a lady whom he recognized.
Chris: “Lynn”<br>Lynn: “You must be Chris. So then you know I'm Bianca's mother” Standing near him with sympathy in her eyes
Chris: “Yes I am. What… Why are you here?” Stumbling over his words. With surprise in voice.
Lynn: “Chris, when Bianca was at my home trying to get the Grimoire, she left me a note, telling me to give this note to you, at this exact time and exact date.”
Chris: “Do what,, why,, thi…” being cut off
Lynn: “Chris I don’t know,, I didn’t open it,, trust me,, it’s in me to read these type of things, but it’s my daughter and I respect her wishes.”<br>Chris: “Thank you Lynn.” Giving her a sympathetic grin.
Lynn: “Chris, I’m assuming you’re the one she loves the one who she would be with to eternity. Treat her right, and love her forever.”<br>Chris began to cry at the thought that he knew she was dead the last time he was there. He knew and couldn’t tell her.
He chocked on his words. “I will love her forever, and ever. You have no idea.” And with that Lynn looked down, and shimmered away. Leaving him sitting there with a note from his Bianca and tears falling down his face, so hard he can’t even bring himself to read the note.

After sitting there for an eternity staring at the Beautiful White Angel Statue in the Arboretum. He decides to open the note that he is holding onto for dear life. He can see her beautiful writing, thinking of the countless love notes he’s read from her when they were younger. The note read:

My dearest darling Chris:

If your reading this, then my mother followed through. I just wanted you to know I love you with everything I’ve ever had inside of me. Because of you, I feel like I’m a better person. I know your going through a rough time, right now, but I want you to know that “This to shall pass.” I can’t tell you much, because the future is ever changing, but everything you’ve done, all the time we’ve lost, is making a difference, and because of you, I know our future will be better. Chin up my darling. Chin up. All I can say is you are the strongest person I know, and your family is the strongest family ever. Fight for your love, and fight for your family.”<br>
Love for Eternity,
Bianca
Xoxoxox

By the point Chris is so beside himself with grief and love and fear, he can’t stand it. He cries a little longer, and thinks. Re-reads the letter again and again, then finally he see what he the last line. “Fight for your love, and fight for your family.
Chris: “That’s it. We have to fight this,, our family is at stake”<br>With that he orbs out.


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Leo orbs in to a thick cloud like room. He looks very destined to do what needs to be done.
He runs an Elder.
Leo: “I need to know what is going on?”<br>Elder: “Leo,, you know we can’t tell you. Your emotional attached to the sisters. We can’t let you be part of these discussions, and furthermore it’s not our call Leo. It’s the Tribunal. There the almighty answer to this, and it’s that’s just how it is.”<br>Leo: “That is crazy. I’m a Elder. I deserve to know what is going on here. I more then deserve to know.” Screaming at the top of his lungs in anger.
Gideon comes up behind him
Gideon: “Leo, you know as well as we all do that things could get worse. You have to disconnect yourself from the Sisters. You’re a Elder now, not there whitelighter.”<br>Leo: “Gideon, there my family and they come first.”<br>Gideon: “No Leo, being a Elder come first. You choice this life, this is your destiny. Leave Chris to take care of this.”<br>Leo: “I can’t, and I won’t. You know what is going to happen don’t you.”<br>Gideon: “Yes, as being privy to be the counsel for the charmed ones, I was told of how the sentence would follow out.”<br>Leo: “Gideon, you must tell me. These girls won’t make it through another sister being lost.”<br>Gideon: “Leo, you know as well as I do that there is no stopping the tribunal.”<br>Leo: “That thought has never stopped us before. Maybe we should appeal.”<br>Gideon: “To who Leo. There are the be all of it all.”<br>Leo: “You know this was a setup,, a blantant setup. It’s Barbas, it’s his fault.”<br>Gideon: “No Leo. The girls know not to use Magic for Personal Gain. This is a consequences.” The other elder agreeing with him.
Leo now madder then ever.
Leo: “I’m warning you, if the tribunal doesn’t lend way, or we don’t find another way to fix this, then the charmed ones, will be no longer. We can’t lose them in the fight for good.”<br>Gideon pondering his statement, the other elders have gathered to listen all looking perplexed by his statement as well.
Gideon: “We need to discuss whether we can tell you how Phoebe’s death will prevail. But I can say this much. Prue has already been made aware of what is going on.”<br>Leo: “Thank you Gideon.” With this he orbs out leaving all the other Elders looking at Gideon.
Elder: “Gideon, why would you tell him that.”<br>Gideon: “We can’t afford to lose the Charmed Ones. That statement was for the Greater Good.” They all looked at him with confusion.


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Leo Orbs into the Manor.. To find the girls now sipping Chamomile Tea and eating chocolate chip cookies.
Leo: “What going on here?”<br>Piper: “Oh good, your back. What did they say.” All the sisters looking at him. All still have puffy face but with a glimmer of hope.
Leo: “Well.. They wouldn’t tell me anything.”<br>Piper: ‘Dang it Leo,, I told you not to leave till you knew something. Do you not know it’s not good to mess with a pregnant women in my condition.”<br>Leo: “Yes Honey, Yes, but Gideon did tell me that Prue already knows all the details.”<br>Phoebe; “She does!” With excitement in her tone
Paige: “And your excited why. Have you lost your marbles.. She coming back to take your spot Phoebe.”<br>Phoebe: “I know. I was there,, remember!”<br>Paige: “Well yeah. But…”
Phoebe: “If Prue knows then…” cut off by Piper
Piper: “We can call on Prue.”<br>Phoebe: “Exactly what I was thinking”<br>Paige: “Hello,, Am I or am I not the only sane one in this room. Do you not recall that you’ve called for her in the past and she didn’t come.”<br>Piper: “Gosh, Paige, let’s be a little more negative here.”<br>Phoebe: “Yeah Paige,, power of three,, we can do it.”<br>
With this Chris Orbs in all Hyped up and Excited about his revelation.
Chris: “Okay everyone,, I’ve got it.. We have to fight this. It’s our family, we have to fight for our family.” With a goofy revelation look on his face.

Leo: “Yeah, we kinda already got that far Chris.”<br>Paige: “Thanks for joining..” with a smart aleck tone.
Chris: “What…. What did I miss?”<br>Paige: “Well Crazy Sue..” Pointing to Phoebe “ and Crazy Lou” pointing to Paige “and there leader” pointing to Leo. “Have decided that they are going to summon Prue.”<br>Chris: “Wow what a great Idea!”<br>Paige not utterly disgusted “Great,, another idiot.” Rolling her eyes.
Chris: “Paige it’s perfect. Why can’t we work with Prue to find out how this will happen and stop it.”<br>Paige: “Earth to Chris, come in Chris. Because it doesn’t work,, She doesn’t show up. We’ll get mom or grams.”<br>Chris: “Well Paige, you can’t bake a cake without breaking a few eggs.”<br>Paige: “What???”<br>Chris: “Never mind… Let’s get this started, we can’t waste anymore time.”<br>Piper: “Good idea. I’ll get the candles.”<br>Phoebe: “I’ll get the book”<br>Paige: “And I’ll get the stray jacket, because your all going to need it with this idea.”<br>As they all run their separate ways.

[Nite Owl]

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I love it!! I absolutely love it!! It won't quite fit in with what I'm planning for No Greater Love--by using Aurora's Aftermath of A Wish, the girls *were* able to get in contact with Prue and found a different way to let her live, a way that wouldn't mesh with this (I don't want to say what that is and spoil it for anyone who hasn't read it yet), but depending upon what you do, I'm already having fun figuring out how to twist *both* stories, so they will

Please update soon!! This is great--it's *so* very much the way everyone would react!!!

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I'm excited you like it. I've been watching Charmed from the beginning, so I think i've just gotten used to seeing them, and there personality.. I try so hard to write with them acting it out.. haha lue

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I am loving it!! Great story!!

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A few minutes later. Piper walks into the Attic. With candles, which she sets on the table. Phoebe walks in with a lighter. Phoebe just standing there staring out in space. Still really worried about her impending doom.
Piper: “Phoebe!” Snapping at Phoebe..
Phoebe: “What?” Wondering why Piper is yelling at her.
Piper: “You think you can help a pregnant women out here. Remember,, can’t bend down too well.”<br>Phoebe: “Ohhh,, yeah. Circle of Candles.. On it!” Grabbing them off the table and beginning to put them in a circle.
Piper: “Okay, now were is everyone else?”<br>Leo: “I’m here.”<br>Piper: “Okay,, and the rest.”<br>Paige walks in with a doubty look on her face “Let the Insanity Roll…”
Piper: with a smart aleck smirk on her face “Paige, can we be a little more dramatic. Plus where is Chris?”<br>Paige: Lighting all the candles “No Piper, not dramatic, practical.”<br>Chris runs in.. “I’m here, I brought something of Prue’s with me.”<br>Phoebe: begins to tear up again. “Her jacket. I thought I got rid of that.”<br>Chris: “Nope, found it.”<br>Phoebe: “How, did you even know ab…”
Chris: “We don’t’ have time for this Phoebe.. Long story..” Looking irriatated, he sets the jacket in the circle.. “Can we proceed now.”<br>Piper: “Okay….” A little more apprehensive now.
All the girls gather near the Book of Shadows.
Piper in the middle, Paige to her right and Phoebe to her left. All holding hands.
Chant the spell together:
Hear these words, Hear our cries
Sprit from the other side
Come to me, I summon Thee
Cross now the great divideAll looking around waiting, and then glowing lights appear. Paige thinks she might have to eat her words.
And then Grams appears. “Girls,, what, why are you calling me now”<br>

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Paige rolls her eyes: “Told you so.”<br>Piper pulls her hands away, and kinda slaps at Paige.
Piper: “Grams we must talk to Prue!”<br>Grams: “You can’t Piper. You know this.”<br>Piper: “Grams it’s literally life or death.”<br>Grams: “Piper, girls you know the Elders have forbid it. We just can’t.” Looking at Leo with a bit of an Evil Eye.
Leo seeing her look, and taken a back.
Piper getting madder and madder with each word: “Grams if you don’t get your transparent butt back there, and bring back Prue, so help me god.”<br>Grams: “Piper…..”<br>Piper: “Grams,, Since when did you ever care about what Elders or anybody says,, you live to your own rules.. Remember.”<br>Grams: “Piper, be smart about this,, Prue can’t help you. Hello everyone, how are you all doing.”<br>Phoebe: “Could be better!”<br>Paige: “Hello again…”
Leo: “Um fine…”
Chris: “Hey there..”<br>Grams: “Chris, I presume.. hmmm.”<br>Piper: “Grams,, stop trying to get out of this.. Go get Prue now.”<br>Grams: “I can’t dear.. I’m sorry,, I can do this,, You three are the power of three, and have the power of spells, your charmed my dears.. charmed.. Blessed it Be.” With this she winks and them and dissipates into white shinning balls and disappears.
Piper: ‘Whaa.. What just happen?”<br>Paige: “I told you soo…”
Piper and Phoebe: “Shut up.”<br>Paige: “Okay….”<br>Chris: “Isn’t it obvious what she was saying.”<br>Paige, Piper and Phoebe and Leo; “Umm No…”
Chris: Rolling his eyes “You are Charmed. Spells.”<br>Phoebe: “And.. how do you expect us to pull Prue when the Elders are holding her.”<br>Leo: “It’s simple your magic is more powerful.. So do a spell as the power of three.”<br>Piper: “Aww…” Looking a little confused. “I didn’t get that.”<br>Phoebe: “Okay,, let me think, let me think.” Sitting herself at a table. Rambling through ideas of blood and sisters.
Phoebe hands the sheet of paper to Piper : “What do you think?”<br>Piper: “It’s good.”<br>

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Phoebe looks at Paige, and grabs a knife from the table.
Phoebe: “Hold out your hand.”<br>Paige: “No..”<br>Phoebe: “We’ve no time to waste.”<br>Paige: “Okay,, but I’m not into all this hurting yourself for spell bus..” With that Phoebe pokes her hand. “Owwww.” Holding her hand like a wounded dog.
Phoebe: “Your such a baby.”<br>Paige smirks at her. Then Phoebe does her hands ‘Ouch..”<br>Piper: “I guess me now.”<br>Phoebe: “Yes..” Sticking Piper;s hand.
Piper: “Okay, let’s get this going.”<br>Phoebe: “Now form a circle around the candles. And grab each other hands. Ready?.” Leo and Chris looking at each other with concerned looks.
“Hear These Words, Hear My Cry
Our Sister from the Other Side
Our Blood to Your Blood, I summon Thee
Our Blood to Your Blood, Come to Me”<br>
All the lights began to flicker, then a warm breeze came across the room, blowing out the candles. Beautiful colored orbs began to appear. Then Prue materializes in a ghostly form.

Prue: “What just happened.” Looking at herself.

[Nite Owl]

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Piper is stunned. Tears streaming down her face,, holding on so tightly to Paige and Phoebe’s hand. Phoebe doesn’t even notices because tears are also running down her face. Both Leo and Chris are stumped.. Piper is holding Paige’s hand so hard at this point.
Paige: “Piper,, Owww, I need this hand…”
Piper: “Oh sorry…”
Prue: “Looks at her sisters. Oh my,, you did it.”<br>Phoebe: almost hoping out of her skin “We did do it..” They let go of there circle. Prue walks out of the circle and materializes.
Prue: “Wow,,, to be human again.”<br>Piper: Grabs Prue speechless. Hugging her. Then Phoebe puts her arms around Piper and Prue.
Prue: “This is soo wonderful. I’m soo happy to see you again.” Tears now streaming down her eyes.
Piper: “I…. I… Can’t believe it’s you.”<br>Prue: “Me as real as I can be.”<br>Phoebe: “I’m so sorry about everything.. It’s my fault, I’m soo sorry.”<br>Prue: “No it’s not.. It all happens for whatever reason.”<br>After an eternity of hugging, the girls finally break away.
Prue walks up to Paige. Who has been standing by Chris and Leo, absorbing everything.
Paige: Paige holds out her hand to Prue “It’s nice to finally meet you.”<br>Prue: “So your our long lost sister.” Grabbing her hand and then pulling her in for a hug.
Paige: Kinda dumbfounded “Yeah guess I am” Shrugging her shoulders.
Prue: “You’ve done a really really good job.”<br>Paige: “Thanks, I guess.”<br>Prue moves over to Leo. Leo is sniffling over the reunion.
Leo: “I… I would had tried to save you.. I would have…” Now fully crying. Piper completely sobbing now from the conversation. Prue grabs Leo and hugs him and whispers in his ear.
Prue: “Leo,, it’s okay, I don’t blame you. You saved the better sister. You really did. If not, then I wouldn’t have a nephew and one one the way. And the Charmed One’s legacy to continue,, I have you to Thank.” Leo nods his head in agreement and pulls away wiping his tears away.
Chris: “Hello….”<br>Prue: “And you are….”<br>Chris: “I’m the one on the way.” Looking at Piper’s Stomach
Prue “Wha…” stopping in mid word.
Piper: Scurries over to Chris and Prue “Prue this is your Nephew from the future 20 or so years, Chris.”<br>Prue: “Wow… Talk about time travel.”<br>Chris: “Hi…” Putting his hands in his pocket, a little nervous.
Prue: Grabs him and hugs him.. “I wish I would have been able to get to know you.”<br>Chris: “Well I know all about you. I’ve got your powers.’<br>Prue: “Well that works.” Looking over to Piper,, “Where is Wyatt?”<br>Piper: “Oh Magic School.”<br>Prue: “Magic School?” Confused.
Piper: “Long Story… Leo go get Wyatt.”<br>Leo: “Okay,, be right back.” He orbs out.
Phoebe: “Prue, I’m soo excited you’re here.. I’ve just missed you soo much…It’s unreal.”<br>Prue: “I know, it’s wonderful. I just don’t know how you did it.. The elders had me banned not to leave, well until they needed me.”<br>Phoebe: “Yes,, we did it.”<br>Prue: “We’ve got a lot to talk about.”<br>Piper: “Yes we do. Why don’t we go downstairs have some coffee, and I’m starving.. Baby has to eat.”<br>Chris: “Yes I do.”
Piper: “Not funny..”<br>Chris: “Right!” Being more serious.
Prue: “Seems like a good plan”<br>Putting her arm around Phoebe as they walk downstairs behind Piper.
Chris: “Come on Paige.”
Paige: “Right coming…” Chris: “What’s wrong?” Paige: “Nothing.. I just don’t know her, and it’s feeling really strange, ya know.”<br>Chris: “Yeah I know..” And they walk down the stairs.


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Leo orbed in the dining room with Wyatt , as Piper walked in.
Piper: “There’s my little bitty boy.” With a tone more chipper then she has been in a long long time.
Prue: “OH PIPER, he’s adorable.. Just soo cute. I could just kiss him over and over again.” Taking him from Piper’s hands.
Phoebe: “I know,, I could just kiss his little c
Chris: Walks in seeing everyone googling over Wyatt again. “Wyatt, Wyatt, Wyatt…”
Paige: Standing near him starts to laugh.. “Little Jealous??”<br>Chris: “No not at all,, how ever could you tell…” in a mocking tone. Paige just standing back with a cheshire cat look on her face.
Leo: “Girls, don’t scare him.”<br>Prue: “Oh LEO.. We won’t hurt the little butter ball..”
Piper makes some Tea in the kitchen, and gathers some of her famous chocolate chips on puts them on her best plates.
Prue: “Piper, come in here, really it’s only cookies.”<br>Piper: “I just want it to be special,, that’s all.”<br>Prue: “Looks like she hasn’t changed much.”<br>Phoebe: “No she hasn’t.” Sitting down with Prue and Wyatt around the table.
Prue: “So tell me about things.. What’s been going on?”<br>Phoebe: “Gosh where do I start. Got Married to a demon, became a demon queen, got pregnant, killed demon husband, lost demon baby, write gossip, Now going to Die… That pretty much sums it up.”<br>Prue: “Yeah so I heard.”<br>Phoebe: “Good then tell me what is going on.. We’ve got to try and fix this.”<br>Prue: “Well it’s going to be tough, very tough. Your talking about a decision made by the Tribunal. A mixture of demons and elders. They’ve got strings they can pull, I don’t know how we’d stop this.”<br>Piper: Brings in the tea.
Paige: “Sit down Piper, your pregnant, I’ll get the cookies.” Walking into the kitchen to the get cups and grabbing them and putting them on the table.
Piper: “Yeah that sounds good.”<br>Piper: “Prue, you know I love you to death, and would do anything to have you back here with us, but I’m just kind of getting used to losing you. We can’t handle doing this all over again. I can’t lose another sister. I mentally and physically can’t handle it.”<br>Paige: Walking in with a plate of cookies. “No offense Prue, I don’t know you that well and I”ve heard you are great and all,, and I know you’re my sister,, but we’ve got to save Phoebe. No offense.”<br>Prue: “None taken,, Your Right Paige. It’s just this is going to be really really tricky.”<br>Phoebe: “We can do it!”<br>Prue: “I don’t think it’ll work.”<br>Piper: “We have to try.”<br>Prue: “Okay,, I’ll tell you what I know, but you have to understand, there is HUGE risk involved. We could be diminishing everything we’ve done good.”<br>Paige: “A chance we must take.” Looking at Phoebe with a smile.
Prue: “Okay.”<br>Leo: “First off before you say anything, you know who is listening.” Pointing upwards.
Piper: “Yes of course,, a voice protection spell. There’s one in the book.”<br>Paige: “I’ll get it.” “Book” holding out her hands, as it orbs into her hands.
Prue: “So you’ve got to call out to get something?” Kind of being snide
Paige: “Yeah” Even more curt back. Walking into the kitchen to mix up a potion.
Prue: “Hmmm, okay…”
Chris: “I’ll help you Paige.”<br>Paige: Turning her back and making mocking faces at Prue, talking under her breath.. “Hmmm, okay..”
Chris: Snickers,, a bit..
Paige: Grabbing ingredients in Piper’s well stocked and well organized cabinet. Starts brewing together…<br>Chris: “Can I get you anything”<br>Paige: “Yeah nettles, is all I need.”<br>Piper: Walks into the kitchen.. “Hey that’s a floating potion.. So you might want to keep the lid on it..”<br>Paige: “Yeah thanks.. Maybe you should go catch up with your Favorite Sister in there, we’ve got this under control.”<br>Piper: Looking a little surprised. “Okay,, Just thought I would help” She walks back into the dining room.
Chris: “You know Paige,, it’s not mom’s fault, there just happy to see her.”<br>Paige; “You know there wasting time. They think it’s a party that she’s back. But Phoebe could die any minute.” And Paige breaks down crying to Chris.
Chris: Feeling her pain, clothes the door with his hand from across the room.
Chris: “Listen Paige,, we’re gonna stop this, we are.. Pleasantries are over.. It’s business time.”<br>Paige then throws the needles in, and the mixture does a loud poof.
Phoebe run in. “We’re ready.”<br>Paige wiping away her tears. “Yeah, just needs to fill some vials.”<br>Phoebe grabs the turkey baster and sucks up some potion, and closes the lid. As Phoebe fills the vials.
They all grab a few vials one for each person including Wyatt and bring them into the dining room.
Phoebe: “Ready” Giving everyone a vial. “Open them at the same time. Prue open two, one for you and one for Wyatt.”<br>With that all the vials were opened, and a purple hazy mist filled the room. Piper: “If this gets on the walls, I swear I’m going to be really mad.” Prue: “Oh calm down Piper, you only live once.” Piper: “Not funny Prue,, not funny.”<br>

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I'll post more tommorrow.. I hope you like it soo far.. lue lue

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It's very good. I liked your alternative Summon the Dead spell. The only thing I would have done differently is instead of the spell reading "Our Blood to Your Blood", I would have just said 'Blood to Blood' You still get the same effect. See

Hear These Words, Hear My Cry
Our Sister from the Other Side
Blood to Blood, I summon Thee
Blood to Blood, Come to Me

But it is a great story and a really interesting premise. Update soon
Kowa

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This is a really good story. Keep going!!

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Oh, very, very *very* well done!!! I absolutely love it!! I *loved* Grams being typical sneaky Grams, I loved using the blood to call to blood, and I loved the change in the spell!! Very, very *very* good job!! And everyone's reaction, again was just plain perfect!!! I feel bad for Paige & Chris who just don't know Prue and probably feel just a little bit left out. Hope that doesn't prevent any of them (Prue, Piper & Leo or Paige & Chris) from getting done what they've got to do to save Phoebe--*if* indeed you *don't* plan on having a World Without Phoebe, since I know some readers who wouldn't mind that one bit--especially if it means replacing her with Prue!!

I'll admit I'm doing a minor pout, because I'm not sure how to make this fit in with what I had planned for my own story, but I haven't given up yet!! Whatever you do, please don't change your ideas for your story, just so it fits into mine!! If it does, it does; if it doesn't, it doesn't, but whichever, this is still a fantastic story that will give me ideas for mine, and for which, I'll still most definitely give you credit!!!

I'm dying to find out what's going to happen next!! Please update soon!!

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I"m soo happy you like it soo much.. I hope more people read it,, I've put so much thought into it!!!!

You know I thought I heard a version of that spell before.. I just couldn't put my finger on it... That's the only way I possibly thought Prue could be summoned if they made it happen with there blood...

I'll post more soon.. I love your feedback,, It's make it worth all the thinking and writing!!!

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Actually for how many people are reading and reviewing right now, you're getting *plenty* of responses, a lot more than most stories are!! People are busy with summer and chatting and now getting ready for school, that there just hasn't been that much, so don't let that disappoint you and stop you from writing this great tale!! I'm sure once the show gets started again and more people come back to the Cafe and read, that you'll get a lot more readers.

Please update soon!!

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Esmeralda is right. I have been silently reading and loving your story. I have not been up much for reviewing recently, but I don't want you to think your story is going unnoticed. I am really enjoying your story. Please keep up the great work. The thought and energy you are putting into your story are very appreciated. Keep up the great work.

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Once the purple hazy mist collided together through the air, it caused a loud sucking sound, which sounded like air, and engulfed the house in purple haze. Paige… “Ummm, do you think that is only inside or outside.” Piper: “I’m not sure.” Prue: “Well maybe we should do a invisibility spell.” Phoebe; “You were always the smartest.” Paige mocking Phoebe’s remark. Making Chris chuckle out loud. Leo: looking at Chris with a serious look of disapproval. Piper giving the same look to Chris. Chris: “Sorry Purple haze must had went up my nose.. My bad.” Looking over at Paige, with a smirk. Everyone then looking away…<br>Paige,, “I can do this one…”
Let the object of objection
become but a dream,
As I cause the seen
to be unseen

As the purple haze disappears after her words. Paige crosses her arms in accomplishment. Prue: Looking over at Paige. “Nicely done.” Paige gives her a look of yeah thanks but no thanks.

Leo: “Okay so now we’re good.” Piper: “Ya know,, now I can’t even remember what we were discussing.” Walking in with a tub of Ben and Jerry’s ice cream. Prue and Phoebe giggle. Piper: “What,, I’m pregnant. I can eat, can’t I.” Chris: looks at her. “Yeah,, Chocolate chip cookies, ice cream, tea, I think there was a scone or something in there too.” Piper: “Listen, mister, if it wasn’t for you,, I wouldn’t be this hungry.. Your quite annoying when it comes to eating,, your always hungry.” Chris grabbing a bite of her ice cream from the container. Chris: “Yeah, yeah.”

Phoebe: “No offense, but remember me,, the one waiting the death fate.” Prue giving Phoebe a hug. “Nothing has changed the world still revolves around Phoebe.” Paige “You mean “Ask Phoebe” The world revolves around that.” Phoebe: “Okay Okay… Seriously now..” Piper: Shoving another bite of chunky monkey in her mouth. “Phoebe is right,, We need to fix this mess.” Prue: “Yeah your right..” now bouncing Wyatt to put him in the play pen.

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Prue: “Okay here is what is going on….” Paige sits in Prue’s seat right next to Phoebe.. As Phoebe let’s out a gasp of nervous air wondering what Prue will say..
“The elders came to me,, several of them accompanied by the Tribunal. They let me know of the impending doom upon Phoebe and how it came about from the Trial. They explained that Darryl has been helping a lot when it comes to police help, and how he was caught in the cross fires of negligent magic.
Phoebe: “Negligent,, my butt. We were…” Cut off by Piper. “Phoebe hush.”<br>Prue: “Anyways,, explained how Phoebe was forcing premonitions and bunch of other things.” Looking at Phoebe. “How could you use magic for personal gain. I thought we’d been over it and over it.” Phoebe now looking a little like a little girl who is getting in trouble. “I know,, I messed up,, but I was just trying to get ahead.” Prue: “Ahead of what,, your life. God Phoebe,, it was stupid.” Paige looking at Prue with distain in her eyes. “Look Prue, she messed up, we’ve all messed up,, get off her case. She knows she did wrong.” Prue “Paige,, I know you’re a new witch, and all, but your dang lucky you didn’t get the same.” Paige looking at her with a how dare you look. Paige: “Listen, I don’t care what you think or who you think you are. You’ve no right to play judge and jury here.” Prue: “I know the Tribunal already did.” With that Piper looks over at Leo, who looks at Chris.

Leo: “Girls this isn’t getting us anywhere. We’re aware of the mess up,, let’s fix it now. And quickly. The Elders are calling me all the time now.. They know what is up..” Piper; “They do., Sneaky little…”

Prue: “Okay, your right.. They told me that I was banned from coming down here, period. What is to happen is this, I don’t know the time or dates or anything but I know how.” You are to have an accident, a very tragic one. One that is non-magical. I’m not sure if it’s in a car or an elevator or in a shower or what. This accident is going to kill you on the spot. No chance for healing from anyone, including Paige or Leo or Wyatt for that matter.” Phoebe begins to cry, causing tears from Paige and Piper and even Prue. Prue: “I know honey, I know. It’s hard to hear but we have to overcome it together.” Phoebe shakes her head and swings her hands to go on. Prue: Wiping tears from her eyes and sitting between Piper and Phoebe. “At that point in time, a demon called Arkubas is to erase the time of my death, and all memories of my existence will be lead towards being out of the country and coming home.” Phoebe: “Out of the Country,, you mean the planet.” Shaking her head. Prue: “Anyways,, at this point. The charmed ones will be the only ones to realize that I was dead. Which will make you relive another funeral and burial. I will have to restart my life, from point of Phoebe’s death.”<br>

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Piper: “Whoa that is really really wild.” Paige: “That sounds crazy,, and cruel.” Chris looks at Prue “We’ve got to stop this. This is not right.”

Prue: “I agree,, but I’ve no control over this.” Phoebe has now lost it completely. “I can’t go out, I can’t move, I can’t do anything. I could be taking a shower, and I could die,, I could walk up the steps and die. This is mad,, absolutely crazy.” Prue now comforting Phoebe. “I know, I know.” Paige looks over and rubs her back. “There has to be something we can do.”<br>
A loud clasp is heard in the foyer, such as you would hear opening a new jar of jelly. Piper looks at Leo “What in the world was that.” Looking towards the foyer, a bunch of white orbs appear in a circular motion. Leo starts pushing Prue towards the kitchen.. “ELDER……” Piper: “Oh crap,, goo…” Prue and Leo slip into the kitchen with Chris following and orb out as the Elder tries to materialize.

Piper standing up Ben and Jerry’s still in hand. “What are you doing in my home?” Elder: “Better question is.. Where are you hiding Prue.” Piper begins to laugh. “That was funny, in case you didn’t get the memo up there in LaLa land,, My sister died a while back.. You might wanna try her in the land with all the clouds.” Being as cynical as possible. Elder: “I’m aware of Prue’s situation, but we have forbid her to leave there, and she is gone, the only assumption, she was called. The only witches who can do that. You the charmed ones.” Paige: “Congratulations.” Clapping « Not only are you elder like your a genius.” Elder: “So she is here.” Phoebe stands up. “I thought you Elder’s knew all and see all.” Crossing her arms in disgust. The Elder at this point is becoming very frustrated. “Where is Leo?” Piper putting her Ice Cream down. “Which is it..do you want Leo or Prue.” Becoming quite upset with the Elder. The Elder put down his hood, and begins to look at the girls. “Piper I presume. You must understand,, I understand your grief and I understand what you are going through right now and it’s not easy…” Piper: “Darn right you don’t.. and I suggest you don’t try either.” Elder: “Either way you look at it,, the verdict is set, it’s best not to mess with it. Let it lie.” Paige: “Do you have anything else to say?” Elder: “No but I’ve been sent her to bring back Prue.” Phoebe: “Well Prue isn’t here. So leave…” With this Leo walks in from the kitchen. “Hey there Mika.” Throwing a cheese puff in his mouth. “Sorry just having a little sister meeting here.” Mika (Elder): “Leo,, where is Prue.” Leo looking quite surprised. “Prue, is where Prue has been since her death.” Mika: “Leo, Prue was summoned and left without permission and against orders.” Leo: “Well that is a shame,, we didn’t call her. You’re an elder did you sense her here.” Mika looking very mad at this point: “No I do not.” Leo: “Well did you sense her before you came in.” Mika: “No I did not,, I didn’t sense anyone here. It’s as if you were blocked.” Leo: “No blocking,, just plain old family conversation.” Mika still leery of Leo and the girls. “If you see her, and if you know where she is,, she must come back.” Leo: “You’ve got it.. Elder honor” with a chuckle. Giving Mika a firm handshake. With that Mika Orbs out, quicker then he orbed in.

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The girls still in fighting stance watch as he orbs out. Piper spins around and looks at Leo.. Lipping without words “Where is Prue?” Leo looks upwards with a smirk. Piper lips back.. “WHAT?” Leo lips back: “HIDING”… Phoebe joins in the lipping “WE NEED NEW POTION.” Paige joins in too: “AND A SPELL”. Phoebe gives the thumbs up as Piper begins to write a spell and Paige go to the kitchen to brew more potion, as Piper grabs her ice cream “Aww man,, it’s melting…” frustrated “Dang stupid Elder”. Leo: “Piper, that an Elder.” Piper looks at him “Ya know Leo,, this Elder crap is really starting to get on my nerves.” Phoebe looks at Leo “Ummm, Leo,, pregnant and hormones,, haven’t you learned not to fight with her..” Leo “Yeah all to well.”.

A loud pop and poof. Paige: “Ah stronger…” Walking in with vials. “Readddy.” Phoebe: “Yes,,, Ready..” Leo: “Okay, quickly after I do what I have to do.” All the girls give a thumbs up. Leo: “Chris!” Then Chris materializes with Prue. Paige: “Hurry..” Handing them all vials and two for Piper for Wyatt and her.. “Open them” With that a Purplish Red Haze does the same as before. Paige begins to read her spell, as Paige and Piper join in behind her.
We come to thee
We ask of Thee
Give us Privacy
Chanted by all three sisters. Then the sucking noise as if all the air came out of the room again. Phoebe: The invisibility Charm Paige!”<br>Paige chants:
Let the object of objection
become but a dream,
As I cause the seen
to be unseen

All the girls sit down tired a little exhausted. Prue: “That was way close.” Leo: “Way close,, I just had to lie to an Elder.” Piper looks at Leo. “Leo, life gives you a few white lies.” With a large cheesy grin and a giggle. Leo: “Funny Piper. Real funny” Rolling his eyes. Chris: “Gosh Leo,, calm down,, it’s not the end of the world. It’s just a little white lie.” Leo looking at Chris “Yeah you would no to well, how that works.” Chris now rolling his eyes.


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Paige “How Corny. Now are you three done.” Prue: “Yeah we’re running out of time.” Phoebe: “Yes I AM.,, When is this supposed to happen.” Prue: “ I don’t know.” Paige: “Well maybe it’s best not to.. Less Stress.” Phoebe: “Yeah, if you’re the one who isn’t supposed to die.” Chris: “A little more drama please. So we need to get to Arkubas.” Paige: “He’s an upper level demon with no vanquish in the BOS” Chris: “Great. Any other bad news, we want to spread on this wondrous day.” Piper: “Well that doesn’t mean we can’t vanquish him, we just have to use our strongest potions and spells.” Prue: “True, but finding Arkubas, isn’t going to be easy.” Chris: “She is right, he’s located literally in the underworld, but he’s also very good at sensing.” Leo: looking at Chris with surprise “How do you know this.” Chris: “Well it’s a long story, but short version, I tried to find him when someone I loved die, and have him reverse the past and make a new.” Piper: “Looked at Chris, you mean me?” Chris: “Mom, not now.” Prue shaking her head “Besides that it’s the underworld, it’s quite dangerous. I mean without an appropriate guide.” Phoebe tearing up “You mean without Cole.” Prue biting her lip. “Honey, he was a demon, and he covered your backs a lot more then even you knew.” Phoebe: “I knew Prue, God I knew,, but he was very very evil.” Prue: “I know honey, I know. But for now, we really can’t go searching the underworld looking for him without …” Chris interrupting. “I know the underworld, trust me. With Wyatt as my brother in the future I know it well.” Paige: “In the future…” Chris; “No now, I’ve been down there enough. We can do this together.” Phoebe; “He’s right,, with the right potion, and maybe a spell, we can keep him from sensing us.” Piper: “That or I can just freeze him, and we can come up on him with the element of surprise.” Leo: “That would be good, until he unfreezes, and then he could shimmer.” Phoebe: “How about we just call him here, and in case him in crystal, and make him talk.” Prue: “How do you make a demon talk.” Paige: “Very carefully…..” Smiling and knowing she had done it before with a Kazi.

Leo: “So wait a minute, your saying you want to bring a demon to the manor.. And not any low level demon, but a High Level Demon?” Piper: “And….. It’s not like we’ve not done it before..” Phoebe: “Heck we had one living here for a while.” Leo: “Phoebe that is different, Cole was not out to hurt you.” Phoebe: “Some would disagree with you on that.” Leo: rolling his eyes “At this point in time, we need to be careful, what if something happens.” Paige: “No Leo, we need to take risk, or we won’t have Phoebe around.” Piper: “So alright we’ve got a plan.”<br>

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Prue: “I need to get back before the Elders freak out to much.” Phoebe: “You are right.” Piper hugs Prue and a tear trickles down her face “I wish.. I wish things were different.” Prue: “I know.” Phoebe hugs her “You know we miss you.” Prue: “Yeah, I miss you all.” Tears trickling down her face. Paige walks over and hugs her “No offense, I would love to get to know you..” Prue: “Yeah we’d clash a lot, but we’d been good sisters.” Paige walks away. Chris hugs Prue. “I’m happy to meet you and get to know you.” Prue hugs him “You’re a good kids, Leo and Piper are lucky.” Leo orbs in with a sleeping Wyatt “Well miss you.” Prue begins to cry “Take good care of these boys, they are our future.” Phoebe: “Says another spell”<br>Sight unseen
Sight unaware
We no longer need our privacy here
The loud popping noise was heard once again such as a jar opening as heard when the elder orbed in.
Phoebe: “The privacy potion and spell are back to normal.”<br>And with that she walks back into the circle, and says “Blessed it Be”<br>She then turns back into a ghostly form and vanishes in white lights.

The girls are still crying a bit, but know they must get things done. Paige: “I’ll get the potion together to make Mr. Crazy Time Man talk.” Piper: “Good idea.” Phoebe: “I’ll write a locating spell.” Piper: “Good idea” Chris: “I’ll go to the underworld and check out this guy and gather some information.” As he orbs out.
Piper: “Good idea”
Leo: “I’ll go take Wyatt to Magic School so he is safe.” He then orbs out.
Piper: “Okay, we’ll then I’ll get the crystals.” Paige: “I’ve already got them ready.” Pointing to the table as she walks down the steps. Piper: “Ohh okay.” Phoebe: “Go lie down, till were ready. You need some rest for you and Chris’s sake.”


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Oh, CharmedCrazy! I can't begin to tell you how much I absolutely totally love this!! It's *so* fantastic!! Your characterizations are so perfect, the plot is so perfect, and so is the way they're going about taking care of it.

Man, there's *got* to be a way of combining this with Aftermath of A Wish for my story!!! You've got it down so perfectly, but so does that one!!!! I'll see if my two favorite "advisors", Aurora & SciFi, can help me out with this!! Can you imagine how great that story's going to be with them helping? And I I can't being to tell you how thrilled I am that you're letting me use this story!!

Please update soon!!!

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I'm soo glad you love it!!

Is Aftermath of a Wish a Story your are working on,, or is it a post already going on? I'd like to read it.... I've read something from Aurora and SciFi and there pretty talented.. I think Brad Kern should come our way and offer us a job writing Charmed,, could you imagine the storylines.. We'd rock that Season....

[Nite Owl]

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Aftermath of a Wish is a story Aurora wrote showing what happened when Richard wished the Charmed Ones alive again in I Dream of Phoebe and is a perfect "tweener" story that I want to use. She finished posting it in July.

You'll probably want to finish your story first, but here's the link:

Aftermath of a Wish

Please update soon!!

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Thanks Esmeralda!! I'm going to hold off till my story is finished then I'll read her...

I'm kinda at a Cross Roads of making this story to long or repetitious or going straight for my climax now.. I'm not so sure!

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I'm kinda at a Cross Roads of making this story to long or repetitious or going straight for my climax now.. I'm not so sure!
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That's always the problem, isn't it? Personally. I feel like your story is heading for the climax right now, but if you had other ideas in your head that aren't repetitious, then go for it!! That's what Aurora said she learned in her creative writing class--it's like a puzzle--define a problem, figure out the solution, and then how you're going to get there! I think that's part of the reason why I like her stories so much, because she follows that. BUT if you can figure out subplots that make the story richer, but that continues to bring the plot forward (like all the subplots SciFi has going on in The Witch and the Assassin), then that's even better! And don't worry about lengths; as long as it continues to be this good, size doesn't matter--I *don't* want this one to end!

Please update soon!!

[Nite Owl]

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Had to let you know!!! I'm so very excited!!! I figured out how to fit *both* Aftermath of a Wish *and* Ultimate Punishment into my story, No Greater Love!!! I *can* make it work!! And I figured it out all on my own!!! YAY, ME!!!

So, now, pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeease, update sooooooooooooooooooon!!!

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Ok, I think that what I am going to say is going to make me very unpopular, (Sorry Es), but especially if you are getting towards the end, Maybe seperate your posts a little bit more. Doing this would serve 2 purpouses. First, It would allow for more reviews. Second, It gets the people reading your story hooked and always wanting more. You sort of tease them with a decent sized update and then make us wait a couple days for more.
Either way, I'm hooked
Kowa

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I think you misunderstood me, KOWA. By length not mattering, I didn't mean the length of the updates (you kidding? I prefer short, frequent ones! That's why I've been doing my own story that way!) What I meant was the length of the story. I love this story and don't want it to end, so if it lasts another year and stays this good, I won't complain one bit!! But at the same time, if it's working towards a climax, as CCrazed thinks it is, then it's best to let the story decide where it's going, end it, and maybe write a sequel, the way *you* do that so well!!

But I'm glad you pointed that out in case CCrazed didn't understand me. At any rate, CCrazed--please update soon!!

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Wow.. I appreciate your feedback. This is my first fan fiction so I welcome any advice... Your right.. I just get soo excited about the story and my fingers keep going and going.. I don't think I'm ready to end it yet,, I've got to think the story is leading me to really more ideas.. So I'm going to just go with it.. Why not be a 2 hour show.. hehehehee,, lol...

Please keep reading,, I love it!!

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That's your best way to do it, CCrazed! You're doing *such* a great job for this being your first fanfic!!! Looks like you have the characters in your head properly. Now that you've given them a problem to solve, just let them do their thing and let us know what they do!!! *They'll* let you know how long the story should be!! And if you want to write an entire season as one long novel, I for one won't complain one single bit!! Or if you suddenly find a place that says "END", but, oh, here's a great idea to continue, then just end this story (so I can put a review for it in the Review Thread!!), and write a sequel instead (or even a trilogy--we *love* trilogies around here!!). Do whatever feels best for you; that's the best advice anyone can give!!

Best of luck!!! Please update soon!!!



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I just got finished reading all of this, and I think you’re doing a fantastic job. It’s a great plot, but more importantly, you have all the characters down really well. Kudos to you!

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Wow,, thank you very much for the feedback... I'm so excited.. I love hearing good words,, there very encouraging. I'm going to post more on Monday.. as soon as I get to work.. More time there,, hahaha..

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Piper waddled down the steps mumbling to herself. “I feel so useless.” While Phoebe continued to work on her spell writing intently. Her mind flooded with fears making it very hard to concentrate on a spell. While Paige begins to work on a vanquish potion, and a potion to get him to talk and be accommodating. Two potions brewing at the same time.. One potion way trickier then the other. Paige: also mumbling to herself “Hmmm, what next.. What next..” Leo orbing in. “Everything okay.” Paige: “Yeah, memory is on the fritz.. I can’t remember all the ingredients to Cole vanquish potion. Leo: “Well it was a power of three spell. I know that much.” Paige: “Yeah but it was the mixture of the potion from each of us. Hmm,, maybe Phoebe can remember.” Leo “I doubt it. She was in her ummm, dark period living with Cole when you made the adjustments.” Paige: “Yeah that is true.” Leo: “Where is Piper?” Paige: “Phoebe sent her to take a nap. Took much stress.” Leo: “Smart Idea. How is Phoebe holding up.” Paige: “I’m not sure, to be honest. She seems like she is taking it well, but then again she’s probably freaking out inside.” While placing more ingredients in to the two different mixtures. Leo: “Don’t get those messed up.” Paige: “Leo,, you do your thing and I’ll do mine.”

All of sudden you hear a faint thud and really loud screaming.. Paige: “It’s Phoebe.” Leo: “Oh no.. Orb to the attic”

The both orb in to find Phoebe fighting with a demon. A man in a black coat with red eyes, and white hair. Throwing energy balls her way, and fire balls that are green in color. Phoebe is levitating whilest kicking, and pushing him slightly away. Paige: “FIRE BALL.” And she pushes it toward the demon, who sees the occurrence and shimmers out. Phoebe falls to the floor with a large cut and burn to her arm. Piper waddles up the stairs as fast as she can. “I’m here…” huffing and puffing. Paige goes over to Piper and sets her down as Piper catches her breath. Paige: “He’s gone.” Piper: “What was he?” Leo: “A demon.” Piper: “Ya think? Now not the time to be vague, Leo.” Phoebe sitting up: “Leo,, need help here.” Pointing at the burn. Leo put his hands over her and the orange-ish white glowing light heals Phoebe. Leo turns to Piper “I’m not sure.” Phoebe stands up and sits by Piper now all healed. “He’s a demon who knows things.” Paige walking over to the book and looking. “What does that mean.” Phoebe: “Well he said he knew about my fate, and it was his chance to the defeat the charmed ones. I think he thought I was already dead.”

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Leo: “Why do you say that” Phoebe: “He looked surprised to see me.” Piper: “Great just great so we’re going to be sitting targets.” Leo: “Aren’t you anways.” Piper: “Yesss, but that doesn’t mean most of them aren’t scared of us.” Paige looking at a page of the demon “Found him.” Phoebe jumps up and runs over to the book. Piper attempts to get up and falls back down “Okay, I give up, just tell me who he is.” Paige begins to read the BOS. “Grovlin – A low level demon who steals secrets and powers, but has no powers. He is very elusive and easily can boost himself to a high level demon, based on stolen powers. Etc etc etc” Phoebe : “ There’s no vanquish potion or spell.” Piper: “Great, not only do we have to try and save your life, we have to vanquish a demon of whatever level with whatever is out there and we don’t know what powers he has. Boy I’m loving this day…” Paige: “Okay,, way to stay positive Piper.” Phoebe: “Maybe you can just blow him up.” Paige: “Yeah,, or maybe a power of three spell.” Piper: “Great..” sounding less impressed. Chris Orbs in. “Okay, so we… What happened here.” Paige: “You have to ask.” Chris: “Demon..” Piper: “Bingo.” Phoebe giving Piper a dirty look. “It’s a Grovlin demon.” Piper: “Yeah, he’s making us grovel for our lives.” Paige: rolling her eyes. “She has a case of the negative attitude.” Chris: “I can tell. Well he’s nothing a stealer demon. You can just blow em up Mom.” Piper: “Yeah so I’ve heard.” Chris: ignoring her remark “So about Arkabus, he’s been talking to the Tribunal, he’s going to be tough to get and to call for.” Paige: “No tougher then most demons.” Chris: “No tougher, we could really use As much power as possible, not only are we fighting a demon, we are fighting Elders.” Piper: laying back in frustration “I need food.” Leo: “I’ll go get you something,” orbing to the kitchen. Chris just shaking his head. Sits down by Piper. “Mom, were going to get this done. We can do it.” Piper: “Yes I hear this, but Grovlin demons, tribunal, phoebe, prue.. It’s too much.” Chris: “I know but we’ve dealt with a lot before. You’ve dealt with a lot. We can do this we have too.” Piper hugs Chris “Your right honey.” Leo orbs in with a stash of chips and cookies and pickles. “Here you go honey.” Piper looks at Leo “What are you feeding everybody in town.” Leo: “I… I… just thought you’d be hungry with two and all.” Paige walks by him and grab a bag of chips “Smooooth Leo,, real smooth.” Leo: “What..” Phoebe sitting by Paige eating some chips: “You’d think you’d know how not to screw up by now, Leo” laughing at him. Leo: “Okay,, I just didn’t want to go up and down, getting stuff.” Paige: “Ha,, it’s just an orb away.” Chris: “Anyways.. back to the issues,, people.” Paige: “You’re right.. I’ve got potions that are probably overcooked.” Piper: “Yeah, I’ve got a spell to write.” Piper: “Hmmm, okay.” Leo: “I’m going to talk to the Elders, see if I can talk some sense into them.” Chris: “I’ll help.” They orb off. Piper: “Guess I’ll go finish that nap.” Phoebe: “Okay honey.” Piper waddles down the stairs with cookies in hand. Paige has already made it down to the kitchen and has to re-start the potions. Paige: “Stupid Demons… Ruined my potions.” As smoke and sparks went down the drain. Piper waddles her way to her room sits in an oversized chair and falls asleep.

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Phoebe feels a little more refreshed kicking some demon butt and finishes her spell without much thought to her situation. She sits there for a few minutes, and re-reads the spell. Phoebe: “Perfect, if I say so myself.”
She begins to walk towards the door to walk down the steps and her phone rings. It’s Elise.
Elise “Phoebe“<br>Phoebe: “Yes, Elise” with a oh my god look on her face.
Elise: “Got a business meeting with a few top executives for this radio station spot. You have to go. Jason was supposed to do it, but he’s out of the country and has been for some time. It’s in 1 hour.
Phoebe: “Yeah,, umm okay, we’ll see I’ve got this….”<br>Elise: “Phoebe.. No excuses. None.”<br>Phoebe: “Elise.. It’s…”
Elise: “Okay, Phoebe, see you in the office in an hour. Bye..” Phone goes dead.
Phoebe: “I swear, that Elise, she is just….Uggh..” Breathing heavily, and she is soo mad. “I’m about to die,, and I can’t even tell her, No.”<br>Phoebe begins to walk down the stairs,, holding her cell phone in one hand and her spell in another. Still whining outloud to herself about her call with Elise. She misses a few steps, and begin toppling down the stairs hitting her head and her back and her legs. Screaming the whole way down, She falls to the ground in a twisted mess at the end of the steps. Bleeding from her nose and head.


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Piper hears the thud and the bouncing down the steps. “Oh my god, Phoebe,, not yet.” She runs from her room as fast as she can. Seeing Phoebe in a tangled mess at the bottom of the steps. As flashbacks of Grams death, flashes in her head. She ends up freezing in her spot, not able to move or talk or anything. She knows she is frozen, she just can’t move.

Paige hears the thuds not as loud, but figures something is wrong, because she can sense it in her heart. “Phoebe.. Oh no……” She orbs to where Piper is standing,, frozen still unable to move. Paige looks at Piper then looks down the stare that Piper has locked and it leads to Phoebe, who is now laying at the bottom of the steps in a massive heap. Paige: “Nooo.. Phoebe..” Screaming at the top of her lungs. “It’s too soon.. it’s too soon,,” She goes over to Phoebe who can barely say anything or breath for that matter. She looks up to Piper: “PIPER..”.. Piper finally unfreezes and runs over to Phoebe side. “Phoebe, hang on honey, ,hang on...”<br>Phoebe: “I’m sorry” tears in her eyes, each letter with a huge gulp of air. In a really faint whisper.
Piper: “No,, it’s okay, it’s okay.” “LEO… “LEO….” Screaming at the top of her lungs.
Paige: “Hold on.. Hold on,, it’s too soon..” Crying so hard she can’t barely see Phoebe through her tears..
Piper stroking Phoebe’s hair. “It’s going to be okay, I promise.” Sobbing between each word… “LEO LEO LEO” With sheer desperation and anxiety in her voice.
Paige: “Where is he.. Where is he… We can’t lose her.”<br>Phoebe: With her eyes looks at Paige who is at her side, and Piper whose stroking her hair,, and whisper with extreme pain and difficulty with each word. “I love you both.” And takes a last breath and her eyes gently shut and her head all bloody and bruised cocks to the side, and dies.
Piper: “NO!!!!” Screaming with her sobs and body begins to shake, as she lays he head on Phoebe’s head.
Paige: “Phoebe stay with us,, stay with us..” Kind of slapping her face, trying to wake her up.. “Please Phoebe,, You can’t leave me.” Holding her lifeless hand in her hand…..
Piper: “Paige,, heal her.. Now…!!!”<br>Paige: “I can’t, I don’t…”
Piper: “I don’t care, we can’t lose her,, try,, TRY!!!”<br>Paige put her hands on Phoebe,, nothing happens.. “It’s not working….”
Piper: “Try harder,, concentrate.. Please…” Sobbing and rocking with Phoebe in her arms.
Paige hands begin to glow,, but nothing happens to Phoebe.. The glowing stops dead.
Piper: “What are you doing,, Don’t stop..” Screaming at Paige ,, tears rolling down her cheeks.
Paige looks at Piper “She’s gone…” Crying so hard,, that she can barely get the words out of her mouth.
Piper: “NO she isn’t.” Getting up and grabbing a phone and calling 911. Sobbing so hard the operator can’t understand a word she is saying.

Within minutes the paramedics are running up the stairs to Phoebe, and moving the girls away.. Paige and Piper hold onto each other,, crying and sobbing. Piper not accepting her sister’s fate. “Please Please help her.” Full fledge sobbing.

[Nite Owl]

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Very, very well done, CCrazed! Oh, to have it happen the same way as it happened to Grams has to be tearing Piper totally to shreds! And why didn't Leo come? If those frickin, frackin (as HollyHalliwell says) Elders stopped him from coming, I'm going to...I'm not sure what, but it sure won't be pretty!!!

This CAN"T be the end!! Please say it ain't so!!! For one thing, it's *so* very sad, and for another thing, if this is how it ends, of course, I can't use it in my own story!! Phoebe can't write a letter to Chris if she's dead!! Of course, as I said before, if this *is* how you plan on ending it--a world truly without Phoebe, and Prue taking her place, with the world thinking that Phoebe, not Prue, died, while the sisters will remember, then go for it! Do *not* change just so it fits my story!!

But whatever you're going to do with it, please update very soon!!! Man, I love this fanfic!!!



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Thanks Esmeralda,, loved your review!! You are going to be soo mad about how it goes then.. Those freakin elders....hehehe..
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Leo is talking to on the Elder on the Tribunal,, trying to explain once again, the importance of trying to overturn the Tribunals decision with Chris backing his every word. “What you don’t understand is this.. The sisters work off there emotions, you take one out of that equation AGAIN, they won’t survive,, We’ll be opening the world to evil….” Stopping in Mid-Sentence. “Piper..” Chris looks at Leo “What?” Leo: “Something is wrong. We have to go to them.” The Elder looks at Leo “You can’t.. It is done.” Chris looks at the Elder “What.. What is that.. What does that mean.. It’s done, is that code or some crap.” Elder: “No,, it’s too late to save Phoebe.” Chris: “Like Hell I can’t.” trying to orb out. Chris looking shocked,, “I can’t orb.” Leo: “Neither can I.” Elder: “Their destiny is fulfilled. You can’t help the sisters now. Be there for their pain.” Leo; “NO….. It’s too soon.” Chris grabs the Elder by his cloak. “You let us Orb now. You, Son of a …..” The Elder taken a back: “There destiny is sealed, the sentence is fulfilled.” Leo grabs Chris pulling him from the Elder. The Elder dust himself off “You can go now,, but don’t try to save her,, she is gone.” Leo looks down, and can feel her presence is gone. “He’s right, we must go now.” Chris mad with fire and passion in his eyes “That is crap, you are all scum..” And orbs to the manor with Leo following.

The paramedics are now working on Phoebe.. “I can’t get a pulse.” The other paramedics checking her airway “There no air moving through.. No vitals.”

Leo grabs Piper who is sobbing so hard, and Chris shocked to see Phoebe lifeless body all tangled up, and he quickly hugs Paige. Piper holds onto Leo,,,, Piper: “Save her.. Please Leo..” Leo looks at Piper, tears in his eyes. “I can’t….” Piper: “Where were you.. Why?” Chris looks at Piper: “They held us. The wouldn’t let us go.” Piper staring at Phoebe with extreme terror in her eyes. Paige holding Chris’s hand, squeezing him so hard also has sheer terror and shock in her eyes.

The Paramedics pull out a defibrillator. Putting the paddles on Phoebe’s chest. “Clear.” Shocking her with volts to start her heart. As Piper and Paige both jump when they see Phoebe’s body jump from the jolts, feeling her pain. Paramedic “No vitals, no heart waves.” Paramedic screams “Clear” and shocks her again, three more times. Paramedic: “Nothing.” The other paramedic: “Call it.” The paramedic calls her death.

The other paramedic walks over to Piper and Paige who are now uncontrollably crying and in hysterics. “I’m sorry.. We did all we could.” Piper screams,, “NOOO…not again,, nooo..” and falls down Leo again, and falls to the ground crying and sobbing,, shaking uncontrollably. Leo tears in his eyes, falls with Piper so that she won’t hurt herself. Paige says nothing, a blank, shocked, and confused and hurt look in her face, her eyes so full of tears, still staring at Phoebe’s lifeless body, letting go of Chris’ hand.. Chris puts his face in his hands.. “It’s not supposed to happen this way.” He sits down on the ground, crying. Paige walks over to Phoebe, and kisses her, still unaware of everything as though reality hasn’t hit her yet. She takes her cell phones out of her hands, and takes the spell out of her other hand. She crosses Phoebe’s arms over her chest and kisses her goodbye on her forehead.

Paige then walks back to Piper and just stands there,, still frozen in time in her mind. Everyone watches as they put Phoebe’s lifeless body in a black bag and zip it up and take her body out of the house, as all the rescue workers leave. It all hits Paige very hard and all at once,,, she falls to the floor, crying and sobbing, shaking and her head in her hands. “No,,, it’s not happening… Wake up Paige.. Wake up NOW..” Piper still sobbing, and being held by Leo on the ground, looks over to Paige and slides over to her, and holds her. Paige grabs Piper’s arms and locks them around her. Piper: “Paige, it’s not a dream, it’s a horrible reality..” Crying through each word. Both holding each other…Paige looks at Piper as they take Phoebe’s body away. “This isn’t happening. We were going to stop it.. We were.” Piper looks at Paige: “I know I don’t understand this..” Chris slides over to the girls and hugs them.. Piper looks at Chris “I’m soo sorry honey.. I’m soo..” Chris: “I know..” choking on his words through his tears..


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wow, im still halfway through, but this is amazing!!! i am so loving this fic!! is this your first, CharmedCrazed?? i loved the line Bianca used in her letter, "This too shall pass." Its so freaky, because this is the line that i always tell myself and my friends when we have problems.. wow... im gonna continue reading and drooling over your fic now

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Yes this is my first FanFic. I'm so glad your loving it.... I use that line all the time, especially when times are tough,, and I figured that would be perrrfect!!!!!!! Keeping Reading.. It's an excellent review.. Thank you!!!

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darn freakin ELDERS!!! !!! how could they do this to Pheebs, to TCO's??? im with Esmeralda here
okay...breathe *calming down now* ok whew! wow! i just finished everything, and youur latest update *the one with the Elders (darn Elders ) holding back Chris and Leo and the one where the 'medics were trying to save Phoebe* was written very very well. you've written the details with such precision- it took my breath away!! oh please write more soon.. poor Paige and Piper, how will they cope with two dead sisters? whats gonna happen to the Power of Three now that Pheebs is gone?? oh please.. continue and update soon!!!

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I'm with Red! This one broke my heart almost as much as Awakened did, but this time, the freaking, fracking !@#$% Elders were able to stop Leo & Chris from doing withat Leo did then! OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!! If I could get my hands on those !@#$% Elders, I'd, I'd, I'd kick *their* sorry a$$es all the way to h*ll and back, and then make sure they stay there!!! Imagine how much fun the demons could have with them!!! They definitely deserve it!!! Actually thanks for giving us a reason to be angry at the Elders, coz it's better than having our hearts break at the death of Phoebe!

I was so glad that Chris was there, so Paige would have someone to hang onto. When Prue died, Phoebe had Cole, bur right now, Paige doesn't have anyone! So I was *so* glad he was there, even if he's as mad as the rest of us!

Now I'm dying to find out how Prue will come back in the picture and what will happen with everyone else thinking that Phoebe died when Prue did, while the sisters know better. Will they have to actually live through another funeral? Will Prue be there for that? And will they ever figure out a way to straighten out this mess??

PLEASE update soon!!!!

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Red, and Esmeralda,, What a wonderful review!!! I know, I had tears in my eyes when I was writing it... But it had to be done!!! The story had to flow, and what better to place blame but on those Elders ,, whom I think are more evil then demons!!!! ((my opinion only))

I'll try to update more today!!!



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A crackle is heard from the middle of the room. Piper and Paige and Leo and Chris all look up. Then white orb lights appear, and swirl around. Piper looking angry and mad and sad “If that’s a Elder, so help me. It’ll be his last breath.” Prue’s body image fades in through the white orbs and lights. In a ghostly form, and then slowly becomes a human form. Prue stands in the hallway looking at Piper and Paige, both of whom are still sobbing and now with dumbstruck and almost shocked looks on their face. Prue can sense their pain and can feel their anguish. Prue begins to tear up. She walks over to where Piper and Paige are sitting on the ground and leans down near them, tears rolling down her face. Piper: “Prue… We just…. Couldn’t,, didn’t stop it in time..” and lays her head in Prue’s shoulder. Prue strokes Piper’s hair and doesn’t say anything. Paige gives Prue and evil look and slides away from her. Prue doesn’t react, just looks down at Piper. Leaving Chris sitting there still tears running down his face. Chris: “Has everything been undone. What happens now” Prue: “I think so. And now, we have to do the unthinkable, and that is to bury Phoebe.” Piper still crying, and now Paige in the corner of the hall,, crying so hard she can’t breathe.

A knock is heard at the door. Leo looks at the girls. “I’ll check that.”. He orbs to the front door. Leo opens the door. There stands Darryl and Sheila. Darryl has tears in his eyes, and Sheila is standing behind him with tears in her eyes.. Darryl: “Leo, I just heard about Phoebe.” Leo’s face puffy from his tears, wiping away the tears from his yes. “Yes, umm.” Not sure what to say. Darryl: “It’s okay,, I know it’s rough to come up with words.” Leo: “Yes I know.” Darryl: “I didn’t want come by yesterday,, so we waited till today.” Leo taken aback by Darryl statement: “What do you mean you didn’t want to come by yesterday,, it just happened..?” Darryl looked at Sheila and then Leo: “Oh,, you mean it feels like it just happened?” Leo: “No, Darryl it did just happen, not more then an hour or so ago.” Darryl: “No Leo, it’s been almost a day and half ago.” Leo looked perplexed. “Come in, I’ll call the girls.” Darryl and Sheila stand in the foyer, as Leo leads them into the living room. Leo yells for the girls to come down. Chris comes down, followed by Paige and Piper, and then Prue walks down last. The girls walk in,, there faces red from crying still quite shaken up. They hug Darryl and Sheila. Prue walks up to Darryl. “Prue,, this is horrible news, having to come home from being overseas to find your sister… um you know. I’m soo sorry.” Prue looks at her sisters, then Darryl, and then Leo, who already looks miffed and shocked. “Yes, Darryl it was a shock,, but I didn’t come from overseas.” Piper looks at Paige and then Prue and doesn’t say anything,, tears still rolling down her face. Darryl now a little shocked, but ignored her statement. Leo: “Piper…. You all need to hear this.” And he looks at Darryl and Sheila. “How long has Phoebe been dead.” The word dead pierced through Piper’s head and Paige’s head like swords,, making both of them cry to the point of sobbing. Darryl: “I found out yesterday,, the day is almost over today.” Piper: “How is that Possible..? It all just happened not more then an hour or so.” Sniffling between each word. Paige ignoring the whole issue, still trying to cope with the information and the visions playing in her head. Leo: “Something else is involved here. I don’t think Arkabus can speed up time.” Prue: “Why can’t he, when he manipulates it.” Leo: “Well then why would he want too.” Chris: “Easily… More time passed the harder it is to get Phoebe back.” Anger in his eyes with each word. Sheila sitting by Paige and Piper “Chris what do you mean get Phoebe back?” Leo and Chris wince, and the girls still sobbing. Leo goes through the whole scenario of events to Darryl and Sheila ending with the moment in time. Both of them are quite stumped and surprised. Darryl: “All of this was because of me?” a tear rolling down his cheek. Piper: Looks up.. “No because Phoebe didn’t want you to die.” Darryl: “But for her to lose her life…. Why?” Paige: “We didn’t know that would be a issue at the time.” Darryl sat down more perplexed then ever. Sheila looks at all the girls. “I’m sorry… We owe you so much.” Piper kinda scoffed, and Paige looked at her with an appreciative smile. Sheila “So you were” looking for the right word “deceased, Prue and now your alive? How? Not how, but why… or…” Prue: “I understand your question,, it’s hard to understand,, and in fact most time dead is dead,, but that isn’t the case. Magic has it own rules and laws.” Sheila “Ohhh.. Okay..” Looking at Piper. “Do you want us to take Wyatt for a bit?” Piper: “No he’s at Magic School.. It’s too dangerous right now. But thank you for asking.” Darryl gathers himself and grabs Sheila hands, and they kissed everyone good bye.. “Let us know if you need anything.” Piper hugs Darryl and tells him they’ll let him know. And they walked out the door.


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Paige gets up and stands there.. Leo looks at Piper.. . “Piper we need to get you to lie down,, all this stress and emotions can’t be good for Chris.” Piper nods her head and hugs Prue on there way upstairs. “I’m happy to have you back, but can’t handle losing Phoebe…” Crying she walks up with Leo. Chris still sitting in the overstuffed chair looks at Prue. Prue: “Are you okay?” Chris: “As to be expected.” Prue: “I understand that.” Chris: “Why aren’t you more upset.” With blame and hatred in his eyes. Paige scoffs at the questions and at Prue. Prue flashing a wide eyed look at Paige’s scoffs and then replies to Chris: “ I don’t’ know,, maybe because we’ve been apart from each other, and I know she’ll be able to see people she hasn’t seen in some time.. I’ve been there and done that Chris.” Chris: “Yes, I know.. but still she is dead,, no longer alive. Her life ended before so much was to happen.” Prue: “I know,, so was mine… Plus you know she was my sister also” silently biting her lip, a bit hurt and revolted by all of this animosity towards her. Paige gives Prue a very evil look and mumbles under her breath, stands up and walks up to her room.. Chris: “I’m sorry, your right. You have to understand it wasn’t her time. She had daughters, and a family in the future. What does that mean for our line.. What does that mean for my future, my cousins.” Prue: “The future isn’t written completely Chris.” Chris: “You think…” in a smart aleck tone. Chris: “I’ve gotta go! I can’t talk about this anymore” and he orbs from his sitting position. Prue: “I don’t know if I can handle this…” And she walks to the kitchen and starts to make something to eat, along with some Tea.

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The scene changes to a dark and dingy cavern. A hole in the wall dive, with little to no light other then the fire stakes hanging motionless in the air. We see the Grovelin demon standing there, looking at a crystal ball that is in shining brightly. The Grovlin demon looks at the women in a red cape and jet black hair,, long black nails and piercing blue eyes. “We must know when the witch is dead.” The demon women looking into the ball,, her hands washing the balls with red and white flame tips at then end of her black nails. “Silence Petromish…” Petromish, the grovelin demon gives her a piercing look. “No one silences me…” cut off by the demons quick red sparks from her nails at they dash towards his chest. “Owwww..” petromish winces. The lady demon returns back to her ball: “If you want to rule the underworld Petromish, you’ll listen to me when I speak. Behind every good demon man is a powerful demon women.” Petromish: “I like that in my women.” Kissing her neck. The lady demon “Can’t you see.. The Queen of Darkness. Lady Kochska.” Petromish: “Yes,, I love the part of me being the Source.” Kochska: “You would. You dolt.. Now let’s get back to gaining the charmed ones powers and the powers of that baby..” Petromish: “I knew.. I fell for you for a reason.” Now playing with his fire power and bouncing green fire balls up and down in his hand. Kochska: “Petromish, your driving me crazy.. Go away from me so I can try and see the charmed ones. I must know when is the best time, the most vulnerable time to attack.” Petromish now a little hurt, walks away, and mocks Kockska.

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Very, very well done, CCrazed! I'm a little confused (nothing new with me, I'm warning you), as to how much these two new demons had to do with what happened to Phoebe, but..

Man, is the Tribunal evil, even if two of them are Elders! (Then again...!!!) To make time go by that fast, so it's harder for TCO to save Phoebe, for the world to think that Prue was gone overseas--hardly giving Piper & Paige a chance to mourn at all! So does the world think that Phoebe is already buried or do we still have to go through that? Nice touch on your part!

I can understand why Paige & Chris feel the way they do towards Prue, but it's not her fault!!! And Prue's been gone for a long time; she's used to losing her sisters, besides now knowing that Phoebe is truly in a better place!! I liked Chris being concerned about his cousins, Phoebe's kids. Nice touch on your part! Or do those kids now become Prue's??

I'm also wondering if these two new demons that we just met are affiliated with Barbus at all--I just *know* that he's behind this somehow!!

I'm continuing to love this, CCrazed!! Please update soon!!!

I continue to love this!

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bravo bravo!! yay CharmedCrazed!! those were amazing updates!! i loved the way Paige reacted to seeing Prue appearing. it was realistic to see that she was apprehensive at first... i love this fic. and oh, poor Darrly, he has to live with the fact that Phoebe sacrificed her life for him whew!! please update again CharmedCrazed

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Esmeralda and Red,, you are sooo sweet.. I just love your reviews!!!

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Leo lays Piper down who is still sobbing. “Piper, were going to get her back.” Piper: “She’s gone Leo,, we can’t fight Death.” Leo: “We have to try. Prue is here,, remember, your still the power of three.” Piper: ‘NO Leo,, the power of three is dead.” Leo: “Piper don’t say that,, please don’t say that. Your upset.” Piper: “Upset,, UPSET.. My sister is dead, and my dead is sister is alive. Not to mention my sister just died in front of me the same horrible way Grams did.. and…..” cut off by her own sobs, as flashbacks of grams at the bottom of the stairs flashes through her head. Leo: “Piper… Grams death was different..” Piper looking hurt: “You weren’t there Leo,, I can’t do this anymore.. Can you go check on Wyatt?” Leo looks at her “Yes, I can” seeing her pain and feeling it, he orbs to the Magic School. Piper begins to cry so hard, now that she is alone,, cries herself to sleep. Her dreams are floods of fast processing pictures of grams death, then prue, and now Phoebe. Grams body at the bottom of the steps, then Phoebe in the same spot. Over and Over again, the flashes of them both falling down the steps.

Paige walks past Piper’s room.. Piper laying there still crying,, still in so much pain. The same pain Paige is feeling now. Paige gets to her room, and tries to fall asleep. Hours pass by and Paige isn’t sleeping very well, she keeps waking up to the silence of her pain. Wakes up and decides to sit up,, knowing she can’t sleep she just seen her sister dead. She sits there in the darkness of the night, and decides to get some Tea to calm her nerves. She walks past Piper whose asleep, but also tossing and turning, she then goes down the steps to find Prue asleep on the couch, books and papers in front of her, the tv still on the news channel. She walks over to the couch.. “What is she trying to do..” saying in a whisper. “Trying to catch up on current events” Rolling her eyes.. She walks over to the Television and turns it off. Which wakes Prue up. Prue: “Hey,, are you doing okay?” Paige: “What do you think?” in her most sarcastic tone. Prue: “Well maybe I should say , As can be expected?” Paige: “I’m hanging in there. I can’t cry anymore. I just can’t believe that she is gone. I felt like we had a chance to save her. We had a plan.” Prue: “I know,, I felt that maybe me coming back made the Tribunal acts on the situation a lot faster.” Paige: “No offense, I told them not to call you.” Prue: “None taken, maybe they should have listened.” Paige: “Well I’d redo a lot about the situation over again.” Prue: “Yeah, I’d assume we all would. Did you see Piper before you came down.” Paige: “Yeah, she doesn’t seem like she is doing well.” Prue: “She wouldn’t be,, she is the only one whose had to live through both her sisters dying.” Paige: “I know.. I don’t know how she does it.” Prue: “I know my death was hard on her,, it was on me.” Paige: “Prue,, how would you know it was hard on her,, you haven’t seen or talked to her since then.” Prue: “I know and I can still….” And she is cut off by Piper’s scream. Paige: “Oh no, it’s Piper!” Prue: “PIPER…” They both run up the stairs to Piper.

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Piper is now breathing hard,, her heart is racing. She is muttering to herself. Paige runs in as Prue follows. Leo orbs in. “What is going on.” And he rushes to Piper’s side. “Grams,, where is grams,, Phoebe is hurt.. Phoebe is .. is…” Paige hugs Piper: “Phoebe is gone, and so is Grams.” Piper: “I KNOW,, I know. I know. I know…” repeating herself over and over again, until her words are sobs. Prue walks up to Piper and sits next to her on the bed. “Piper…. Honey,, why do you keep saying Grams.” Piper sniffling and trying to catch her breath. “Dead… Phoebe,, like Grams…..” Prue looks at Leo who looks back at Prue with a concerned look. Prue: “Piper,,, Grams had a heart attack.” Piper: “But she was at the bottom of the steps like Phoebe… Can’t you see.” Prue: “I see. I see.” Hugging Piper. Leo looks at Paige and Prue, and nods out to the hall. Piper sits there crying very hard, and sobbing . Leo meets the two of them in the hall.. “We’ve got to get her calmed down, or she is going to put herself in to premature labor.” Prue: “Oh goodness, we don’t need that now.” Paige: “No we don’t, but what do we do. We can’t bring Phoebe back.” Leo: “I don’t know. We’ve got to calm her down.” Prue: “How about you go get Wyatt.” And we’ll make her some tea and calm her down that way.. Leo: “Good idea.” Paige walks into Piper who is still sobbing. “Honey,, how about we go down stairs and have some tea, maybe some food.” Piper hugs Paige. “She’s gone, Paige, she gone.” Paige pats her back holding her composer the best way she can and whispers “I know.” Prue helps Paige lead Piper downstairs to the kitchen where Paige grabs some cups and Prue puts water on the stove. Prue looks at Piper: “You’ve got this place so well organized.” Piper gives her a half smile. Prue pours each of them a cup of Tea. Prue looks over at Piper “It’s going to be okay.” Piper just shakes her head. “No it’s not. It’s not okay. I can’t do this anymore.” Paige; “We have to go on Piper. We can’t stop.. Phoebe wouldn’t want it.” Piper looks at Paige “Phoebe wanted a life. A child, a good job, and great family.” Paige: “ I know, but she wanted to be a charmed one, a witch.” Prue looks over from her cup of Tea. “I don’t think we should discuss this now. Our emotions are too much on a high.” Piper looks at Prue “Maybe your right.” Leo orbs in with a sleeping Wyatt. Piper’s somber and sobbing changes to pure love and appreciation. “My boy!” Leo smiles “He needs his mother.” Piper smiles back.. “Thank you Leo.” And she stands up and grabs Wyatt kisses him all over and grabs Leo hand. Looks at Prue and Paige “We’re going to bed.” With that, Leo orbs them to Piper’s room and they close the door, and fall asleep with Wyatt between them. Without tears and without pain,, just her family and nothing else needed at this point in time..


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Prue looks at Paige and Paige kinda smirks. Paige: “Well she needs that right now.” Prue: “I know.. I’m going to take care of the funeral preparation for Phoebe’s funeral. Is that okay with you.” Paige. “Yeah,, I’ll help as much as I can.” Prue: “That not necessary.” Paige: “It’ll help me cope. I’ve been through this before with my parents. I know the in and outs.. I can help.” Prue: “Okay.” Paige: “I’m going up to my room.” Prue: “Yes, I know.. my old room.” Paige: “Yeahhhh,, that’s the one. Good night” Prue waves her hand goodnight. She thinks to herself I wonder if I have my powers back. And she waves her hand sending the chair smashing into the side of the cabinet. “It works.” Paige runs in.. “What happened.” Prue: “Sorry,, Power checking.” Paige: “Ahh,, but what,, how did you..” Prue: “Moved it with my hands. Kinda like a wave.” Paige: “You didn’t have to say anything.” Prue: “No.. You could do that too if you worked on it more.” Paige: “Can you help me.” Prue: “Sure.” Paige “Thanks,, Good night again. ”

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The next morning, was still very somber. Piper wakes up, a little more refreshed, while laying by Leo and Wyatt. She gets up, and Wyatt wakes up. She lets Leo sleep in. She gets Wyatt dressed and puts on a new diaper. She looks in Paige’s room, she is sound asleep hanging off her bed, and she walks toward Phoebe’s room. An empty room, full of memories, and hurt, and pain flushes over her. She breathes in real hard trying not to cry again, as Wyatt coos. “Let’s go downstairs, Wyatt.” She walks down the steps and see Prue sleeping on the couch. A neat stack of books and newspapers on the table in front of her. The television turned off. Wyatt giggles. Piper smiles to see Prue,, she has missed her soo much.. The thoughts of having her back, makes her ecstatic, but also makes her feel bad for being even a little happy. She walks into the kitchen and starts to make breakfast and coffee. The coffee smell wakes up Prue,, who is revitalized. She walks in and gives kisses to Wyatt who is now in his chair eating a few animal crackers. Prue: “Wyatt,, your sooo cute!!” Piper: “Morning Sis.” Prue: “Morning.. Breakfast smells good.” Piper: “I bet it does,, when you’ve not had any in years.” Prue: “Yeah,, so it does.” Prue walks over to the answering machine and clicks the play button. “Ms. Halliwell, Please call Thompson Funeral Service. We need to go over the arrangements of Ms. Phoebe Halliwell’s Service. My number is 555-0123.” Prue rights down the number.. Piper freezes in her spot, and a tear trickles down. “I can’t handle that right now.” Prue: “I know, I’ll take care of it.” Piper: “I’ve done it once for you, I can’t do it for Phoebe too.” She said very coldly and without feeling. Wiping away the tear. Prue: “Yeah, I figured as much. I say we don’t’ talk about it today.” Piper: “Okay” Paige stumbles in,, her hair sporting a definite bed head look. Prue: “Nice hair, Paige.” Paige: “Yeah,, has a mind of it own.” Trying to move it around to look normal… The phones rings. Paige walks over to it. “Yeah,, Hello.” Voice from the other end “Hello,, Paige. It’s Elise.”<br>Paige : “Elise… What can I do for you” with a bit of a shocked look on her face
Elise: “I just heard about Phoebe… I think it’s all my fault. ” Sniffling while she was on the phone
Paige: “No Elise,, she fell,, it was a mistake.” Surprisedby her reaction,,, Elise usually is so cold.
Elise: “I know but I had just talked to her, and then I heard, and..”<br>Paige: “No Elise,, please don’t think that way. Phoebe loved her column and loved her job. It was a joy for her.” Trying to hold back her tears.
Elise: “How are you all holding up.”<br>Paige: “We”re still not sure.”<br>Elise: “We’re all here for you. We’re going to run a full page front page on her life and her columns, I hope that will be like a tribute to her life. And please let me know when her funeral arrangements are set.”<br>Paige: “Yes, and Thank you for your concern. Good bye.” Hanging up the phone.
Piper: “Who was that?” Paige: “Umm, Elise.. I can’t hear that women’s voice without a cup of coffee first.. Ugggh…. But it was a weird call,, she said she was to blame for Phoebe’s,,, ya know. ” Prue: “Who is Elise?” Paige: “Phoebe’s boss” Piper: “Used to be…” giving Paige a past tense look. Paige: “Yeah…. Okay… She was a thorn in Phoebe’s back.. one of those pushy types.” Prue: “Awww,, why would she think…” Paige: “How, would I know.. Something about talking to her,, and the she fell blah blah,, you know the story.” Prue: “So call Elise for funeral arrangements.” Paige: “Exactly… speaking of which, has anyone heard from Chris.” Prue: “Not since our fight last night.” Paige: “Yeah not a pretty conversation.” Piper: “What happened?” Prue: “Nothing really,, just Chris was upset, yada yada yada.” Piper; “Well I’ll have Leo check on him today. He needs time to cope.”

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Chris is seen in a dark dingy zone,, black with suet. Hiding from the realm of demons that come by him. He whispers a spell to himself: Black as Night, No need for Light, I call my ability, to hide me with invisibility. With that he goes invisible and slides through more demons,, listening to there conversation. Until he comes to a cavern heavily guarded by magic demons,, he slips in,, a dim room with fire light, and a large open cauldron, with black and red liquid boiling in it. The demon walks in and stands in front of the cauldron, not more then 6 feet from Chris. He’s a dark pale demon,, dingy red cloak. Nails long and black, jet black. The demon looks up from his white and black eyes “Show yourself witch.” Chris freezes. “SHOW YOURSELF WITCH!” As he forms a energy ball. Chris mumbles a spell in a whispered tone and becomes visible. The demon fizzles his energy ball. “Aww,, young Chris.” Chris: “Yeah…. Young Pissed Chris! How did you know who I was?” The demon: “What do you want from me.” Chris: “To fix this mess.” The demon: “I can’t.” Chris: “You must Arkabus, you are messing with our future here!” Arkabus: “Chris, you must be wondering why your still alive. The only reason why you are alive, is for the fear of your brother in the future,, we are strong allies, and I can’t touch you. I foresee this, and I know I can’t. But that doesn’t mean I’m on your side.” Chris: “Arkabus,, you will be heavily reward from my brother if you save my aunt. I know the ties you have with him, and our family” Arkabus: “I’m aware, but I can’t. If I do, the tribunal will know, and I will be vanquished.” Chris: “You must find a way around it!” Arkabus: “Listen, boy, I’ve done all I can do. Be gone, or I’ll take my chances with Wyatt in the future without you.” Chris gives him the most evil eye, he can muster, and orbs out. Petromish and Kochska walk in from behind a cavern wall.

Kockska looks at her ball and laughes “Aww the little witch misses his auntie..” and begins to laugh. Petromish: “What happened?” Kockska :”Well one of the witches went to Arkabus to plead with him” Petromish: “Ahh, so there growing weak and now desperate.” Kochska: “We’ve close my dear very close. Vunerability. And Arkabus’s help, you’ll be source and we’ll defeat the charmed ones and that powerful child.”<br>

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I just found your story CharmedCrazed and I'm loving it! Very interesting plot and I love how Prue's come back. And how badly Piper must feel- happy that her sister's back but feeling totally upset at the same time because of Phoebe...both of those emotions at the same time must be so hard to deal with.

Please update soon!

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oooh!! thats a lot of updates from the amazing charmedCrazed!!! woohoo!!!! well what can i say??? WOW! i loved the way you wrote Piper dealing with Phoebe's death, it was soo realistic...!!! i mean, wow!! it was so so so *im all out of words, so i'll stick with fantastic* and Paige acting all sarcastic toward Prue, very well done!!! and Prue enjoying breakfast after all these years??? a really really good touch of reality in there! oh man! this fic rocks!!! oh please update soon CharmedCrazed, this fic totally rocks!!!!

*edited, thanks esmeralda, for helping me with that *

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Very, very well done, CCrazed! Elise obivously feels responsible because Phoebe was talking on the cell to her when she fell, and, of course, she knows nothing about the Tribunal and their edict.

I also thought the scenes with Prue and Paige were very well done. I'm not sure if Paige *will* be able to use TK the way Prue & Chris do--the first sister is supposed to be able to move things with her mind, but of course, Paige does it by calling for it, so it orbs to her. I think Prue would find that power kinda cool! But it's nice of Prue to offer and Paige to accept.

Interesting that Chris had an alliance with a demon in the future to try to go against Wyatt, but that the alliance may be breaking up now. Sounds like the future Source may know a lot more than we think he does!

Great, great job, CCrazed!!! Please update soon!!

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Oh, so sad! It's great how the family is pulling together to support each other. And it's just like Chris not to sit back and take it. I just wish the others could pull themselves out of their grief long enough to take a cue from him. Pretty cool how he's not moping about, but using his influence in the Underworld to try to fix things. Of course he'd go there, because the Powers That Be on the good side are obviously useless in every sense of the word.

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A white limo pulls up to a white mausoleum in the middle of a wooded area, secluded by shade trees and beautiful pearly white Greek statues. Prue steps out, in a black dress, black sunglasses, and her hair immaculately in place. Paige then gets out, her black dress, and funky pink shoes, and black sunglasses. Paige grabs Wyatt from Leo and the driver gets his stroller out of the trunk. Leo steps out and helps put Wyatt in his stroller, he’s in an black suit,, also with black sunglasses. Piper then gets out with Leo’s guidance. Her hair pulled back, her composer stiff, Black dress, and black shoes, no sunglasses,, her eyes are red and puffy from crying. Chris stumbles out of the car behind Piper. He’s dressed up, but looking very irritated. He whispers to Paige: “Don’t you think this is a little soon.. We could be trying to save her and not bury her.” Paige: “Chris.. come on, face facts.” Chris rolls his eyes. “I am… this is stupid. We can fix this, we just need too..” Piper looks up at Chris. “Enough..”.. and starts pushing Wyatt up the steps. They all follow-- the area is beautiful, wrapped in white swarms of drapes and ribbons and lilies. A priestess stands waiting for Prue: “We’re ready.. We’d like for everyone to say goodbye before everyone comes.” Prue shakes her head yes, and they all follow to Phoebe’s casket. There lies Phoebe,, beautiful in her black dress, hair just right, and eyes closed holding a lily. Paige begins to tear up, and Piper begins to sob. Piper holds her hands up and freezes everything. The priestess is frozen, Leo is frozen. Chris looks at Leo “Mom, why is Leo frozen.” Piper: “Because,, I can’t do this again. Look, Look at her,, she is gone.. Lifeless. My baby sister. She is gone,,” Prue looks at Piper and holds her and Piper is rambling and crying. Paige is beside herself. “Prue, we’ve got to get her to unfreeze this, somebody might come in an see.” Piper: “Let them see,, who cares. What the hell. And she starts to ramble a spell.” Chris looking quite afraid, and really unsure of what is happening. Piper chants: “I call upon thee, those to be, lock up this hell, do as I tell” The doors slam shut, and lock. Piper looks at Prue and Paige, “we are to do this now. I won’t bury my baby sister,, I won’t do it” Prue looks stumped,,, Paige: “Do what Piper.. She is gone for god’s sake.” Piper: “The Hell she is.” Piper starts screaming “Gideon.. Get your Elder butt down here.” Prue: “What are you doing.” Piper: “Fixing this hell. ….. G..ID…EOOON…” White orbs appear. Gideon forms “What is going on.” Piper: “Good you’re here.” Gideon: “Piper, your not rational,,, why is Leo frozen,, why is..” Piper: “Just shuuut up Gideon. Time to fix this mess.” Gideon: “What… Listen Piper, I know your irrational, and not thinking clearly but I’m a Elder and…” Piper: “Okay,,, You deserve respect and blah blah blah.” Paige’s eyes bulge almost out of her head in amazement. Prue: “Honey, you need to sit down, your losing it.” Piper looks at Prue : “Don’t touch me. I’ll blow this place to the hilt. Now everyone shut up. I’m pregnant and on edge here. Paige orb that chic to a locked room or outside or something.” Paige grabs the lady and orbs her the back room. Paige orbs back, and Piper is in full rants now. Piper: “Gideon take us to the Tribunal,, all of us, as she is standing by Phoebe casket.” Gideon: “ I can’t. I won’t.” Piper: “YOU can and you will.” Gideon decides it’s best to do as she says. He orbs them to the all-familiar black and white room. Everyone is present including Leo who is now not frozen. Leo looks stumped. “What just happened." Piper looks at Leo. “Don’t make me freeze you again.” Leo shuts his mouth. Gideon: “What now??”

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Piper: “Hello--- big heads!!!” Paige whispers with a irritated tone: “Piper,,, you trying to kill all of us.” Chris: “Shut up Paige,, Mom’s on a role… As you were mom.” And smiles to Piper. Piper ignores there statements. “HEY,, I’M TALKING TO YOU.” As the Tribunal’s heads pop through: “Who calls for us and why?” Gideon opens his mouth to see Piper point at him. “Don’t you dare!!! You’ve done enough damage.” Piper: “I DO!! Piper Halliwell a CHARMED ON E!” Tribunal: “We see this! What do you want.” Piper: “Simple,, bring m y sister back now!!” Tribunal: “We can’t!” Piper: “Not a good answer. Do this now,, or your once Precious Charmed Ones will turn Magic on his head and then some.” Tribunal: “Sit….”<br>
The sisters all sit,, Piper beckons Leo to take Wyatt to the Magic School he follows through quickly. Chris sits by Gideon, with a smug smile on his face. Phoebe’s casket is moved to the side. Tribunal: “Now address us as we deserve, and a podium appears” Piper “Fine, it’s all technicalities.” She walks up,, both Prue and Paige aren’t even sure what is going on. “Listen,, my threat is not a light hearted conversation. It’s a real as you are! You can take our powers, but that will throw off the element of good versus evil, and you wouldn’t want to do that!” The tribunal begins to whispers to each other. “We won’t be swayed by your careless manners, Miss Halliwell.” Paige stands up: “Listen,, what you did to Phoebe was wrong, What she did was against rules, but what Barbas did was too, he exposed Magic,, and then you allowed him to live. You allowed me to live. We’ve all swayed Magic into the realm of personal gain many of times, and we’ve all not had gotten such a harsh punishment. I mean it’s like a yellow light,, it’s just there for suggestion purposes. You don’t get a ticket for blowing a yellow light,, same thing here, you don’t die from it” Prue kinda snickers at her analogy of the situation but shakes her head in agreement. Gideon by this time is just shaking his head in absolute disappointment. Chris pats his back.. “Ye have little faith,,Elder!” and snickers. Tribunal: “We’ve made our decision.” Piper rudely interrupts “And ya know it was a crappy one.” Paige: “An Unfair one.” Prue stands up: “And an evil one.” The tribunal is taken aback. “We won’t be spoken to like this.” Piper: “Okay, and on the same note, we won’t be treated like this either. We’re Charmed” The Tribunal fades out. Piper: “What,,, What… What just happened.” Gideon: “ I don’t know, but it can’t be good!” Chris: “I bet there deliberating.” Gideon: “On what,, THREATS! This is the stupidest and non-respectful idea so far.” Piper: “Stick a sock in it.” Leo orbs in,,, “What did I miss?” Gideon looks at Leo “Disastrous! By this meeting, They’ll have Arkabus turn time as far ahead and we’ll all be dead” Leo looks very scared now. Piper: “Nothing this far..God, Gideon a little more drama please. They’ve disappeared.” Chris sits back, “hmmm,, that’s it,,,, something isn’t right here” he mumbles. Piper: “What?” Chris: “there is an influence, I just know it.” Gideon: “That is crazy.. Your talking about evil and good working together, they can’t be influenced. Chris: “Yes they can!” and he orbs out, Leo follows him.


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Chris arrives in the underworld. Leo falls right beside him with white orbs.. Chris grabs him into the corner. “Shhh…” They can sense white orbs.” And a jolt of wild boar looking guards run past. Leo whispers to Chris “Why are you hear.” Chris rolls his eyes. “To find the influence.” Sneaking off in the shadows as Leo follows. Chris,, “Drink this dad?” Leo: “What is it?” Chris: “Invisibility” Leo: “Aww,, yeah of course, who wouldn’t carry that around in the pocket.” Chris ignores him as they become invisible.

Paige looks at Gideon then to Prue. “What was that.” Piper leaning on the podium “Hopefully saving our butts!!!” Paige laughs at Piper “Didn’t think we needed in on this one,, did ya?” Prue stands there her arms on her hips: “Yeah, smooooth idea. But a glitch, we didn’t know about it.” Piper “Neither did I,, I felt it. When I saw Phoebe.” Paige: “So we could all leave here dead. That’d be good for Wyatt and Chris.” Piper: “Yeah…. Didn’t think about that. But I was right,, they kill us.” Gideon: “They’ll mess up the balance of good versus evil.” Piper: “Right,,, and they won’t want to do that.” Gideon: “I wonder why they didn’t think you’d revolt?” Piper: “Because there Big Heads with no brains.” Gideon looking perplexed. “I’m thinking Chris might be right.” Piper “What?” Gideon, no time to explain. “We must stall the decision, they make. Which will be your death.” Piper: “What?” Paige: ‘Come again?” Prue: “Nooo…” Gideon: “There under the influence of evil, there going to not care of the decision made,, evil vs good.. Not an issue.” Piper; “Aww okay…” Paige: “Well goood good choice sis.” Prue: “I was just getting used to this.” Piper: “I didn’t know.” Paige tries to orb out,, “Well I can’t orb out, so whatever happens, it happens here.”<br>
Chris and Leo come by Arkabus’s Cavern. Chris: “He’s gone.” Leo: “Who?” Chris: “Arkabus.” Leo: “How did you?” Chris “NOT now…” They continue to walk around,,, to walk past the cavern of Petromish and Kochska. “A blurry form on the ball.” Arkabus talking to the 4 beings. “You musn’t let the Charmed ones live. They must go. If not, I’ll forward time to the point where Heaven and Hell collide and Evil and Good have no stand.” The one being: “You mustn’t!” Arkabus: “I’ve foreseen it, and at this point, it will happen, and thanks to your powers and the given powers from Petromish, I can make it happen.” Petromish waves to the beings. “We must talk this over, the balance will be off, and it’s not good for either side.” Chris: “It’s the Tribunal!” Leo: “They are being blackmailed, but why and how?” Chris; “Why?? Of course to the source of all evil, you must be able to get rid of the charmed ones! It’s pretty smart!” Leo looks at Chris a little concerned about his comment! Chris rolls his eyes,, “Whatever… you know what I meant!” Leo: “How do we fix this!” Chris: “We call them on it!”


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The Tribunal flashes in and motions for the girls to stand up. Tribunal lead: “Your disregard, and your foolish and distasteful manners and disregard for our powerful position, has given us no other option to immediately dispense of your life and to stop the charmed line in your path. Piper shrieks, and Paige stands mortified, Prue : “You can’t! We need to keep the balance.” Tribunal: “We’ve done all we can do.” And then the tribunal fades. With a shocked Gideon standing in his place. Gideon to the girls who are all shocked and consumed by the verdict. Piper: “They can’t do this to us,m my boys!!!” Paige: “Why didn’t you try and stall them!” Gideon, “I couldn’t. I’m sorry!”<br>
Chris orbs in and Leo follows. “We’ve got it!!” The girls stand there looking blank. Leo: “What happened?” The girls then disappear from the floor. Chris: “Mom…. Paige!!! Aunt Prue!!!” Leo: “What is going on!! I can’t sense them!!!” Gideon,, “Leo and Chris,, the Tribunal has given a verdict of death,, immediately! Chris: “NO!!!!” Leo orbs to manor,, and Gideon and Chris follow.

There lies Piper dead on the floor. Prue beside her and Paige near them both. Chris screams “NO!!!!!!!! MOM!!!!!!” Leo grabs Piper and holds her.. “OH NO.. What?? Why didn’t you stop them Gideon!” Chris is crying and stroking Paige’s hair. “Paige.. Oh I’m soo sorry.. for everything!!!” Gideon is awe struck and completely beside himself. “This is very very wrong!” Chris looks at Piper: “How come I’m still here?” Leo: “She not pregnant anymore. She must have had you already.. Time must had been manipulated again!” Chris and Leo are sobbing so hard,, holding the charmed ones near them.. There lifeless bodies cluttered through the foyer...


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It's so like Piper to go on a psychotic rampage like that. To just completely lose it.

Oh my god the Charmed Ones are dead?! And poor Chris left even more alone than before. Of course he's going to try and fix this...

Great update.

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CharmedCrazed! this is absolutely fantastic! the Tribunal being blackmailed by a demon, the Charmed Ones dead, Piper on a rampage...oh my goodness, this is one good fic! its so.. so... new, so original! please update again soon!!

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THANK YOU THANK YOU!!! You are soo wonderful..... I'm so glad you like it!!!! I'm going to update more!!! Hope you love it!!

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After some time of Leo holding Piper in his arms. He can no longer cry anymore. Gideon sitting at the table sitting back in disbelief. Chris stands up, and lies Paige down and kisses her hand. Chris: “We’ve got to fix this.” Gideon: “How do you expect us to do that?” Leo: who has been trying and trying to heal Piper “I don’t know,, I can’t heal them.” Chris: “The Tribunal is being blackmailed,, there all Evil.” Gideon: “I figured as much.” Leo: “We can’t do anything.” Chris: “If we don’t, then not only will the Charmed ones be dead, but so will Good, and the world I came back to fix will be much worse. And straight evil.” Gideon: “I’m unsure what to do. We can’t just walk in an accuse the Tribunal of Evil Acts. We’ll be no better off then the girls.” Leo: “Watch it Gideon.” A stiff tear and pointed finger of anger towards Gideon. Gideon: “I’m just saying, we’ll do them no good to be dead or in our cases recycled.” Chris: “We’ve got to figure this out. Someone has to stay with the girls so no one knows there not in this world. Leo that is you.” Leo nods so unable to think because of the overwhelming grief he feels for his one true love as she lies lifeless in his arms. What good is he, he can’t even save the one women, the one thing he cares about more then his own life or his destiny. Gideon: “I’ll go the other Elders. Work with them, we’re going to need there backing.” Chris: “I’m going down to the underworld. I’ve got to manipulate them back.” Gideon: “Chris you must be careful, we’ve no clue how far time has been manipulated. There may be a source and this world may no longer be the balance of good vs evil.” Chris: “Yeah, gotcha.. Covert operation.” With that he orbs out.

Chris orbs to the attic. He going through the book. Reading entries on Kockska and Petromish and Arkabus. He begins to brew up potions of in mass quantities, and writing down spells. Gideon orbs into the attic to find the noise he hears from below as Chris. “I thought you were going to the underworld?” Chris looks up from the smoking brew. “Yeah and, I’m not stupid,, potions and spells are the only things I’ve got to save myself.” Gideon: “That’s not true you know.” Chris: “Ahh let me guess,, I’m a smart boy with lots of potential, as you love to say.” Gideon: “Well yes,, but I was going to say with the charmed ones gone, your powers should multiply by leaps and bounds.” Chris: “What do you mean?” Gideon: “You should be getting your mother’s powers soon,, freezing, and maybe combustion.” Chris: “How will I know.” Gideon: “By the pure waving of your hands.” Chris: “Ha… Oh okay. In case you’ve not noticed I’m the future Chris and the baby chris is whom will get the powers.” Gideon: “Yes but your not thinking clearly. Realize this, you’ve had these new powers all of your life, and you should be able to control them now, without even knowing it. Try it!” Chris: “Okay,,, throw this in the air.” Handing Gideon a sharp athame. Chris puts up his hands like his mother did. Gideon throws the athame in the air. Chris winces his hands and the athame and Gideon freeze. “Wicked!” with a chuckle. Chris stands there and exams his new power and looks as everything is frozen in time. He didn’t even know he could do that! I wonder if I can blow things up he thinks to himself. He grabs a near by candle and throws it in the air. Throws his hands out and thinks of blowing up the item, in seconds the candles is blown to little shards of wax that hit Gideon. Which Gideon unfreezes as they hit him. “What what…” spitting out wax from his mouth and shaking himself off, quite irritated. “I’m assuming you’ve mastered the combustion.” Chris: “Yeah,, No wonder my mom kicked butt, these are awesome powers!” Gideon: “So then you should be safe to go to the underworld. Chris: “Not yet,, I need a few potions and spells to help myself.” Gideon: “Well let’s get this done and quickly. If the balance continues to stay off, our lives are going to be in GREAT peril. Not to mention that Leo won’t be able to stay sane” Chris: “I’m veryy veryy aware.” Gideon orbs out and Chris finishes his potions as quickly as he can,, with brewing and writing the spells.


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Leo is still in the foyer,,, still sobbing and holding Piper’s lifeless body in his hands, and still in complete disarray with the situation that lay in front of him. The utter doom and gloom. He’s never felt this powerless in his life. The memories fluttering in his head of is love for her, and how she made him feel whole and complete. He grabs Piper and puts her on the couch,, covers her up and proceeds to the same with Prue and Paige. Setting Prue in a chair and Paige as well. He sits down by Piper, still sobbing. He holds her in his arms. He begins to rock with her. “Piper, I’m soo sorry.. I’ve left you while you needed me. I’ve abandoned you, and it hurt so bad. I can’t make it without you. I can’t raise these two children, without you. We need you badly.” Crying and sobbing while rocking.. More and more flashbacks of there life kept rolling through his head. The moments when he asked Piper to marry him. Talking to her in the bathroom through the door. The utter silliness of the situation, the anxiety he felts the pain of not having her in his life if she was to say no. Then flashing to Piper as she was pregnant. Everything about her was beautiful and graceful. The beauty she withheld every moment of her life. The flashes, brought him into a deep dark depression, the hatred filled him. The pure hatred he’d not felt in his life before. He wanted revenge; he wanted his wife back, his distant family to be more of a whole family!!! He wasn’t sure if he wanted revenge on himself or on the tribunal. He was sure of one thing,, his hatred was geared toward himself!

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woah! its so cool! Chris has Piper's powers now! yay!! but my favorite update is the one with Leo mourning over Piper..it is so sad, so touching...


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awwww.this is so sweet!!!

youre such a talented writer CharmedCrazed! looking forward to your next exciting udpates!!!

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I just caught up. This is getting better and better with every update. Keep up the good work
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Must-Read Update is right!!!! You should write for NBC, CCrazed!!! That was absolutely totally fantastic! Like the others, I loved Piper going nuts, that's our Piper, and I hated the Tribunal's decision, especially their executing it so quickly!!! That one demon must really be able to manipulate time well to be able to kill the girls while keeping Chris alive. That's a cool trick for a demon!

I loved how Chris was so used to being in the Underworld while Leo was totally out of his league. I loved poor Gideon finally being someone who's helping them out now that his precious balance of good vs evil is so @#%$-eyed! I love him realizing that Chris should have his mother's powers--how 'bout his aunts? They're dead, too! Coz he sure has his Aunt Prue's powers, so why not the others???

And like the others, I loved Leo mourning his precious Piper (althoug personally I was hoping he'd remember their wedding before remembering her pregnant), even as my heart broke for him. But you wrote it *so* beautifully! And now he wants to take it out on himself--well, we know where Chris gets it from!! Just so he doesn't do something evil before Bad, Bad World; that would just make things worse!!!

This is *so* very wonderful!!! Please update soon!!!

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Chris now finished with his potions, and spells. Heads toward the foyer, finds Leo in a ball of a mess. “DAD, for god’s sake.. If you want mom back, quit this incessant crying. She’s only gone if you don’t help!!!” Leo taken aback by Chris’ rudeness. “Chris, your on a suicide mission,, they tribunal will kill us all.. We can’t fight the powers that be.” Chris: “Geezzz,, Dad… Give it up! Tap into the pain and hurt and hatred you are feeling, and lets kick some demon butt! Now grab these crystals.” Chris: “They aren’t going anywhere, plus we can lock the door.” Leo: “Yeah ,,Okay!” Grabbing the crystals under his arm and following Chris to the underworld in black orbs! They orbed this time much closer to the cavern of Arkabus,, which was heavily guarded.. Chris whispers and hands a vial to Leo “Hurry drink this…” Leo: “What is it?” Chris: “Invisibility,, silence, it’s a mixed potion.. Just Drink it,, and be quiet!” Kochska walks past, and the guards bow towards her. Chris whispers to Leo: “There a source now!” Then Arkabus appears at the door way, as Petromish walks in,, the guards fall to the ground in his wake. Arkabus bows,, “My Lord, the Source!” Kochska with Petromish on his side. Petromish: “We’ve come to extend you a right hand position to the Source.” Arkabus, “Yes my source!” Kochska: “You’ve done well by us, Arkabus!” The crystal ball once in Kochska cavern now lies in Arkabus’ cavern. Kochska “May I?” leaning towards the ball. Arkabus: “Yes” as he walks backward. Kochska starts to churn the ball with her hands the red and now black flames whipping against the ball. “The future holds.” She shrieks in pain,, and blank look comes across her face. Petromish: “Kochska,,, what is it??” shacking her,, trying to see what the ball reveals!! “Kochska,,, KOCHSKA!” Kochska looks at Petromish, and then Arkabus. “I see no good,, I see the future as it was to be before!” Petromish: “WHAT? How is that to be!” Arkabus keeping his head down in the presence of the Source and His Queen. “Arkabus, how can this be!” Arkabus begins to open his mouth. But Kochska begins to scream in dire pain as a reddishblackswirl vial hits her chest and she goes into flames, and she blows up. Petromish: “Who, HOW,, we are they??” Arkabus looks over “The Witch!” Petromish: “What witch,, the witches are dead!!” Arkabus: “NO the witch from the fu…” cut off by the crystals that orbed in sink around him to catch him a crystal cage!! Petromish: “Guards stop them!” The guards all looking around, not sure what to catch… There’s no one there! The source Petromish forms energy balls and begins throwing them all over the place. Chris and Leo diverting each one with ease. Chris begins blowing up the guards,, one by one like flies dropping. Till the only people left were Petromish, still throwing Energy Balls and calling out chants to reverse the witches spell of invisibility. Arkabus is still in the crystal cage violently trying to get out. A quick spell is chanted from the thin air,, from Chris “I bind you, I bind you, take these powers, hold them for an hour. Arkabus is washed with a white and red light,, mixed with black spirals.. Arkabus is tied of his powers, and can’t touch time to fix his situation. Petromish, throws an energy ball grazing Chris’s arm as he falls and begins to bleed. The blood making a puddle, making Chris no longer invisible. “DAD,,, leave with him” chris yells as he orbs out. Chris begins to move around,, trying to hold the blood, so that he can be undetectable. Losing more and more consciousness at the minutes go on.

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Very well done! I like the two of them working together--FINALLY--and actually acting like father and son---Chris even calling him Dad! That must've been what helped zilch Leo out of his grief for the time being.

Very good fight scene, but now I'm dreadfully afraid that Chris is dying, too. If he does, if only Leo is left, I don't think he's be able to take it--*he'd* go nuts, since only Chris is keeping him sane!!

This is *so* very good, CCrazed!! I love it!! Please update soon!!!

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Thank you soo much!!! I think the end is near!! I'm thinking tommorrow will be the end of the 1st story,, and then I'll start the 2nd story in my line!!

So keeeping watching,, it's going to end soon!! and I'm looving how I did it!!!!!

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wow!!! another great update from the great CharmedCrazed!!! wow! i loved the fact that Chris had the guts to shout at Leo, telling him to stop this "incessant crying" and oh, i cannot wait for your second story! im so excited!!

PS great potion ideas and fight scene

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Leo not know that Chris was hit by an energy balls, orbs out with Arkabus and his cage in tact, and orbs the manor’s attic where Gideon is waiting for him. Gideon: “Nice Souvenir! As he chuckles at the caged Arkabus. “Leo I’ve gotten the Elders to take meeting against the Tribunal and they’ve declared the Elders were being blackmailed and the Tribunal members have been relieved of there duties, the demons on the tribunal were also relieved and declared of new members, but the Elders and Demons agree,, the mess is still to us to fix. They can’t make a demon, especially one who has the power of the Source and Arkabus and behind the threats to fix this!” Leo: “Well,,,, good,,, at least the girls will be safe once we get this fixed.” Gideon: “How do you expect to fix this without the power of three!” Leo: “Chris has got enough brains and powers to fix this! He has his mother and me in him” Gideon rolls his eyes at Leo’s optimism.

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Chris is now bleeding very heavily,,, trying and trying to stop the blood from dripping off himself.. Hundreds of demons begin to come into the Cavern now crowding around their new source to protect him. Chris trying very hard to keep himself awake and keep conscious as energy balls keep grazing near the droplets of blood he was leaving… Chris chants a spell he had to think up quickly..:

I call upon the Sister Three,
My aunts my mother please help me
This Source whose darkness is wise
Do as you may bring him to demise.

A cold wind is felt throughout the dark cavern. White lights are rushing through the air. Chris is trying everything he can to stay alert and to keep moving so the energy balls don’t hit him again. The charmed ones appear in a ghostly and extremely faded form. A power of four all holding hands. Looking right at Chris. Chris sees his mother “Mom…..” a faint whispers derives from his lips! No words are spoken, both then all bow there head in unison, as a white force rolls onto Petromish. And the once protection the demons were giving Petromish changes just as quickly he is now the enemy they were hunting. Petromish becomes the target of so many different demon tactics and fireballs, trying to defend himself by throwing energy balls and cross chants, and his gathered evil powers to protect himself. The 4 girls, of whom were Piper, Paige, Prue and Phoebe, orbed the unconscious Chris to the manor, as we see Petromish blowing up in a earth quaking black ring of fire,, as he is vanquished by his own demon forces.


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Chris is orbed in with white and golden and iridescent orbs on the ground in front of Leo and Gideon. Leo sees the unconscious Chris and begins to heal him. Chris comes too.. “MOM!!!” Leo looked at Chris “What happened.” Chris sits up from the hard wood floor attic. My mother and aunts all saved me.. I said a spell and they came to me. The other demons blew up the Source. Leo smiled and Gideon was shocked. “The power of three still exists. The tribunal thought they could get rid of their powers, but they weren’t even that strong.” Smiling at their failed attempt. Chris still a little woozy “You mean the power of four.” Smiling. Leo: “Yes, the power of four. Whom we need to save!” Arkabus over in the corner is grimacing as the sheer good in the air. “You make my skin crawl.. Spare me you disgusting witches. Let me out now or your sealing your fate!” Chris jumps up. “One witch, two Elders, Now Shut up!” Throwing a bead of flask at the crystal cage, shocking Arkabus and his over dramatic ego down. The electric shocks knock him to the ground!

Chris: “It’s this simple Arkabus, I’ll spare your life, if you reverse time and spare the charmed ones life!” Arkabus: “You are crazy!!! MAD! That is suicide!” Chris: “NO not fixing this mess you have made is suicide not to mention your perfect setup life to come in the future is already messed up!!!” winking at him! Leo walks over: “Funny you didn’t foresee this Arkabus, you know you can’t defeat the charmed ones or this family! Why even try?” Arkabus: growls with contention “You think you’re so smart witches! But the charmed ones are dead! And without me, they are no more!” Gideon rolls his eyes. “Let me guess, your doing this for the Greater Good!” Arkabus snarls: “NO you bumbling fool,, for my greatness!” Chris throws another flask into the cage, erupting more crystal shock to the demon “Yeah okay,, well your greater good is greater dead when I’m done with you. Your choice is simple,, you can be sacrificed or live! Seeing I’m banking on you’ll be wanting to live.. Try another option of defeating the sisters..Though this was a great plan.” Throwing another flask into the cage out of sheer hatred! Leo grabs Chris “Your going to kill him before he makes a decision!” Chris “And you care,, he killed Mom!!” Leo’s hatred begins to move in on him again: “True,, Have at it!” Gideon wide eyed with suspense and begins to stop them. “Back off Gideon, we’ve got this covered!” Leo scorns him and gives him a I know what I’m doing look. Chris begins to fly another flask at the cage.. Arkabus: “STOP, STOP!!” Chris: “Aww, we’ve made a decision?” freezing the flask right at the entry of the crystal cage. He unfreezes Gideon and Leo and Arkabus,, leaving the flask still frozen in time. “Cooll!!” Leo looks at the flask piece frozen in the air. “Wow Chris,, your powers are even stronger then your mother!” Arkabus quivering in the middle of the cage,, watching the piece closely. “I’ll do as you say!” Chris “good… and just so you don’t try anything funny,remember 2 elders here and they don’t fast forward or rewind without knowing!!! GOT ME!!” Arkabus agrees… Chris reverses his binding spell. Arkabus looks at Chris: “It’s done”<br>

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Within in seconds, we hear commotion downstairs and Piper yelling up for Leo to come down. Leo face illuminates with the chime of her voice and begins to walk to the door. Leo turns around “You’ve got this right?” Chris: “Sure,,go, I’ll be there in a minute.” As well does Chris. Chris restates the binding spell as you hear Arkabus protesting against this, then he is black orbed down to the underworld with a flick of his arm. Gideon looks at Chris: “You think that was smart to take a demons power away, and leave him as a mere mortal.” Chris: “Gideon, he’ll find a way to reverse it, this just gives us time to be ready for the threat!” Gideon gives Chris a pat on the back “You’re a good kid Chris,, smart very smart!” Chris: “Thanks for your help!”<br>
Chris takes off downstairs as Gideon orbs away. Chris sees his mother and gives her a huge hug!!!! “Mom,,, I don’t want you to leave me again!! Not now,, not anytime soon.” With tears in his eyes. He looks over to Paige whose has tears in her eyes. “Oh Paige,,” and hugs her. Phoebe walks up and joins in on the hug. Chris: “Phoebe… It’s soo great for you be alive!” He breaks away from the hug to see Prue still sitting in the chair. Chris: “What is going on?” Prue looks at Chris,, “the Elders brought me here not Arkabus,, so I’m here to stay… At least that’s what Leo thinks!” Leo kinda grins at Chris and shrugs. Leo: “I think the Elders, brought her back as a consolation to the terror they bestowed on them! Chris: “Wow… I guess you were right,, our future is ever changing!” And the whole family walks off to continue their life as the Charmed Ones….
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wowie!!!!!!!!!! what an absolutely fantastic fic!!! i so love this! Chris was truly brave, saving his entire family!!! definitely loved this smarter and braver version of Chris! oh my, the Power of Four? i cannot wait for the second one!