True love

[babaygirl313]

(orbing)
Hi Chris phebobe said what are you doing here! Phebobe I have to tell you something what is chris is it important yes! Should i get pagie yes you should she needs to here this to. Paige pheboe said louldy. Im here god what do you want chris needs to tell us something go ahead chris. Thanks it's about piper she is missing. Are you sure she is missing I would know because I am a whitellighter. Ok where was the last place you seen her i saw her going to P3 said pheobe. Ok so i check with the elders if they have heard something about it. And we should go to check the book of shadows.
Where am I GASP cole i new that you would have something to do with this. You are not that dumb after all said cole. When my sisters find out what you are doing you are going to be vanqusihed agian. That won't work because they still think that i am still missing. And that will not be used full because i will stil find my way out. What is your plan any way my plan is to use you as bait. WHAT!!! yeap because you are going to tell pheboe that i am not evil anymore. And if you do not do it you will die. I should have known that this is another plan to get pheboe back piper said. Yeah because i know that me and pheboe are meant to be together i am not going to give up unitl i get her back.
Paige did you find any thing in the book of shadows pheboe said. Well i have a clue that my lead to her what is it phebobe said it's cole. Did you find anything to tell you that it's cole no but i kind of knew because i had a vision seeing cole and piper was tied up. Ok i am going to trust you.
To be contunied

[charminggrl]

this is a pretty good story babygirl313 but with the way ur writhing it's kinda hard to rell who is talking so mabye u should use quotation marks just to make it a little more easier to read but great story line continue soon

[babaygirl313]

that's good advice so did you write one of your own

[charminggrl]

no i dont have much writing talent leave that to the real writers just some advice my english teacher gave me once

[babaygirl313]

So what did you find out said, Where's chris well it kind of hard to belive but chris maybe behind this plan. Wait how did you know about this said pheboe. All of the elders are talking about it so tell me what did you find out right NOW said leo. You do not have to yell at us well i am sorry i am just worried about her. This maybe my faught. How can it be your faught and cole is behind this i think said paige. Paige I tought that you knew that he was behind this, said phebobe. Where is leo i think that he went to the elders and tell hime what he now. When do you think he went i think he went while you was arguing with me i am sorry
paige i am nerves about this hole situation. (walking up the stairs) who is it said pagie.
It's me said piper i am so worried about you so where have you
been missy said paige. I just went for a walk and while i was out
i ran into cole. What did he say to you we talked for a while what was you talking about said pheboe. We just talked about you about me said pheboe? I think that he is really good now because when i look into his eyes i see good instead of evil. Piper are you nuts we been down this road before and i just can't go it agian, said pheboe. Just trust me will your sister ever lie to you said piper. Good so just think about for a while. Back in the underworld cole was watching the whole thing in a crystal ball
GOOD my plan is going well as i except it to go. But is can be much better. you said cole. I'm back said seer.

[charminggrl]

it's getting good but still knida difficult to read sorry

[prue]

very hard to read... you should try using the script style... for example, from the very beginning of your story....

Phoebe: Hi Chris. What are you doing here?

Chris: Phoebe, I have something to tell you.

or you could try something like this:

"Hi Chris," Phoebe said. "What are you doing here?"

"I have something to tell you," Chris said.

just some helpful ideas.

[mangogirl]

phoebe has got the TOPS for cole she will never forget him. ::)even though she never found out about piper and him ,even when she thout she heard him when he was cwoting shack spear but the again she just had to marry coop. she knew that it wasnt coles falt that he became the source of all evil, i mean he didnt tell her beacuse he didnt want to scare her and he was under the old soures blood , mind and POWER. so it wasnt his falt

[mangogirl]

phoebe has got the TOPS for cole she will never forget him. ::)even though she never found out about piper and him ,even when she thought she heard him when he was cwoting shack spear but the again she just had to marry coop. she knew that it wasnt coles falt that he became the source of all evil, i mean he didnt tell her beacuse he didnt want to scare her and he was under the old soures blood , mind and POWER. so it wasnt his falt

[mangogirl]

phoebe has got the TOPS for cole she will never forget him. ::)even though she never found out about piper and him ,even when she thought she heard him when he was cwoting shack spear but the again she just HAD to marry coop. she knew that it wasnt coles falt that he became the source of all evil, i mean he didnt tell her beacuse he didnt want to scare her and he was under the old soures blood , mind and POWER. so it wasnt his falt

[x0charmedfanx0]

I can't help but see that Piper and Dan had more love than Piper and Leo and that Phoebe had more love with Cole thatn Phoebe and Coop. Coop didn't have many episodes to be in, so we didn't get to know him as well. Leo is bearly ever there and he is kind of a wimp. Althought Dan didn't accept Piper being a witch, if he had more time, he probably would have. Yes, Cole had too much evil behind him, but if Phoebe just helped more and have it time, they would both be happy, because we all know that Cole would do anything for Phoebe. Comment back to x0charmedfanx0
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[x0charmedfanx0]

OMG! Everytime I see Andi, Cole, and Dan, I automatically start crying. They were SO the perfect matches and we all saw that! They are adorable and kind and I just can't help it! They were the best!