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Post by ~:*Destiny*:~ on Feb 24, 2008 16:21:10 GMT -5
CHAPTER 1: Jobs During Season 2
PHOEBE: Oh my gosh! Prue! PRUE: WHAT NOW PHEEBS!? PHOEBE: I may want to go back to colege PRUE: really! you!? PHOEBE: yeah PIPER: interesting PHOEBE: but I need to think about it give me a week I want to try out the work life style for a month because next month applications are due PIPER: what kind of jobs would you pick? PHOEBE: I don't know
The next day........... At McDonald's............
PHOEBE: Ugh........ how do you work this cash register? MANAGER: like this
He clicks tons of buttons.
MANAGER: GET IT RIGHT NEXT TIME! JOHN: he's harsh! PHOEBE: I KNOW! what's your name? JOHN: John Mayors PHOEBE: Phoebe Halliwell JOHN: nice to meet you PHOEBE: you too JOHN: are you free tonight? PHOEBE: yeah I think JOHN: well you want to go out to a club PHOEBE: what kind of club? P3? JOHN: I was thinking of something else but.... PHOEBE: where? At an annoymous strip club.....
PHOEBE: A STRIP CLUB HUH? JOHN: yeah I spend my free time here PHOEBE: well..... John leads Phoebe to a men's table.
JOHN: This is my girl her name is Phoebe PHOEBE: hi! SAM: hey sexy lady do you dance well? GEORGE: do you work here? BRAD: No way she's too gorgous JOHN: guys PHOEBE: I'm gong to the rest room
In the rest room.......
PHOEBE: (washes face) what am I doing here? Noise: woman crying PHOEBE: hello what's wrong JUNE: there's something in the mirror? PHOEBE: what's in the mirror? JUNE: a monster PHOEBE: what?
Phoebe walks to the mirror and then gets sucked in.
TO BE CONTINUED....... CHAPTER 2: The Other Phoebe coming soon!
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Post by christycluvsp3 on Feb 24, 2008 16:39:24 GMT -5
Cool... Hope Phoebe's okay.. Is this like where they have to go to their alternate selves because of Gideon?
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Post by ~:*Destiny*:~ on Feb 24, 2008 17:41:33 GMT -5
( you'll see) (i am going to do chapter 2 today because I feel like it!)
Chapter 2: The Other Phoebe
Image: a young girl dancing on a pole in the club. We relize this girl is Phoebe.
John: you look like this girl I know her name is Phoebe Girl that looks like Phoebe: My name's not Phoebe it's Kayla John: Then have you seen a girl that looks like you? Kayla: (laughs) no but if she left I'll keep you company John: that would be nice but I've got to find her
(FLASHBACK)
Phoebe falls in the underworld.
Phoebe: (screaming) Where am I? Brad: in my hell Phoebe: what are you? Brad: a God...... a God named Brad..... Girls appear rubbing him. Brad: all these women here are like you before but I changed them and their names Phoebe: why am I cuffed? Brad walks up to her.
Brad: because your in my hell an I want you and when I kiss you You new name will be Kayla! Phoebe: no
Phoebe's strugling to not let him kiss her. Brad kisses her.
Brad: (laughs) now go Kayla and dance as my queen stripper Kayla: but of course master!
(END OF FLASHBACK)
Back at the Halliwell mansion..... The next day.......
Piper: Prue! Where's Phoebe it's the next day? Prue: maybe she slept with him Piper: possible Prue: she'll be home later
Back at the club.......
Kayla's dancing the night away.
Kayla: so John is Phoebe special to you? John: yes Kayla: I think she left you John: really I think so too I haven't heard fromher since yesterday. Kayla: yeah why don't you come to my apartment. John: sure
At the apartment.......
Kayla: I heard you like it rough so do I John: yeah I do
Kayla pushes him on the bed. She kisses him and then bites him. John: Kayla! Kayla: huh what's wrong baby? John: nothing Kayla: good
They had sex.
The morning after........
Kayla: (yawns) (wakes up) John!?
Then Brad comes.
Brad: Kayla! You little slut! Kayla: I am sorry! Brad: no sorrys Kayla: (kisses him) you are my one true love Brad: good (they make out)
They get in bed.
Kayla: I love you!
Fade out
halliwell manor.......
Piper: Phoebe's not home I'm worried Prue: it's time to worry we got to find that John guy she went out with. And, we got to call Leo Piper: no I am dating Dan now remember! Prue: c'mon this is for phoebe Piper: fine! Prue: LEO!
Leo orbs in.
Leo: what's wrong?
Then all of a sudden Brad appears and stbs Leo with an arrow.
Piper: LEO!
TO BE CONTINUED.............
Chapter 3: The Lost Life coming soon!
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Post by pipercharmedphreak on Feb 24, 2008 21:55:28 GMT -5
Can't wait for an update!
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Post by ~:*Destiny*:~ on Feb 25, 2008 17:03:16 GMT -5
( thanx 4 all the people that r reading and commenting! ;D)
Ch. 3 The Lost Life
Piper: LEO! LEO! Prue fights Brad. Then Brad disappears. Prue: sh!t! Piper: Prue Leo's disappeared! (sobbing) Prue: what!? where?
the strip club.....
June: us dancers live here sweating and dancing for perves! I hate it here right Kayla? Kayla: I don't know it's not that bad! June: duh because your the strip queen it's easy for you you get to sleep with the sexy guys! Kayla: (laughs) yeah! Brad: girls! they may be some intruders coming so if you see a guy that looks like a whitelighter than it's ok! guy that looks like Leo: Hi my name is Derek! Kayla: hi Derek! (waves at him) Derek: hi and you are? Kayla: Kayla Jones Derek: nice! (he kisses her hand) Kayla: oh so romantic Brad: ok stop it! Kayla let's go in the bedroom! Kayla: OK but I'm on top! Brad: oh yeah!
outside the manor.......
Dan: Piper! Piper: yeah Dan? she kisses him. Piper: what's up? Dan: just a romantic night tonight! Piper: (laughs) I would love to Dan but I have a family emergency! Dan: again? Piper: yeah! Dan: you owe me Piper: this time will be so much better than last time I promise! Dan: are you sure? Piper: yes I am sure! they kiss passionately. Prue: oh ugh! Piper! we got to go! bye Dan! Dan: bye Piper: bye (waves)
at McDonald's........
Prue: hey kidnapper John: what!? Prue: you kidnapped our sister Phoebe! John: what!? Piper: where's Phoebe? John: ok we went to this strip club all right? Piper: a strip club? John: yeah and then she says she's Giotto got to the rest room and then she disappeared then this chick named Kayla comes up to me and starts flirting with me then I nailed her good but to the point she looked like Phoebe Prue: ok and what's the name of this strip club again? John: Brad's Hell Ladies Prue: let's go and you your coming and taking us there! They pull John.
at Brad's Hell Ladies.......
Kayla: so your the male stripper? Derek: yeah! Kayla: your so sexy and innocent looking can I taste you? Derek: sure! Kayla kisses him. then licks him.
in the bedroom.........
Kayla throws him on the bed. Kayla rips his shirt off. and then they had sex. in another world.........
Phoebe's Essence: Leo? I am having sex with Leo!?
TO BE CONTINUED............
Ch. 4: The Unexpected Child? Coming soon........
( will post next one after reviews show up thank you for reading and replying!) ;D
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Post by pipercharmedphreak on Feb 25, 2008 19:46:10 GMT -5
Interesting. I think I would prefer the story more without as much sexual content.
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Post by ~:*Destiny*:~ on Feb 25, 2008 20:57:49 GMT -5
(thanks pipercharmedphrek for your PM's and comments! ;D) Chapter 4: The Unexpected Child? The next day..... In the bedroom......... Kayla: Leo? Derek: who's Leo? Kayla: I don't know why I just said that! Derek: ok? Kayla: good morning! She kisses him. Derek: so time for work! Kayla: yeah bye at the club....... Kayla's dancing on the pole and swinging rope. Piper: oh my gosh! Prue: what? Piper: look (points at stage) Prue: oh my........ Pheebs!!! John: that was my girl! Prue: oh what the hell Pheebs what are you doing here? Kayla: who's Pheebs? My name's Kayla! Kayla Jones! Prue: no your Phoebe Halliwell brain washed! Derek: get your hands of my woman! Piper: your woman? Leo? Kayla kisses him. Kayla: his name is Derek and mine's Kayla and we're in love Brad:WHAT!!!! Piper: what!!! Prue: what!!!! Kayla: and we want a child and a marriage and to leave this place! Brad: what!!!! Kayla: YES!!! Brad: (almost about to choke them but they disappear!) DAMNIT!!! Prue: where did they go? at vegas..... Marriage Ceromony.......... Elvis: will you marry Derek Harold? Kayla: I do! TO BE CONTINUED........... Ch. 5: Why am I the one possessed? REVIEWS GO DOWN THANKS FOR EVERYONE READING AND REVIEWING YOU WILL GET CHARMED POINT 2!!!!
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Post by Prue's Empath on Feb 25, 2008 22:33:39 GMT -5
LOVE IT!!!!
but your kinda up straight when you right it i got a little boerd every now and then but other thne that i like the story line!!
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Post by ~:*Destiny*:~ on Feb 26, 2008 19:10:55 GMT -5
(thanks! to all that is reading and commenting!!!! ;D ) Chapter 5: Why am I the One Possessed? at club............ Prue: what are we going to do? Piper: no idea! Our sister is missing and so is my ex! Prue: and in love! Piper: I hate seeing them together! Prue: so do I! Piper: sorry but....... Prue: Brad!!! Brad: I lost my control I don't know how! Prue: (sees a floating esscence) WHAT IS THAT!!! then Phoebe pops out of no where! Phoebe: ME!!! stuck in HELL!!!! what took yawl so long and you Brad you almost killed me and put some girl named Kayla in my body!!!!! Brad: well..... she used to work here before she died she was my one true love and then I got into magic, vodoo, whatever I could get my hands on! then I was really powerful and then I saw you you looked just like her so I decided to bring her back! My mistake she's sleeping with other men! Phoebe: in my body!!!! I am a fricken ghost right now!!!! she could give me STD's! Why am I the one that always get's possesed!? Piper: don't worry Leo dosen't have STD's! Phoebe: what does she mean? Brad: well...I needed a male stripper so..... Prue: what he's trying to say is you are in love with Leo but is actually some guy name Derek and yawl slept together and then yawl disappeared! Piper: Phoebe: don't worry! I will find them! Phoebe all of a sudden has a preminition! She sees Kayla and Derek on their hunnymoon! Phoebe: they are in Vegas on their hunnymoon! Piper: HUNNYMOON!!!! at vegas in hotel room........... Kayla: Oh derek I have never been so in love! Derek: me too! They make out on sofa. Kayla: time for a child! then the team comes in....... Phoebe: OVER MY GHOSTLY BODY!!!! then Brad stabs Kayla and Derek. Kayla and Derek falls to the floor. Phoebe: NO!!!! TO BE CONTINUED........... COMING SOON CHAPTER 6: THE DEAD BODIES!? Reviews go here if you read and comment (reply) I will give you a Charmed point! So thanks for reading!!! ;D
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Post by ~.:Alysha:.~ on Feb 27, 2008 18:36:57 GMT -5
Yeah the story is alright, but i dont think the characters really sound like the Real charmed ones like iv never heard them say yawl but yeah thats just my thoughts but, its better than what i could write lol..An interesting story line though
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Post by ~B@MeLiSsA30@B~ on Feb 27, 2008 21:08:40 GMT -5
It's quite interesting. I agree with the person above. It doesn't sound like the sisters, but other than that, it's really good.
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Post by ~:*Destiny*:~ on Feb 28, 2008 19:29:06 GMT -5
(Thank you for reading everybody! ;D Please continue commenting) Chapter 6: The dead bodies?!! Phoebe: NO! Prue kicks down Brad. Piper checks Leo's pulse. Piper: their still alive Phoebe: good Prue: ok... Brad now tell me how to put Phoebe's and Leo's essence back! Phoebe: I didn't see Leo's Brad: I will never tell you Piper: Oh really Prue: (throws lamp using her mind at Brad) Piper: don't mess with us ok? Prue: yeah Phoebe: Preminition Phoebe sees her and Brad in the hospetal dead) Phoebe: Oh no Piper: what did you see *as she freezes time* Phoebe: me and him dieing Piper: * kicks him in the face 3 times* *unfreees* tell us! Brad: no then all of a sudden Leo's essence goes in Derek's body and Derek's essence leaves Leo: Hey you guys! Piper: LEO! *runs up to him and hug him* then Phoebe's essence drifts away with Brad
TO BE CONTINUED.......... Ch. 7 The Kidnapping
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Post by ~B@MeLiSsA30@B~ on Mar 8, 2008 17:09:05 GMT -5
Wow, thats crazy. really good.
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Post by ~:*Destiny*:~ on Mar 8, 2008 19:50:19 GMT -5
thank you 4 comments! :* to all who loves it and comments!
Ch. 7: The Kidnapping
Phoebe: Get off of me you b*stard! Brad: (licks neck) you arent an essence anymore I got rid of Kayla! Your in your body now! Now bow down to me! Phoebe: yes master! (bows down) Brad: Good! ---------------------------------------------------------- Prue: where's Phoebe? Leo: in the club! I sense her there! Piper: let's go! ----------------------------------------------------------- Brad makes out with Phoebe. Brad: now recite this spell it will rid you and your sisters of yawls power! Phoebe: yes master! Piper: not just yet! ----------------------------------------------------------
To Be Continued.......
Ch. 8 Give Me Your Powers! Coming Soon!
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Post by ~B@MeLiSsA30@B~ on Mar 12, 2008 17:07:38 GMT -5
Oh wow wow wow. Keep updating. ;D ;D ;D
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Post by ~:*Destiny*:~ on Mar 14, 2008 17:22:56 GMT -5
(thanx 4 reading and commenting!! ;D)
Chapter 8: Gimme Your Powers!
Brad: Come on Phoebe! You know you love me! Prue: NO YOU DON'T PHEEBS!!!! Piper: Phoebe don't you dare! Phoebe: From whence they came, return them now Vanish the words Banish our powers Prue: NO!!!!!! Piper: (punches Brad) Phoebe we gotta get out of here! Phoebe: no I love Bradikens! (licks lips) Piper tries to freeze time but it dosen't work. Prue tries to move a vase wit her mind but it dosen't work. Prue: She vanished our powers! Brad: yes and now I have them Witches! Brad leaves with Phoebe. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Setting Car. Brad's driving.
Brad: Thanks baby! Brad kisses her. Brad: man are those boobs of yours real? Phoebe: sure 100% babe! They make out. Brad: I can't wait to have sex with you later cause I haven't had you I've had let's see Kayla but I ain't ever had you! Phoebe: ohhh baby! They french kiss. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Prue: what are we suppose to do? Leo: Save Phoebe again Piper: Aren't you guys married? Leo: Derek and Kayla is! Prue: confused here! Leo: Look we better go save Phoebe! ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Setting Brad's apartment.
Phoebe and Brad have sex. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------
TO BE CONTINUED IN CHAPTER 9: UNEXPECTED............
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Post by ~B@MeLiSsA30@B~ on Mar 16, 2008 18:15:33 GMT -5
I can't believe Phoebe gave up there powers. That's crazy.
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Post by ~:*Destiny*:~ on Mar 18, 2008 18:51:25 GMT -5
(thanks to all who read and comment! ;D)
Chapter 9: Unexpected
Setting Brad's apartment.
Brad: Good morning Phoebe! Phoebe? Phoebe walking out of the bathroom. Phoebe: Good morning honey! Phoebe french kisses him. Brad: mmmmmm.......... Phoebe: (laughs) Honey, I think this is too early but...... Brad: but what babe? Phoebe: I'm pregnent! Brad: are you serious!? Phoebe: yeah hun! Brad: Is it my baby or Derek's? Phoebe: I'm sure it's yours hunny! Brad: Oh God! If it's that Derek's child I will be p*ssed! Phoebe: Sweetie? Brad punches Phoebe. Brad: You whore! Phoebe: Brad!? (starts to cry) Brad: I'm sorry hunny! Phoebe: NO!!! Phoebe runs out of the apartment. Brad: No Phoebe come back! -----------------------------------------------------------------------------------
At the Halliwell Manor....................
Prue: We have no powers what are we suppose to do? Piper: Well Leo's talking to the Elders so hold your horses! Prue: I can't Piper! Phoebe got rid of our powers and is hyponotized! We are vonerable! Then Dan knocks at the door. Piper: hold on a sec! -----------------------------------------------------------------------------------
At the door........................
Dan: Piper! Your sister is out at my house! Going crazy! Piper: are you serious? Dan: yes! Piper: PRUE!!! Prue: yes Piper? Piper: It's Pheebs! -----------------------------------------------------------------------------------
TO BE CONTINUED............ IN CHAPTER 10: Getting Phoebe Sane!
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Post by ~B@MeLiSsA30@B~ on Mar 22, 2008 2:06:38 GMT -5
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Post by ~:*Destiny*:~ on Mar 22, 2008 20:10:19 GMT -5
(thanks for the comment! ;D)
Chapter 10: Getting Phoebe Sane!
Setting Dan's House.
Piper: Phoebe!? Phoebe: Piper! Brad was about to kill me! Prue: Are you ok? Phoebe: yes! But, I sorta got some news! Prue: what kind of news!? Phoebe: I'm pregnent! Prue: Are you serious!? Piper: Is Brad the father or Leo!? Phoebe: I don't know! Piper: LEO!! LEO!! Leo: yes!? Piper: your girl friend is pregnent! Phoebe: he's not my boy friend! Leo: she's not my..... Piper: you knocked her up once...... Prue: let's not argue! Leo: It could be Brad's! Piper: can you get rid of her pregnancy! Leo: That would be a hard core spell! Prue: If it's Brad's we kill it if it's Leo's we don't! -----------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Setting Halliwell Manor.
Phoebe: Ok when will this spell wear off I feel qeezy Piper: one second...... Prue: It's...... Leo: who's!? Prue: yours! Leo: what!? Prue: just kidding it's Brad's his demon child! Leo: God Prue! You freaked me out! Prue: I know! Phoebe: I better tell Bradikens! Brad: I'm here baby! Phoebe: Bradikins! Brad escapes with Phoebe. Piper: No powers, no Phoebe, no hope, what are we suppose to do now!? -----------------------------------------------------------------------------------
TO BE CONTINUED IN CHAPTER 11: The Birth or Death?
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