Piper Halliwell
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Post by Piper Halliwell on Mar 3, 2006 19:40:56 GMT -5
Im sry I posted so late, had other things on my hand. Anyways, you did a GREAT job writing this story, it felt so real and I could imagine wats going on in my head while reading each sentence. So, *[Soul of THE EMPATH]* you are a great writer and you should write more stories for us to read and enjoy.  |
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thekiwicharmed
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Since Charmed it's been Veronica Mars!
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Post by thekiwicharmed on Mar 3, 2006 23:45:31 GMT -5
At first glace, i skimmed act one. But by act two I was reading it down to a T. This is the first Charmed fan fiction i've read all the way through in a very, very long time and it's making me nervous that the actual finale won't live up to what your story is trying to show. The fact that you are explaining the girls whole destinies is quite estatic really and I hope you explore the many ways and reasons why things haven't gone their way too much. Also, don't go too overboard with the Prue enterance or it will consume the episode. Some things were over the top. Like Patty saying Grams came crying to her. Grams doesn't cry  . Also the Elise Phoebe scene was rushed. Other then that I really enjoyed it and will read any other episodes of this you put out. ~Kiwi. |
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~Empath~
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One of my favorite powers...Astral Projection! GO PRUE!!!
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Post by ~Empath~ on Mar 4, 2006 13:55:24 GMT -5
At first glace, i skimmed act one. But by act two I was reading it down to a T. This is the first Charmed fan fiction i've read all the way through in a very, very long time and it's making me nervous that the actual finale won't live up to what your story is trying to show. The fact that you are explaining the girls whole destinies is quite estatic really and I hope you explore the many ways and reasons why things haven't gone their way too much. Also, don't go too overboard with the Prue enterance or it will consume the episode. Some things were over the top. Like Patty saying Grams came crying to her. Grams doesn't cry . Also the Elise Phoebe scene was rushed. Other then that I really enjoyed it and will read any other episodes of this you put out. ~Kiwi. Thaks Kiwi for looking at my story as a Charmed Episode and crtiquing it as a Charmed episode. And I did think about the who Grams not crying thing and I wanted to switch in Patty and Grams Lines but it was too late, to many pople had read the story already so I decided to leave it as it. The Phoebe/Elise scene, I tried to go with as much as I was give this season. We've only see Elise once this season and Phoebe has barely been at her job, plus I was approaching this as a real script so time limitations and trying to fit in the major plot was a real issue. Also, as for the Prue entrance (I don't know if you were a big fan of Prue) but read what I have so far in Part II. Well once again, thank you for critically looking at my story and critiquing it as any other Charmed Episode.... One Thankful Empath |
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Post by Clare on Mar 19, 2006 11:21:06 GMT -5
Just read all of your fanfic Empath and i absolutely LOVED it!! ;D I thought it was really funny when Phoebe said love you to Elise on the Phone, and when Paige says PhoeMe, PhoeMe, PhoeMe - that was funny too!! I think its great how each sister goes to someone to say goodbye and how Phoebe finaly tells elise the truth!! The talk between piper and her dad is so emotional and it is great when Chris finally uses his magic to send the crayons to wyatt! aww how cute! And i thought the part where 3 big bads were brought back was so cool and it was a really good shock when Asmodeus absorbs them!  PHOEBE GETS HER POWERS BACK ;D Loved it how Chris and Wyatt kill seleth - how cute! lol And Prue came back - that was really good how she entered into the story. Truly great writing and i even thought it was a real episode at some points it was that well written!!  lol |
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~Empath~
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One of my favorite powers...Astral Projection! GO PRUE!!!
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Post by ~Empath~ on Mar 20, 2006 8:04:14 GMT -5
Just read all of your fanfic Empath and i absolutely LOVED it!! ;D I thought it was really funny when Phoebe said love you to Elise on the Phone, and when Paige says PhoeMe, PhoeMe, PhoeMe - that was funny too!! I think its great how each sister goes to someone to say goodbye and how Phoebe finaly tells elise the truth!! The talk between piper and her dad is so emotional and it is great when Chris finally uses his magic to send the crayons to wyatt! aww how cute! And i thought the part where 3 big bads were brought back was so cool and it was a really good shock when Asmodeus absorbs them! PHOEBE GETS HER POWERS BACK ;D Loved it how Chris and Wyatt kill seleth - how cute! lol And Prue came back - that was really good how she entered into the story. Truly great writing and i even thought it was a real episode at some points it was that well written!! lol Thank You Clare and for everyone else that posted!!!! My next fan-fiction will be Charmed: The Next Generation so stay tuned!!! |
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Post by Astral Echo on Mar 20, 2006 16:25:22 GMT -5
I love it, it's amazing and please PM me when the second part starts.
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. Also the Elise Phoebe scene was rushed.
lol
