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Post by Piper Halliwell on Oct 28, 2008 9:58:41 GMT -5
[Ok well this is my first fanfic and it is basically just making it up as i go along. Here is the cast list and the first chapter, if i get any interest i will go on. ]Cast List Holly Marie Combs As Piper Halliwell Brian Krause As Leo Wyatt Wes Ramsey As Wyatt Halliwell Drew Fuller As Chris Halliwell Willa Holland As Melinda Halliwell
Victor Webster As Coop Cupid Jennifer Love Hewitt As Prudence Halliwell Jessica Stroup As Kira Halliwell Michelle Trachtenberg As Penelope Halliwell
Rose Mcgowan As Paige Matthews Ivan Sergei As Henry Mitchell Penn Badgley As Henry Jr. Matthews Rachel Bilson As Helen Matthews Rachel Bilson As Patricia Matthews Emma Watson As Hope Matthews
Powers ListPiper Halliwell - Molecular Combustion & Temporal Statis Leo Wyatt - Whitelighter Powers Wyatt Halliwell - Whitelighter Powers, Telekinetic Orbing, Conjuring & Force Field Chris Halliwell - Telekinesis & Whitelighter Powers Melinda Halliwell - Molecular Inhibition, Telepathy Coop Cupid - Cupid Powers Prudence Halliwell - Hearting, Electro-mental Ignition & *Future Power* Kira Halliwell - Hearting, Empathy & *Future Power* Penelope Halliwell - Hearting, Molecular Combustion, Deflection & *Future Power* Paige Matthews - Whitelighter Powers & Telekinetic Orbing Henry Mitchell - None Henry Jr. Matthews - Orbing & Glamouring Helen Matthews - Telekinetic Orbing & Orbing Patricia Matthews - Glamouring & Telekinetic Orbing Hope Matthews - Orbing, Healing & Sensing
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Post by Piper Halliwell on Oct 28, 2008 10:46:06 GMT -5
Part One
"Chris, Wyatt come on we are going to be late, we can't keep them waiting for us, they have been through enough" Piper shouted up the stairs. "Mom it's no use, Wyatt is still in the bathroom, you know how long he takes" Melinda mumbled sarcastically as she sat down on the couch. Piper didn't bother to say something to her daughter and kept looking up the stairs. Suddenly Wyatt and Chris came walking down the stairs, wearing their tuxedos bought especially for that day. A tear ran down Piper's face, she really didn't want to do this again, Piper didn't know if her heart could take it. "Piper, we, uh need to go, i just spoke to Prue, everybody is there" Leo told Piper as he walked from the kitchen into the living room. "Oh ok then lets go" Piper answered.
The car ride to the Church was quiet, Piper sat resting her head on the window, Leo drove with hardly any expression on his face, and their children sat looking at one another not knowing what they should say or do once they arrived. Finally they arrived, the journey only took ten minutes but to Piper and her family it seemed like it took hours. Melinda looked out of the window and noticed her cousin Penelope standing there, Melinda waved but Penny didn't return it. It was like she was in a trance or something. Suddenly the car stopped. Stillness fell upon the car for a couple of minutes until Wyatt opened his door. The rest of the doors quickly followed suit. "Melinda will you go and see if Penny is ok, she doesn't look too good" Leo said to his daughter who just nodded and began to walk over to her cousin. Meanwhile Piper, Leo, Chris and Wyatt walked into the Church.
"Penny are you ok?" Melinda asked folding her arms because of the cold. "Yea, i'm fine. Just can't seem to bring myself to go in there at the moment" Penny answered and looked up. The wind howled and Penny smiled slightly, could she count that as a sign? Penny wasn't sure. "Come on Penn We'll go in together" Melinda said linking her arm with Penny's. Penny didn't say anything she just walked in leaning on her cousins shoulder slightly.
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Post by ~*Alicia*~ on Oct 28, 2008 12:09:43 GMT -5
So far I like it. For being your first fic it is good. I've seen worse, trust me. Only thing, I may be just paranoid or getting the wrong idea but I think Melinda sounds a little bit cold. Her first comment about Wyatt and the bathroom seemed to be quite out of frame to me, maybe she was trying to light up the mood but I still think (that to me) it sounds out of frame. But I like it, it is good Nice work, G.
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Post by Piper Halliwell on Oct 28, 2008 12:10:51 GMT -5
No i totally get it but in my head i see Melinda as a little cold so i made her that way. It is her way of trying to deal with the persons death.
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Post by ~*Alicia*~ on Oct 28, 2008 12:20:11 GMT -5
Oh, okay. I get the point now, her way of dealing with people's deaths is to be cold... nice.
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Post by Piper Halliwell on Oct 28, 2008 12:27:13 GMT -5
I hope it is a good idea
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Post by jate88 on Oct 28, 2008 20:46:28 GMT -5
Woah whole bunches of popular culture up there The only thing I like about pop culture is staring out the pretty girls but good story none the less.
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Post by Cara Halliwell on Oct 28, 2008 21:15:52 GMT -5
i love it! especially since i am a part of the rp. if you need help, let me know!
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Post by Piper Halliwell on Oct 29, 2008 16:57:06 GMT -5
Thanks Cara but it is all mine really nothing is going to be taken from your RPing i want this to be all me.
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Post by ~Andrew~ on Oct 29, 2008 17:38:33 GMT -5
great so far. i'm not sure when this is taking place, uh how many years after the finale? but none the less awesome beginning. continue soon. *bless
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Post by Piper Halliwell on Oct 29, 2008 17:48:53 GMT -5
I haven't really decided though, its around 20-25 years after
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Post by Piper Halliwell on Oct 29, 2008 19:53:23 GMT -5
Part 2“That which belongs to fellowship and love.” The Priestess said. “That which belongs to the circle. Remains with us. The wheel turns. As life is a day, so our sister has passed into night. Nothing is final, and we who remain behind know that one day, we will once again share the bread and wine with our sister. O' blessed spirit, we bid you farewell, for you await a new destiny.” Upon her finishing she untied the silver cord and gently laid it into a chalice. She then blew out the candles and looked around carefully studying the guest’s faces. Penny sat on one of the white chairs, her eyes glued to the coffin. More specifically her mother’s engraved name on the sheet of gold colored metal. “I’m sorry” she whispered closing her eyes and shaking her head slightly. *Flashback*
“PENNY” Phoebe shouted and pushed her daughter out of the path of a fireball that had just been thrown at her. The demon smirked and threw another. Phoebe managed to dodge it but looked worried, she kept her eyes on Penny making sure she was ok.
Penny stood still against the staircase, she could hardly see her mother through the door but suddenly she heard a scream come from the room. Still she did not move, Penny was blocking out everything coming from the room but she didn’t know why. Then she came out of her own world and began breathing heavily. “MOM” she shouted running into the living room.
Phoebe lay on the carpet, a fireball had hit her in the chest, in the heart. She died on the impact so was not breathing.
Penny dropped to her knees and held her mother’s hand. “Mom wake up, come on mom, just wake up” she managed to get out but felt like she couldn’t breathe . “Mom…..Mom…..Mommy”……
*End Flashback* As Penny came out of her flashback her sister Kira was looking at her. Kira placed her hand on Penny’s shoulder “Are you ok?” . “Yea, I’m fine” Penny gave the same answer she had given Melinda just minutes ago, she didn’t want to worry her sisters but Penny also didn’t want to tell them that Phoebes death was her fault.
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Post by jate88 on Oct 29, 2008 21:10:45 GMT -5
Penny sure does have a lot to worry about. Hopefully the truth will come out and she won't have to worry anymore though.
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Post by ~Andrew~ on Oct 29, 2008 21:15:43 GMT -5
aww poor penny
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Post by Esmeralda on Oct 29, 2008 22:49:20 GMT -5
Beautifully done! Like the others, I feel so bad for Penny; what a horrible thing to try to live with! Hopefully someone will be able to help her out.
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Post by Piper Halliwell on Oct 30, 2008 7:08:52 GMT -5
Thank you so much everyone. It is so nice that i have made you feel for Penny, thats what i was going for. As for it coming out and someone helping her. You will just have to find out by reading.
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Post by ~*Alicia*~ on Oct 30, 2008 13:52:44 GMT -5
I love it, Gerogia! Poor Penny, I am dying to see what will happen.
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Post by Piper Halliwell on Oct 30, 2008 18:12:29 GMT -5
Part 3The sun is beginning to set. Piper was in the kitchen at Phoebe’s house. Piper was in the middle of cooking something, it was the only thing that kept her mind off of everything. Paige suddenly walked in, “Piper, the last of the guests have gone. I was thinking we could stay here tonight, seeing as Coop has not been here since..well you know when. I am actually worried about him”. Piper turned from the oven to look at Paige. “Yea I think that’s wise, I don’t really want the girls alone tonight. Don’t even remind me about Coop, he has girls here and he knows about Phoebe but he just leaves for no reason. I don’t understand how he could do it”. Paige looked at Piper nodding her head but was really thinking about something else. Paige wasn’t sure if she should have even mentioned it but did anyway. “Piper, what do you think is going to happen to us?”. “What do you mean?” Piper said looking confused. “Well whats going to happen to the power of three, I mean there is not three of us anymore” Paige answered. “Uh Paige I wasn’t actually thinking about that yet, I mean Phoebe hasn’t been gone that long. But if I had to answer I would say that we would loose the power, I will get Leo to ask the elders. But not now, we can’t be thinking about that yet” Piper explained to Paige and turned back to the oven to continue her cooking. “Uh well ok then” Paige said quietly as she walked back into the living room. (This part is short i know but i felt it was important to add, the next part may be up today if i can write)
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Post by Piper Halliwell on Oct 30, 2008 19:15:37 GMT -5
No ;D
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Post by jate88 on Oct 30, 2008 20:27:02 GMT -5
Melinda deals with people dying by growing cold towards people. Penny has to put up with the pain of it being her fault that her mom died or at least she thinks it's her fault and Paige wasn't sure if she should ask the question or not. ;D
You know something if Penny doesn't deal with this problem the right way she can always deal with it the way Melinda deals with loved ones dying.
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