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Post by lindsaywinchester on Jan 5, 2009 16:05:29 GMT -5
I'm sorry if my English is not so good, I'm only 13 years old, and this is my first topic. sorry
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CHAPTER ONE : THE FIRST SOUND
''Leo, what is that sound?'' Piper is sitting in her bed trying to wake Leo up. ''Leo?'' Piper can't wake Leo up and desides to go alone. She walks to the door and opens it. BONK, BONK, BONK. That's the sound again. Piper goes to Phoebe's bedroom to see if she's the one that makes that sound. Phoebe is in her bed. She's fast asleep. Maybe it is Paige... Paige's door is open. She's not in her room. ''Paige?'' Piper asks to nothing. ''Yes..'' The voice behing Piper is formiliar, but she's so scared that she is trying to freeze the thing. But the thing takes her hand. ''Chill, it's just me.'' It's Paige. ''My god Paige, you scared me.'' Piper is trying to take her breath. ''Sorry, but what ware you doing?" Asks Paige curious. "I heard a sound and I was looking where it came from.'' Piper explains. ''You meen...'' BONK, BONK, BONK. ''...That.'' Paige finishes her sentence. ''Yes, did you here it to?'' ''Yes, and I think it comes from the attic.'' ''I think so, yes.'' Piper agrees.
Together they go to the attic. Paige tries to open the door quit, but it is so old that it whistels. She storms into the room. The person That makes the sound has black hair and is looking in The Book Of Shadows. But before Paige can do anything, the person orbs away. Piper storms in. ''Who or what was it?'' she asks. ''It was a whitelighter, and it was good because it was lookin in The Book Of Shadows...
I'm going to bed now, but tomorrow I'm going to begin on Chapter 2. Thanks for reading!
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Post by ~B@MeLiSsA30@B~ on Jan 6, 2009 1:01:05 GMT -5
I really like the beginning here. Made me curious to know what that sound was, and now I'm curious to know who the Whitelighter is that was looking at the Book of Shadows. I can't wait for your update.  |
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Post by lindsaywinchester on Jan 6, 2009 12:57:44 GMT -5
CHAPTER 2: THE WHITELIGHTER RETURNS
''Piper? Are you awake?'' Phoebe's voice is hoarse. She's in her morning clothes. ''Now I am.'' Pipers is grumpy. ''I'm going to dress up now.'' Phoebe walks to the stairs. She walks downstairs. ''Paige, do you know why Piper is so grumpy?'' ''I think so, yesterday a noise in the attic waked her up. I heard it to and we ware on the attic when I saw a whitelighter with black hair. He or she was looking in The Book Of Shadows, so it has to be good.''Paige explains. ''Yes, but it will not be the first time that a demon tricked The Book.'' Phoebe has a point, for example: Zankou did trick The Book. ''But I didn't feel like a bad presence, so I think it was good.'' ''Okay, then I think so to.'' '' Hi...'' Piper is walking to the coffee-machine.
Leo comes in. ''Hey, good morning. An Elder just orbed in, and he said that there was a whitelighter in The Manor. She was looking in The Book Of Shadows! Is that true?'' Leo asks. ''Yes, it is. Paige and Piper discovered her because she made that much noise. But we didn't know that it was a woman. Only that she is good, and she has black hair.'' Phoebe saids. ''Okay, but they decided to let her come back here to apologize because she scared you.'' Leo saids. ''And she made Piper grumpy.'' Paige laughs.
The woman with the black hair orbs in. She has grey eyes and her outfit is all black. ''Hi, I'm Susy. I'm sorry that I waked some of you. I had to look something up, but I didn't had the right to do that alone. I know.'' Susy apologizes. ''I'm new.'' ''Okay, the next time you can come in the afternoon. We don't mind.'' Paige saids. ''Okay, thanks.'' ''But what was the sound?'' Piper asks curious. ''Oh, um, I can't say that. I'm not aloud to. I have to go now.'' And Susy is gone.
Thanx Melissa!
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Post by ~B@MeLiSsA30@B~ on Jan 6, 2009 16:54:32 GMT -5
your very welcome. So, its a girl named Susy. I wonder what kind of information she is wanting, and why she can't share it with the girls. It was nice of her to apologize though. Good job! This is good again!!!! |
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Post by lindsaywinchester on Jan 7, 2009 11:23:34 GMT -5
CHAPTER THREE :SUSY'S REAL IDENTITY
Piper, Phoebe, Paige and Leo are sitting in the kitchen. ''I wonder what Susy means with I can't tell you.'' Paige saids. ''Maybe it is a secret of The Elders. It's to bad that Leo can't orb up anymore. And I totally understand why you can't.'' Phoebe knows that Paige don't like The Elders because of what he did to Piper and Leo. ''Sometimes I want to be a Whitelighter again, but I don't like to go to The Elders, and I rather be with Piper.'' Leo gives a lovable look at Piper. Piper smiles. ''Me too.''
''I will go to The Elders, I'm very curious myself.'' Paige will go. ''But Paige...'' ''No, I go, I want it myself.'' Paige orbs away.
*UP WITH THE ELDERS*
''Paige??'' Carrie, an Elder, recognizes her. ''Yes, I'm here because I want to ask you why you send Susy.'' Paige explains. ''Susy? Who is Susy?'' ''Susy, the Whitelighter... With all those black clothes...'' Paige is confused. ''We don't have a Whitelighter named Susy, o wait, no it can't be...'' ''What? What?'' ''We had a Whitelighter, Susy, but she died a month ago... But we have her body, we still have to take it away...'' Carrie explains. ''Can I see the body?'' Paige asks shy. ''Actually you can't, but, well, in this case you can. This way.'' Paige follows Carrie, but she is very nervous. Carrie opens the door, and sees something very suprising....
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Post by ~B@MeLiSsA30@B~ on Jan 8, 2009 14:52:29 GMT -5
Whoa! I wonder what paige saw. I can't wait to find out.  |
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Post by lindsaywinchester on Jan 11, 2009 11:38:18 GMT -5
CHAPTER 4:THE EMPTY ROOM
The walls of the room are white, the floor is white, the furniture is white, everything is white. Thats makes it better to see the red footsteps on the floor. They mysteriously stop in the middle of the room. ''I...I don't understand... We keep our bodies protected by 2 guards.'' Carrie doesn't understand it. Paige walks to the red footsteps on the floor. ''It's blood. I can smell it. '' Paige is so used to blood, but it's not from a demon. Because demon blood is very slimy, human-form blood is not that slimy. ''But where are the guards? I don't understand.'' Carrie keeps talking. ''Is there a problem ladies?'' Another Elder walks in. ''O my god. I see it. GUARDS!'' Nobody answers. I think.. It's not really good to say but, I heard that someone called the guards away. But nobody was there. I said that they have to get back to the moratorium, and then I orbed away, so I don't know what happened after that, so...'' ''Someone called, Oh sorry John, the door was locked so we couldn't get in, and then we get to the real world because we thought that she maybe was there, and we ware attacked by demons, but we killed them. I heard you call us, so I orbed us to here. Sorry that it taked so long.'' The guard explains. ''Okay it's alright, you didn't harm anyone good. Both of you did you're job good.'' The Elder saids. ''Thanks, we did our best.'' The other guard thanks The Elder and they walk away. ''I will go to my sisters and we will look for the escaped.... dead person.'' Paige orbs away.
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Post by CharmBffy on Feb 11, 2009 22:19:37 GMT -5
this is good
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Post by ~B@MeLiSsA30@B~ on Feb 11, 2009 22:39:16 GMT -5
Sorry it took so long to reply to the story. Very nice update. I am excited to see what happens next. |
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