Post by CharmedbyCri on Feb 3, 2009 8:52:50 GMT -5
Hi.
Thanks to Charmed, now I like writing in English.
Here's two of my poems, please let me know your opinion.
This one is dedicated to my Mom.
First Emotions
First image I've ever seen
when my eyes shut opened
to a bigger and bigger world
a little fuzzy but marvellous to see.
First feeling I've ever felt
when my heart suddenly
started to dance whenever
my eyes looked at something new.
First breath I've ever taken
when I felt alive
and free to be
part of the world around me.
First steps I've ever moved
when my brain said "Try and go!"
to reach you, beside me
every moment, every time.
First lullaby I've ever known
is also the first sound I've ever heard
when, from the womb, I played and smiled
at your every tear and sigh.
First word I've ever said
when you called my name aloud,
my mouth just opened
and finally "Mom" came out.
But the greatest emotion at all
is can share with you my whole life.
This one is a little sad and it's dedicated to a future love.
Rain inside
It’s rain falling here
Falling slowly in my heart
Falling, falling deep inside
And never stops.
I can feel it on my body
And my soul can breathe its smell.
It’s rain falling here,
When you’re not beside me,
But the dawn seems to appear
When you’re magically again
Back to me keeping your voice down.
Nobody can hear you,
Cos there’s rain all around the world
And the noise is so strong
That I barely hear you, myself.
It’s your cry
That I can hear
No matter the rain,
It’s your inner cry
as similar as mine
that I can hear.
But now a light comes to me
Showing a way for me to go,
To go and see
If someone still remembers me.
Your tears touch my hands,
My lips and my frozen heart.
You keep me tight,
Don’t wanna me to leave,
But I can’t, I have to go
Go through the light;
Behind me your painful sight.
I open my eyes,
Mouth still tastes of you.
The sun shines,
It’ a new dawn
In the world.
No rain around,
No clouds inside,
Just a deep pain
Goin’ through my eyes.
You’ve touched my hair,
You’ve been here today?
Or was it just the wind,
Was it just the rain?
Thanks to Charmed, now I like writing in English.
Here's two of my poems, please let me know your opinion.
This one is dedicated to my Mom.
First Emotions
First image I've ever seen
when my eyes shut opened
to a bigger and bigger world
a little fuzzy but marvellous to see.
First feeling I've ever felt
when my heart suddenly
started to dance whenever
my eyes looked at something new.
First breath I've ever taken
when I felt alive
and free to be
part of the world around me.
First steps I've ever moved
when my brain said "Try and go!"
to reach you, beside me
every moment, every time.
First lullaby I've ever known
is also the first sound I've ever heard
when, from the womb, I played and smiled
at your every tear and sigh.
First word I've ever said
when you called my name aloud,
my mouth just opened
and finally "Mom" came out.
But the greatest emotion at all
is can share with you my whole life.
This one is a little sad and it's dedicated to a future love.
Rain inside
It’s rain falling here
Falling slowly in my heart
Falling, falling deep inside
And never stops.
I can feel it on my body
And my soul can breathe its smell.
It’s rain falling here,
When you’re not beside me,
But the dawn seems to appear
When you’re magically again
Back to me keeping your voice down.
Nobody can hear you,
Cos there’s rain all around the world
And the noise is so strong
That I barely hear you, myself.
It’s your cry
That I can hear
No matter the rain,
It’s your inner cry
as similar as mine
that I can hear.
But now a light comes to me
Showing a way for me to go,
To go and see
If someone still remembers me.
Your tears touch my hands,
My lips and my frozen heart.
You keep me tight,
Don’t wanna me to leave,
But I can’t, I have to go
Go through the light;
Behind me your painful sight.
I open my eyes,
Mouth still tastes of you.
The sun shines,
It’ a new dawn
In the world.
No rain around,
No clouds inside,
Just a deep pain
Goin’ through my eyes.
You’ve touched my hair,
You’ve been here today?
Or was it just the wind,
Was it just the rain?
