In The Way Of Destiny

[Piper Halliwell]

Disclaimer: I do not own anything related to 'Charmed'.

Authors Note: Okay I really wasn't happy with my other one, so many things I feel that I did wrong, this is something that I have thought about for a while because I lost my muse for the original and finally now I feel that enough ideas are in my head to rewrite it. Some things will be different but you will just have to read. Sorry for everyone who read the first one, especially Es! But I really do think this one will be better. So without further ado this is 'In The Way Of Destiny'- The Rewrite.

---

In The Way Of Destiny - Rewrite

[/u][/size]


Chapter One: Disaster Or Meant To Be?[/center]


Phoebe Halliwell was washing up whilst listening to some music on the 27th May, it was a Thursday and everything was normal, Coop had Faded home from work and wrapped his arms around the love of his life, Phoebe who was also the mother of his three daughters: Prudence, Patricia & Penelope Halliwell. The couple danced around the kitchen happily for all of five minutes before disaster struck, a powerful demon shimmered in and caught them by surprise. The first fire ball was sent towards Phoebe, it missed, but only because Coop had dived in front of it to save her. He was dead within ten seconds. Phoebe overwhelmed with grief forgot about the demon in front of her and went to help her husband, this was her biggest mistake and the next fireball that was thrown didn’t miss. Phoebe and Coop Halliwell were dead leaving their children behind but also doing what the demonic world had wanted for so long, breaking the power of three.

This is what the youngest daughter Penelope Halliwell didn’t know as she walked home from school, Penny had stopped off at the local shop to buy a couple of things her mother had asked her too, just the usual stuff; groceries. It had only been ten minutes after the attack when she arrived back home “Mom, Dad you in?” Her voice echoed but to her surprise there was no reply, Phoebe had told her that she was working from home that day so why wasn’t she in? Penny shrugged her coat off and held the grocery bag with arm, placing it on the hanger she proceeded to the kitchen to put the food away.

She stopped stone cold and dropped the bag, jars smashed and food poured out onto the clean tiled floor, Penny grabbed the doorframe for support her eyes were as wide as they could go, what she saw couldn’t be right, it couldn’t be. The thing was Penny didn’t remember falling asleep. Her breathing sped up and her left hand moved to her mouth as she began to take in the scene in front of her. That was it Penny couldn’t take it anymore she moved to the wall in the hallway and slipped down it so she was sitting down her knees pulled close to her chest. The uncontrollable tears came and then Penny couldn’t stop, they were dead and there was nothing she or anyone else could do about it, thoughts rushed through her mind, memories of her parents just everything coming all at once. Her mother was the strongest, bravest person Penny knew, she had seen her fight so many demons, how could this happen? Why now?

The phone began to ring but Penny didn’t hear it, or maybe she didn’t want to. She was immersed in her thoughts like a trance or something. Penny just thought that if she could sit there, close her eyes and just not think about it then maybe it would go away and everything would be back to normal when she opened her eyes again. She knew it was stupid deep down but Penny wasn’t thinking about that right now.

Ringing was getting louder and brought Penny back from her mind, slowly she stood up and picked up the phone “Hey Penny a group of us are all going out later you wanna go?” Sophie, Pennys’ best friends voice was happy as usual. Everyone else was carrying on with their lives and Penny was in her own personal hell on earth. She didn’t bother to say anything and put the phone down. It felt like her whole world had just crashed.

Meanwhile Prudence Halliwell was working as per usual, she was always working nowadays, but for some reason today Prue had picked up a copy of the bay mirror to read her mothers ‘Ask Phoebe’ article. Smiling she put it down, after all these years her mother still believed everyone could find love. Not everyone could just go and marry a cupid though Prue thought to herself. There was a reason she worked herself silly, Prue just didn’t have anything better to do. From the age of seventeen she knew that the life of a witch was not for her and didn’t really use her powers after that, dating was a big no for her at the moment. She had always had the worst luck in men, either they were jerks or freaks so Prue chose just to work.

All the thinking about Phoebe had made Prue want to call her, after she moved out of the family home Prue and Phoebe had not had a good conversation, it was a shame but they were really different personality wise. Dialing the number the Prue knew off-by-heart now she heard the dialing tone and waiting for someone to pick up, Prue expected it to be Penny seeing as she was always nearer to the phone most of the time.

Penny picked up “Hello” her solemn voice was barely audible.

“Penny, are you okay?” Prue asked wondering why her sister was so sad, it was probably nothing after all, teenagers had a thing of thinking that everything was the end of the world, hell even Prue went through that years ago, that’s how she knew.

“Prue” Penny began crying down the phone. “It’s mom and dad” She barely got out.

Prues heart stopped one of her worst fears could have been coming true. “Penny what do you mean” She asked trying to be calm but failing miserably.

“They’re dead”






[/font]

[Esmeralda]

Hey, Georgia!

First, like I told you at Alternate Charmed, needless to say, I'm a bit disappointed about you rewriting your "In the Way of Destiny", since I enjoyed the original so much, but I've also hit the wall while writing a fic and realize that I have to start all over. Hopefully you can finish this version, because if it's anything like the original version, we'd love to have it over at Alternate Charmed!

Next, I'm glad you didn't start this version with your cast list (including pictures) and your powers list. Since you're not doing this as a virtual series (you're not writing it in script) and you're not doing it as a rewrite of an RPG (if you were, it's not truly your fic and you should give credit to all of the other people participating in the RPG), it really isn't necessary to say who's playing who (each reader should be allowed to imagine the characters the way they want to, unless you give descriptions during your narrative), and it's more fun to find out who the kids are when you actually introduce them, and what their powers are when they actually use them.

So your rewrite is already off to a very good start before I even start reading! Now to read...

*reads*

Oh, yes, I definitely like you starting this *this* way rather than starting right away with the funeral--allowing you to show us what happened. AND I love you starting with Phoebe's girls rather than starting with Chris and Wyatt right away.

YAY!! I see the second major change!! The middle daughter is now Patricia, after Patty, rather than Kira, so all three daughters are both "P's" and are named after the people who Phoebe lost! Even tho I liked Phoebe naming her middle daughter after the TRUE LOVE of her life (Kira was the only one who Phoebe truly loved outside of herself), this does work better, especially if you're going to do what I hope you're going to do!

WOW! That first paragraph is absolutely amazing! A wonderful telling of why the demons were able to kill Phoebe and Coop and how. Also I *love* the fact that BOTH Coop and Phoebe are dead, so we don't have to worry why Coop doesn't come back to take care of his daughters.

*back to reading*

Knowing that Penny is your favorite character, I was happy to see that she's the one who will discover the disaster. Um, you might want to change this sentence:

Penny shrugged her coat off and held the grocery bag with arm, placing it on the hanger she proceeded to the kitchen to put the food away.

It sounds like she put the grocery bag on the hanger! I don't think that's what you meant!

But I totally adored the way you wrote Penny's reaction towards seeing the scene in the kitchen and the aftereffects--it reminded of me after Mom's death when I just didn't want to believe it and when it seemed so weird that everyone else's day was going so normal; it just didn't seem right. Fantastically done!

I also love the way you introduce us to Prue and her reaction towards her mother's Ask Phoebe column, having no idea that it's her mother's last column. She reminds me of the one she was named for... This is such a great way of introducing your characters and was needed in the other version!

I love this line:

“Penny, are you okay?” Prue asked wondering why her sister was so sad, it was probably nothing after all, teenagers had a thing of thinking that everything was the end of the world, hell even Prue went through that years ago, that’s how she knew.

So true and so well written!

And what a spot to stop! SOOO much better than your first cliffhanger in your other version. Yes, I definitely like this version better!

Now hurry up and post Chapter Two. PLEEEASE???

[Piper Halliwell]

Chapter Two: Panic

[/u][/center][/size]


Prue gripped the phone “Penny, what?” She said again trying to hold back her tears. So many questions were running through her mind. How did it happen? Were you there? Who was it? Penny had to be mistaken she had always been one to overreact in the family, she had to be mistaken they were still alive.

“Prue it’s true, I think a fireball hit them” Penny just wanted her sisters, someone to tell her everything would be okay like her mother used to.

“Wait there I’m coming” Prue said thinking about how terrified her baby sister must be, she wanted to protect her. Prue was supposed to protect her. Standing up out of her office chair Prue steadied herself, she hadn’t faded in a while so would have to concentrate. Thinking hard about the house she closed her eyes and a cloud of pink smoke surrounded her, she faded into the hallway and saw her sisters tear stained face. Prue began to cry again as she pulled her sister in for a hug resting her head on the top of her sisters. Penny cried into her Prues shoulder holding her a tight as she could.

The two sisters stayed like that until the door opened and revealed the middle sister Patricia home from college. She looked at her sisters with a confused look on her face wondering what the hell was going on, Patty had no idea what she was about to let herself in for. “Prue what are you doing here? What’s going on?” She walked closer to Prue and Penny her expression dropped Patty knew something was not right.

Prue and Penny shared a look that said who should tell her and Prue stepped forward “Patty, it’s mom and dad. They got hit by a fireball” There was no point Prue trying to sugarcoat it, she didn’t know how to so just came out with it.

Patty placed her bag on the table and walked towards the kitchen, she needed to see it for herself before she could believe what her big sister was telling her. “Oh my god” Patty whispered looking at her parents. Penny came up behind her sister and pulled her from the doorway. “We need to call someone, Aunt Piper. Someone” Patty babbled not having any idea what she was supposed to do, what they were supposed to do next. You don’t exactly learn about how to deal with something like this, it was safe to say that all of the girls wanted their parents to live forever and kind of expected Coop to but even if Phoebe was not invincible they thought she would die when she was old, really old. Like one hundred or something.


As Prue and Penny cried Patty stood in the corner on her own, she wanted to cry and inside she was but tears just wouldn’t come. Patty had never been one to cry in front of people, it was more her style to cry on her own but after something like this and Patty wasn’t able to shed one tear, did that make her a bad person did it mean she didn’t love her parents as much as her sisters. No it didn’t but Patty couldn’t help thinking it. “I’ll call Piper” She said solemnly picking up the phone. [/font]

[Esmeralda]

Very well done, Georgia! I liked how you showed the different way the sisters reacted towards the news, especially with how differently Patty reacted as compared to the others. Shock and grief affects different people in different ways.

I love how Prue wanted to take care of her sisters--she's reminding me more and more of her namesake! The other two not as much right now, but then Prue is the oldest, just like her namesake, while Patty is now the middle child and Penny now the baby, totally different than *their* namesakes. As such, I think you've got their reactions down perfectly.

Can't wait to read the next chapter and see how Piper (and her family) and Paige (and her family) react to the news.

Please update soon!

[Reality Bites]

This is a pretty interesting fic. I'm looking forward to what's in store for Phoebe's three daughters. I also find it interesting that her daughters are named Prue, Patty, and Penny. Her sister, mother, and grandmother... all reincarnated? How awesome would that be?!