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Post by pipercharmedphreak on Apr 7, 2008 18:22:44 GMT -5
Thank you guys so much for reading my story. I am glad you all like it! ;D
Part 7
Piper looked at Phoebe with a pleading look in her eyes. She needed Phoebe to believe them. Piper motioned for Leo and Prue to follow her around the corner. If Phoebe did not believe them, then it would be even harder to convince Paige.
"Wait. Did she say Paige? As in our innocent Paige?" Prue asked in a hushed voice. Piper nodded.
"Hey Phoebes. Watcha need?" wondered Paige.
Phoebe hesitated. The look in Piper's eyes haunted Phoebe for that split second.
"Um." Phoebe paused. "I was just wondering...have you been attacked by any demons lately?" Phoebe grew to be an even worse lier as the years rolled on.
"Nah. Me get attacked by a demon. Never. I'm only Charmed." The sarcastic Paige responded. She always had a smart aleck remark up her sleeve.
Piper closed her eyes and listened as her younger sisters continued to talk. Paige. Only a few short years ago she had been an only child. Now she had learned to know and love the life of the Halliwells. Piper thought about those around her. Prue, the oldest sister, the strong one; Phoebe the baby, the rebellious one; Paige the youngest but never the baby; and finally Leo her love, her soul mate. All that was missing was her sons. Hearing the voices of the two sisters she had just lost made Piper want to fight to get them back even more, stronger. Piper snapped back into reality to realize that Paige had just orbed out. Phoebe came around the corner to see all three who had been listening in. Phoebe embraced Prue in a hug and closed her eyes to soak in the moment.
(Short Time Lapse- All characters are sitting around the kitchen table)
"Alright so bottom line is we need to get the Hollow back into it's box." Phoebe ran over the plan of action again. She wanted everything to fall in place.
Leo watched as the Original Power of Three used their knowledge to create a seemingly fool proof plan. He added input every once in a while, but he knew that the girls had thought so much through. The only question was, would the plan really work? Would the evil that they needed to help them see a need in assisting? They could only hope.
"Phoebe?" A voice said from the hallway. Before stepping out of the shadows the voice spoke again. "I thought I heard voices."
To Be Continued...
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Post by ~*Alicia*~ on Apr 7, 2008 18:54:53 GMT -5
Loved it! I do, I do!! You're such an awesome writer I hope you update soon, I can't wait!!
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Post by Prue's Empath on Apr 7, 2008 19:42:45 GMT -5
I just finished this story and you are very good at writing,you make the characters say things she can see them saying,you make sure to explain each and everything clearly to us,I love reading your RP and your Phoebe picking up a knife update was typical Phoebe! LOVE IT!
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Post by ~.:Alysha:.~ on Apr 8, 2008 1:00:28 GMT -5
Yeah chick, loved the update, i wonder who the mystery person is ohh..dum dum dum daaaaaaaaaa!! Cant wait for the next installment of this very addictive fanfic!!
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Post by pipercharmedphreak on Apr 8, 2008 13:00:25 GMT -5
Thanks for keeping up with the inconsistent time between updates. I am glad to know you are enjoying it! And now...to reveal the mystery person...
Part 8
"Cole." Phoebe said as she stood. Cole stepped out of the hallway revealing that it was, in fact, Cole Turner. Phoebe put her hands on either side of his face and gave him a kiss.
Cole pulled away. "Is that...is she...?" Cole could barely even finish his sentence, but everyone knew he was shocked at the fact to see Prue Halliwell very much alive sitting at his kitchen table.
"Wow Cole glad to see you too." Prue sniped.
Cole held Phoebe in a tight embrace. Both Piper and Leo felt a great amount of tension. They both were speechless knowing that this was not the ending that Phoebe and Cole were able to share.
[Flashback- (Episode 5.12 Centennial Charmed)
Paige: Phoebe, are you crazy? Throw it before he shimmers out.
Cole: She's not gonna throw it. Are you?
Paige: Throw the potion.
Cole: We've been through so much together, haven't we? Our love's so strong, nothing can destroy it, not even this. We're meant to be together.
Phoebe: I don't think so.
(Phoebe throws the potion at Cole and he explodes and is vanquished. Suddenly, the room starts spinning around.)
End Flashback]
Piper dodged Cole's gaze. She longed for Phoebe to find the one person who she wasn't going to have to go through hell and back with. She wanted her sister to find love, though she knew it wasn't with Cole.
Phoebe kissed Cole again. Motioning towards Piper, Prue, and Leo- Phoebe spoke, "They need my help."
"Promise me you'll stay out of trouble." Cole begged
"When have known this Halliwell to behave?" teased Phoebe
"Good point. Just come home safely."
"I will." Phoebe smiled. "I love you." Phoebe gave Cole another hug before stepping over to her other family. "You guys ready to do this?"
"No, but do we have a choice?" The always confident Prue was nervous. Even though Piper and Leo hadn't revealed all the details to her and Phoebe, she knew a lot was banking on this plan.
Piper grasped Leo's hand. She couldn't help but pray for everything to come through. The butterflies that plagued Piper before returned. So much depended on this.
The Charmed Ones stood side by side, hand in hand, with Leo holding onto Piper. They began to recite, "Hear these words, hear the rhyme, we send you this pleading sign, return we four to Piper's time ."
As they group began to depart, Phoebe held her hand up wave to Cole. They smiled at each other as they gave their final silent good-byes.
To Be Continued...
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Post by *Sammi!* on Apr 8, 2008 13:18:44 GMT -5
Sorry I havent reviewed for a while! I love the way the story is turning out, and I love that Prue is alive again! - I also love that Phoebe is still with Cole! Tis what I love!
Please update soon! I wanna know what happens!
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Post by ~B@MeLiSsA30@B~ on Apr 8, 2008 15:58:12 GMT -5
I loved it. Awesome updates. I love what you did with the girls, & with Cole seeing Prue again. The reactions were spot on. I would love to read more.
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Post by ~.:Alysha:.~ on Apr 8, 2008 17:37:20 GMT -5
Like the girls said above me i loved it and and the fact that Cole and Phoebe are together any story that has that is just right for me lol! Cant wait for more of this awesome story!!
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Post by Esmeralda on Apr 19, 2008 11:15:27 GMT -5
First, many many apologies for taking so long to review this. I've been ultra-busy at work and also came down with a bad cold, so although I *have* been reading this, I didn't feel like I could give my reviews the care and attention that it deserves...just saying, "I like this." or "This is good" or "Write more", just doesn't seem right--it doesn't sound like I've truly read and enjoyed it, and with the time and effort you put into your fic, I feel like I should do the same with my reviews.
But before I do, I have to tell you how very much I love your new siggy..it so truly shows Prue and Piper as so much more than sisters...also as very best friends! I do wish that Kern hadn't fired Shannen so we could've seen them that way throughout the series! Although I love Paige (I would've prefered Phoebe dying and getting rid of Alyssa over Prue dying and getting rid of Shannen, since I hated how Alyssa changed Phoebe from Phoebs to PhoeME/Freebie once she became a producer), I would've loved to have seen Piper and Prue together throughout the entire series--maybe Prue could've prevented Piper from becoming a whiney self-centered, selfish b!tch by giving her younger sister what-for whenever she needed it.
And she needed it often once her son came back from the future and taught her to forget about innocents and just think about herself and her family!---Prue would've made sure Chris got his ultra-skinny a$$ back to the future where it belonged before he could screw up his mother and aunts! There's my hope for this fic--that they go back to S6 and send Chris back the day he gets there, since they'd know what the problem was and be able to fix it themselves WITHOUT Leo learning how to murder and no longer being our Leo or the sisters having to become goddesses and acting like they know who's good and who's evil and who should live and who should die! Chris was SOOO wrong...they didn't need to become goddesses. They had the Power of Three, which made them the most powerful witches ever, something the Elders didn't have the first time the Titans showed up. Leo should've very simply told them to use THAT! GRRRRRRRR at Kern and his reasons for turning Charmed into a costume party rather than concentrating on consistency and the plot!
*takes deep breath* Sorry, but I get into how horribly Kern changed my favorite characters and I get upset! At any rate, back to your fantastic fic, back to wishing the characters were more like these!
At any rate, I'm WAY behind, but now I'm gonna FINALLY catch up, but I'm going to have to re-read those parts to remind me of what happened--in fact, I think I'm going to re-read the last part I reviewed just to make sure I'm remembering what's going on.
*goes back to re-read*
Ah, yes, now I remember...Piper using the spell to try to reach Phoebe, so now ending up in the loft makes her think that it didn't succeed. Now I've gotta go remind myself what happens next!
*goes off to re-read next update*
Oh, I do love the way you write! You do such a fantastic job with your descriptions, making it easy for me in my mind exactly what's happening. And again your characterizations are spot on...this is *so* much the way they would've reacted!
I smiled when you mentioned how Prue could figure out what Piper was thinking due to their strong sisterly bond, even if this is a Piper who has gone 5 years without Prue.
I loved you having Piper notice the paper with the date and I love the fact that obviously they somehow saved Phoebe and Paige during S8 so that both can be alive now AND Leo figuring that out. I *so* wish Kern would've let Leo continue to use his whitelighter knowledge even when Leo was mortal so he wouldn't have to be Piper's little errand boy and not much else.
And I REALLY love Phoebe realizing that this *isn't* the Piper from her time. And here comes Paige!! Can't wait to see what Prue's reaction is to her and her reaction towards Prue!!
*goes back to read next update*
Oh, I just found one of my latest favorite lines:
ROFL! Isn't that the truth! And I loved Paige calling Phoebe Phoebs...I don't think she ever called her that once during the show and Piper never did once Prue was dead, the reason I knew that my Phoebs was also dead, replaced by that sl*t PhoeME/Freebie.
I also laughed at Paige's smart-aleck response. You SO have her down!
Oh, now I'm smiling so big it might just split my face. My *new* favorite line:
Naturally, that describes my siggy. If only Kern hadn't forgotten all about this and tried to stuff the surviving sisters into molds where they very simply didn't fit.
I would've prefered if you didn't use this line or lines similar to it:
Those are the sorts of stuff used when writing in script and you do SUCH a fantastic job writing prose that it's not needed and if anything is rather distracting from the story. I would prefer something like this:
"A short time later, the four sisters and Leo were sitting around the kitchen table."
OOO! Someone else is part of this fic. Coop? It's gotta be Coop since we know that the Angel of Destiny ends up marrying them when "Phoebe finally finds love" *rolls eyes at this obvious dissing of Cole*
*goes back to read next update*
Cole??? Cole's back?? How can Cole be back??
LOL, I love the way you make Prue snipe..that is just SOOO Prue! I'm sure she's as "thrilled" to see Cole as he is to see her! Of course, I'm dying from curiosity to know how Phoebe ended up with Cole when as shown in the perfect flashback, he's been vanquished and she's now married to Coop.
I'm with Piper...we know that with Coop, Phoebe won't be tempted to turn to evil the way she always was with Cole. But then Piper would've been happier if she had married Dan and just had a normal life with normal kids, while Leo could've stayed a whitelighter, taking care of his charges rather than just being Piper's little errand boy, or worst, her Leocicle (he couldn't die if he was still a whitelighter, since he's already be dead)! What's best for them isn't always what happens, not when love rears its ugly head! And in this show, being in love usually screwed up the characters! GRRR at Kern for that!
I loved our always-confident Prue nervous; it shows how very important this is. And before that I loved it being the original Power of Three who comes up with the plan. I can see Paige being nervous around Prue (or St. Prue as Paige probably thinks of Prue with the way Paige's sisters always talked about Prue) and just letting them decide what to do.
I don't believe it!! I'm all caught up!
I so love the way you take the "Hear these words, here this rhyme" spell and make it fit the latest situation. Fantastic job!! I hope it works this time; I'm dying to see how you make this scene different than the way Forever Charmed solved this mess (which made me roll my eyes...three generations of Halliwells can NOT control the Power of Three...only three sisters descended from Melinda Warren can, meaning that Chris and Wyatt can never be more powerful than their three cousins...Phoebe's daughters.)
What I'm not sure of is whether Paige is going with the sisters or if it's just the Original Power of Three and Leo. I'm sure I'll be able to figure that out from the next update.
Speaking of, PLEEEEEEEASE update soon!!
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Post by ~*Alicia*~ on Apr 19, 2008 11:28:03 GMT -5
Loved the update! It is a great story! I like the fact that Prue is alive again and Phoebe and Cole are together. Update soon!
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Post by pipercharmedphreak on Apr 21, 2008 23:04:22 GMT -5
Thank you very much for your feedback. Es, I enjoy to take your tips. They help me become a better writer. Again, I am very pleased that you all are following my story. *Hugs* Here's the next part in Blessed Be: Part 9 ------------------------------------------------------------------------------ Prue, Piper, Phoebe and Leo appeared inside magic school. They stood motionless, unsure of where to find who they were looking for. Then they heard the voices. Piper sighed. Her heart was pounding, her palms were sweating, thoughts bounced back and forth in her head as she took a step toward the room where the voices flowed.
The Trio and Leo entered the room. Empty. All except a white pedestal.
Prue was the first to speak, "We know you're here. You can't hide forever."
The Triad slowly appeared. They stared at the Original Power of Three not knowing what was about to happen.
"We need your help." Phoebe stated rather bluntly.
Each member of the Triad snickered among themselves. "Why would we want to help you? What would we get out of it?" One member of the Triad interrogated.
This time Piper stepped forward. " Listen. You remember the plan to use the Hollow to kill us? It doesn't work. Phoebe, Paige, and I are about to absorb it too."
"Meaning?" The third Triad member asked.
"Meaning," Piper began again, " we fight, people are killed. Your precious Christy dies. Your plan does not work. Get the picture?"
"How do we know that you're not manipulating us to revive the Power of Three? After all we can't trust you, you are good."
"Cut the crap. Are you gonna help us or not?" Piper snapped. Prue widened her eyes at Piper's rampage.
The Triad ceased their discussion. "We'll help." The first Triad member simply stated.
The three formed a circle and began to chant. The girls joined hands and Leo squeezed Piper's hand tightly. They began to recite a spell, returning them to the Manor moments before the battle erupted. Clearly, something big was about to happen. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------- To Be Continued...
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Post by ~B@MeLiSsA30@B~ on Apr 21, 2008 23:13:40 GMT -5
Love it Piper. Great story. So are they gonna work together although they can't trust eachother. I can't wait to find out.
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Post by ~.:Alysha:.~ on Apr 22, 2008 0:45:48 GMT -5
OHHH Interesting, i wonder whats going to happen? Im just as curious as Melissa as to whether they are all going to work together? Cant wait till the next update chick! Brilliant stuff!
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Post by Primrose_Empath on Apr 22, 2008 9:02:02 GMT -5
*hugs back* You're more than welcome sweetie -- thank you for writing this!
Whoa, looks like I've missed a good number of updates -- sorry for being such a slacker. *blushes embarassedly*
Es, I hope you don't mind if I simply 'ditto' your excellent review, as you've basically said everything I wanted to say.
*reads latest update*
Ohh, nice twist there! So at first glance it appears that they are going to work together -- but evil is not exactly known for being honest, and the Triad is no exception to the rule. So I'm sure that somebody has something up their sleeves, and I can't wait to find out what that is. Update soon please!
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Post by Esmeralda on Apr 22, 2008 23:25:21 GMT -5
First, I'm SOO glad that you liked my review. Since I tend to be brutally honest, I'm never sure what the author will think, but I'm always happy when the author likes it, especially when she can take my advice.
WOW!! Absolutely totally WOW!! That was *so* not what I was expecting, but it makes *so* much sense! Who else but the Triad could control Billie & Christy??
But as Primrose points out, as has been shown on Charmed before (and I keep expecting a flashback from Apocolypse NOT...) working with evil doesn't always work out the way you expect it to!
Like her, I wonder if someone has something up their sleeves...and whether it's the Triad or the sisters...or BOTH???!!
I also wonder if somehow this is what sets up so that Cole comes back and he and Phoebe end up together....maybe with him no longer half-demon so he can't turn Phoebe evil again??? Or maybe show that Coop is actually him???
I really grinned when Piper told the Triad off and Prue gave her a strange look. This definitely isn't the same Piper Prue remembers! Great job with that!!
I can't WAIT to find out what's going to happen!!
PLEEEEEEEEASE don't make us wait too long!!
And for this wonderful update (and wonderful fic!), you have been blessed!
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Post by Piper3 on Apr 27, 2008 21:13:20 GMT -5
Ok,sorry it took me so long to actually read it all PCP its just everything has been crazy lately. I think this is excellent. I like how the REAL charectors are in it and not the new Piper and as Es calls her PhoME. I love how Cole is back, I love Cole. I really love this and I can't wait to read more about it. Please up date soon. Also I have read all of the comments and I agree with everything that has been said by Es and Primrose. Excellent reviews ladies. Thanks for writing this fanfic PCP can't wait to read the rest!
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Post by ~*Alicia*~ on Apr 28, 2008 15:34:33 GMT -5
Love the update! Awesome story! It just gets better and better! Evil and good working together, great idea!
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Post by pipercharmedphreak on May 4, 2008 3:36:38 GMT -5
It really warms my heart to hear that you are enjoying this story. ;D If you recall a while back Dumain was trying to convince Billie to project to the past, well here we go...(without giving it all away of course )
Honestly, this update took me a while because I had a tough time writing with Billie and Christy. I must have re-written the upcoming part about a dozen times before getting it to something that pieced together. Anyways, happy reading! Part 10Billie and Christy stood in the attic, their eyes dilated and both yearning for power. Dumain grinned. However, he had no idea that the Charmed Ones had also absorbed the Hollow. "Go! Now!" He yelled. He was anxious for the Charmed Ones to be defeated. Billie and Christy stood close together and headed towards the stairs. Seconds after their exit a projection of Billie appeared. "What the hell?" Dumain grew puzzled. Billie looked around realizing she succeeded in projecting herself to the past. She stormed out of the attic in search of herself and her sister. Billie and Christy rounded the corner. Billie's projection was not far behind. "Christy!" She called. At the sound of her little sister's voice she turned around. "What's going on?" Billie demanded "Listen to me, please. Piper, Phoebe, and Paige got infected with the Hollow at the same time we did. You can't go after them." Her projection begged, but a lack of response provoked her to continue. " If you go after them...Christy will die." It pained Billie let those words come out of her mouth, but it didn't matter. She would say anything if it meant keeping Christy alive. But in spite of these words Billie flicked her hand out, sending the future Billie across the room. Again, Billie and Christy headed downstairs in search of the sisters. Billie's projection lay motionless, leaning up against the wall. Leo, Prue, Piper, and Phoebe appeared in the dining room entryway. They looked around and saw no sign of anyone. Then they saw them. Billie and Christy descended down the stairs and Paige, Piper, and Phoebe orbed into the conservatory. "We've been waiting for you." Billie said dryly. "Well, the waits over." Paige responded coldly. Piper added, "No potions huh?" "We don't need any potions." Christy sneered. Phoebe chimed in, "Funny, neither do we." Piper directed her attention towards Christy, "I knew we shouldn't have trusted you." "You should've followed your instincts." Piper raised an eyebrow and calmly said, "Next time." "There won't be a next time." Billie replied confidently. Billie's projection stood at the landing and rubbed her head, watching the scene. She held her breath, unsure if anything was going to change. After a moment both sides blasted the other releasing energy and great power. They all winced and squinted at the power between them. No progress was being made on either side. At last the Triad flamed in. "Cutting it a little close don't ya think!" Phoebe complained. "Just say the spell!" One of the members responded. The blasts from both sides continued while good and evil began to chant, " Yam is ado, heek is ado, malo cot bonus, moss in con sesis, super deeco nos." The light dimmed, the Hollow taken away. The black particles that was the Hollow hovered in the air until combusting. It was over. The past was changed. The Triad flamed out and both the bodies of Future Piper and Billie's projection sped up until they were one with their past selves. "Well, there's something you don't see everyday." Prue said to the Alternate Future Phoebe. "What is going on?" Paige questioned. Leo answered, "Looks like time caught up with itself." ----------------------------------------- To Be Continued...
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Post by ~:*Destiny*:~ on May 4, 2008 12:30:01 GMT -5
Love the updates! ;D Great Story!
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Post by Esmeralda on May 4, 2008 23:37:42 GMT -5
Fantastically done, PCP! A perfectly rewritten "Ultimate Battle" scene! Of course I recognized a lot of it from Forever Charmed but I loved the way you redid it with your current cast.
Here's my favorite part:
ROFL! That's just *so* perfect!!
I'll admit I was very surprised to see that both sides didn't have anything up their sleeves, but I love the idea of a trio of good and a trio of evil had to chant the Hollow spell in order to return it to its box!
I love the fact that you now have Prue from the past taking the Patty and Penny's part and Phoebe from the future taking the kids' parts (I HOPE! If there's no Chris and Wyatt in this fic, I will NOT complain one single bit; in fact I'd cheer! Those two scene-stealers were the most unnecessary part of Forever Charmed, just stuck in there for their fans and no other reason! Definitely not for the plot or Wyatt would've shown up the instant they stole his powers--during Kill Billie Vol 2! *rolls eyes at Kern*)
But this isn't done yet, just like it wasn't on the show. Yes, everyone's alive, but Billie and Christy are still evil and power-hungry! Speaking of, you did an absolutely marvelous job with both of them, especially with Projection Billie; probably one of my favorite parts of the entire fic so far!
Can't wait to see what they all decide to do now. ANd STILL dying to know how/why Cole is alive and Phoebe isn't with Coop in the future when the Angel of Destiny married them!!
PLEEEEEEEEEASE update soon!! And for this wonderful update, you have been added back to my list of my people to be blessed!
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