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Post by *Sammi!* on Jun 19, 2008 18:29:06 GMT -5
Oh my word! Prue called Victor dad and gave him a hug! Wowo! Something we thought would never happen! I must admit, that bein such a huge Cole fan I have noticed that you do write him very well! And for that I love you! lol!  Weldone with the story again! Please update soon! x |
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Post by ~*Alicia*~ on Jun 19, 2008 18:42:10 GMT -5
Wow, PCP!! I love it<3 And don't worry about not having it finished, always when writing things tend to get difficult or you get busy and writing is the last thing on your head. Sorry I haven't commented, but I have had my mind in other things, but I never missed and update!! Great work, keep it coming!!
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Post by Cara Halliwell on Jun 21, 2008 15:39:21 GMT -5
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Post by *Sammi!* on Jul 3, 2008 11:55:12 GMT -5
PCP where are you with the updates?! Need to know more about what happens!
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Post by pipercharmedphreak on Jul 3, 2008 12:41:28 GMT -5
Sorry it's been a while since the updates. I've been working like a dog, out of town, and recently sick. Anyways, enjoy the update!
“Let me make sure I’ve got this right. Instead of our focus being on Billie and Christy, it’s on the Triad. Right?” Paige double-checked the plan with her sisters. At the nod of Piper’s head she continued. “And we go about vanquishing the Triad how exactly? How did you three do it last time?”
“We didn’t.” Piper stated matter of factly.
Phoebe let out a chuckle. “Cole did.”
[Flashback (Episode 3.07 Power Outrage)
Triad #1: I warned you, Belthazor. I warned you what would what happen if you failed us.
Triad #2: He's done more than fail us. He's betrayed us. You've betrayed the source.
Triad #1: He's showed sympathy to the witches.
Triad #3: And squandered a golden opportunity. (A rotating ball of fire appears in Triad #3's hand.) You are allowed one final statement.
Cole: I've got nothing to say. Except...
(Cole pulls out a knife and throws it at Triad #3. Triad #2 throws a fireball at Cole but Cole disappears and it misses. He reappears behind Triad #1 and breaks his neck. He throws a lightning bolt at Triad #2 and he is engulfed in flames. Cole stands there and yells at the top of his voice.)
End Flashback]
Paige rolled her eyes. “Well, isn’t that just great. You know this whole situation just keeps getting better and better.”
“We could always summon Cole.” Phoebe suggested trying to sound lighthearted and hint at Coop’s offer.
“Ha! Very funny!” Prue avoided the suggestion. “And even if that was an option, we couldn’t do it. I mean from all that I’ve gathered you’ve vanquished him. We don’t summon dead demons sis.”
Piper remembered how Cole helped her out before. He had been hanging around before, so perhaps he had been around now.
Phoebe came back at Prue, “ We may not, but I know someone who can.” Her sisters looked at her with inquiring minds. “Coop. That’s what he came to talk to me about. He found a way to bring Cole back.”
Paige snorted. “You’re not actually considering it are you?”
“Of course I am Paige.” Phoebe raised her voice slightly. “I loved him. I married him. Cole…was the love of my life.” Phoebe brought her two hands to her heart, emphasizing her point.
Paige lowered her voice, “What was has changed from what is. Notice you said ‘loved’”
The room was silent for a moment as each of the sister’s took everything in.
Then Prue raised an eyebrow and broke the tension, “You married him?!”
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Billie sat on the floor of a silent hallway in magic school. She had been leaning against the wall. She held her head in her hands. Christy stepped quietly. She took a moment to watch Billie, before sitting down next to her.
“Hey.” Christy said softly.
Billie looked up revealing a tear-stained face. She wiped tears from her eyes. “Hey.” After a pause she continued, “This is embarrassing.” Billie let out a laugh.
Christy turned to Billie and began to stroke her cheek, helping to wipe away strands of hair that had become plastered to her face, as they were drenched with stray tears. “What’s so embarrassing about it? You’re my little sister. It's okay for me to see you cry.”
“You know, I really didn’t expect you to come find me. After the way you talked to me.”
“I’m sorry. Billie, I never meant to put you in this situation. The Triad…they…they’re strong. And I’m starting to think you’re right. Something feels wrong about this.”
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Coop looked into Phoebe’s eyes. “Are you sure you want to do this.”
Phoebe turned back to look at Prue, Piper, and Paige. Each of them gave a slight nod, signaling their approval. At this Phoebe gave her affirmation to Coop, to summon Cole.
“Take my hand. Think of Cole and nothing but Cole. Your love for him will enhance the magic of my ring and the spell.” Phoebe took Coop’s hand. She could feel his strength. Coop began to recite, “Powers of this cupid rise, throughout all planes across the skies, come to us and settle here, come to us who call you near.”
Phoebe completed the spell, “Heart to heart we summon thee, heart to heart return to me.”
The room was silent. They all watched as a body began to materialize before their eyes. Phoebe looked up at the face.
Phoebe whispered softly, “Cole.”
She swiftly walked over to wrap her arms around him. Cole embraced Phoebe’s hug, but had a confused look wiped over his face.
“I think you all need some time. I’d better get going.” Coop felt disappointed. As much as it was his job to bring love to other people’s lives, he fell in love with Phoebe.
Phoebe let go of Cole and walked over to Coop. Grabbing his hands she said, “Coop. Thank you so much for everything. You will always have a special place in my heart.”
Coop smiled and flashed out.
“Alright. I really am confused. What is going on?” Cole demanded to know. Between being back and seeing the four Halliwell sisters together he was unsure of what was occurring.
Piper placed her hands on her hip. “Well, Cole. We need to know how you vanquished the Triad.”
Cole let out a breath. “I was the mighty Belthazor. I could kill anyone I wanted. I was sinister, wicked, and intelligent. You’re not the demonic soldier of fortune for nothing.”
Prue put out her sarcastic tone of voice. “Well, thank you Cole for being such a huge help!”
After moments of being quiet, Paige piped up. “Wait, we may not need Cole. I think I have an idea.”
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Post by *Sammi!* on Jul 3, 2008 12:59:20 GMT -5
Cole didnt need to act that way! Good job with him though, I can imagine him in my head being really confused!
I feel for Coop, even though Phoebe and Cole are my favourite couple, he was really upset at the way that Phoebe had reacted to Cole.
I love the way Prue said "We dont summon the dead sis" that was so Prue!
I like the way youre building Billie and Christy up too.
Great update! Please dont make us wait as long for another!
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Post by ~.:Alysha:.~ on Jul 7, 2008 1:46:05 GMT -5
OMG! First I would like apologise for reviewing this for like a million years! I forgot all about it! But thankfully, I remembered! I absolutely love how you have written each character! They honestly sound like their true selves! Like the characters we all grew to love! You have such creativity, these ideas are fantastic! I love how Billie and Christy are beginning to realise that maybe it's not the best way! And how Prue is taking control once again, yet they arn't excluding Paige! I love your Coop! As mush of a Cole fan that I am, i'm beginning to like this Coop! Like many others have stated he is like the original Cupid! The good one, unlike the one we got stuck with! I still want Phoebe to send with Cole though lol! But i didnt like they way he spoke to everyone in your last update! No need to be smart! I can't tell you enough how much I love this fic! It's absoluetly brilliantly written and so imaginative! I wonder what's going to happen! Please please please update again soon! I NEED to know whats going to happen |
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Post by Esmeralda on Jul 13, 2008 17:24:47 GMT -5
First, many, MANY apologies for taking so long to review this update. Like you, I've been ultra-busy at work and very simply didn't have time. As such, I totally understand what took you so long to update. And sick, too?? Oh, you poor kid! Hope you feel a LOT better now! Now onto the review... First, huge smile for you letting your characters remember that it was indeed Cole who vanquished the Triad last time (which made me wonder just how powerful the Triad really were...as the Ultimate Big Bad, they stunk and should've stayed vanquished!) and getting to have a flashback; our first in a while. I loved everyone's reaction towards bringing Cole back; every last one of them was spot on. I especially loved the snorting and the sarcasm!! I also noticed and like the fact that Phoebe talked about loving Cole in the past tense...she's gotten past him. Of course, if Kern hadn't made him crazy and Phoebe Freebie during S5, that might not have been the case. But as is, you've got this down perfectly! And, oh, did I howl at Prue's reaction towards Phoebe marrying Cole! I wonder what Prue would think if she knew that Cole had become the Source and impregnanted Phoebe with an evil child. The whole BIllie/Christy scene made me smile. Funny. Rather than calling this fic "Blessed Be", I'd call it "Forever Sisters", not just due to my older siggy:  but because that, being sisters, is what this fic is all about, not about being witches...even Billie and Christy! Beautiful, sweetie; very simply beautiful! I especially love Christy, of all people, realizing that something's off... Coop having Phoebe thinking about her love for Cole in order to enhance the magic of his ring and his spell made me smile, as did the way you tweaked the spell to fit Coop. Beautifully, wonderfully done! My heart ached when Coop gave Cole a chance to be with Phoebe, but again it shows why I love him...because he loves Phoebe enough to want what's best for her not necessarily what's best for him, the reason why I think he's truly S2 Cupid and not S8 Coop. I ADORED Cole's response to how he was able to vanquish the Triad because it's SOOO true, and Piper's response back made me howl!! But Paige...oh, I'm simply dying to know what her idea is!! PLEEEEEEEEEASE update soon!! And, oh, if you weren't on my To Be Blessed list for a NUMBER of different reasons, oh, would I be scurrying over there to add you back! |
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Post by Piper3 on Jul 28, 2008 23:08:54 GMT -5
Wondeful job PCP. I am so sorry I haven't reviewed in like forever. I think it was a really good idea to bring Cole back. I love how you have all four sisters there because really Piper would go back to Prue not her mother.I also think you are doing a really good job with the charactors like really knowing who they are. I think Prue figured out that Paige is her sister but I am not quite sure. Thanks soooo much for writing this and I can't wait to hear more. Please bless us with another wonderful update soon.
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Post by pipercharmedphreak on Jul 30, 2008 13:48:25 GMT -5
Finally! I have made time for the update. It's been a crazy past couple of weeks but here it is at last! As always, thank you for your reviews. They all definitely bring a smile to my face.
Enjoy!
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Phoebe sat with the Book in her lap. Cole stood over her shoulder looking at what Phoebe had been writing. Phoebe felt a comfort with Cole lingering around as he was. She flipped the page and pointed to a spell.
“What about this one?” She asked, wanting Cole’s opinion before she wrote it down.
Not too long ago, Paige had something go off in her head. Something ticked inside saying that if this was supposed to be an ‘ultimate’ battle then they needed to go forward with full force. Prue had elaborated on the idea, adding in that they should make a combination of some of their strongest spells and potions. After all, an “Ultimate Battle” called for their most powerful magic; magic that had been used in the past eight years to vanquish their most powerful foes. From Jeremy to the Source and even a new charm here and there, The Power of Four agreed on how to tap into the Halliwell line.
Now, Phoebe sat in the attic creating a combination of these spells. She used Cole’s input when necessary. He had known a lot about magic, and having that extra bit of knowledge gave Phoebe more confidence.
“Eh. That one is primarily used for banishing rather than vanquishing.”
“Right. Of course. I knew that.” Phoebe made an attempt to protect her pride.
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A cauldron began to bubble over and steam as Piper reached for a bag of crickets sitting on the counter. She made a face as she pulled one out with a pair of tongs.
As if the first face of disgust wasn’t enough, she made another. “Nasty.” She mumbled to herself.
Prue made her way into the kitchen. She watched her little sister as she stirred the concoction. She walked with a natural grace over to Piper and leaned against the counter.
“How’s it coming?” Prue asked as she watched Piper stir.
“I’m not sure yet, actually. I’m making a combination of some of the strongest things we’ve got. If anything, it’ll stun them enough for us to say the spell.” Piper said, her voice glimmering with hope.
Piper turned her attention back to the potion.
“You know, it looks like you’ve come a long way in the past five years.” Prue mentioned, as she had noticed how Piper commanded the situation.
“Obviously, not far enough.” Piper retorted. “I just feel like I should have seen all this coming. But instead I’ve been too wrapped up in my own life. We all have. And as much as I hate to admit it, Billie and Christy are right. As witches, we’ve lost our way.”
Prue’s face softened and she stood up. “Well, instead of wallowing in self-pity, let’s just get this straightened out.”
Piper nodded. “Beetle toe?” She asked, reaching her hand out for Prue to give her the next ingredient.
Prue stretched to grab a jar. “Here ya go.”
Piper took a pinch from the jar and braced herself before putting the pinch in. Carefully, she took a step back and tossed it into the bubbling cauldron. Instantly, smoke accompanied the booming sound, leaving Piper and Prue coughing.
Paige walked into the smoke contaminated room. Waving her arms in attempt to clear the smoke she remarked, “Please tell me you’re not trying to blow up the kitchen again.”
Piper glared at Paige. “Very funny,” she in her ‘Sarcastic Piper’ tone of voice.
Prue watched the two as they briefly sniped at each other playfully, letting out a slight laugh when appropriate.
Paige put an end to the playing around as she set a wooden box on the island. “ I set a circle of crystals outside the Manor for protection. Precautions and all, just in case the Triad decides to attack us first.”
Prue gave her a nod of approval. “And just how many odd looks did you get from the neighbors?”
“Plenty.” Paige responded, “But I’m getting eerily used to them.”
Piper let out a chuckle as she began to fill potion viles with the blackish-brown liquid. “Not exactly the color I was going for, but it’ll do.”
Prue took a vile of potion for herself and Paige. Handing the concoction to Paige she said, “Great now all we’re waiting for is-”
Before Prue could finish her sentence Phoebe walked into the room.
“-Phoebe.” Paige finished Prue’s sentence.
In Phoebe’s hand were four copies of the spell. Each sister looked at one another; all just as nervous about the Battle as the next. The tension in the room had mounted up and now the time had come, the sisters were ready.
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Post by Cara Halliwell on Jul 30, 2008 17:17:19 GMT -5
oh my GOD have i missed some updates!!!! gosh, it seems like forever since i checked on this story. i'm glad i did!!!!!!!! FANTASTIC job on all of this, pcp. i love love love it. keep up the great work and i can't wait to read the rest of it!!!!!!!!!!!
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Post by heybethann9 on Aug 2, 2008 0:34:42 GMT -5
This is like having a new episode to see with each update I love it. I wish I could write like that.  |
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Post by Esmeralda on Aug 5, 2008 7:53:25 GMT -5
I'm SOOO glad that Real Life settled down a bit for you so you could update, PCP! I've been dying wanting to know what was going to happen!
Unfortunately, I didn't like this one as much as the other updates. I'm sure it was supposed to be a 'tweener, the proverbial "calm before the storm", but because it was, because it didn't have the drama, the suspense, of the earlier sections, I just didn't like it as much. Hopefully by my saying that, you now know for sure how very *very* much I love the earlier sections!
Although there were definitely parts that I *did* like.
This one made me grin...it's just SOOOO Phoebe!
Although I grinned, this one didn't quite sound right. Piper has made *so* many potions in the past few years, I doubt if she'd find anything nasty, unlike she would in the first couple season. Her not even giving it a second glance could've shown Prue just how far she has come.
Speaking of:
This, of course, is a line I've looked for for a long time, and might be why you needed the calm before the storm.
A bit like Piper's earlier line, I also feel like this isn't quite Piper. S8 Piper *knew* that everything she was doing was right; she wouldn't have realized that she and the others have lost their way, even after Prue had pointed out earlier that Christy and Billie are badly-used innocents. I was happily anticipating Prue giving her the whatfor she needed and Piper finally admitting it, so for her to just admit it herself was a bit of a letdown.
This should've been the cricket, giving Prue a chance to go "EWWW!" and Piper to be able to giggle at her.
My favorite bit of the entire update. Wonderfully done; each sister sounding just like herself.
Although the tension was definitely gone during this update, it doesn't prevent me from rubbing my own hands in anticipation. Can't WAIT to see what happens next!!
Please update soon!
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Post by pipercharmedphreak on Oct 18, 2008 15:16:34 GMT -5
Oh my gosh. I haven't update it ages, thanks to Real Life. *Blushes* However, there WILL be an update heading your way...THIS WEEKEND!!
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Post by Esmeralda on Oct 18, 2008 20:34:20 GMT -5
YAY! I can NOT wait!!
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Post by heybethann9 on Oct 19, 2008 1:30:34 GMT -5
I'm excited! It's like waiting for the season premiere of a show you love to watch and having to know you have to wait another day or two.
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Post by pipercharmedphreak on Oct 19, 2008 10:50:21 GMT -5
Thank you all for your kind words.
Cara: I'm also glad you checked on the story! It makes me smile to know that you can't wait to read more.
heybethann9: I like your take on how each update seems like a new episode. I'm positive you can write very well also.
Es: Yes, that whole previous update definitely was the calm before the storm. That whole section was difficult for me to write. I had to keep myself from adding a bit of action in there. ;)I can definitely see how those lines you pointed out didn't really seem like Piper. You are completely right. By now, Piper would have gotten used to the odd potion ingredients. And I can certainly see how I should have added Prue giving her sisters the whatfor. I'm taking those into consideration for editing before I post it at AC. (Hopefully you don't mind me changing those few bits, seeing as I agree with you completely on those points)
Okey dokey folks. Without making you wait any longer here it is:
“Where do we wanna do this?” Paige asked.
“The Attic. Where it all started. Where else?” Phoebe replied with a bit of nostalgia in her voice.
As the sisters climbed the stairs, Phoebe pulled Cole aside. Piper and Paige continued on their way, not noticing the absence of Phoebe or Prue, who stood around the corner waiting for Phoebe.
“Cole, please let us do this alone. This is our fight. Not yours.”
“I’m not letting anything happen to you Phoebe. You should know that.”
Prue listened to the conversation. She closed her eyes. The words seemed all too familiar to her.
[Flashback (Episode 1.22 Déjà vu All Over Again)
Andy: But if he is a demon and it turns out to be a trap?
Prue: I'll have Piper and Phoebe there to back me up. The Power of Three.
Andy: Plus one: Me.
Prue: No. You can't be there, Andy. That's where you were in Phoebe's
premonition when, uh ... just ... promise me you'll stay away.
Andy: I can't do that, Prue.
Prue: I mean it. Don't make me use my magic on you.
(Liking the wording of that, Andy smiles. Prue smiles back.)
Prue: I don't want anything to happen to you, Andy. You know how much I still
care for you.
Andy: (nods) Okay. I promise.
End Flashback]
“Cole you don’t have any powers. You can’t protect yourself. Do you think I’d bring you back just to watch you die?”
Prue heard enough. She could hear the strain in her sister’s voice. She also knew that having a conflicted mind going into a battle could have dire consequences.
“Pheebs,” Prue stepped out from her standing place. She tried to make it sound as if she hadn’t been listening in. “You ready?” She asked.
Phoebe let her eyes wander back to Cole. “Yeah,” she said, her vice a mere whisper. “Stay here,” Phoebe begged Cole once more. She gave him a quick kiss on the cheek before turning around and walking up to the attic with Prue at her side.
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“There you two are.” Piper said as the sisters walked in.
Phoebe and Prue looked around the attic. Piper and Paige had moved furniture and boxes out of the way, everything pushed next to the wall. They were going to need as much room as possible, especially since they had no clue what exactly was going to happen.
“Uh, we were just clearing a few things up,” Prue added quickly. She didn’t want to make Phoebe explain everything right now.
“Well alrighty then. Shall we get this show on the road?” Paige asked the rhetorical question. The mischievous gleam in her eye returned.
The sisters exchanged glances and joined hands. As each reached for the hand of another, they felt a surge of power. Together they began to chant, “ Reaching out through time and space, we witches now call to face, demons far or demons near, we seek to bring the Triad here!”
Suddenly a wind began to blow through the attic and three shadowy figures stood before them.
One of the members took a step forward. “What makes you think you can bring us here and destroy us?” He snickered, “Do you think good will actually overcome evil? Evil killed Melinda Warren, your mother, countless innocents, Andy…”
Paige interrupted the demon before he open any more wounds, “You have no right to talk about them. And we know that we will send you back to whatever hell you came from. For good.”
In that moment Phoebe’s shoulders scrunched up and her eyes closed.
The Triad drew closer together. Psychically they banded together to create a stream of fire. They hurled it towards the sisters. Piper tried to freeze the stream, but it was too much for her one power to block. Instead, the stream hit her and she was sent flying across the room. “Piper!” Phoebe could hear herself yell. With each of the sister’s attention turned towards the fallen Piper, The Triad began chanting. It was something in Latin. Something that made Phoebe’s flesh burn, her heart race, and made her lose her breath.
Mere seconds later, Phoebe’s attention was brought back to what was going on around her. Piper, Prue, and Paige had seen the look on Phoebe’s face plenty of times before to know that what she had seen had to be changed.
Phoebe spoke quickly, with warning, and in a low whisper so that only her sisters could hear her, “Stream of fire. Piper’s freeze doesn’t hold very long. They were chanting something. I think it created a counter effect to our spell. It-it killed us. They made our own spell kill us.” Phoebe felt mortified.
The moment the words glided from her mouth, the Triad stepped closer together.
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Cole paced back and forth downstairs. He let out a frustrated sigh. He sat down abruptly on a nearby couch and plopped his head into his hands.
“Having problems adjusting to being back?” An unknown voice said suddenly. Cole looked up, not knowing whom to expect.
“Uh, Coop right?” The Cupid nodded. “Thanks for bringing me back.”
“Well it was my idea, but it was Phoebe’s love for you that brought you here.” Coop never was one to take credit where it was due.
After a moment of the two looking at each other, unsure of what to say, Cole began to rant, “It’s not that I’ve never been powerless before, but last time I walked on this dimension as a physical being, I was full of them. And I’ve tried the mortal lifestyle before. It wasn’t for me. I couldn’t protect Phoebe and when I tried, I was turned into the Source. I’ve always been used to being powerful and strong.”
“But now, you get to be with Phoebe. Whether you have powers or not, Phoebe loves you. Isn’t that enough?”
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The flames roared closer to the sisters. Piper flung her hands out to freeze the waves coming towards them. They stopped for a moment. Phoebe drew in a breath of worry. Prue’s mind raced back to what Phoebe said moments before, Piper’s freeze wouldn’t hold. Instinctively, she brought her hand up in front of her, to create a magical block. Between the telekinetic hold and the freeze, Piper and Prue were able to keep a handle on the flames for a moment. The Triad grew angrier. They added more magical fuel to the fire. The stream grew larger.
“I can’t hold this much longer!” Prue called out with anguish.
“A little help here!” Piper exclaimed.
With the Triad’s attention turned towards the stream of fire, Phoebe was able to make her way over to the evil trio. One of the members eyed her, unsure of what she was going to do, but he kept his focus on the flames in an attempt to break through the hold. Phoebe gathered her strength, spun around, and kicked him - sending him flying across the room. The two others from the Triad let out a grumble and expected the third to get back up so they could begin their spell. Phoebe snickered. She always knew her martial arts skills came in handy.
At that moment Paige grabbed onto Prue and Piper’s shoulders. An array of blue orbs overcame them and an instant later they appeared on the other side of the room. The flames crashed against the wall, leaving scorch marks behind. Phoebe rushed towards their side. Again, the four sisters joined hands. This time they chanted louder than ever, “The Power of Four will make you no more; Patricia, Penelope, Melinda, Astrid, Helena, Laura, and Grace; Halliwell witches stand strong beside us; Vanquish this evil from time and space; No longer will you dwell; Death takes you with this spell; Drive these demons back to hell!”
The third Triad member was standing at last. They chimed in with a spell of their own, “Ostendo sum alica of bonus, attero veneficus!”
The two sides battled with spells. Suddenly, a force field of blue magic surrounded the Halliwell sisters. Piper smiled as she saw what was happening. The attempt to draw on the power of the entire Halliwell line was a success. They continued to chant. Finally flames surged over the feet of the Triad, the fire crawled up until each demon was engulfed in the flames. Then it happened. An explosion. The force of it sent the Halliwells flying back, in all directions. Smoke clung to the walls and the ceiling of the attic. Miscellaneous attic items were scorched or demolished. But the Book lay on its pedestal completely unharmed. The Triad was gone, at last.
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Billie and Christy still sat on the hallway floor of magic school. Together, they put the puzzle pieces together. Dumain and the Triad weren’t using them for their magic, or because they were the Ultimate Power; they were using them for their sisterhood, just as someone to get hurt or be killed instead of the evil. It was clear they had no intention of involving themselves in the Ultimate Battle anymore. No longer were they going to allow evil to manipulate them into being pawns in the game.
Up until that moment, magic school had been silent. It was an agonizing scream that echoed through the halls and broke the quiet. The sisters exchanged glances and jumped up, in search for the ear-splitting scream. At last, they found it. It was Dumain’s vanquish. Billie and Christy looked at each other. Dumain was a creation of the Triad, made to be devious and carry out the plans that they didn’t want to get their hands dirty with. If Dumain was gone, that meant the Triad was too. Billie and Christy hugged each other, relieved that the Charmed Ones has succeeded.
TO BE CONTINUED...
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Post by Cara Halliwell on Oct 19, 2008 14:00:24 GMT -5
o m g u have to update soon!!!!!!!!
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Post by heybethann9 on Oct 20, 2008 9:32:38 GMT -5
OMG talk about action packed! I love this story it is great and I got chill bumps just now reading it again ;D
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Post by Esmeralda on Oct 20, 2008 23:40:14 GMT -5
Es: Yes, that whole previous update definitely was the calm before the storm. That whole section was difficult for me to write. I had to keep myself from adding a bit of action in there. LOL, I can definitely understand that. You're so good at adding action, to have it so sedate must've been tough You kidding?? I'd be thrilled and honored! I know I took the comments I got from posting Charmed Forever to make Charmed Forever II, the version I posted at a couple of other sites (including AC) and I think those comments helped make it a lot better. So if you do the same with Blessed Be (Including, I hope, changing the title to Forever Sisters as opposed to Forever Charmed) when you post it there, I'd be the happiest admin you've ever ran across! YAY!! And I'm off! *reads* WOW!! Absolutely totally WOW! Now *that's* the fic we remember! Tons of action with everyone completely totally in character, but in YOUR character, the character we love, not the ones in Forever Charmed that I for one did NOT! Although as strange as it will sound after what I wrote about the previous section, some of my favorite parts of this one were conversations, like this: You haven't used any flashbacks for awhile, but, oh, was this perfect or what?? I felt SO much for both Prue and Phoebe! Beautifully, perfectly done! Even Prue calling her Pheebs (or as I usually spell it, Phoebs) a name hardly anyone called her after Prue was gone. Then there's this: OOOO! Sadistic monster! I SOOO wanted to kick their his a$$ for that! You truly created an Ultimate Evil here, SOOO much better than what the show did! Much as I loved the use of Phoebe's premonition power here (especially her sisters recognizing the look), usually she has to touch something to trigger one. Maybe have her brush against Piper? I'm glad you explained that, because I missed it, but OOO, there's those sadistic monsters again! But doesn't that make sense, to make the Charmed Ones be the ones who kill themselves? That's SOOO monstrously horrible! FANTASTICALLY DONE, girl! Especially using Piper's freeze, something mostly forgotten after she got her explosion power. YIKES! Although somehow the word gliding doesn't quite seem to fit here...exited, perhaps? Or escaped? Man, I adored this conversation! It just makes me love your Coop more and more and more!! And you SOO have Cole-with-no-powers perfectly in character here! I hope Coop has prevented Cole from repeating Andy's mistake, even if Andy did save the sisters! Oh, man, I love this! Plenty of action, plenty of suspense and that line is SOOO Piper that I cracked up! YAY!! I love that the Charmed One that the Triad would count as the weakest (no active powers) saved the day!! Wow! You're just putting everybody's powers to use, aren't you?? I'm glad each one has a role in getting rid of those creeps, ESPECIALLY this part: YAY! Great line!! Good job taking Prue's name out of the list (although it COULD be Melinda Warren's daughter) and that last line?? PERFECT!! OH! I wish the ending had been more like this! It seems a bit like the Ultimate Battle, but, OH, SOOO much better! Tremendously wonderful job describing this! I especially loved the fact that even tho the Halliwells went flying, the Book was perfectly AOK! YIPPEE! I'm so glad you let them realize that! If only Kern had looked at them and their situation that way! YIPPEE!! *cheers madly* Absolutely the best ending for the Jenkinses I could possbily think of!! OH, how I wish the show had handled it more like this!! I get the feeling we're getting near the end...can't WAIT to see how you end it! PLEEEEEEEEEASE update soon! And I'd bless you, but I'm SOOO far behind in my promised blessings, I don't know if I'll EVER catch up! |
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