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Post by Sasha on Sept 24, 2018 23:08:24 GMT -5
PHEEBS: Some new Deadline Articles: SASHA: PHEEBS: Feel free to edit, change, ask questions or note if something should be added or taken out. SASHA: Great job with these. Love them!
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Post by summerreading on Sept 25, 2018 6:31:50 GMT -5
PHEEBS: Some new Deadline Articles: SASHA: PHEEBS: Feel free to edit, change, ask questions or note if something should be added or taken out. SASHA: Great job with these. Love them! SUMMER: Great job. I love these. Maybe a little bit with Connie and the writers talking about remembering Classic Charmed with their parts.
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Post by pheebs on Sept 25, 2018 19:40:06 GMT -5
PHEEBS: Some new Deadline Articles: SASHA: PHEEBS: Feel free to edit, change, ask questions or note if something should be added or taken out. SASHA: Great job with these. Love them! SUMMER: Great job. I love these. Maybe a little bit with Connie and the writers talking about remembering Classic Charmed with their parts. PHEEBS: Thanks guys. Might work on writer interviews press release articles soon or on the weekend. I just will wait until more members assign an episode a writer.
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Post by Sasha on Sept 25, 2018 21:10:09 GMT -5
Feel free, to edit, change or ask questions?
I added a little hint of the plot that will become part of our season finale. Remembering S1 had no real story-arc, but the Inspector Rodriguez story was around for 3 episodes with hints. If you don't like this, take it out, I just added it in, but thinking it might not work? Love your input guys, and maybe this story should have been an earlier one in the season. I'm not sure?
I'm not as happy with this one than I thought I would be. So any suggestions would be nice.
Also was inspired by the suggestion of a story based on Patience and her daughters.
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Post by Ruth Marie on Sept 26, 2018 7:19:41 GMT -5
SASHA: Feel free, to edit, change or ask questions?
I added a little hint of the plot that will become part of our season finale. Remembering S1 had no real story-arc, but the Inspector Rodriguez story was around for 3 episodes with hints. If you don't like this, take it out, I just added it in, but thinking it might not work? Love your input guys, and maybe this story should have been an earlier one in the season. I'm not sure?
I'm not as happy with this one than I thought I would be. So any suggestions would be nice.
Also was inspired by the suggestion of a story based on Patience and her daughters.
RUTH: I think maybe having a different villain might be better or I'd switch the plot so Patience is kidnapped and Phoebe and Piper resolve whatever fight they have fearing for her safety. Maybe even a plot with a homage to Power Outage. With the Demoness of Rage having them fight where they temporarily lose their powers. I don't suggest the second, just ideas.
Just a suggestion Sasha and everyone?
I think the story just needs a little more. But that is what Team Charmed Cafe is here Sasha to help you.
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Post by summerreading on Sept 26, 2018 23:30:24 GMT -5
SASHA: Feel free, to edit, change or ask questions?
I added a little hint of the plot that will become part of our season finale. Remembering S1 had no real story-arc, but the Inspector Rodriguez story was around for 3 episodes with hints. If you don't like this, take it out, I just added it in, but thinking it might not work? Love your input guys, and maybe this story should have been an earlier one in the season. I'm not sure?
I'm not as happy with this one than I thought I would be. So any suggestions would be nice.
Also was inspired by the suggestion of a story based on Patience and her daughters.
RUTH: I think maybe having a different villain might be better or I'd switch the plot so Patience is kidnapped and Phoebe and Piper resolve whatever fight they have feared for her safety. Maybe even a plot with a homage to Power Outage. With the Demoness of Rage having them fight where they temporarily lose their powers. I don't suggest the second, just ideas.
Just a suggestion Sasha and everyone.
I think the story just needs a little more. But that is what Team Charmed Cafe is here Sasha to help you.
SUMMER: I think I'd change the whole rage part, we had the Banshee tapping into the family's unresolved grieve for Victor. This one doesn't seem fitting unless Peyton/Andrea uses the Demoness of Rage to get Paige away from her family when they are infected by rage and take it out on Paige, another part that gets her to become a warlock.
I think a story needing to rescue Patience might be better, or here's a suggestion, A Enter the Demon body swap plot, where Patience switches bodies with either Phoebe or Piper, that way they can understand each other better. Just throwing that out there.
Here's my edit:
What do you all think? edit, re-edit or ask questions?
Also, Sasha, if you want to revert back to your version, feel free.
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Post by Sasha on Sept 27, 2018 8:26:52 GMT -5
SASHA: Feel free, to edit, change or ask questions? I added a little hint of the plot that will become part of our season finale. Remembering S1 had no real story-arc, but the Inspector Rodriguez story was around for 3 episodes with hints. If you don't like this, take it out, I just added it in, but thinking it might not work? Love your input guys, and maybe this story should have been an earlier one in the season. I'm not sure? I'm not as happy with this one than I thought I would be. So any suggestions would be nice. Also was inspired by the suggestion of a story based on Patience and her daughters. RUTH: I think maybe having a different villain might be better or I'd switch the plot so Patience is kidnapped and Phoebe and Piper resolve whatever fight they have feared for her safety. Maybe even a plot with a homage to Power Outage. With the Demoness of Rage having them fight where they temporarily lose their powers. I don't suggest the second, just ideas. Just a suggestion Sasha and everyone. I think the story just needs a little more. But that is what Team Charmed Cafe is here Sasha to help you. SUMMER: I think I'd change the whole rage part, we had the Banshee tapping into the family's unresolved grieve for Victor. This one doesn't seem fitting unless Peyton/Andrea uses the Demoness of Rage to get Paige away from her family when they are infected by rage and take it out on Paige, another part that gets her to become a warlock. I think a story needing to rescue Patience might be better, or here's a suggestion, A Enter the Demon body swap plot, where Patience switches bodies with either Phoebe or Piper, that way they can understand each other better. Just throwing that out there. Here's my edit: SUMMER: What do you all think? edit, re-edit or ask questions? Also, Sasha, if you want to revert back to your version, feel free. SASHA: I love your edit Summer. Much better than mine.
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Post by prudencehalliwell on Sept 27, 2018 15:21:59 GMT -5
SASHA: Feel free, to edit, change or ask questions? I added a little hint of the plot that will become part of our season finale. Remembering S1 had no real story-arc, but the Inspector Rodriguez story was around for 3 episodes with hints. If you don't like this, take it out, I just added it in, but thinking it might not work? Love your input guys, and maybe this story should have been an earlier one in the season. I'm not sure? I'm not as happy with this one than I thought I would be. So any suggestions would be nice. Also was inspired by the suggestion of a story based on Patience and her daughters. RUTH: I think maybe having a different villain might be better or I'd switch the plot so Patience is kidnapped and Phoebe and Piper resolve whatever fight they have feared for her safety. Maybe even a plot with a homage to Power Outage. With the Demoness of Rage having them fight where they temporarily lose their powers. I don't suggest the second, just ideas. Just a suggestion Sasha and everyone. I think the story just needs a little more. But that is what Team Charmed Cafe is here Sasha to help you. SUMMER: I think I'd change the whole rage part, we had the Banshee tapping into the family's unresolved grieve for Victor. This one doesn't seem fitting unless Peyton/Andrea uses the Demoness of Rage to get Paige away from her family when they are infected by rage and take it out on Paige, another part that gets her to become a warlock. I think a story needing to rescue Patience might be better, or here's a suggestion, A Enter the Demon body swap plot, where Patience switches bodies with either Phoebe or Piper, that way they can understand each other better. Just throwing that out there. Here's my edit: SUMMER: What do you all think? edit, re-edit or ask questions? Also, Sasha, if you want to revert back to your version, feel free. SASHA: I love your edit Summer. Much better than mine. PRUDENCE: Great work. I think I like Summer's edit more. Sorry Sasha. But still the basis of the plot was good Sasha.
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Post by prudencehalliwell on Sept 27, 2018 15:31:05 GMT -5
PHEEBS: Some new Deadline Articles: SASHA: PHEEBS: Feel free to edit, change, ask questions or note if something should be added or taken out. SASHA: Great job with these. Love them! PRUDENCE: Love these!!!
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Post by Sasha on Sept 27, 2018 19:37:49 GMT -5
SASHA: Feel free, to edit, change or ask questions? I added a little hint of the plot that will become part of our season finale. Remembering S1 had no real story-arc, but the Inspector Rodriguez story was around for 3 episodes with hints. If you don't like this, take it out, I just added it in, but thinking it might not work? Love your input guys, and maybe this story should have been an earlier one in the season. I'm not sure? I'm not as happy with this one than I thought I would be. So any suggestions would be nice. Also was inspired by the suggestion of a story based on Patience and her daughters. RUTH: I think maybe having a different villain might be better or I'd switch the plot so Patience is kidnapped and Phoebe and Piper resolve whatever fight they have feared for her safety. Maybe even a plot with a homage to Power Outage. With the Demoness of Rage having them fight where they temporarily lose their powers. I don't suggest the second, just ideas. Just a suggestion Sasha and everyone. I think the story just needs a little more. But that is what Team Charmed Cafe is here Sasha to help you. SUMMER: I think I'd change the whole rage part, we had the Banshee tapping into the family's unresolved grieve for Victor. This one doesn't seem fitting unless Peyton/Andrea uses the Demoness of Rage to get Paige away from her family when they are infected by rage and take it out on Paige, another part that gets her to become a warlock. I think a story needing to rescue Patience might be better, or here's a suggestion, A Enter the Demon body swap plot, where Patience switches bodies with either Phoebe or Piper, that way they can understand each other better. Just throwing that out there. Here's my edit: SUMMER: What do you all think? edit, re-edit or ask questions? Also, Sasha, if you want to revert back to your version, feel free. SASHA: I love your edit Summer. Much better than mine. PRUDENCE: Great work. I think I like Summer's edit more. Sorry Sasha. But still the basis of the plot was good Sasha. SASHA: I did say I wasn't as thrilled with what I came up with. I'm glad someone took mine and edited it better.
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Post by Ruth Marie on Sept 27, 2018 23:02:36 GMT -5
SASHA: Feel free, to edit, change or ask questions? I added a little hint of the plot that will become part of our season finale. Remembering S1 had no real story-arc, but the Inspector Rodriguez story was around for 3 episodes with hints. If you don't like this, take it out, I just added it in, but thinking it might not work? Love your input guys, and maybe this story should have been an earlier one in the season. I'm not sure? I'm not as happy with this one than I thought I would be. So any suggestions would be nice. Also was inspired by the suggestion of a story based on Patience and her daughters. RUTH: I think maybe having a different villain might be better or I'd switch the plot so Patience is kidnapped and Phoebe and Piper resolve whatever fight they have feared for her safety. Maybe even a plot with a homage to Power Outage. With the Demoness of Rage having them fight where they temporarily lose their powers. I don't suggest the second, just ideas. Just a suggestion Sasha and everyone. I think the story just needs a little more. But that is what Team Charmed Cafe is here Sasha to help you. SUMMER: I think I'd change the whole rage part, we had the Banshee tapping into the family's unresolved grieve for Victor. This one doesn't seem fitting unless Peyton/Andrea uses the Demoness of Rage to get Paige away from her family when they are infected by rage and take it out on Paige, another part that gets her to become a warlock. I think a story needing to rescue Patience might be better, or here's a suggestion, A Enter the Demon body swap plot, where Patience switches bodies with either Phoebe or Piper, that way they can understand each other better. Just throwing that out there. Here's my edit: SUMMER: What do you all think? edit, re-edit or ask questions? Also, Sasha, if you want to revert back to your version, feel free. SASHA: I love your edit Summer. Much better than mine. PRUDENCE: Great work. I think I like Summer's edit more. Sorry, Sasha. But still, the basis of the plot was good Sasha. SASHA: I did say I wasn't as thrilled with what I came up with. I'm glad someone took mine and edited it better. RUTH: Any suggestions on the title of the episode?
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Post by pheebs on Sept 28, 2018 0:57:40 GMT -5
I did some new ones.
Feel free to edit, change, ask questions or even point out what might be missing or needs taking out?
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Post by prudencehalliwell on Sept 28, 2018 19:59:42 GMT -5
PHEEBS: I did some new ones.
PHEEBS: Feel free to edit, change, ask questions or even point out what might be missing or needs taking out?
PRUDENCE: Great job. I think wwhen S1 is complete. We can aadd the teasers in maybe.
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Post by pheebs on Sept 29, 2018 6:33:40 GMT -5
PHEEBS: I did some new ones.
PHEEBS: Feel free to edit, change, ask questions or even point out what might be missing or needs taking out?
PRUDENCE: Great job. I think when S1 is complete. We can add the teasers in maybe.
PHEEBS: Thanks. That's true. If anyone wants to add any teasers, go for it!
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Post by pheebs on Sept 29, 2018 6:54:28 GMT -5
SASHA: Feel free, to edit, change or ask questions? I added a little hint of the plot that will become part of our season finale. Remembering S1 had no real story-arc, but the Inspector Rodriguez story was around for 3 episodes with hints. If you don't like this, take it out, I just added it in, but thinking it might not work? Love your input guys, and maybe this story should have been an earlier one in the season. I'm not sure? I'm not as happy with this one than I thought I would be. So any suggestions would be nice. Also was inspired by the suggestion of a story based on Patience and her daughters. RUTH: I think maybe having a different villain might be better or I'd switch the plot so Patience is kidnapped and Phoebe and Piper resolve whatever fight they have feared for her safety. Maybe even a plot with a homage to Power Outage. With the Demoness of Rage having them fight where they temporarily lose their powers. I don't suggest the second, just ideas. Just a suggestion Sasha and everyone. I think the story just needs a little more. But that is what Team Charmed Cafe is here Sasha to help you. SUMMER: I think I'd change the whole rage part, we had the Banshee tapping into the family's unresolved grieve for Victor. This one doesn't seem fitting unless Peyton/Andrea uses the Demoness of Rage to get Paige away from her family when they are infected by rage and take it out on Paige, another part that gets her to become a warlock. I think a story needing to rescue Patience might be better, or here's a suggestion, A Enter the Demon body swap plot, where Patience switches bodies with either Phoebe or Piper, that way they can understand each other better. Just throwing that out there. Here's my edit: SUMMER: What do you all think? edit, re-edit or ask questions? Also, Sasha, if you want to revert back to your version, feel free. SASHA: I love your edit Summer. Much better than mine. PRUDENCE: Great work. I think I like Summer's edit more. Sorry, Sasha. But still, the basis of the plot was good Sasha. SASHA: I did say I wasn't as thrilled with what I came up with. I'm glad someone took mine and edited it better. RUTH: Any suggestions on the title of the episode? PHEEBS: Maybe one of these: A Warren Family Feud Or Walking a Mile in the Shoes of a Warren?
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Post by Esmeralda on Sept 29, 2018 15:37:45 GMT -5
SASHA: Feel free, to edit, change or ask questions? I added a little hint of the plot that will become part of our season finale. Remembering S1 had no real story-arc, but the Inspector Rodriguez story was around for 3 episodes with hints. If you don't like this, take it out, I just added it in, but thinking it might not work? Love your input guys, and maybe this story should have been an earlier one in the season. I'm not sure? I'm not as happy with this one than I thought I would be. So any suggestions would be nice. Also was inspired by the suggestion of a story based on Patience and her daughters. RUTH: I think maybe having a different villain might be better or I'd switch the plot so Patience is kidnapped and Phoebe and Piper resolve whatever fight they have feared for her safety. Maybe even a plot with a homage to Power Outage. With the Demoness of Rage having them fight where they temporarily lose their powers. I don't suggest the second, just ideas. Just a suggestion Sasha and everyone. I think the story just needs a little more. But that is what Team Charmed Cafe is here Sasha to help you. SUMMER: I think I'd change the whole rage part, we had the Banshee tapping into the family's unresolved grieve for Victor. This one doesn't seem fitting unless Peyton/Andrea uses the Demoness of Rage to get Paige away from her family when they are infected by rage and take it out on Paige, another part that gets her to become a warlock. I think a story needing to rescue Patience might be better, or here's a suggestion, A Enter the Demon body swap plot, where Patience switches bodies with either Phoebe or Piper, that way they can understand each other better. Just throwing that out there. Here's my edit: SUMMER: What do you all think? edit, re-edit or ask questions? Also, Sasha, if you want to revert back to your version, feel free. SASHA: I love your edit Summer. Much better than mine. PRUDENCE: Great work. I think I like Summer's edit more. Sorry, Sasha. But still, the basis of the plot was good Sasha. SASHA: I did say I wasn't as thrilled with what I came up with. I'm glad someone took mine and edited it better. ESMERALDA: I agree with all of you - fantastic idea, Sasha; great editing, Summer! Sasha, I like your foreshadowing, but I wonder if we should wait and fit it into one of the other episodes – Summer’s edit with her “But before they can celebrate a newfound mother-daughter bonding experience, Patience, Phoebe, and Piper have to rescue Paige and Prudence, and can they fit the spell to put Phoebe and Patience back in their own bodies?” is just *so* dramatic (especially after a slight Es-edit, hehehehe), I really think the extra paragraph takes away from that. So for the time being, I’m going to take it out. If you really want it to remain, I’ll put it back in. Along the same idea, I agree with you that this story would work better earlier in the season when Patience and her daughters are just starting to get to know each other better after her daughters grew up on the other side of the country, but that sort of shuffling will have to wait until we’re done with our 100 episodes. Again, Sasha, if you want to keep your last paragraph, I’ll put it back to Episode 21, right before the last episode of the season. ------------------------------- RUTH: Any suggestions on the title of the episode? PHEEBS: Maybe one of these: A Warren Family Feud Or Walking a Mile in the Shoes of a Warren?[/quote] ESMERALDA: I actually like the title "A Warren Family Feud' with "THE WARRENS WALK IN EACH OTHER'S SHOES" as the tagline. What do you guys think? Naturally, being Es, I had to edit the tagline slightly… Here's the rest my edit of Summer’s edit. Again, I’ll switch the episode number and/or the title/tagline if enough members think I should. ESMERALDA: So? What do you guys think?
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Post by Esmeralda on Sept 29, 2018 16:03:39 GMT -5
PRUDENCE: Many thanks to Es for the inspiration! ESMERALDA: My pleasure. Glad that your idea to do something with Patience's office inspired me to inspire you! SUMMER: Prudence, well-done!!! I' so proud of you for attempting to do one. I've been very busy this weekend, and haven't had a chance to do any myself. But I'm so pleased that others keep on adding to our count. PRUDENCE: ---------------------- PRUDENCE: The wording might need work, and some editing required if someone can work it a little better, go for it guys! Spring Break according to me googling I found in Salem it is between March 15 Friday Spring Break starts and March 25 Monday Spring Break ends, Classes start), so we can easily adjust the episode placement when needed to episode 16 which has an air date of April 7th. I'll let you guys title and tagline it. I can't think of anything at the moment. So feel free to edit, or change it? SASHA: Like the story connecting all the Warrens and Patiences job. PHEEBS: Glad you decided to do another one Prudence. Loving seeing more and more members having a go at them. ESMERALDA: I agree totally! Here's my edit: SUMMER: Great job! ESMERALDA: So? What do you think? Not nuts on my title or my tagline, so if anyone has a better one, let's hear it! I took out the bit of Patience taking pictures of things that hadn't happened yet because I don't know how that could happen. The other is bad enough. SUMMER: I like this story. I think what is happening is worse enough and perfect for our story. I suggested a tagline and added it to the press release above. Feel free to change it back, if needed? PRUDENCE: Looks much better Es. The tagline I think might need more work maybe and less long. Something simple like maybe will Patience lose everything important to her. Something like that maybe? I'm not great at taglines. But making a suggestion. SUMMER: I hope you continue to do more stories Prudence. Yeah the taglines maybe just need to be simple. Looking at the stories so far. I've forgotten Andrea has made her debut appearance in the other universe only. Unless of course she's present at Victors funeral briefly and we're to assume she's present but a press release doesn't mention that of course. I feel a story based around Patience and her daughters should be a focus of a S1 episode for one of the last few press releases we write up. I know we've had moments throughout the season. I just think one all around their relationship should be a key focus in a story. RUTH: I'd assume she would be at the funeral. I like the sounds of an episode based around those three. Not sure what plot though. ---------------------------------- ESMERALDA: Guys, I think I went back and edited my post after Summer quoted mine, so she missed my change and the rest of you just continued her version. My suggestion for the tagline is "GENTLE PATIENCE HAS KILLED?" Do you guys like that better than the longer "JEALOUSY AND HATE AGAINST PATIENCE MAY COST HER EVERYTHING INCLUDING HER INNOCENCE" Just in case I did any other editing on my edit (highly like for me, here's the way I show this episode right now: Is that the way we want it, or has it been changed since I posted that?
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Post by Esmeralda on Sept 29, 2018 19:38:20 GMT -5
ESMERALDA: I kinda like using that to show what we're quoting from... PHEEBS: Yes, something to do when we hit 100 episodes. Like I said earlier, my Deadline press releases are enough, for now, to make it feel real, since those are actually as real as you can get, so we do have something making it feel truly real with those. Here's some real Classic Charmed press release I found online for some real ones: ESMERALDA: First, does that last one make anyone shudder, thinking of Shannen directing an episode Kern wrote when you *know* that Kern knew Shannen would soon be fired when Shannen didn't? It also makes me think that this is something else to do when we hit 100 episodes - don't know about you guys, but I kinda like that format for these episode press release. So our first one would be: Like I said...I kinda like it that way. Something to do when we hit 100. And for those who want to include directors, we could.
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Post by summerreading on Sept 29, 2018 20:17:54 GMT -5
SASHA: Feel free, to edit, change or ask questions? I added a little hint of the plot that will become part of our season finale. Remembering S1 had no real story-arc, but the Inspector Rodriguez story was around for 3 episodes with hints. If you don't like this, take it out, I just added it in, but thinking it might not work? Love your input guys, and maybe this story should have been an earlier one in the season. I'm not sure? I'm not as happy with this one than I thought I would be. So any suggestions would be nice. Also was inspired by the suggestion of a story based on Patience and her daughters. RUTH: I think maybe having a different villain might be better or I'd switch the plot so Patience is kidnapped and Phoebe and Piper resolve whatever fight they have feared for her safety. Maybe even a plot with a homage to Power Outage. With the Demoness of Rage having them fight where they temporarily lose their powers. I don't suggest the second, just ideas. Just a suggestion Sasha and everyone. I think the story just needs a little more. But that is what Team Charmed Cafe is here Sasha to help you. SUMMER: I think I'd change the whole rage part, we had the Banshee tapping into the family's unresolved grieve for Victor. This one doesn't seem fitting unless Peyton/Andrea uses the Demoness of Rage to get Paige away from her family when they are infected by rage and take it out on Paige, another part that gets her to become a warlock. I think a story needing to rescue Patience might be better, or here's a suggestion, A Enter the Demon body swap plot, where Patience switches bodies with either Phoebe or Piper, that way they can understand each other better. Just throwing that out there. Here's my edit: SUMMER: What do you all think? edit, re-edit or ask questions? Also, Sasha, if you want to revert back to your version, feel free. SASHA: I love your edit Summer. Much better than mine. PRUDENCE: Great work. I think I like Summer's edit more. Sorry, Sasha. But still, the basis of the plot was good Sasha. SASHA: I did say I wasn't as thrilled with what I came up with. I'm glad someone took mine and edited it better. ESMERALDA: I agree with all of you - fantastic idea, Sasha; great editing, Summer! Sasha, I like your foreshadowing, but I wonder if we should wait and fit it into one of the other episodes – Summer’s edit with her “But before they can celebrate a newfound mother-daughter bonding experience, Patience, Phoebe, and Piper have to rescue Paige and Prudence, and can they fit the spell to put Phoebe and Patience back in their own bodies?” is just *so* dramatic (especially after a slight Es-edit, hehehehe), I really think the extra paragraph takes away from that. So for the time being, I’m going to take it out. If you really want it to remain, I’ll put it back in. Along the same idea, I agree with you that this story would work better earlier in the season when Patience and her daughters are just starting to get to know each other better after her daughters grew up on the other side of the country, but that sort of shuffling will have to wait until we’re done with our 100 episodes. Again, Sasha, if you want to keep your last paragraph, I’ll put it back to Episode 21, right before the last episode of the season. SUMMER: Thanks Es. I like this foreshadowing, but I agree with Es. I think it might fit better earlier in the season. Half wondering, if 'Reflections of the Dark Kind' would make a better fit as Episode 21, and 'A Warren Family Feud' being moved as episode 8. The revelation of Paige's child and Piper and Phoebe learning this would make a great end of season story. Sasha, if you really like that last paragraph, we could work that into one of the other S1 episodes that we felt didn't have a dramatic last paragraph, and just switch them around. Unless you can find a new story that might fit better with it, then we'd have a new press release. ------------------------------- RUTH: Any suggestions on the title of the episode? PHEEBS: Maybe one of these: A Warren Family Feud Or Walking a Mile in the Shoes of a Warren? ESMERALDA: I actually like the title "A Warren Family Feud' with "THE WARRENS WALK IN EACH OTHER'S SHOES" as the tagline. What do you guys think? Naturally, being Es, I had to edit the tagline slightly… Here's the rest my edit of Summer’s edit. Again, I’ll switch the episode number and/or the title/tagline if enough members think I should. ESMERALDA: So? What do you guys think? SUMMER: I love this edit Es and title plus tagline. I like the idea of this being episode 8, and switching it around with 'Reflections of the Dark Kind' to be episode 21. Unless Sasha really likes her last paragraph foreshadowing or wants to do a brand new press release with it.
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Post by summerreading on Sept 29, 2018 20:20:08 GMT -5
PRUDENCE: Many thanks to Es for the inspiration! ESMERALDA: My pleasure. Glad that your idea to do something with Patience's office inspired me to inspire you! SUMMER: Prudence, well-done!!! I' so proud of you for attempting to do one. I've been very busy this weekend, and haven't had a chance to do any myself. But I'm so pleased that others keep on adding to our count. PRUDENCE: ---------------------- PRUDENCE: The wording might need work, and some editing required if someone can work it a little better, go for it guys! Spring Break according to me googling I found in Salem it is between March 15 Friday Spring Break starts and March 25 Monday Spring Break ends, Classes start), so we can easily adjust the episode placement when needed to episode 16 which has an air date of April 7th. I'll let you guys title and tagline it. I can't think of anything at the moment. So feel free to edit, or change it? SASHA: Like the story connecting all the Warrens and Patiences job. PHEEBS: Glad you decided to do another one Prudence. Loving seeing more and more members having a go at them. ESMERALDA: I agree totally! Here's my edit: SUMMER: Great job! ESMERALDA: So? What do you think? Not nuts on my title or my tagline, so if anyone has a better one, let's hear it! I took out the bit of Patience taking pictures of things that hadn't happened yet because I don't know how that could happen. The other is bad enough. SUMMER: I like this story. I think what is happening is worse enough and perfect for our story. I suggested a tagline and added it to the press release above. Feel free to change it back, if needed? PRUDENCE: Looks much better Es. The tagline I think might need more work maybe and less long. Something simple like maybe will Patience lose everything important to her. Something like that maybe? I'm not great at taglines. But making a suggestion. SUMMER: I hope you continue to do more stories Prudence. Yeah the taglines maybe just need to be simple. Looking at the stories so far. I've forgotten Andrea has made her debut appearance in the other universe only. Unless of course she's present at Victors funeral briefly and we're to assume she's present but a press release doesn't mention that of course. I feel a story based around Patience and her daughters should be a focus of a S1 episode for one of the last few press releases we write up. I know we've had moments throughout the season. I just think one all around their relationship should be a key focus in a story. RUTH: I'd assume she would be at the funeral. I like the sounds of an episode based around those three. Not sure what plot though. ---------------------------------- ESMERALDA: Guys, I think I went back and edited my post after Summer quoted mine, so she missed my change and the rest of you just continued her version. My suggestion for the tagline is "GENTLE PATIENCE HAS KILLED?" Do you guys like that better than the longer "JEALOUSY AND HATE AGAINST PATIENCE MAY COST HER EVERYTHING INCLUDING HER INNOCENCE" Just in case I did any other editing on my edit (highly like for me, here's the way I show this episode right now: Is that the way we want it, or has it been changed since I posted that? SUMMER: That is perfect and less long. Unless someone can find a way to shorten the longer one and word it better, I'll take the simple short one.
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