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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:26:24 GMT -5
scififantasychic Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 231 (4/30/04 11:37 am) Reply Re: Unspeakable Consequences -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Oh, and another thing I love is that the Source is still around!
mkp3mom Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 20 (4/30/04 2:42 pm) Reply Re: Unspeakable Consequences -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- and the plot thickens.....so cool with the oracle! good job, charmed 12, keep up the good work oddball7 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 154 (5/1/04 3:46 am) Reply | Edit Re: Unspeakable Consequences -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- OMGOSH!!! trust me your hard work truly does show... this just keeps getting BETTER AND BETTER AND BETTER...AND OH YEAH BETTER!!!!!
Please keep up the great work and can't wait to read another update.
P.S. trust me I know about them big white voids on Word... I currently have one there myself lol. charmed addict Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 216 (5/1/04 5:21 pm) Reply Re: Unspeakable Consequences -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Hey oddball7, I also think this fan fic is getting better and better and better! You know why, because it is! CharmedFan, I can honestly say that this fan fic is a classic and should be put in an archive!!! I'm NOT kidding!!! It is so amazing!!! Keep it up!! amypooh321 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 32 (5/3/04 10:39 am) Reply Re: Unspeakable Consequences -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- NO! NO! NO!!!!
I paced myself... I read slowly... now I have to wait???
Ug.
I hate waiting...
Should have read slower.
MORE MORE MORE!!! oddball7 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 152 (5/3/04 10:14 pm) Reply | Edit Re: Unspeakable Consequences -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- hahaha i agree amypooh... i'm dying for mooore... i neeed moooooooooooooooooooooore! Esmeralda Posts: 489 (5/3/04 10:16 pm) Reply Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEZE!!!
We want an update SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOON!!!
Otherwise, here will be us: CharmedFan12 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 423 (5/5/04 10:00 am) Reply Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- hehe, I'm glad you like the Source and Oracle. They definately are good bad guys. lol amypooh, I'm sorry! lol. Here's a good update now, so maybe you could just...i dunno...oh, forget about that little wait that you had to endure? lol.
Please enjoy!!! Let me know what you think!!!
After they heard a knock at the apartment door, Piper and Melinda curiously went to see whom it was. As Piper opened the door with Melinda looking over her shoulder, they saw it was strangely Jamie and her bony faced mother. “Jamie? Ms. Parks?” Melinda asked as Leo walked in from the bathroom and stood a few feet away, also curious. “What are you doing here?”<br>“We need to talk with you,” Ms. Parks said, glancing down at her daughter. Melinda and Piper stepped out of the way and let the two in. “Wow, I can’t believe I’m finally meeting you, a Charmed One.”<br>“Is there something that I missed?” Piper asked, turning to Melinda. “Uh, yeah. I sort of accidentally found out that Jamie is a witch.”<br>“Do I want to know how?!” Piper asked, her hands springing up as they did when she started getting upset. Melinda pushed her hands down, and grinned sheepishly. “Do I want you to know? No.”<br>“Can we get you two something to drink?” Leo asked, changing the subject. “Yes please. Tea would be wonderful, if you have it,” Ms. Parks replied, smiling at the man. Leo nodded politely, before turning and walking into the kitchen. “So what are you doing here?” Melinda asked again, this time aimed directly at her peer. “Well…I sort of screwed up.” Melinda finally noticed how pale the girl had gotten. “What do you mean?” she asked slowly. “She was telling us about how a Charmed One and her daughter were living here in our little town at dinnertime, and our whitelighter had joined us.”<br>“I accidentally told them about your dad,” Jamie said quietly, and Melinda could almost feel the color draining from her face. “As soon as she heard, our whitelighter took off.” “Wait, hold up, what’s going on?” Piper asked, holding out her hands as if to say ‘slow down here’. Melinda turned to her with a frightened expression on her face. “The Elders know about me.” Piper’s expression matched her own, and she suddenly started running towards the kitchen. “Leo!” she screamed and Melinda was right on her heels. As they entered the small kitchen, their hearts stopped as they saw the tea packets scattered across the floor, a coffee mug and warm water spilling over the counter, and a chair knocked over on the floor, but no Leo. “Oh, god.” Piper knew what had happened: as Leo was getting the drinks, the Elders had pulled him up as they had the night of Piper’s failed wedding 15 years earlier, and he struggled not to be taken. Piper turned to her daughter. “Can you-?”
Ooh, cliffhanger. This last segment was so long I just found I nice little cliffhanger in the middle of a paragraph, lol.
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:27:00 GMT -5
scififantasychic Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 263 (5/5/04 10:07 am) Reply Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Nooo! No, no, no, no, no! Piper had better be asking if Melinda can go knock some Elder heads together, because they can not, no, they will not do this again! Please, save us from the cliff! amypooh321 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 37 (5/5/04 10:13 am) Reply Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Oh my gosh... THIS IS SOOOO GOOOD!!! I am torn ... I think I alost like this story better than the REAL charmed right now!! I know from your posts that you are relatively young (say, compared to me...) but you are so incredibly talented! I am on the edge of my seat to find out more. I love the character of Melinda. I love the struggle of Piper being a songle mom (so am I), and the forbidden love is so wonderful! I can't wait to find out about these two new witches... do they have a motive,, are they good, bad? Who knows! I want Leo and Piper to get back together!!! Also, an update on the other sisters back home would be good to. I am sure it is all to come, but as usual... I CAN"T WAIT!!! Esmeralda Posts: 505 (5/5/04 1:02 pm) Reply NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!! -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- NO! They can *not* take Leo away from Piper (and Melinda--and us!) again! I should know better than to read stories like this at work--I have tears rolling down my cheeks! I wish Jamie hadn't been such a loudmouth, but your setting up the plot this way--the way Melinda let her secret out at school, having Jamie *be* the loudmouth, so *their* whitelighter would go tell the Elders--WOW! But I don't understand--I thought the Elders had given Piper & Leo permission to be together--or was it supposed to just be in San Francisco? Whatever, I'm praying that somehow Melinda & Piper (and maybe the rest of the Halliwells--like Amypooh, I'm dying to read more about them; you write them all so well!) can find a way to BRING HIM BACK!!! PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEASE!! I won't show jumping emoticons (I wish there was a crying one!); I'm hurting too much, but how's this: Edited by: Esmeralda at: 5/10/04 10:06 pm Nat365 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 566 (5/5/04 2:00 pm) Reply Re: NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!! -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I think I can guess what's going to happen when Piper turns round. But, I will not say anything, so as not to spoil it, especially if I'm wrong, lol! This is a great update, got my heart in my mouth. Have you ever written anything else? Not neccesarily Charmed. Can't wait to read more. Oh, Esmeralda, I think they took Leo because they found out about Melinda, and are going to grill him about her. That is also why I am guessing as to what will happen next. They have permission to be together for a week, but they do not have permission to have a child, if that makes any sense. Edited by: Nat365 at: 5/5/04 2:03 pm The Blue Flamers Posts: 6 (5/5/04 4:03 pm) Reply You are MEAN!!! -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- How can you leave us with this cliffhanger? It's INSANE!!! You're MEAN... PLEEEEEEASE... Update SOOOON... We're dying here to know what happens next... Marina & Aida CharmedAgainPiper Posts: 138 (5/5/04 4:13 pm) Reply ooo -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- NOO!!! Come on Piper!! KICK THOSE ELDER"S @$$!!!! (oo please show her getting angry and distressed *thinks this to herself*) Ahh...*pulls hair out* NOO!!!! update soon PLEASE!! oddball7 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 169 (5/5/04 5:14 pm) Reply | Edit Re: ooo -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- okay yeah cliffy middle of paragraph... complete torture!!! You can't do this to us... and please dont' make us wait too long again I HAVE TO know what happens next... I have a pretty good idea what Piper is going to ask Melinda but that's beside the point because, "Can she?" Oh I hope so! Pleeeeeeease bring Leo back to Piper FOREVER!!! And Pleeeeeeeeeeeease update soon!!!! charmedone89 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 700 (5/5/04 5:20 pm) Reply Re: ooo -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- oh, common! You can't do this to us now!! Kowa97 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 61 (5/5/04 7:12 pm) Reply Re: Unspeakable Consequences -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Excellent place to end. Very,very,very good. I think you should have Melinda go up there and orb the Elders heads into a box until they send Leo back for good. Esmeralda Posts: 514 (5/6/04 12:53 am) Reply RE: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- That's a perfectly wonderful idea, Kowa! But if I know Charmed Fan, I'll bet her solution will be even better!! And I hope we get to read about that solution SOOOOOOOOON!! If not, here's me: mkp3mom Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 21 (5/6/04 4:00 pm) Reply Re: RE: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- UGH! I love/hate cliffhangers Hurry, please! charmed addict Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 232 (5/6/04 5:14 pm) Reply Re: RE: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Hey Esmarelda, I think you like this emoticon a lot! U use it practicaly EVERYWHERE! LOL! OH MY GOD!!! CharmedFan, you are mean! I was just getting into it, and you just end it! Oh well, I guess that EVERY good writer knows exactly where to put a cliffhanger, and you most certainly know, so I believe that would make you a good writer.............. umm maybe not! How about an AMAZING WRITER!!!!!!! Love this fan fic sooooooooo much that I'm actually dreading the day it ends because then, there will be no more "Unspeakable Consequences"! Ok, forget what I just said! Keep it up, IT ROCKS!!!!!!!!!!!
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:27:48 GMT -5
Esmeralda Posts: 532 (5/6/04 11:01 pm) Reply To: Charmed Addict -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Yeah, I guess I do pout quite a bit!! But that's what I do when I have to wait too long for an update!! And this one definitely needs updating SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOON!!!!
Edited by: Esmeralda at: 5/10/04 10:07 pm CharmedFan12 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 426 (5/7/04 10:02 am) Reply Re: To: Charmed Addict -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Wow, I can't believe the response that came from such a tiny post! I'm thrilled! Thank you all so hugely much!
Elder head knocking? Sounds cool. lol. I just accidently typed "banging" instead of knocking and I'm imagining these rockers in white robes and long white beards...What the heck kind of reality did I step into? lol.
If you think that this is better than the show, I'll take that as a good compliment! I do love the character Melinda too, and that's a reason this story has been taken so far. If a writer does not like a character that they've been writing, wouldn't they not enjoy writing the story? I'm thankful that I have great characters to manipulate and make other characters out of. And about the two new witches? They are good. Motive? Eh...I don't think so...they might! Who knows! (Not me, lol). And about the update on the sisters...you are completely right, and that is the reason I'm remodeling some of my unread story! I was so caught up in Melinda and Piper that I forgot that they really needed to see their family. Problem is being fixed! lol!
Esmeralda, you have tears rolling down your cheeks? Really? My...I'm sorry I made you cry, lol! The Elders allowed Piper and Leo to be together, but it was a limited amount of time. The little amount of time that was left in their week was taken away when the Elders heard of their disobedience.
Have I ever written anything else? I have six stories on Charmed; the ones posted on this board are ones I've taken seriously. There was one goofy story I was writing with a fellow Charmed fan where the two of us went to Cali to go kill Kern...that story hasn't gotten very far, lol. I have recently started writing the beginning to an X-Men (the movie) story, but that was mainly to satisfy the urge to write it. That's really it, about the stories.
I wasn't trying to be mean! I'm trying to be conservative, haha! I needed a stopping point and I thought that this place would be appropriate enough! lol.
Oh, don't pull your hair out! I'm sure you have nice hair! (hehe, she has hair, and she's not pulling it out! haha.)
I'll try not to make everyone wait too long, but it won't be right away. Sorry to say, this post is NOT AN UPDATE.
See, someone liked my cliffhanger! Thanks Kowa! You think that she should orb their heads in a box, huh? *scratches chin* hehe.
Thanks Esmeralda! You really have that much faith in me? I'm touched!
Ooh, another person who loves (/hates) cliffhangers. Good for you.
Don't dread the day this ends! I'll be celebrating when this thing is done! Almost a years worth of work done, finally! Of course, I going to have a sequel...
Hehe. Unfortunately, as I have said before, this post is not an update. I'm really sorry to say. I have just wasted all of your precious time just so I could talk to everyone. I really wanted to though! I love you guys! oddball7 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 198 (5/7/04 4:31 pm) Reply | Edit Re: To: Charmed Addict -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- awww... i figured it was too good to be true when i saw you as the last post on UC. But i had to check it out... and i definately forgive you b/c i couldn't be mad at you for something i accidentally did earlier this week on my fan fic. But please keep your word and don't make us wait much longer for an update... i wanna know what you have in mind for Piper/Leo/Mel... and i'm glad to hear that your including some more of the sisters... They sure have become a big family to keep track of!
But once again hurry and update soon!!! Thank you!
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:28:57 GMT -5
charmed addict Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 237 (5/8/04 4:57 pm) Reply UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- CharmedFan12, it's time that you knew the truth........... You have a gift! ............................................................. A GIFT OF WRITING AMAZING FAN FICS SUCH AS THIS ONE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! LOL I'm sorry, but I think I've said that this is a good fan fic in every possible way! So Keep it up! IT ROCKS!! CharmedFan12 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 428 (5/10/04 9:58 pm) Reply Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Wow, I love you all so much! You're the greatest people! You fill me with a wonderful happiness that I can't seem to come by in the non-virtual world. Thanks for that. Thank you for all of the positive comments and thank you for all of the appreciation! (I know I've said this all before,but I needed to say it. )
Alright, I checked the date, and I figured five days of torture was enough! Yay! Update! Enjoy!
“Can you-?” Before she could finish, Melinda had already grabbed both of her hands and they orbed out. Melinda closed her eyes and concentrated: she’d never even attempted that before. Once her feet felt the familiarity that was solid ground she opened her eyes. Before her stood a magnificent hall filled with pillars that held no roof. Marble floors and walls surrounded them, and an eerie foggy brightness made Melinda squint. “I did it,” she breathed out, amazed and terrified at the same time. She felt her mother shudder next to her. “Are you alright?” “No,” Piper responded, before looking around and finding the room she was searching for. A large doorway that reached higher than their sight allowed them to find stood against one of the stone walls, and they made their way towards it. “You ready?” Melinda asked, looking at her mom’s determined face, and they started walking to the door. As soon as their feet stepped through the door, there were yells and cries as many whitelighters started running their way. Melinda held out her hand and sent two flying back into the wall, and to her left Piper was gesturing, sending the whitelighters up in orbs before they reappeared in heaps on the ground. More came, and they were thrown back and blown up just as easily. Their anger pushed them forward, and soon anyone who tried to sustain them was on the ground unconscious or was struggling to get up. It was Melinda’s turn to shiver at the place; she remembered it from the vivid dream that she had not days before. It gave her the creeps, but she put off the feelings. She ignored the blue haze that came into her vision; she was starting to get used to it. “What is the meaning of this?” the head Elder shouted at them. “Why don’t we turn this around for a sec,” Melinda said, stepping forward casually, while out of the corner of her eyes seeing her dad struggle against his captors. “What on earth do you think you are doing?” She was not intimidated by them. “Watch your mouth,” the Elder said forcefully. “You must be this child I heard about.”<br>“Could ya be a little bit more specific?” Melinda said, keeping her feet moving slowly through the room so she wouldn’t have them staring her down, or at least she wasn’t as worried about it. “I’m sure you have heard about a lot of kids,” she said, a smile tugging at the corners of her mouth. All her life she dreamed of the moment where she would have her chance against these beings. “The child of the Charmed One and her whitelighter.”<br>“Oh yes!” she exclaimed, the smile coming full to her face. “I have to tell you, it’s really nice being both. Ya get so many nifty powers!”<br>“Silence!”<br>“Hey, I wasn’t done,” Melinda said, humor in her eyes. She looked over at her dad, and he nodded at her with a smile. “Learn your place half breed!” the Elder ordered her bitterly, with stern gray eyes peering from under his white eyebrows. Melinda stopped her pacing, and turned to face him, face now filled with indignation. This was no longer just a game that she was trying to manipulate. Piper cried out in anger at the elder being’s declaration, and Melinda heard Leo say a few choice words behind her. “My place is right here, between you and him,” she said sharply, pointing to Leo. She huffed out a breath, and looked at her mom’s pain filled eyes as Piper watched the display in front of her, with their future in the hands of her daughter and these apathetic creatures. “He has done nothing wrong!”<br>“Do not talk about what you do not understand! He has broken countless rules, including loving the witch! And here, you stand before us, and question our decision? You are living proof of his wrongdoing! What gives you the right to challenge us?”<br>“The right I have is that I am alive! The right I have is that I love them, and I don’t want to see them in any more pain!” Piper and Leo looked to each other, and smiled, despite the grave circumstance. Leo’s heart leapt when he heard what his daughter had said. She loved him too.
I figured that would be a great place to stop. Please tell me what you think. Pretty please with great gobs of something really yummy.
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:31:02 GMT -5
Esmeralda Posts: 549 (5/10/04 10:20 pm) Reply FINALLY!!!! -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- YES!! FINALLY!!! Someone finally let one of the Charmed family tell off the Elders!! And for it to be Melinda, a "half-breed" that the Elders can't stand--that couldn't be more perfect if you tried! It's like Paige or Wyatt or Chris doing it!!! And for her to have such powers and to be using them and for her to try to prove to the Elders the power of something they've obviously long forgotten about--THE POWER OF LOVE!!!--YES!! GO, MELINDA!!!!
But what will happen now that Melinda has given them what-for? Will Leo be punished? Will Piper? Will Melinda? OR DO WE FINALLY GET TO SEE SOME REAL-LIVE ELDER A$$-WHOOPING???!! (Three guesses which one I'm hoping for and the first two don't count!! Especially because you do fight scenes so well, CharmedFan12!!)
Please post again soon!! Even little updates are better than none!!! Man, I love this story, and wish *this* was the one being televised now!!!
P.S. I've just recently found out that I somehow missed out on reading the section about the Source and the Oracle!! I'm so excited about my two favorite bad people making it into *this* AU (Alternate Universe), where they haven't been vanquished yet!! Can't wait to see what you do with them--once you get Piper, Leo & Melinda out of *this* mess!! Just don't let the Source take over one of the Charmed Ones or one of their guys--PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEASE!!! Charmed hasn't been the same since that happened!!
Edited by: Esmeralda at: 5/10/04 10:43 pm Charming PL Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 30 (5/10/04 10:39 pm) Reply Re: FINALLY!!!! -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- OH MY GOD!!!!!! I don't know what else to say. Esmeralda put it so great that there is nothing left. The Charmed Ones finally get to experience the thrill that the Elders's are about to get their ass' wooped.
Charming PL oddball7 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 229 (5/10/04 10:54 pm) Reply | Edit Re: FINALLY!!!! -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- woop wooop woop! yeah yeah!! wahoooooo! bring on the elder-butt-kicking-of-the-century!!!!!!!!! GO MELINDA KICK SOME ELDER #$%!!!! Alright CharmedFan12... esmeralda pretty much summed it up for all of us.... now lets see some butt kicking updates! pleeeeeease . As esmeralda said, "shorter IS better than none"
I'm so excited about this elder whooping that i just might have to borrow a few of esmeralda's jumping men to unleash some of this excitement!
nanny nanny boo-boo elders are going to get their butts kicked!
Edited by: oddball7 at: 5/10/04 10:55 pm scififantasychic Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 317 (5/10/04 11:45 pm) Reply Re: FINALLY!!!! -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Yes, indeed. But it seems some of those Elder butts are already smarting. Shall we give them another round? I think so.
Esmeralda Posts: 555 (5/11/04 12:43 am) Reply Re: FINALLY!!! -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- ROFLMAO!! Oh, SciFi & Oddball, you two are cracking me up!!! I *do* hope that you two let *your* characters do some Elder-a$$ whooping in your own stories!! The more Elder A$$ is gra$$ the happier Esmeralda will be!!!!
Oh, I've got my fingers crossed that this is what we get to see!! C'mon, CharmedFan12, just a nice, short update about Melinda doing some major Elder-a$$-whooping and I'll fill this whole entire message area with jumping emoticons!!! Here's a start:
charmed2008 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 782 (5/11/04 7:40 am) Reply Re: FINALLY!!! -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- That was really a great updat!! I think that i Want to try and bet Esmeralda with the emocions for onece! lol
Whew! I think thats enough!
Edited by: charmed2008 at: 5/11/04 7:42 am amypooh321 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 40 (5/11/04 9:18 am) Reply Re: FINALLY!!! -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- AWESOME UPDATE!!! Your scenes are so vivid and true to character! I really do wish the televised Charmed was as passionate as this story, like it used to be. When I read your story, Charmedfan12, I am reminded of how Charmed use to be to watch. It was not as silly as it can sometimes be now. You have such an amazing gift fro writing, and I am sorry if you do not get that kind of validation in your other-than-virtual-life... YOU SHOULD!!! Maybe you should write a book! Go on tour and sign autographs!!! Woo-Hoo!!! Famous!!!
Ok, now the begging... MORE PLEASE. I really should never have caught up to the current posts. Now I have to wait for more.
Post soon!
AP The Blue Flamers Posts: 10 (5/11/04 12:22 pm) Reply WOOOHOOOOO!!!! --------------------------------------------------------------------------------
'T was about time!!!!! We were desperate for an update... And yes, five days of torture were more than enough, we hope this isn't repeated!!!!
Great update, as always!!! Let us tell ya that your fics are awesome! We LOVE them!!!
Update sooooooon!!!!! Pleeeeeeeeeeeease... Otherwise you won't have two very happy reviewers here next time...
Marina & Aida Kowa97 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 62 (5/11/04 6:01 pm) Reply Re: WOOOHOOOOO!!!! -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Ok, Now what you need to do is put Melinda up against the actual Elder councel. Heck, Put her up against 3 of four at once and let her loose. There are many elder extremities that she can call for and taunt them with. That would be hilarious. Good job RedPhoenix Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 242 (5/12/04 1:11 am) Reply Re: Unspeakable Consequences -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- WWWWWWWWWWOOOOOOOOOOOOOOWWWWWWW!!! you are such a great writer!! pls write more soon! by the way, how many pages is this in MS Word? Nat365 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 576 (5/12/04 12:08 pm) Reply Re: Unspeakable Consequences -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Charmedfan12, this story is really amazing. U should re-start this topic though. You get a lot of new readers, as well as your regular ones, and they have to scroll through all the comments to find the updates, and sometimes miss them. I can tell you, I missed your latest one! You should take the whole story so far, and post it as one post in a new topic, then update from there.
Amazing update! It was cool that Piper and Leo let Melinda be the one to stand up to the Elders, like they knew that it was something she had to do. Esmeralda Posts: 575 (5/12/04 12:59 pm) Reply To: Nat -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- No, I disagree. Unless CharmedFan12 wants to do this one story like a trilogy (which I hope she doesn't), it's better for the full story to be as one thread--makes it easier for new readers to read the full thing. As long as you hit the last page of each story that you've been reading, you can usually tell if you've missed an update or not.
The problem is that there's so many new stories going on right now that the story often gets pushed off to the second page before you get online and miss the fact that it's been updated. I know I've missed a number of updates and have been frustated.
Hey, people, I just had an idea. Does it make sense to start an Update thread? Each time an author starts a new story, he/she could start a new post with the title, author and link, and then whenever the author updates her/his story, she/he can just go to that thread and update that story's post, showing when he/she updated. That way all the reader would have to do is just check that thread and find out whether the reader's favorite story(ies) have been updated and go there via the link.
Whatcha think? If enough people agree, I'll get it started.
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:31:23 GMT -5
Nat365 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 577 (5/12/04 2:06 pm) Reply Re: To: Nat -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- That might be a good idea. But esmeralda, i think you misunderstood. I didn't mean for the story to be started from where it's been left off. I meant for the whole thing to be posted as a new topic. Everything in the story so far. That way, people can read what has been written, without 'wow, this is amazing' posts between updates, and so they would be able to read it all, without missing anything.
Of course, only if the story is saved as a whole somewhere other than here. It would be annoying to have to go through every update and cut and paste it. Not to mention time-consuming! Esmeralda Posts: 579 (5/12/04 2:39 pm) Reply Gotcha -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Gotcha, Nat; I did misunderstand. That would be up to CharmedFan12, whether she actually has the full thing somewhere else, the way I have Charmed by Love in Microsoft Works and just copy and paste from there. Because you're right; copying and pasting would be a *real* pain!
Of course, part of my problem is I like all the comments between, like watching commercials that you enjoy between sections of the show. But if enough people bug CharmedFan12, maybe she will. oddball7 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 235 (5/12/04 4:31 pm) Reply | Edit Re: Gotcha -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- yeah I agree w/ esmeralda... i actually come to the stories and see what all everyone else had to say about it while waiting for the updates lol! It's like a good version of commercials
And I think the update thread would be pretty cool! Cause I know there is days when it seems like every writer updates their story at around the same time on the same day and the first writer's update is to the second page in a hot-jumping-bean-second.
My story has been there done that lol!
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:32:20 GMT -5
Kowa97 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 64 (5/15/04 1:06 pm) Reply Re: Gotcha -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Please update. I am dying to see Melinda kick some more elder A**. It's already been five days and I am drooling for more CharmedFan12 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 430 (5/15/04 11:29 pm) Reply Re: Gotcha -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Wow, thank you all for the reviews! They're wonderful. I'll have a more personal post tomorrow when I update tomorrow. I'm not on my computer, otherwise I'd update. Thanks Kowa for the heads up! CharmedFan12 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 431 (5/16/04 2:03 pm) Reply THIS IS AN UPDATE, IT'S JUST GOT A LOT OF A.N.s. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Alrighty! I can't believe all of these reviews! I'd have thought that there would have been a emoticon limit, but alas, there appears to be none, lol!!! Esmeralda: 49 CharmingPL: 1 Oddball: 13 Scifi: 10 Esmeralda (again, lol): 80 charmed2008: 142 (holy crap!) TheBlueFlamers: 15 (That almost seems like a small number now, doesn't it?) Kowa: 14 RedPhoenix: 5 Nat365: 2 Oddball (again): 1 Kowa (again): 2 Wow. That's not even all of the reviews. Some didn't even put smilies. You people are amazing! All of you! (Oh, you all don't need to put smilies up just so I can count them again, I am NEVER doing this again. It took me a good 10+ minutes to do!) All together that is...334 smilies just after that last update. I think that's right...Yeah, that's right. Wow.
lol, Esmeralda! Can I call you Es? hehe. She can't REALLY beat them up! If she did, she'd never get Leo back! We wouldn't want that to happen! Instead, how about we all contribute to a mockery Elder *ss-woopin' extravaganza?! You can start a thread Es! (lol, that's fun.) Or I could! Yeah, I will. ALRIGHT, VOTING TIME. Would you all rather have a story line in which Melinda and the Charmed gang kick butt or would you like to have a "101 Ways to Kill or Torture Elders" thread? I've done the latter, and it's fun. Please let me know what you want!!!
lol, you are all hilarious, thanks for the laughs! Look what you've done Es, you've created an army of smilie warrior Elder killers!
Oh, charmed2008, you definately did beat Esmeralda in the smilie battle! Congrats! lol!
amypooh, I really do agree with you with the new eppis. I was reading the spoilers and not only are they rediculous, they are completely contradictory! I'm glad I don't watch the show anymore! I was watching P3H2O the other day, and I just wish Charmed were still like that. Except with more P/L. hehe.
Sorry Blue, it will be continued. I can't afford to update like I used to, once every day, for I've only got about 10 pages left and an update takes up a couple pages.
RedPhoenix, this story is 98 pages in Word (I'm almost there! Two more pages!) I started this story on April 12, 2003 at 8:04 PM. That means that it has been one year, one month, three days, 13 hours and 46 minutes since I've started. Ugh, math sure is terrible on the weekends. I'm not even sure if that's correct. I think it is. There has been 12,634 minutes of editing time. That's...*gets out the calculator again*...210.56667 hours; 8.7736111111111125 days. That's 1.25337301587301587301587301785714 weeks of continuous editting time. Whew.
Es, I personally don't think that the Update Thread is the best idea. It would be to confusing. What I do with my other story if I no one has noticed that I've updated and it's on the very bottom or the second page, I simply "bump" it up with a " " or a " " or whatever I feel like having. Just putting a smilie isn't very obvious that you are bumping, but you are getting your story back to the top where people are looking. It works, I assure you.
Wow, okay. I'm just going to update now. I'm really exhausted! lol. It's that math, I tell you. This is a good update, so I won't update for a while after it. It was three pages long in Word. Enjoy everybody!
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:32:37 GMT -5
“The pain that is created is their own doing, and your existence is nothing but a mistake!”<br>“Are you so sure?” asked a feeble old man’s voice off towards the end of the marble table. The head Elder turned his head at his coadjutor. “Are you sure that it was a mistake?” “What do you mean?” demanded the head Elder in his roaring voice. The other Elder pointed his shaking hand in Melinda’s direction. “She’s no ordinary being, I don’t think. Am I the only one who noticed the peculiarity of her eyes?” Melinda remembered the blue haze that was in front of her eyes that she had long forgotten, and she glanced at her mother, who was looking back at her, who had already noticed the supernatural shine in her child’s eyes, but didn’t say anything. “What are you implying?” the head Elder asked. “Well, I have been thinking while the two of you have been arguing,” the frail man said, waving his bony, arthritic-looking hand between the main Elder and Melinda. “What if she is the Prophesied?” “The Whosa now?” Melinda asked, narrowing her eyes. Another Elder spoke from the quieter side of the table. “Thousands of years ago, a wizard had a vision of what he said was a powerful magical being. ‘Upon the heavenly canopy of Earth, There would be a child conceived Above. Through mighty beings she would birth And thy beings would share an eternal Love. Powerful shall thy child be Whose eyes are but a divine pool. The child shall be the key That will end Evil’s rule. The mighty beings’ Love will long time endure, Angel and sorceress they shall be. Forbidden will be their Love but water-like pure, And the child will be born in secrecy. The child, whose gifts will be many Will have strength enough to offset Evil. Long needed will such power be But losses will come out against their will.’<br>Long forgotten has been this prophecy. I had not remembered it for many hundreds of years now. Long ago, however, much time was spent trying to understand everything that could be understood from this passage, when we thought that Good was suffering badly.” Melinda’s mouth was slightly hung open as she listened. She couldn’t believe it. She couldn’t formulate words either. She looked at her mom, and her eyes held fear above all. Leo stood still. That was his daughter. That was about them. “Once we had given up trying to predict the coming of this being, we forgot about this. A mistake if there ever was one.”<br>“What does this mean?” Piper said softly, but loud enough to echo slightly in the ghostly room. She could finally get words out. “It explains why she’s here, and her purpose,” said the third Elder, whose hood rested lightly on top of this shimmering white hair. “What does it mean about them?” Melinda asked sharply, referring to her parents. “It means that they broke the rules and had you, mistake or not!” the head Elder shouted, coming out of this period of silence. “What’s going to happen to them?” she asked, looking at the frail Elder. “They-” started the held Elder, when the other Elder’s hand silenced him. “Uriel, let me say something. Child, even though you were meant to come about, it doesn’t change the fact that your parents have disobeyed us.”<br>“But sir, they’ve already suffered enough!”<br>“Your existence is a blatant disregard for our rules!” Uriel, the head Elder, sounded throughout the hall. “It’s not like they meant to have me, but come on, it’s not like I’m a bad thing here,” Melinda said, looking at the hooded Elder. His hands were held thoughtfully in front of him, and his wise eyes stared down into her own magnificent ones. “Does this mean that we should now reward them after their defiance?”<br>“It means that you could have some compassion.”<br>“Child, what we shall do is discuss this and reach a logical, fair decision on all of this. What you must do, however, is leave. We will send a whitelighter as soon as we have come to a decision. Until then, you must wait patiently. Now take your mother and go.” It was another Elder this time, one stern but fair sounding. Melinda shifted her weight slightly as she looked at him. “What about him?” she asked, looking back at her dad, who was still trying to shrug off his guards. She figured the Elders weren’t letting him orb or something. “He will stay.”<br>“Why?” No response came from them, and so Melinda voiced something else that she had on her mind. “What about her sister’s whitelighter? My cousin was hurt demonically, and the whitelighter didn’t do anything. I had to help him because the guy you assigned didn’t do his job!” “We cannot control every move our whitelighters make, as you can see as you are standing there.”<br>“But he hardly helps them!”<br>“Leave, now.” Melinda decided it best not to argue anymore, and she walked back to her mom, grasping her forearm and they both glanced at Leo before they disappeared in a swirl of orbs. As Leo watched them orb away, he turned to the Elders. “What are you going to do with me? Are you going to let me go back?” he asked, trying to get his arms free. “You are going to be locked up until we decide what to do with you,” Uriel said severely. “Secure him!” The whitelighters roughly held him, and carried him off to the containment chambers that he was held in with Piper over a decade before. They ushered him into the room and threw him on the stone floors, before they started to leave. “John! John, why are you doing this? I’m not the bad guy!” Leo asked one of the whitelighters, as they were about to slam the door shut. “I know you aren’t. But it’s this, or end up like you.” John shut the door behind him, and Leo stood up and ran towards the door. “John! John! Get back here!” he shouted, while knowing that it was no use. He turned around, slid down the door onto the hard floor, and pulled his knees to his chest. John clearly told him that he was a disgrace. He just wanted to be with the people that he loved most; was that so hard to understand? Leo put his hands up and combed his hair with his fingers. Worry consumed him, and so did longing. He wanted to see them, both of them, again. He soon fell into an uncomfortable sleep.
Review!!! Go easy on the smilies, lol.
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:33:20 GMT -5
amypooh321 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 41 (5/16/04 2:34 pm) Reply Re: THIS IS AN UPDATE, IT'S JUST GOT A LOT OF A.N.s. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- YUMMY!!! Loved it! I was watching P3H2O the other day too and was thinking about what a deep, wounderful eppy it was and why they weren't like that anymore.
Good job again! You are going to have a lot of work to do because the summer is comming and there are no new eppisodes on tv... I am leaving it in your hands to keep me submersed in the charmed world thru your stories while the cast and crew are on break!!!
Love it!
AP charmedone89 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 727 (5/16/04 3:08 pm) Reply Re: THIS IS AN UPDATE, IT'S JUST GOT A LOT OF A.N.s. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Oh my god. That was so good. You better have them end up all together!! I mean they are meant to be together. And nice job making up that prophecy. That was a really cool Prophecy. That is amazing how powerful Melinda is. She can wipe out evil! This is so good. You must update more soon. CharmedFan12 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 432 (5/16/04 3:31 pm) Reply Re: THIS IS AN UPDATE, IT'S JUST GOT A LOT OF A.N.s. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Thanks you two! Yes, I will be keeping busy over the summer writing a sequel to this. I've been planning it in my head a little, but we'll see how it works out. Thank you charmedone89. I appreciate it, I spent a lot of time on that section. I truly did.
Don't forget about the Elder bashing! I want to know what you think about that!!! charmed2008 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 801 (5/16/04 3:58 pm) Reply ezSupporter
Re: THIS IS AN UPDATE, IT'S JUST GOT A LOT OF A.N.s. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- That was sooo good!!
Edited by: charmed2008 at: 5/16/04 7:07 pm Nat365 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 581 (5/16/04 4:14 pm) Reply Re: THIS IS AN UPDATE, IT'S JUST GOT A LOT OF A.N.s. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I'm pretty sure someone said 'easy on the smilies' lol! Seriously though, u should edit and cut down. That is way too many, and the moderators might put a smily limit or summit! Very good update, btw. Kowa97 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 65 (5/16/04 5:17 pm) Reply Re: THIS IS AN UPDATE, IT'S JUST GOT A LOT OF A.N.s. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I think Charmed2008 has a heck of a lot of time on their hands. Either that, or your story is just that good. Personally, I think it is the latter. Thak you for the update. I have to agree that the Prophecy was absoultely excellent. Could have been written by Nostradamus himself. (if he wrote longer prophecys that is) I give you a Googolplex of thumbs up on that one. (If you don't know what a Googolplex is, Back to the Future part 3. "Clara was one in a million, one in a Billion, One in a Googolplex.) Bravo Bravo Bravo charmed2008 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 802 (5/16/04 5:27 pm) Reply ezSupporter
Re: THIS IS AN UPDATE, IT'S JUST GOT A LOT OF A.N.s. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Personally Nat I dont think that the smillys are hurting anything since this is the only story I do this on! And plus I not going to be at this cafe to much longer because its going downhill soooo much!!!! Esmeralda Posts: 624 (5/16/04 6:49 pm) Reply Re: Lots of A/N -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- It's getting awful close to time to watch the season finale of Charmed, so I'm going to read the actual update later, but I got such a kick out of reading your A/N's, that I knew I'd have to respond to that.
First, sure, you can call me Es! I like it! Someone else called me Essie for awhile, and I like that, too. Since I tend to nickname people quite a bit myself (I'm the one who started calling scififantasychic SciFi--I hope she doesn't mind--and a few others, like calling people their screen name without their number--although you I call CharmedFan12, just because there's so many other Charmed Fans out there. I might try CF12--would that work?), I sure don't mind if other people want to shorten Esmeralda! After all, that's 9 letters! (See? I can count, too!)
Second, sorry for getting the smilie war started; that truly was not my intent. I just wanted to show how much I love this story and how much I wanted to see an Elder-a$$ whooping!! I did not want to goose others into doing even more! The thought of you counting all those ones! WOW!
And, yeah, you're right that if Melinda *was* allowed to do some Elder a$$-whooping that Leo would be punished, and we certainly don't want that. Besides, in my own story, Charmed by Love 2, I was rewriting Morality Bites and I was reminded--Wrong things done for the right reason is still the wrong thing--and that the Charmed Ones are supposed to be protecting the innocents, not punishing the guilty, and I guess that's what Melinda would be going against if she beat them up. Oh, well!! I'm glad in your case cooler heads prevailed--they wouldn't have in mine!!!
But can't Melinda do it metaphorically when she gets back--pretend her pillow is the Elders and whomp on that? I'd even take that!! But more, I want her and Piper and Leo to show these heartless creatures what it means to love!!
I also like your idea of 101 Ways to Beat up an Elder! That sounds like great fun!! I'm not quite sure this would be the right Forum for it, but since we don't appear to have a moderator (I hear KatHalliwell hasn't been around for awhile), why not push the envelope a little? Unfortunately, my imagination's not as good as a lot of the other writers (the reason my own story is so-much based on the series and the reason why I think I'm a better reviewer than writer), so I think I'll let you start it.
I can't believe how long you've been working on this story and posting it! My full story (Charmed by Love 1, 2, & 3, which I wrote as a single story last summer) was over 100 pages, but that's in Works--you get a lot more lines in Word--I have that at work. I *do* hope we can talk you into continuing this as a series, even (hopefully for your sake!) it's not as long as this one. I just love this AU you've created!!!
I haven't had enough response to get my update thread going, so I'm not going to. Your idea of just sticking in an emoticon is a cool one! Have to keep it in mind!
As far as I'm concerned, Charmed hasn't been the same since Constance Burge left. If she was still around, you *know* there wouldn't be as many inconsistencies, the way Brad Kern allows. So I don't blame you for not watching, CF12--I do just because it's habit and because I want to see what happens. But no doubt the earliest ones are best; that's why I love watching them on TNT. I wish they'd only show the first 3 seasons, then go back to the beginning (sorry, Paige & Chris fans--nothing against those characters, just against the writers!) That's part of the reason why I love your story and a lot of the other ones in this Forum so much--wishing that the show was still like them.
WOW! This response is a lot longer than I originally planned--I could've read the update! But it's time to go to my friend's place, so we can have supper and watch the finale. ENJOY THE SHOW, EVERYONE!!!
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:33:46 GMT -5
Nat365 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 584 (5/16/04 7:12 pm) Reply Re: Lots of A/N -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- That's 1610 emoticons. And I don't think the cafe is going downhill. Anyway, I'm not gonna post anymore till the next update, seing as how this thread is so long already! charmed2008 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 803 (5/16/04 7:23 pm) Reply ezSupporter
Re: Lots of A/N -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I erased them for you your hinass! CharmedFan12 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 434 (5/16/04 7:41 pm) Reply Re: Lots of A/N -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- lol, you two are funny! I can't believe that you counted all of those emoticons! That must have taken forever! lol, charmed2008, thanks for the laugh. The prospect of me counting all of those after I counted the others seemed horrific, haha!
Es, I'm glad you like the nickname, hehe. It suits you, I think. Also, CF12 is my preferred nickname, actually. When I used to be big around this forum for posting about the show and having discussions and debates, I would always sign my posts CF12. I think I did in the beginning of this thread. Eh, Kowa's right, this thread is long. That was a long time ago. If you ever look at reviews at fanfiction.net and you see CF12 as the name (which isn't very often, mind you), *gabs thumb at self* that's me. It's so much easier than CharmedFan12 or CharmedFan I think.
The Elder bashing thread can go in here because not only is it a take off from my story, it can be in story like form. It's made up, so they can't really get all mad at us or anything. Like I've said before, I've done this thread at another forum with a friend and it was okay in the fan fic area.
The question is, what would everyone prefer? Story format with all of our Charmed characters from all of the series, or list format with no character restrictions? oddball7 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 244 (5/16/04 7:43 pm) Reply | Edit ezSupporter Re: Lots of A/N -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- ooooookay wow! that was a lot of math! whew! And next of all kind of like the idea of 101 ways to kill of the elders... i can think of a few myself
And next of all GRRRRRRRRRREEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAATTTTTTT UPDATE!!! The prophecy was sooooo good! And almost a 100 pages? GEEZ! I thought I was bad since I had almost 20 pages in works on 8 pt font.
But ooooooh I can't believe your planning on making us wait longer since you gave us a good update...... but I guess since i get to watch the season finale in just a little bit then i'll be good for a while ..... oh i sooooo can't wait to see it!
And I can't wait for another update!!!!
(just a couple of emoticons.... what can i say they're addicting ) charmedone89 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 731 (5/16/04 9:21 pm) Reply Re: Lots of A/N -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Yeah, the elder bashing was great. I have always wanted someone to tell the Elders off. I mean they just piss me off. If I could I would go "Up There" and kick their butts and tell them off! Esmeralda Posts: 625 (5/16/04 11:15 pm) Reply Re: 101 Ways to Kick an Elder A$$ -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Almost forgot. Thinking about whether I'd rather have a thread showing the different ways you could kick an Elder a$$ or a story that shows Melinda and Co. doing it, I say BOTH!! First run a thread letting people show how they'd do it, with each one counting (so the first idea would be 1, the second 2, etc.), then CF12 (thanks for letting me call you that!), you write a story using all 101 ideas!!! How's that???!!! NOW, I'm *finally* going to go read the update!!! Esmeralda Posts: 626 (5/16/04 11:26 pm) Reply Re: The Update -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- WOW!!!! I still think Uriel either needs to have *his* a$$ whooped or be kicked out as the head--he's reminding me too much of Gideon and I *truly* don't need *that* reminder right now!!! Even the fact that they don't seem to care that the other whitelighter isn't helping his charges still make me want to see their a$$es kicked! But seeing what happened on the finale and shaking with fear over what the writers are going to do to Leo for killing an Elder, I again say that your way of doing it is a lot better.
I agree with the others, the prophecy was beautifully written and fits the situation you've set up *so* well!! BUT will it let Leo be free to re-join the others? Please update again soon!!!
I'm back to my point of hurting so much to show jumping smilies--adding it to the pain from watching the finale, I definitely can't. So how's this:
CharmedFan12 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 435 (5/17/04 12:31 am) Reply Re: The Update -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Well, my idea actually was to have a completely interactive thing were people can all write their own senarios and short stories or something. That way, it'll be enjoyable for everyone! Maybe people could submit ideas if they don't want to write and other people could write them or simply their own ideas. Anyway it works, I think.
It also works for more than just people who like my story. If someone wants to have Andy kill or torture the Elders, or Cole, or Marge (hehe, remember her? She was funny. Ms. Hellfire, I think it was. hehe) if they want, it's completely up to them! What do you think? Esmeralda Posts: 629 (5/17/04 12:56 am) Reply Re: 101 Ways to Kick the Elders' A$$es -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- That sounds like fun, too, CF12--whichever way you want to do it!! Just make it clear in your intro that there's no consequences to any of the actions people take--just have fun and get our aggression out!!
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:34:12 GMT -5
scififantasychic Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 371 (5/17/04 9:47 am) Reply Re: 101 Ways to Kick the Elders' A$$es -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- We need a hostile take-over in Elderland. The way you have the other Elders act, they're almost likeable in their fairness, and some of them actually seem to have and ounce of *gasp* compassion. So why do they allow this anal-retentive Uriel be their leader? GRRRRR.
Great prophecy, like everyone else said. Now if the Elders can just get over their "we're always right even when we're wrong" complex, things will go better!
Charming PL Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 32 (5/22/04 11:15 am) Reply Re: 101 Ways to Kick the Elders' A$$es -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- You've got to update again soon. Its SOOOO good.
Charming PL charmed addict Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 261 (5/22/04 10:51 pm) Reply Re: 101 Ways to Kick the Elders' A$$es -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Hi everyone! How have you been? I'm bored over here at 11:00 PM! Hey CharmedFan12, love the fan fic, it rocks!!! And I found the emoticon wars pretty funny! Ok, so I'm just sitting here listening to Evanescence while catching up on my favourite fan fics! So, CharmedFan12, love the fan fic! I feel so bad for Leo . I hope the Elders let him go and live with Piper and Melinda! Yeah, so I'm gonna go now. See ya, and keep up the good work with the fan fic!
Definition Of HERO: Chris Halliwell!
Edited by: charmed addict at: 5/22/04 10:56 pm CharmedFan12 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 439 (5/24/04 7:46 pm) Reply Re: 101 Ways to Kick the Elders' A$$es -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Thanks everyone so much! I'm so sorry I haven't updated; I stayed the weekend at my grandmothers and stayed later than I thought I would. I was going to last night but my computer went nuts and the rest is history.
Anyway, enjoy!!
As soon as Piper and Melinda’s feet touched the ground, Piper started pacing. Her fingers were covering her mouth and she was obviously deep in thought. Melinda looked around the room, and was shocked: furniture was turned, and knick-knacks were thrown all over the floor. A bookshelf was turned over, and its books were lying all over the floor. Picture frames were scattered all over the floor, and the glass in them was broken. Jamie and her mom were no where to be seen. She looked back at Piper, who was completely oblivious to the room’s appearance as she paced her short distance and she stared at her shoes as she did so. “Mom,” Melinda said softly, but there was no response. “Mom!”<br>“What?!” Piper exclaimed, looking at her daughter with an expression that showed just how overwhelmed she was. “I, uh…the room.” This is when Piper looked up and stopped dead when she saw their home thrown about. “This can’t be happening. Sarah!” As expected, a shower of orbs appeared a few feet away, and Sarah looked relieved. “I’m glad you’re back.”<br>“We weren’t gone very long. What happened here?”<br>“You were gone for a week, and you had demons come a pay you a visit. I couldn’t do anything about them, I’m sorry.”<br>“What? A week?” Piper asked, shocked, while dropping on the couch, dismayed. Melinda couldn’t say anything, but waited for Sarah to continue. “You forgot, time moves differently Up There. You’ve been gone for a week, today would have been the seventh day.”<br>“Of course,” Piper mumbled, almost soundlessly, while running a hand through her hair. “Demons?” Melinda finally muttered, looking at her whitelighter, who nodded. “A couple days after you left, they came in here, tore apart the place looking for you. More came another couple days after that.”<br>“This is too much,” Piper whimpered. Melinda went over and knelt in front of her, and rested her head in her mom’s lap. Piper fingered Melinda’s hair before she started sobbing. “I can’t do this again.” Melinda looked up at her mother, who was crying into her hand silently. Melinda then turned and looked at Sarah, who understood and orbed out. “I know,” Melinda said softly, while tears clouded her vision; tears that she would never allow herself to let fall. After a moment, Piper looked into her daughter’s hazel eyes, ones that shone a more of a brown than a green in the dark room, and moved off of the couch so she was kneeling next to her. Piper threw her arms around her daughter and Melinda could feel the tears soaking into the shoulder of her sweatshirt. Melinda wrapped her arms around her mom’s slightly trembling frame, and they sat there like that for a long time; neither would be able to tell you how long. “I love you so much,” Piper whispered once she found her voice again. “I know, I love you too.” “I wish I were as strong as you,” Piper told her, and Melinda leaned away, bewildered. “You are strong,” Melinda told her, as if it were obvious. Piper sniffed and wiped her face with her hand. “God, I’m not.”<br>“Where do you think that I get my strength from?” Melinda told her quietly, and Piper couldn’t help but have a smile form at the corners of her mouth. “Thank you sweetie,” Piper said, and hugged her daughter once again. Melinda relished the comfort that her mother gave her, and she tried to keep her breathing regular. Her mom was right when she said before that everything was just too much. Everything was thrown on them in just a few minutes’ time. It was a lot to handle, and she was overwhelmed. “I don’t want to lose him again. I don’t want to lose you.” “You aren’t going to lose me,” Melinda said, her brow furrowed in confusion that her mom would think something like that. “I just keep hearing over and over in my head, ‘but losses will come against their will.’ I hate everything; I hate that you have this destiny, and I hate everything that Leo and I have gone through…” “Everything?”<br>“No…of course not everything. I mean the struggles. I could never hate the happy moments that he and I shared; if they never happened, then you wouldn’t be sitting there, and that would make me sad,” Piper said with a small smile, and Melinda chuckled at her mom’s small attempt at humor. Her face grew serious once again. “I just have this horrible feeling in my gut that I’ll never see him again.” Melinda couldn’t find anything to say to that; she also couldn’t say that she didn’t have the gut feeling either. She was scared that she would never feel the content again that she felt as she saw her parents together; she was scared for her dad and what the Elders may do to him; she was scared of her finally revealed destiny. What if her mom was right, and she wouldn’t live after her destiny was fulfilled? She couldn’t put her mom through that pain. She had already gone through enough, and lost enough. She wasn’t really afraid of death, but afraid of the impact upon others that would come from death. Of course, 14 year old girls shouldn’t have to worry about death, but Melinda knew that she wasn’t like other kids her age at all. Memories flooded back to her, memories of the last week. Or at least the last week Melinda had actually experienced. She remembered laughing. She remembered her father’s grinning face peering over the edge of the bed, playfully mocking her fall from the mattress. As she looked into her mom’s tired and troubled face, she wondered if she would ever, could ever feel that joy again, and the comfort of Leo changing their lives for the better once again. “Come on, go get some rest, you’ll feel better,” Melinda said softly, and stood up before pulling Piper up. Piper nodded, and she headed into her bedroom. Melinda then looked around the room and cringed at the mess. With a sigh, she waved her hand and the chairs and the bookshelf went back to their upright positions, and with another wave books landed sloppily on the bookshelf. They weren’t in order at all, but she didn’t care. Melinda looked down at her feet and found a picture frame, and she bent down to pick it up. As she looked at it, she realized that it was a picture of her and her mom, when she was seven years old. She liked the picture because they were both happy in it. He wondered when they would ever be that happy again. Once she had picked up all of the glass from the pictures, she exhaustedly headed towards her bedroom. She didn’t want to be alone then, so she looked into her mom’s room. She was sitting up with her pillow resting on her chest. She was zoned out in thought. “Can’t sleep?” the teenager asked, and Piper looked up to see Melinda leaning on the doorframe, looking at her. “Nope…Come on,” Piper told her, scooting over and patting the area of bed next to her. Melinda walked over and climbed in next to her mom. Melinda let out a long breath, trying to relax herself, and she closed her eyes. She wished that maybe the Powers That Be would give her a chance to see what was in store in their future, if she would ever see Leo again, or what destiny had planned for her. She sighed, seeing nothing, and tried to fall asleep with the consolation of knowing that she had her mom. Soon enough, she fell into a hardly restful, but dreamless sleep.
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:34:30 GMT -5
charmed addict Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 282 (5/24/04 8:04 pm) Reply Re: 101 Ways to Kick the Elders' A$$es --------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Wow! That is soo sad!!I feel soo bad for Piper and Melinda! God the Elders are JERKS!!!!!!!! I'm very pissed off right now!!!
Anyways, I loved your latest update!! Your fan fic kicks butt!!! Keep up the good work!!!
Definition Of HERO: Chris Halliwell! charmed2008 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 916 (5/24/04 9:17 pm) Reply ezSupporter
Re: 101 Ways to Kick the Elders' A$$es -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Yea that was really good!! Hope you update soon! Esmeralda Posts: 700 (5/24/04 11:41 pm) Reply Re: 101 Ways to Kick the Elders' A$$es -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- WOW! If that didn't show why we need to find 101 Ways to Kick the Elders' A$$es I don't know what would! I pray that Melinda's destiny is somehow to convince the Elders that they are wrong and to let Leo come back to his family.
Funny, as I was reading this, I had a song in the back of my head. Garth Brooks' The Dance:
And now, I'm glad I didn't know The way it all would end The way it all would go. Our lives Are better left to chance I could've missed the pain. But I'd've had to miss The Dance!
I hope eventually both Melinda and Piper can feel that way, the way I feel about my mom!
I won't put in any jumping emoticons; I hurt too much, but how's this:
:loveit :loveit :loveit
Edited by: Esmeralda at: 6/3/04 9:26 pm scififantasychic Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 431 (5/25/04 1:04 am) Reply UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- That was such a wonderful update. You've got us on an emotional rollercoaster! I just hope we can go up from here.
Edited by: scififantasychic at: 5/25/04 1:05 am oddball7 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 347 (5/25/04 7:01 pm) Reply | Edit ezSupporter Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- *i need a kleenex* that was just sooo.... so good! ... but i am sooo sad now.
great job charmedfan12
and please update soon so we can see if Melinda and Piper will in the end be happy even after these "Unspeakable Consequences" amypooh321 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 47 (5/28/04 11:53 am) Reply Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Is there more or is this the end? THERE HAS TO BE MORE! PLLLLEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAASSSSSSSEEEEEEEEE!!!
This is my favorite story! CharmedFan12 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 443 (5/29/04 6:00 pm) Reply Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Updating!
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:35:33 GMT -5
CharmedFan12 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 444 (5/29/04 6:05 pm) Reply Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- This isn't the end! You'd know if it is the end because I'd be rejoicing and rubbing in everyone's face my success. (You can tell I REALLY have spent a lot of time on this.) Anyway, this update's nice and really long, so in compensation I'm not going to update for another few days. That void is becoming might close, and that does not make me happy. Well, enjoy!
“We haven’t heard anything about their location, Sire. But I believe that they aren’t gone permanently, they certainly aren’t dead.”<br>“You’re right, I would know,” the Source responded to his minion Kegar. Kegar was rocking back and forth on the soles of his feet. “Don’t give up, I want them dead. Keep sending your best men.”<br>“Well, sir, most of my men were lost in the battle,” Kegar responded, cringing just in case the Source would lash out. “I know,” the Source responded with a growling sigh. “Send the best you have left then, I want them dead! Especially the half breed, do you understand Kegar?”<br>“Yes, Your Ignominy. Perfectly.” Kegar bowed quickly and hurried out of the room, and rushed over to find some demons willing to go after this being.
Melinda came into mindfulness, but didn’t open her eyes. Her eyes did spring open when she heard a crash of glass falling and shattering in the other room. She sat up, and looked at the clock; it was 3:24 in the morning. She sensed the house, and recognized evil auras nearby. She looked over, saw her mom was still sleeping, and shook her awake. “I think that our home wreckers are back,” she whispered to the waking form. She climbed off of her mom’s bed and looked out of the door and into the dark living room, and sure enough, there were dark shapes roaming around the living room. One was making his way over to where she stood, but it was so dark she doubted that he knew she was standing there. Piper came up behind her and also saw what Melinda was watching. Melinda flicked her hand in the light switch’s direction, and everyone squinted at the suddenness of light. “What are you doing here?” Piper asked, stepping out past Melinda a couple steps, so she was only a few feet away from the previously approaching demon, who was trying to shield his eyes. “We’ve come to kill you, witches,” he snarled, moving his arms back down as he adjusted to the light. “That’s cool and everything, but did you have to do it at 3:30 in the morning?” Melinda asked, annoyed. “We’re here at the Source’s request-” “This isn’t social hour! Attack them!” one of the other demons barked, and threw an energy ball. Piper froze it, and Melinda flung it back at them, vanquishing the talkative demon in an array of flickers of flame. Piper gestured with her hands, and five of the seven demons remaining froze. “Umm…you get them,” Piper told her daughter, referring to the unfrozen demons, who were looking curiously at their still companions. One of them barked a laugh, before launching a fireball at them that Melinda deflected back at him. The demon jumped to the side and watched the fire slam into the wall, causing it to scorch the originally white area. “Can you try to avoid doing that?” Piper yelled at her, while blowing up a demon. Melinda rolled her eyes as she stepped out from the doorway and swung her arm at the demons, and one of them went flying into the coffee table. The one who dodged the fireball before, though, only stumbled back from the wave of power, and he launched another fireball. Melinda grabbed it with her telekinesis yet again and shot it at the unaffected demon, but he ducked and the fireball crashed once again into the wall. “Mel!” her mom cried indignantly, blowing up her third frozen demon in a flick of the wrists. “Sorry!” Melinda apologized. The weaker demon had grabbed an athame from his belt and charged her. Melinda sidestepped, and grabbed the demon’s outstretched arm. She twisted it behind his back and dislodged the knife from his hand before jabbing it into his back and jumping away from the flaming figure. By then, a couple of the frozen demons had unfrozen, and both threw energy balls at Piper. She dived out of the way behind a recliner, and froze the energy balls just before they hit the wall. She sighed in relief at the close call that the wall almost had, and threw her arm out around the side of the chair, killing one of the demons. She peeked around the side and saw that the other one had another energy ball in his hand, waiting to be thrown. He was cautiously moving in her direction, but before he could throw the energy ball, he was blown up. The demon started walking her way, and Melinda threw the athame that she still had in her hand at the advancing demon. The demon simply knocked the knife away before it impaled him, and it fell with a clatter to the floor. He laughed darkly, before forming a fireball. Instead of throwing it at Piper or Melinda, he threw it into the light on the ceiling. Everything became pitch black; there was no light inside and none coming through the window. The demon started laughing once more; it was a cruel and evil laugh that would have chilled Melinda’s bones if she had been paying more attention to it. Instead, she was ducking behind the couch so she’d have protection against flying projectiles. “Looks like I have the advantage. Demons like me have good vision in the dark,” he informed them, and Melinda was squinting in her hiding spot to see her mom with her back against the recliner, trying to see her. She realized that she could see some things, and she doubted if her mom could see anything. It must come with the powers. She could see lighter silhouettes against the darker background, so she wasn’t completely blind. She peeked over the couch and could see the demon slowly approaching. Thinking fast, she orbed out. A couple seconds later, she reappeared on the other side of the room, and she could see the demon leaning over behind the couch, trying to see where she went. Melinda then bent down and felt around, trying to find the athame that she threw at her foe before. A sharp point pricked her finger, and she knew that she found it. When the demon started moving towards where her vulnerable mom was hiding, she grabbed the knife and swiftly moved toward the demon. He didn’t move around in time. Melinda felt the athame lodge between his ribs. She stood back, and squinted as the flames lit up the room for a moment and consumed the demon in a fiery inferno. Once the demon was vanquished, she bumped her way around the chair and helped her mom up. “You okay?” she asked the outline of her mother. “Yeah, fine. Where’s the lamp?” Melinda couldn’t figure out where the lamp was, so she held out her hand and the pale orange light erupted from it. She had discovered a couple years before that her healing ability had more than healing as its use. The soft light floated on the surfaces of the furniture near to them, and soon enough the lamp was found and they could see each other. Melinda sighed and threw the bloody knife onto the tile in the kitchen in frustration. Piper’s empathy persuaded her to pull her daughter into a hug, which Melinda gladly accepted. “You were right. You were right…” Melinda slurred into her mom’s shirt, before she sighed again. “It’s too much. It’s been what, five hours? First we don’t even know that we’re ever going to see him again…” She wiped away a tear before it could leave her eye. “Then our house is half destroyed by demons…we can’t even get sleep because more demons come…and our light bulb is broken! I don’t want to fix that!”<br>“I wasn’t going to make you,” Piper consoled her daughter softly. It wasn’t about the light bulb that Piper was giving her comfort on, but it was the only thing she could get herself to say. Piper led her daughter over to the patched up couch, and sat her down on it. Piper sat on the coffee table across from her, and looked her in the eye. “It’s starting to go away.”<br>“What is?” Piper waved a finger lazily towards Melinda’s eye. “The blue.”<br>“I don’t think I like it,” Melinda told her, scowling as a result of her distress. Piper tilted her head. “I don’t really mind it,” she said. “It’s just…different, I guess. It’ll take some getting used to.”<br>“For both of us.”<br>“Does it…do things look different?” Piper asked, after deciding to rephrase her question. Melinda shrugged her shoulders exhaustedly. “A little. Have you ever worn tinted glasses? That’s sort of what it’s like. It’s like a light blue tint over everything that’s hardly noticeable if you don’t realize it’s there,” she told her. She spun her body around so she could have her head resting against one headrest and her feet reclining over the other. She looked at the ceiling with a multitude of different emotions. “I miss him. It’s only been a few hours, but I feel so empty.”<br>“You’re preaching to the choir,” her mom replied with a sigh. She glanced at the ceiling with a furious look on her face. “I’d scream and cuss my head off at them right now if it weren’t so early in the morning. Shame if the neighbors heard. Maybe tomorrow?” Melinda gave her mom a very small smile, for she knew that her mom was just trying to make her feel better.
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:37:29 GMT -5
“I don’t know how I’m going to sleep.”<br>“You look tired.”<br>“I am.”<br>“Then what’s the problem?” “I just…I dunno. There’s just so much that’s mulling around in my head… I just wish…life were normal,” Melinda said with a sigh, turning her sight from the ceiling to her mother’s face. “I’ll tell you what I’ve figured out over the years. There’s no such thing as normal. When I was, well, naïve about how bad things could seem, I wished that I just lived this normal life. Being a mom and just simply looking around at the world and the people in it showed me that everyone has problems, whether they are big or small. People always have problems of some kind; they’re always different. How can there be a ‘normal’ if every person’s and every family’s life is filled with these complications? Complications that are always unique, and are on different levels of importance and distinction? You see us, we’re screwed up pretty bad.” Piper succeeded with her attempt to make her daughter smile, but unfortunately it couldn’t last too long. “You think they’ll let him come back?” Melinda asked as she turned her attention back to the ceiling. “No…I don’t,” Piper said quietly. Melinda shut her eyes and breathed a deep sigh. “That doesn’t mean that with all of my heart I don’t hope that he will.”<br>“It’s not enough…” “No, it isn’t. Don’t give up on him though.”<br>“What’s to give up on? There’s nothing he can do!” Piper didn’t say anything. Melinda sighed again. “I’m sorry.”<br>“I know that you’re upset, it’s okay.”<br>“No, it isn’t. That wasn’t fair to you, I just lost my head.”<br>“I know. You’re going to need to go to bed soon,” Piper said, changing the subject. “I don’t think that I could.”<br>“You have school tomorrow. Or, today, I guess.”<br>“I do?”<br>“Yeah. Today’s Wednesday.” “Crap.” “No kidding. My vacation is over. Come on, scoot,” Piper said, standing up from her seat on the coffee table and hitting Melinda’s legs to get her to move. Once her daughter had made space for her, Piper sat down and pulled Melinda’s head onto her shoulder. “I love you kiddo, no matter what happens. Even though my heart stops for a moment every time I think about him or look at this ring, I know that I’ll always have you.”<br>“What happened to the pessimistic morbid thought about me getting killed?” Melinda asked. “I have faith in you. I have faith that you have enough common sense not to get yourself hurt too badly,” Piper said with a small grin. “Well, isn’t that curious? What ever did I do to make you think that?” Melinda asked with a small smile also forming. “Eh, I have to think that. I’m your mother.”<br>“Oh, that’s comforting.” Piper kissed the top of Melinda’s hair and rested her head on top of her daughter’s. Soon enough they did fall asleep, but the morning came quick, and another challenging day came into their lives.
Review. Kowa97 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 73 (5/29/04 6:35 pm) Reply Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Your story just keeps getting better and better. I was thinking that the blue glow in Melinda's eyes could act as a sort of night vision. That would have been cool, but I like how you got Piper finally realizing that there is no such thing as normal. It took her long enough. Great job. Kowa
Nat365 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 609 (5/29/04 8:50 pm) Reply Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- This is an amazing fic, keep it up! However, there is one teeny tiny thing, and I don't want to pry, because I write myself, and I know that you will have set ideas about how you want your story to go, (and they are very good ones, btw, juging on what there has been so far), but it would be really cool if Piper had more interaction with her sisters and the rest of the family. She hasn't seen them for fifteen years, yet apart from going to the house once, she hasn't phoned them, or spoken to them, or had any in depth conversations, about the future or the past. I would guess that Piper showing up on the doorstep after all that time would be a bit like a relative coming back from the dead, and if someone you loved came back from the dead, you'd want to spend every minute with them until you got to know them again, and they were re-aquainted with you. They would all have changed. I'm really not trying to critisize, as I love this story, but please write a few more Prue, Piper and Phoebe scenes. HorseFreak91 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 166 (5/29/04 9:28 pm) Reply Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- hahahahahahhaha i decided to post wow i feel bad for Melinda. hehe that was really good please post more soon!!!!!!!!!!!! charmed2008 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 966 (5/29/04 9:40 pm) Reply ezSupporter
Re: Great -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- That was a great update! scififantasychic Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 465 (5/29/04 11:26 pm) Reply Re: Great -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Terrific update, both action-wise, and emotion-wise! oddball7 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 418 (5/30/04 12:15 am) Reply | Edit ezSupporter Re: Great -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- oh that was awesome as always cf12!!! And I love just the way you always have the source calling Melinda "the half-breed".... and yes that was as scific put it definitely great both action wise and emotional wise..... i loved it charmed addict Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 289 (6/1/04 8:19 pm) Reply Re: Great -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I love it soo much!!! It rocks!!! I can't wait for the update!!!! CF12, amazing fan fic!!!!
Definition Of HERO: Chris Halliwell!
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:37:44 GMT -5
CharmedFan12 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 456 (6/3/04 12:32 pm) Reply Re: Great -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Hey everyone! Thanks so much for the reviews. I'll tell you what, I've said it over at my other story, but it's more true here: I update just to read everyone's reviews. Yeah. It's true! I swear it! Yay! Nat, you're absolutely right, and in what I have written, I do have them meeting up, because you aren't the first to point that out. I don't particuarly like how I did it, but that's because I'm so critical of myself. It'll be alright I suppose when you read it. Alrighty, enjoy!!!
Melinda woke up to find herself on the couch with her mother softly speaking to her. “Hey, babe. Get up,” Piper said gently. “You have don’t have too much time.”<br>“Why not?” Melinda asked groggily, sitting up straight. “I wanted to give you a few minutes to sleep. Come on, get ready.” A few minutes later, Melinda walked out with wet hair while slipping her arm in her jacket. Piper tossed her her backpack. “You’re going to freeze to death.”<br>“Yeah, well, I don’t have time to dry my hair, so it’s your fault.”<br>“Shut up. Bye,” Piper said, and Melinda sped out of the room and leaped off of the top of the stairs. She levitated herself to slow the fall, and ran down the street. When she met Mike, she slowed down some. “Where’ve you been?! Jamie said something about why you weren’t here, but I think that we were both confused,” Mike said the first thing as she ran up by him. “I don’t even think she knew where you were. She knew why you were gone, though, she said. Something to do with your dad?” “Yeah. You wouldn’t understand. I’m just going to save you from confusion.”<br>“Thanks…I think… Aren’t you cold?” he asked, spying her wet hair. “Freezing.”<br>“You didn’t really miss anything interesting. The cafeteria lady had a heart attack, though, but that’s it.”<br>“She did? Is she alright?”<br>“Yeah. I’m not surprised much, though. She must eat the crap she stuffs down our throats. If we were 40 something, I’d make out my will already because of our intake of whatever is put into that wrongly named ‘meat’ loaf.” Melinda grinned a little, and stuffed her hands in her pockets. She couldn’t help but think of what seemed to be only hours ago her father was walking with her. “You okay?” Melinda’s silence gave him his answer, and they walked in silence the rest of the way. In the hallway, Jamie walked over to them, stood right in front of Melinda and looked her in the eye. “I’m sorry,” Jamie said, and Melinda shook her head. “You didn’t know better. I don’t blame you.”<br>“What did I miss?” Mike asked. “Nothing,” Jamie responded curtly, glaring at Mike. “Don’t be mean,” Melinda said brusquely. “I’ve been thinking about what you said, about someone like us being mean like I do, and…” She stopped when Jenna and Hannah came over with their hands on their hips. “What are you doing talking to these geeks?” Jenna asked in her usually snotty manner, raising her eyebrow skeptically. “You just answered your own question,” Mike said. “She’s TALKING. That’s what’s she’s doing.”<br>“Shut up dork.”<br>“Oh, I’m hurt!” Mike said sarcastically, clasping his hand to his chest dramatically. “Ooh, the pain!” he said in a high voice. Jenna sneered at him maliciously. “Grow up dirtbag!”<br>“Why don’t you grow up?!” Jamie shouted, before looking as if she just made a huge mistake. Hannah raised her eyebrows. “What did you just say?” she asked, narrowing her eyes at her friend. “Nothing,” Jamie said, walking away, and her friends gave Mike and Melinda dirty looks before walking away behind her. “Eh, will they ever leave us alone?” Mike said. “Not if you keep encouraging them,” Melinda told him. “Let’s just go. I have a lot of work to catch up on.”<br> Time went by down on Earth. Days were difficult for the lonely woman and her daughter. Piper often was found zoned out while absently spinning the engagement ring around on her finger. Melinda felt empty; almost as if something were missing. Something was. Almost a couple weeks went by Down There when a few hours had passed where Leo was. That was about the time when he had his first visitor. Leo woke up to the sound of the door opening and squinted as he tried to block the light from his face to see who was there. John stood in the doorway. “John,” Leo said, almost quizzically. “Hey. I had lunch with a charge and brought you something. It’s not much, but it’ll keep you from starving.”<br>“It’s not like it’ll kill me,” Leo said sarcastically, and caught the sack John tossed to him. He pulled out half of a sandwich. “Thanks.”<br>“You know that I’m your friend, right?” Leo was confused. “Of course I do.”<br>“I don’t want you to think that just because I was told to do this that I still don’t care about you at all.” John closed the door almost all of the way and sat down next to it, looking across the room at Leo. Leo took a bite out of the sandwich and chewed it slowly. “I respect you. I don’t know what goes through your head all of the time, but…” John stopped for a moment to think. “I don’t know anything really about you and the witch besides the obvious. But if you’ve fallen for her, she must be an amazing person.” Leo nodded, swallowing his bite. “But I don’t understand why you want to give up everything you’ve earned and everything that has been given to you just because of her.”<br>“It’s not just her.”<br>“What do you mean?” Apparently, John meant it when he said he didn’t know anything besides the obvious. “I have a daughter,” Leo said quietly. John’s eyes widened. “What?”<br>“I didn’t know it before this week. You know how the Elders let me go see her for this week?” John nodded. “Piper told me that her daughter was mine. I have a daughter. She’s beautiful.”<br>“What the hell makes you think that it’s yours?” John asked, raising his eyebrow. “Piper wouldn’t lie, for one. She has my powers. She has my eyes,” Leo said, looking up at his friend’s face. “Wait, hold up for a minute. She has your powers?”<br>“She’s part whitelighter,” Leo told him softly. “Isn’t your girl a Charmed One?”<br>“Yeah.”<br>“Insane.” Leo took another bite out of his sandwich. He thought for a couple moments, and swallowed. “It was bad leaving Piper. It’s worse leaving a daughter now, too. Do you get me yet?” Leo added sarcastically. “I’m sorry, man.”<br>“They must be going crazy down there.”<br>“You must be going crazy up here.”<br>“Eh, I can’t get mental illnesses, remember? Instead, I get to sit here and bask in my sanity,” Leo said as some more sarcasm came rolling off his tongue. “Why did you do this to yourself, man? I just keep thinking that you wouldn’t be in this situation if you had just followed the rules in the first place. Even then, you should have just tried to forget about her and move on.”<br>“Trying to forget someone you love is like trying to remember someone you never knew. I didn’t mean to fall for her, but I did. I can’t really explain it. I tried to marry her, John. If the Elders let me back to her, I will. I will marry her.”<br>“Do what you want, man,” John said, standing up. “I shouldn’t even be here. I better go.”<br>“Thanks for the food.”<br>“No problem. Good luck.” Leo watched his friend shut the small chamber’s door. He moved so his back was on the floor, and closed his eyes. He wondered what they were doing, thinking, and feeling. He hoped that they were okay.
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:38:25 GMT -5
amypooh321 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 57 (6/3/04 12:56 pm) Reply Re: Great -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- That was amazing. I absolutely loved the line about how forgetting someone you love is like remembering someone you have never met. That is absolute poetry! You are how old CF12? You write like a woman that has none and lost true love. Kudos, kudos, kudos.
More please. And if you happen to speak to the WB, tell them to film this story! I don't care if it doesn't fit the current storyline... it is so good!
I hope you plan on being a writer in your career future!
CharmedRoxy Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 26 (6/3/04 12:59 pm) Reply Re: Great -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- It's brilliant!I can't wait to see how it all turns out! oddball7 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 657 (6/3/04 1:05 pm) Reply | Edit ezSupporter AWESOME!!!!!! -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Oh CF12.... you never disappoint me... that was great! Mike had me rolling in laughter and you described him so well with the "Oh that hurt!" "The pain!" lol... i loved it... and then we saw Leo... poor guy... I'm hoping that John is going to wise up and break the poor guy out of "elder jail"! Even though I liked Leo's sarcasm it was still sooo sad.... and I loved this quote:
Quote: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Trying to forget someone you love is like trying to remember someone you never knew. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Great job cf12!!! charmedone89 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 763 (6/3/04 1:05 pm) Reply Re: Great -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- So great!!!! I love how you kind of tied your two stories together because in both you said that trying to forget someone you love is like trying to remember something you never knew. I don't know if you meant to do that with your stories, but it is cool. I really just want to the elders. I love that censor emoticon! Anyways. I am glad you finally updated! Please update again soon! scififantasychic Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 494 (6/3/04 1:34 pm) Reply Re: Great -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Such an awesome update! I really hope John turns out to be the decent guy he seems to be. Leo really needs a friend up there. Esmeralda Posts: 752 (6/3/04 9:53 pm) Reply Re:WOW! -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I'm sitting here, absolutely amazed! I somehow or another missed the previous update (you don't really think I'd read one and not comment, do you??!!) and now I'm sitting here, hurting like crazy for Leo, Piper & Melinda, smiling at the thought of Mike and even of Jamie, whom I was hoping for just a moment might turn into another friend, and who, MAYBE would be able to help get Leo back, shaking my head at the brilliance of your fighting scenes--I've said it before and will say it again, you write the best ones in the Forum, no doubt about it!--happy that Piper has *finally* realized that a normal life is not all it's cracked up to be--wondering when Piper got her exploding power in this AU (alternate universe), since she didn't have it when she and Leo got married--getting a kick out of your scene with the Source and his minions--he's more evil and yuckier than the one on TV!--and hoping that somehow this is all going to work out all right. I just hope that the only way Piper & Melinda can be with Leo isn't through death!!
I'm not sure whether Piper can go back and see her sisters, even though this week is up. I hope so; I loved the way you wrote them and their families *so* much!!
I'm with whoever said it--this should truly be made into a Movie of the Week on the WB. No, not the WB. They'd turn both Piper and Melinda into sluts, and we don't want that. No, make is a Movie of the Week on TNT--for this is truly fantastic drama!!
Please update soon!! I can't make my bluies and pinkies jump for this story or use my pulsing hearts to show the love Leo, Piper & Melinda share (although according to a thread in the Admin Forum, I should be able to soon), but for now, how's this:
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:39:05 GMT -5
CharmedFan12 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 464 (6/7/04 1:46 pm) Reply Re: Re:WOW! --------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Wow! You people must be the best reviewers on the planet! lol. Yeah, I love that line too, that's why I used it in both of my stories. It was total coincidence that they were posted at the same time, though. Or almost the same time. You know what I mean. I have to say amy, it's so sweet that you'd say that, but I'm afraid I can't accept it. I didn't write it. I'm almost positive it was oddball that I was talking to, and she asked where I got it from, and I told her that I actually had gotten it from a pretty perverted email. I only kept the email for that quote, and once I used it, I deleted it, lol. Emails are like thrift stores. You never know if you'll find a treasure. I did make that one up, lol. Yes, I love Mike too. He's my little comic puppet! My comic relief that releases some of the tension that's running through the story. lol. Es! I wondered where you went. You think too much, I think, lol. Piper got her exploding power not long after she was sent to Utah, and I'll tell you why. She needed a way to protect herself when she was alone, without her sisters. The Powers That Be are cool that way. Not the Elders, but The Powers That Be. lol. Es! How can you say that the only way that they can be together is through death! I'm going to have a sequel! Melinda needs to finish her destiny! They can't die! lmao about the WB. That totally cracked me up when I was reading that. I was talking on the phone at the time, and I just started chuckling, and my friend was wondering what the heck was funny. Eh, the simple pleasures in life.
Anyway, you need an update! Enjoy!
Melinda walked in the door about five weeks after their incident with the Elders and dropped her backpack down. Her mom was sitting down on the couch with her hand playing with her ring, and she was obviously zoned out. Melinda sighed and walked over by the couch. “Hey Mom,” Melinda said. Piper looked up at her. “Hi honey.”<br>“What are you doing home so early?” Piper rubbed her forehead, and looked up at her daughter. “I, uh, wasn’t feeling that great, so I just went home.”<br>“What’s the matter?” Piper sighed. “Nothing. I’m just not feeling good.”<br>“Lemme guess.”<br>“You don’t even need to,” Piper told her. “But I was also thinking of my sisters. I’ve just been so caught up in everything that is going on what my emotions that we haven’t even talked to them.”<br>“Yeah, I’ve been thinking of that too. I was going to ask you about that. I just didn’t.”<br>“You didn’t need to. I feel horrible about it; they have no idea what’s going on with us, it’s been, what, a month in a half…” “If you want, I remember how to get there,” Melinda offered. Piper smiled slightly and sighed. “Um…alright. Gimme a few minutes though, I want to take a shower.”<br>“Okay.”<br>“Do your homework.”<br>“I don’t have any,” Melinda said, as her mom started walking towards the bathroom. “Liar.”<br>“Never! I did it in class.”<br>“Swear?”<br>“Yeah. I’ll study, though.”<br>“I count that as homework.”<br>“I don’t.”<br>“Study.”<br>“Fine, fine. Go take your shower!” Piper smiled at her daughter as she walked over and picked up her backpack. Melinda didn’t take advantage of her gifts, Piper thought, she would rather walk over to get something than have it come flying to her. How could Piper be given such a wonderful being to have as her own? It was just fate, she thought.
A little while later, Melinda orbed the two of them into the entryway of the manor. They slowly started making their way more inwards in the house when Chris came bounding down the stairs. “Hey! Where’ve you been?” Chris’s first words were to them. “Home. Where’s your mom?” Piper asked. “Kitchen.”<br>“Thanks,” Piper said, before making her way towards the other room. “Is she always that direct?” Chris asked, and Melinda shook her head. “No, she’s just stressed. How’s everybody around here?” Melinda questioned curiously and concernedly. Chris looked as if he were thinking. “Well, my family’s good. Keepin’ busy. Dad’s got a new case he’s been working a lot on,” Chris told her, and she nodded. He continued, “Mom seems to have a lot on her mind a lot.”<br>“Like what?” He shrugged. “I dunno. I haven’t asked. I guess I should, but I don’t want to bother her.” “You wouldn’t be bothering her,” Melinda told him. “Kristen and I are working on this project in science class. It’s pretty cool. We’re building these rockets out of soda bottles.”<br>“I did that project,” Melinda said with a smile. “Really? Cool.” “Have you seen Aunt Prue and AJ much?”<br>“No… Only like four times since you left last. They usually come by a lot more than that.”<br>“Oh. Where’s Kristen?”<br>“Downstairs, working on her project. I’m almost done,” he said, smiling proudly. “Good for you.”<br>“Thanks!” Melinda smiled down to her cousin, and started making her way towards the kitchen with Chris following. Piper walked into the kitchen to see Phoebe cutting up vegetables at the counter. “Hey,” Piper said softly, and Phoebe turned around surprised. “Oh my god, you scared me! Ugh, I’ve been so worried about you!” “Sorry about scaring you, and sorry about making you worry,” Piper apologized before Phoebe pulled her into a strong hug. “Don’t be sorry honey,” Phoebe told her before giving her one final squeeze and letting go. “I should be sorry. I’ve just been so caught up in myself that I didn’t think to check in with you two, even though I’ve thought about you and Prue constantly…” Piper rambled. “You had no idea what was going on and you-”<br>“Piper, it’s okay. I was worried, but it’s alright. You’re fine, aren’t you?”<br>“Well, I don’t have any life threatening illnesses if that is your question,” Piper uttered. Phoebe snickered. “Yeah, something like that. Where’s Melinda? Did she come with you? Wait, she would have had to, wouldn’t she? How else would you have gotten here?”<br>“By plane,” Piper joked. “She’s in the other room, talking with Chris.”<br>“How’s Leo?” her sister asked quietly. “Do you know?”<br>“No. How is it that you know?”<br>“We’ve had a few demon attacks since you’ve visited, and Robert has come by to give us a hand. He’s ranted about Leo.”<br>“What has he said?”<br>“Just things like, ‘That stupid whitelighter is messing up everything Up There!’ ‘I can hardly get in to talk to the Elders without hearing his name!’ Robert’s a bitter man,” Phoebe informed her. Piper nodded. “He seems like it. Poor guy.”<br>“I’d think so too if I didn’t despise the man so much,” Phoebe told her with a scowl. They turned to see Melinda and Chris walking into the kitchen. “Despise who?” Chris asked, grabbing a piece of carrot from the cutting board and nibbling on it. “Bob.”<br>“Elgh. He needs to rot in-”<br>“Finish that sentence and you’ll never speak another word again for the rest of your life,” Phoebe threatened. Chris gulped. “Yes Mom,” he said, before turning down the stairs into the basement. Melinda smiled. Piper turned her attention back to Phoebe. “What else have you heard about Leo?” Piper asked her seriously, and Melinda perked her head up to listen more closely. “Just that they’re holding him up there until they come to an ‘official decision’ about what to do about everything. They seem to be discussing the matter a good amount, and as a wife of a lawyer, I can tell you that’s a good sign.”<br>“How’s that?” Melinda questioned. “It means that they’re actually discussing both sides and trying to come to a fair, reasonable, understanding conclusion to this.”<br>“Can any of those words be justly used when talking about anything having to do with those scumbags?” Piper mumbled, and Melinda raised an eyebrow at her with a smirk. “In other words, about Leo, they aren’t just saying that he’s guilty. If that were so, we’d know. Bobby-boy wouldn’t be complaining as much.”<br>“That’s good then,” Melinda reasoned. “There’s a chance.”<br>“It’s no reason to get your hopes up,” Phoebe advised them. “As far as I’ve heard, there’s not much persuading the Elders to let him go.” A silence followed, one that was filled with thoughts of Leo, the Elders, one another, and scenarios of what would be a perfect future. The silence only lasted a couple minutes, but it seemed like much longer to the three of them. “You’re going to stay for dinner, right?” Phoebe said to break the quiet. Piper smiled. “Sure. What are you making?”<br>“Pot roast. It’s something that the kids don’t mind eating and something that Cole and I love also.”<br>“You were never the cook of the family,” Piper said with a grin. “I discovered the joys of cooking after I got married,” Phoebe responded. “You wanna help?”<br>“You have to ask?” laughed Piper. Melinda smiled. She watched her mom share a bonding moment with her sister, and she was glad. She was glad for her mom, and for the family. Things were the way they should be. No, they weren’t. That was a lie. There was something very big missing from this picture, and something missing from their hearts that no one knew if it were coming back.
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:39:41 GMT -5
charmedone89 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 771 (6/7/04 7:37 pm) Reply Re: Re:WOW! -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I thought that was really well done. I love seeing the action with Piper and the sisters. I hope that Leo comes back. But then again, he has too! And your making a sequel??? YEA!!!! Can't wait! Esmeralda Posts: 776 (6/7/04 9:22 pm) Reply Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Quote: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- You think too much, I think, lol. Piper got her exploding power not long after she was sent to Utah, and I'll tell you why. She needed a way to protect herself when she was alone, without her sisters. The Powers That Be are cool that way. Not the Elders, but The Powers That Be. lol. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------
I think you might be right, CF12! It makes sense that Piper was given something to help protect herself when she was alone, but it doesn't make sense that those vengeful Elders would! I'm glad to know that in your AU (Alternate Universe), Powers that are more powerful than them are more compassionate! Hopefully they'll help get this family back together!
Quote: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Es! How can you say that the only way that they can be together is through death! I'm going to have a sequel! Melinda needs to finish her destiny! They can't die! --------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Hey, I knew that Melinda still has a destiny to fulfill (wasn't I the one who suggested "The New Destiny" as the sequel's title?), but how was I to know if Leo was part of it? I could hope, but I guess I was feeling as bummed out as Piper and Melinda when I wrote that there could be no other way but death. Thanks for giving me (and your other readers) hope.
You talk about a sequel--I'm dying to know--is there more of *this* story coming or is this it? It seems like a nice spot to end, but as always, I'm greedy and want much more!!
I hope Melinda's destiny has something to do with straightening out "Bobby-Boy" (man, I loved that!) and letting us know why he's such a pill and so bitter.
I also loved the sister-bonding, and also loved the cousin-bonding. I thoroughly expected Chris to ask Cousin Melinda to help with his project! I was minorly disappointed that Prue & Bane and AJ weren't there, but was glad that they were mentioned. I hope it means that both generations of Charmed will be well-represented in the next section, be that another section of this story or the first one of the sequel. Whatever it is, I hope it's very, very soon, because I truly love this so very much!!! Congratulations on a job very, very well done!!!
P.S. I sure hope the Great Jumping Emoticons War that I inadvertently started wasn't the cause of the death of Pinkie and Bluie!! I *miss* those guys!!!!
Edited by: Esmeralda at: 6/7/04 9:26 pm scififantasychic Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 516 (6/8/04 9:17 am) Reply Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Great! Melinda's right; this is how life should be, if only they could replace Bobby-boy with Leo!!! charmed2008 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 1169 (6/8/04 10:45 am) Reply ezSupporter
Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Great job!! Prue21 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 78 (6/8/04 4:16 pm) Reply Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Wow! This is a really great story, I just started reading it a couple of days ago and now I am all caught up, so pleas update soon!! charmed2008 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 1176 (6/8/04 4:18 pm) Reply ezSupporter
Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I thought that this fan fic was like 20 pages long a couple of days ago, what happened? i luv drew Posts: 247 (6/10/04 3:42 pm) Reply exellent writing -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 18 pages and still going.you are one of the # writers here! this story rox sooooooooooooooooooooooooooo much!1 really.i love how piper and leo interact with each other and melinda....do i have to say more!please write more oddball7 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 828 (6/11/04 1:07 pm) Reply | Edit Re: exellent writing -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Oh CF12..... you finally updated so quickly that i missed it but I finally decided to peak in when I saw a whole new page added lol.
And I have to say that you do a TERRIFIC job of doing interactions with your characters take this for example:
Quote: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- “Do your homework.”<br>“I don’t have any,” Melinda said, as her mom started walking towards the bathroom. “Liar.”<br>“Never! I did it in class.”<br>“Swear?”<br>“Yeah. I’ll study, though.”<br>“I count that as homework.”<br>“I don’t.”<br>“Study.”<br>“Fine, fine. Go take your shower!”<br>--------------------------------------------------------------------------------
That is soooo my mom and me! And Piper and Phoebe having their conversationg, HOW ON EARTH COULD YOU SAY THAT YOU DIDN'T DO THAT WELL?!
Sorry about the caps but I just can't see how you could think that.... I thought you did a great job of it. I felt so much like that was a even older Piper and Phoebe having a conversation. You did a great job and at least you included a mention of Prue & her fam. And hopefuly in your next part they will have a one big family dinner
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:40:04 GMT -5
CharmedFan12 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 469 (6/17/04 1:38 pm) Reply Re: exellent writing -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Thanks so much everyone for the patience!!! I'm so sorry I haven't updated before now. I've been moving around to different houses in the past week and I've been urging myself to read more books. I described my chaos a little better in my other story's update. Anyway, here you go.
Melinda may had only known her father for a few days, but she still felt connected to him as if she had known him much longer. She had reminders of him, and his absence thrown in her face. Melinda and Piper continued to go over to the manor for dinners, and Prue, Bane, and AJ came over often to join them. Melinda became quieter than usual in school, and she knew Mike noticed, but she was thankful that he didn’t say anything. She tried to focus on schoolwork and avoided most people, especially Jenna and Hannah. Jamie didn’t bother them at all with her friends, and often tried to defend Melinda and Mike, which led to complications for her. Melinda didn’t talk to her though, and neither did Mike. It wasn’t that they were grudging her, but they couldn’t exactly be friends. One day, Melinda was tested. Whether it was by some higher power or just on a personal level, it didn’t really matter. It hurt none the less. She also had the experience to understand someone else’s thoughts and why they chose to do the things that they did. It turned out to be better for all. Melinda and Mike were walking in to the lunchroom at lunchtime and were heading for their table when Jenna and Hannah came their way. Mike looked at them with a dirty look and couldn’t keep his mouth shut for long. “What do you want?”<br>“We just wanted to ask Melinda a simply, innocent question. Back off Butch,” Hannah said with a sneer. Melinda turned her head so she could see them better and felt impatience rise inside of her. “What ever happened to Daddy-poo?” Jenna asked with a smirk. “How come we don’t see him anymore?”<br>“Why don’t you just go away?” Melinda asked softly. “Because I think that it’s so interesting that I never see him anymore!” Jenna replied with a mocking voice. “I mean, I live right under you and everything. It’s funny.”<br>“What’s funny?” Mike shot at her. “The fact that you used a four syllable word? I think that’s pretty big for you.” Jenna glared at him, but turned her attention back to Melinda. “Hannah and me were thinking,” she started, before Melinda scoffed. “It’s ‘Hannah and I,’ idiot,” she corrected, before starting to walk away. Jenna grabbed her arm to stop her. Melinda looked down at the hand on her arm and imagined the fear that would be in this contumacious girl’s eyes if she only knew what Melinda could do to her if she wanted. Melinda took a breath to try and relax herself. “We were thinking that he ran out on you. Are we on the right path here?” Jenna said with a cocky grin. Melinda shoved the hand off her arm and started walking away once more. Hannah ran in front of her to stop her. “He probably couldn’t handle your freak of a mother or something.” Melinda shuttered a breath and started running out of the room, but didn’t look back as the blue haze came into her vision. She ran into the small empty gym and leaned against the wall, closing her eyes to try and regain her composure. Mike came running in a second later, breathing hard. “What was that about? How could you just let her say that?!” Mike asked incredulously. Melinda opened her eyes and turned her vision to her friend. Mike’s mouth dropped and he took a step back. “What the hell?” he cried. “This is how I could let her say that! I can’t make it stop!”<br>“How do you do that?” he asked, stepping forward again to get a better look in the dim lit room. “I don’t know, it has something to do with my powers. The point is I can’t get upset or this happens! If this happens, and they see, there’s no changing it.” Mike stood silent for a second, before he put on a sheepish grin. “Well, don’t worry about getting them back. I took care of it,” he said. “What did you do?”<br>“I may have…‘accidentally’…tripped a kid and made him spill his mac and cheese all over them,” he said, smiling. “You’re terrible,” Melinda said, as she noticed the blue haze fading. “Yeah…I am, but your mom has been nothing but nice to me, and I couldn’t stand it when Jenna said that about her.”<br>“Thanks.” The door of the gym opened and Jamie’s head looked in before she spotted them. “Hannah told me what they said. I’m so sorry,” she said, walking over. She smiled and looked at Mike, “They also told me about why they’re covered in processed cheese. I thought that was great.”<br>“Well, I’m the master,” Mike joked. Jamie looked back at Melinda. “They should have never said that about your mom, I’m sorry they did.”<br>“You apologize a lot, you know that?” Melinda said, and Jamie nodded with a shrug. “I can’t help it. I feel responsible. If I’d never allow them to say things to begin with about you, they wouldn’t say that. They also wouldn’t be as bitter as they are if I hadn’t stopped hanging with them like I have.”<br>“Why have you stopped hanging out with them?” Melinda asked, and Jamie sighed as she leaned against the wall. She ran her hand through her shoulder length mousy brown hair and looked at Melinda. “This might sound lame, I don’t know, but when I found out what you were and what you said to me about how I should be understanding of those who are different than myself, it gave me a nice hard kick in the head. I never bothered to open my eyes and look at people for who they are like I should have. I just passed people off as below me, because I thought I was better than they were. When I realized that I wasn’t that great, I felt…I dunno…” “Humility?” Melinda suggested with understanding, and Jamie nodded. “Actually, yeah. Things flipped around and I looked at things from your point of view and others. I saw that I wasn’t that great; there are others like me, like you; us. I’m the one that’s different from them; if they’d only known what I am, what would they think of me? They would be prejudiced. That’s exactly what I am. That’s not fair. I’m just a snob for being the way that I am.”<br>“That takes a lot of courage to say.”<br>“No it doesn’t. It takes humility, like you’ve said.”<br>“You know, you’re not as dumb as you make it seem you are,” Mike told her, and both Melinda and Jamie rolled their eyes. “Come sit with us,” Melinda offered, and Jamie smiled at the opportunity given to her to make amends for what she felt she needed to with people who were more understanding than she’d ever had with Jenna and Hannah. Melinda knew she needed that.
I love you all in a friendly kind of way!!!
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:40:44 GMT -5
Esmeralda Posts: 860 (6/17/04 2:30 pm) Reply Re:UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Absolutely fantastic update, CF12! I absolutely love the personality you've given Melinda and I love both her friend (I love the mac and cheese thing!) and her enemies (who are *such* a$$es, which is why I love them!) and her enemy-now-friend! I would say she passed her test with flying colors! If only those !@#$% elders could learn a few lessons from these teenagers, WOW! Maybe Piper & Melinda could get Leo back!!
Please update again soon!!
scififantasychic Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 573 (6/18/04 1:16 pm) Reply Re: Re:UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Great update! Jamie's ex-friends are such boogers! But I'm glad Melinda has been able to make another friend. She needs that right now with the way her life is going. Charming PL Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 36 (6/18/04 11:07 pm) Reply Re: Re:UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Oh I just LOVE this story. And your other one too. They're both terrific. Update soon!!!
Charming PL Nat365 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 628 (6/20/04 6:51 am) Reply Re: Re:UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Brilliant update! One thing though. It's not 'shuttering' breath, it's 'shuddering' breath. Because you shudder as you breath. I don't know if that's just a typo, or a misplaced word, and I don't mean to offend or anything, cause this fic is great, but could you just change that one tiny word? Thanx! It's funny, I haven't been on the site in about a week, I show up, and my fave fics have both been updated! Hope we see more soon!
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