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No Nat, you're absolutely right. It's one of those things where you aren't thinking wholly on what you are typing and the computer doesn't pick up on it. Stupid computers. Working day by day to make the human brain obsolete! It's working for me, I can tell you that much. hehe, thanks again.
Thanks so much everyone for the reviews! I love them all so much. Reviews are awesome.
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Well, I gotta throw one back at you--you breathe by taking a breath. So that sentence should be, "Because you shudder as you breathe."
That's the problem with depending too much on computers and spell-check--they miss stuff like that!! So let's agree to not worry too much about each other's spelling or grammar (unless it's *really* bad, then I just don't read the fanfic, unlike others who can ignore it) and just enjoy the stories, OK? Especially one as fantastic as this one!!
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This one of the best fics I have ever read. Please keep it up!!!!!
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Stupid me. And I wasn't worrying about it. And you don't need to 'throw one back' because I wasn't throwing one in the first place.
But CF12 has written a story. I believe that when there is a story, grammer is much more important than it is in posts, and I like it when people correct my grammer in my stories. If CF12 doesn't like me correcting, then she can tell me, and I won't.
Anway, this is a great story, and I hope there is an update soon.
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BUMP!
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Thanks everyone. And it's alright if you help me out; the only problem with it is the brief moment of stupidity I feel before I just laugh it off. And don't worry Es, you made me laugh too. Anyway, I'm sorry I haven't been around at all really. I've been doing so much away from home I enjoy the time I have at home, and when I'm at home my dad usually wants to get out of the house (he's a school teacher, so he gets the summers off too; PE teacher) so I'm going and hanging out with him when I have the chance. lol. But alas, after a terribly long (and kind of frusterating) day, here I am updating for you because I felt so bad about not updating.
Enjoy.
After two months, things didn’t get much easier for the two of them. What was better, though, was that Piper and Melinda had their family to talk to and Melinda no longer felt the guilt about not talking to Jamie.
Jamie hung out with them a lot more, and ate lunch with them. Unfortunately, Jenna and Hannah didn’t like that, and showed it. Jamie and Mike’s bickering soon became monotonous and expected, and soon reached a point where it wasn’t as amusing as it was in the beginning.
Betty had her own upsetting time as her 50th wedding anniversary came around the corner, and when that happened, Piper was there to talk to her about it and be the listening ear that Betty needed.
A couple accidents at the inn kept Piper strained, and overwhelmed by all the stress Melinda felt the need to get out her feelings for once.
After Melinda dropped off her backpack and grabbed a drink from the fridge, she hit the button on the answering machine. One was from a telemarketer offering her the fastest cable service around, which she rolled her eyes at. Another one was from the plumber canceling the appointment to fix the sink in the bathroom. The last was from her mother saying that she wouldn’t be home till late and for Melinda to feed herself. Melinda sighed as she left a quickly scribbled note to her mom and orbed out, heading for the manor.
Once the manor was in her vision, she made her way for the kitchen to see if Phoebe was in there, but heard an unfamiliar male voice. She hid herself next to the doorway and listened. He was yelling.
“This is just infuriating! I can’t so much even ask the Elders for a word without being put on hold for his sake. His. He’s not even that great! In fact, as long as that failure became a whitelighter he’s done nothing but break the rules! Now every time I go Up There I hear nothing but ‘Leo this’ and ‘Leo that!’ I can’t stand it anymore, and I wouldn’t have to be put through this if you just had made that boy think with his other head!”<br>“Okay, you’ve said enough! Get out of my house! Now!” Phoebe’s voice rang through the house.
“Don’t tell me to get out! You would have had your little reckless hide in the ground countless times if it weren’t for me!”<br>“What about those other times, huh?”
“Oh, don’t start with the ‘woe is me and my family’ crap. My job is to be your guide, not some little slave to come heal your children or demon husband!” Melinda looked around the door post and saw a man that appeared to be about a little older than her mother’s age with gray hair and a very acrid face. He was standing only two feet from Phoebe’s face now, and looked as if he was trying to intimidate her. Phoebe’s face held fury and an apparent loss of patience.
“I know you have something against my husband, but that gives you no right to talk about him like that.”<br>“You’re right I have something against him! He’s nothing but a devil, and he doesn’t belong anywhere near this house or that book!” He was talking about the Book of Shadows, Melinda figured.
“That’s not for you to judge! What do you think? That he’ll steal the book? Take over the Underworld?”<br>“What’s to say that he won’t?!”<br>“I’m to say that he won’t, you pathetic excuse for a whitelighter!”<br>“It’s not nice to call names. You should now that I’m a highly respectable whitelighter Up There.”<br>“Oh, I’m sure you are!”<br>“Why else was I chosen to be your guide?” Robert said arrogantly.
“Have you forgotten that Leo was our guide before you were even considered for the job?”<br>“And look how that turned out. Disowned, and heart broken. Oh, the pity I feel for him,” he said with disdain dripping from his lips. Phoebe brought her hand up and slapped him across the face, and a loud crack sounded in Melinda’s ears.
“I told you to get out of my house.”<br>“Oh, poor little ex-Charmed One afraid to hear the truth? He is nothing but a wretched waste of flesh. So is that exiled sister of yours and that thing that they’ve created.” Melinda burst. She stepped through the doorway into the room, and rage filled her thoughts as she held out her hand and clutched it into a tight fist. Robert started gagging and sputtering and fell to his knees in a matter of seconds. Melinda stepped over and knelt in front of him, looking into his gray eyes.
“Get out,” she said fiercely, unclenching her fist and he coughed and gasped for air. He stepped back from her in fear and orbed out. Melinda stood up and looked at Phoebe.
“I’m so sorry that you had to listen to that. I can’t believe he said that,” Phoebe said with remorse. “If I had your powers, I’d have done that a long time ago. I’m afraid someday he’ll go crazy, though, and won’t help my kids if they ever need help.”<br>“I understand. Why does he hate Dad so much?” Phoebe sighed.
“Jealously, perhaps.”<br>“Jealously?”<br>“It’s a theory. Maybe he’s envious of the attention the Elders give to him. It would explain why he’s been complaining so much lately. He just doesn’t seem to understand that I love Leo, and I don’t want to hear someone bringing him down,” Phoebe responded, and smiled softly. “I think you’re getting taller.”<br>“I think you’re getting shorter,” Melinda retorted with a grin.
“You’re probably right.” Melinda sighed.
“So that was Robert.”<br>“Yeah, that was Robert. Ol’ Bob himself.”<br>“He’s worse than I imagined.”<br>“He’s stressed. Before your father was allowed back, he was never this bad. He was never good, as a whitelighter, but he was never this bad. He’s been scaring me.”<br>“He’s been pissing me off.”<br>“I’m sorry again. I just hoped that if he yelled, it would get off steam, but he started taking it too far. I’m sorry that you had to witness that.”<br>“It’s alright.”<br>“So…what brings you to our Dismal House of Depression and Death?” Phoebe joked, and Melinda snickered.
“I’ve just been stressed lately and I wanted someone to talk to. Get out my frustrations.”<br>“Well, you’ve come to the right place! We have whitelighter dummies to vent on and suck the life, or air, which ever you prefer, out of, and a resident shrink.” Phoebe’s attempts at humor were working, and Melinda already started to feel better.
“Thanks.”<br>“No problem, sweetie. You’re my favorite niece, you know that?” Phoebe said as she pulled Melinda into a comforting hug. Melinda breathed out a laugh at the joke: she was her aunt’s only niece.
“Yeah, I know.”<br>“Good. Now you can help me clean the kitchen and we can talk. It’s a passive way of charging for my services.”<br>“I’m going to clean your kitchen,” Melinda muttered.
“Help, help clean my kitchen,” Phoebe corrected enthusiastically, and Melinda smiled. She had almost forgotten everything that she had heard two minutes ago from Robert, and felt grateful to Phoebe for helping her out with that.
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Very good update. It was fun to see the seds of jealosy Robert is feeling torwards Leo. He has a massive infieriority complex. Keep up the good work.
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So we finally got to meet ole Bobby-Boy! WHAT AN A$$!! He sounds more like our current crop of Elders, who just don't understand what love is! I'm just amazed that Melinda was adult enough and had enough control not to strangle the a$$ after what he said about her family!! I'm also suprised that she has Wyatt's power of strangling; I always thought that was a demon-power, but if Melinda has a little of that in her, I can understand why she'd let it go now! And if she does, that's great, because it means she's not perfect--I hate perfection; no drama in that!!!
Anyway, I loved the interaction between aunt and niece; very nicely done!!! Great update!! Hope you get unbusy soon so you can update again soon, although I can definitely understand when life gets in the way!!
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That was very good. Though now I'm a little worried that Melinda will be getting into trouble.
Es, I think that the strangulation is simply a use of telekinisis to restrict the windpipe. If Prue had ever thought of doing it in the series, she could have been as deadly as Piper's exploding power, simply strangling demons left, right and centre. Or, should I say, if the writers had thought of it, lol!
It's good that ur keeping this up, CF12. I've given up on my fic at the moment. I have just finished my GCSE's, and I couldn't write it then, and now I have about two and a half weeks before I go away for the summer. And I mean, the whole summer. Between July 14 and the beginning of September/end of August, I will be here in the UK for a grand total of three days. So, not a lot of writing for me!
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Great update! I'm glad that Melinda has her family to talk to, but I really wish Piper would just move home! Melinda could orb and visit her friends anytime she wanted,it's time for them to be with their family again! And with Leo, the poor guy, really hope he gets to come back. Also, love the scene with Melinda choking Bob...I really don't like him.
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Haven't quite finished catching up but I'm working on it. I just wanted to say great story! Still have 2 more pages to go.
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The way it all would end
The way it all would go.
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I absolutely love that song and I love the Dale Sr. tribute version even more!
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wow cf12 you definitley out do yourself with this story..... I was getting so mad during the whole Hannah and Jenna thing and was so glad to hear that Mike tripped a kid that spilled "processed cheese" all over them! And then poor Melinda has to go hear/meet good o' bobbo..... what a jerk! Gosh I hope somebody locks him up soon and throws away the key.... if they give the key to me i'll swallow it for free though.... great job cf12..... lovin the story as always!
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HollyAlyssaHalliwell Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 2 (7/3/04 11:49 pm) Reply Re: Re:UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- CharmedFan12, I LOVE THIS STORY!!!! Please update soon. Blessed Be charmed2008 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 1636 (7/6/04 11:17 pm) Reply ezSupporter Re: Re:UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Great update!!!! Update soon! silvermoon8705 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 224 (7/10/04 9:43 pm) Reply Re: UC = Really, really awesome!!! -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- About Melinda strangling Bob...that is definitely a form of telekinesis, but Wyatt wasn't the *only* one who did the choking/strangling thing...Chris did it too...with the Valkyrie. So it really can't be completely separated as a demonic power... Anyway, after getting that out of the way, I just have to say OMIGAWD!!! I've just caught up with this fic and it seriously was some read for like two days!!! I love how you write Melinda and I constantly go back to the Melinda shown in Morality Bites and I can DEFINITELY see that Melinda growing up to be the 15-year old you show here!!! Even with all her powers that could easily beat all the ones of the three sisters, how you present her character and give her reasonable faults--like just this last update with strangling Bob...that's kind of violent, but of course *very* necessary...but before then she seemed to not be as provoked much by what someone said, which, to me, especially at the beginning with her in school...REALLY reminded me of Piper in the first season where she seemed to avoid confrontations, and instead just attempted to mediate between Prue and Phoebe--makes up for that little detail very well!!! I feel so sorry for Piper, Leo, and Melinda!!! While Piper's sisters have seemingly stable families of their own, Piper has to deal with the emotional roller coaster that has been her own family...she had to raise Melinda alone practically (yes there was Sarah and Betty, but no father ) with the knowledge that Leo was *still* out there somewhere, but because of the ever useless Elders (it seems as the show goes on, they just can't stop sucking) they weren't able to EVER see each other!!! And then for Leo to FIND OUT 15 YEARS LATER that he had a daughter!!! That is just so wrong on so many levels, planes, and dimensions!!! The relationship that Melinda was starting to have with her father for that one WEEK (  ? ) seemed very realistic...awkward at first, but then some pillow fights later, it was actually getting somewhere. But probably because the Elders have NOTHING BETTER TO DO...they decided to make them all miserable ALL OVER AGAIN...wasn't 15 YEARS good enough for you?! You know what...I don't care about their "rules" because I really do think they HAVE NO IDEA what being human is actually like. Hmmm...I think it is when your head is too up in the clouds that things just don't make any sense at all...so why bother trying to understand ANYTHING when you could just make up crackpot rules and delegate them to people who actually do take the time to understand the meaning of "empathy". Okay, while reading all the updates I sadly missed, some scenes glared out at me and now they're forcing me to write them down...I can't leave them alone!!! They nag too much. I think I actually cried during that scene where Piper was giving birth to Melinda and Piper's own mother had actually taken a big risk to be there by her side when her own sisters or Leo couldn't be...that is truly what family is all about. This scene made me wish Patty was on the show more often!!! Oh, but the clincher was after her mother left...that Piper named her daughter Melinda *Patricia* Halliwell...Patty must have been so happy about that!!! And she truly deserved that honour!!! The letters that Piper wrote through all those years that Leo read just made me go back to the eppy P3 H2O when Piper and Leo were reading Patty's letters to Sam...I loved the nostalgia feeling I got from reading Piper's letters...and at some points she really seemed to be echoing her mother in terms of their respective love for their own whitelighters. I'm glad you did a couple updates with just memories of the past fifteen years for Piper and Melinda...it helped to understand why they were like they were years down the line. I'm not really sure what to think of Jamie...I really did not like her when she just had to mention what she knew about Melinda...which then made the Elders immediately lock Leo up again...that was so awful!!!! But at least Melinda seemed to have forgiven her, and Jamie probably hadn't meant to intentionally cause all that to happen, so she's okay for now. She isn't hanging out with the ice princesses who don't know feelings from a hot dog...so that's another plus!!! I love the little twist you put on Phoebe and Prue's families...I'm really glad that you kept Phoebe with Cole (ugh! Source of All Evil, that ruined his character!) and I like how happy they are because Cole is truly her soulmate...no one else could have successfully filled that position (something with forbidden love being an ingredient for eternal love?). Yay!!! And Chris is in the story...it's really cool that he's Phoebe's son instead of Piper's...for some reason, I think he could work just as well either way. And he gets some demonic powers! And a twin! Hmmm...he should be Phoebe's son more often...it's fun seeing him with all these powers while on the show they did an exceptionally crappy job of giving him really interesting powers. Admittedly, it is a little weird seeing Prue have a family and all when on the show she died without that kind of happiness. It's nice though that she's still around because these three sisters together seem to be the best combination...they actually grew up with each other, while Paige didn't have that kind of connection with Piper and Phoebe. The blue haze that Melinda has at her emotional high points is very interesting and I would love to see where you'll go with that...it looks like that when blue haze appears...she is actually really tapping into her true power...the power that is good enough to defeat the Source of All Evil with! Can she use it already and defeat that little nuisance? I can't believe the Source is that naive enough to send all those demons to a manor full of people who are perfectly capable of kicking their evil a$$es and then some, of course!!! He has got to be kidding himself!!! Melinda should show him what REAL POWER is all about!!! Yes, yes I think that is enough. Hope you'll update soon!!! Aww...now I have to wait!!! I was just getting used to just reading it all without waiting *patiently?* for the next update to be up... |
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What a sorry excuse for a whitelighter Bob is. I'm glad Melinda decided to do something finally. I was just waiting for Phoebe to break out the martial arts on his sorry butt, but choking him is so much better!
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I'm with SciFi, CF12!! PLEASE update very, very *very* soon!!!
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I'm so sorry everyone!!! A full excuse (well, sort of) in my other thread. And wonderful to have such great reviews, such as silvermoon's! I was shocked to see that. I thought for a moment it was one of my updates or something it was so long! lol.
One thing in particular caught my attention: about Chris. Let me be perfectly honest with you, I invented Chris before the show did. I should go sue. hehe. I really like Chris, my Chris anyway. I don't enjoy the show like I used to, so I don't watch it. (Don't run away! That doesn't mean that you should go away! I love you all!)
Not long later, Melinda arrived in her little home and saw her mom cooking dinner. She walked over by the answering machine and ripped up her note from before and threw it in the trash. Piper turned around and sighed in relief.
“We ought to put a bell around you or something,” she told her, and Melinda grinned.
“Why’s that? I scared you?”<br>“Well, not really, but I wasn’t sure if you were some being of evil to come and decapitate me and my daughter wouldn’t be here to help.”<br>“Well, hopefully that won’t be a problem anymore.”<br>“Duh it won’t. My daughter is here.”<br>“How do you know I’m not a shape shifter?”<br>“Eh, mother’s sense.”<br>“Right.” Piper grinned and pulled Melinda into a quick hug.
“Love you honey.”<br>“Right back at you.”<br>“You smell like cleaner.”<br>“Probably.”<br>“Why?”<br>“Aunt Phoebe recruited me to be her help.” Piper started sniggering, and Melinda scowled at her. “Go ahead, laugh.”<br>“I am!” she said, chuckling some more.
“I saw their whitelighter today.” Piper’s laughter died down very quickly.
“You did?”<br>“Yeah, he was talking crap about Dad and Cole, Aunt Phoebe’s husband.”<br>“In front of you?” her mom practically cried.
“He didn’t know I was there.” Piper let out the breath that she was holding angrily.
“Do you remember anything that he said?”<br>“One thing that I remembered is that he said that Dad was a waste of flesh and so were you, the exiled sister, and so was ‘that thing that they created’. That sure brought my self esteem up,” Melinda said sarcastically. “He also said something else, but I really don’t want to repeat it.” Piper threw the wooden spoon she had in her hand down angrily, and shut off the stove before holding out her hand to Melinda. “No, Mom, it’s alright.” Piper’s lips were thin from her anger, and Melinda took her mom’s hand with a sigh and orbed out. “Mom…”
“No, you shouldn’t have to have to listen to what he says. Where is he?”<br>“He left a long time ago,” Melinda told her as they headed into the kitchen. No one was in there, and Melinda could sense that Phoebe was upstairs.
“Where is she?” Melinda sighed.
“She’s in the bathroom. Probably cleaning it.” Piper walked upstairs, but Melinda orbed out and orbed back in front of her mothers on the stairs, cutting her off.
“That’s cheating.”<br>“Is not. Now, calm down.”<br>“I am calm, I just need to talk to my sister,” Piper told her patiently, before trying to shove her aside.
“About what?” Melinda asked, not letting her mom through. Piper sighed. “I know that you’re angry, but what can you do?” Piper put her hands up in defense.
“You’re right. I’m…just a little on edge,” Piper said.
“Yeah, I know.”<br>“I still want to talk to Phoebe about this whitelighter of hers.”<br>“Haven’t we already figured that there’s no point to that?”<br>“Yes, but I’m stubborn.”<br>“Really? Hadn’t noticed,” Melinda said sarcastically, and led the way to the upstairs bathroom.
“Phoebe,” Piper said as she saw Phoebe in the bathroom with a spray bottle in hand.
“What’s the matter?” Phoebe asked, looking at Melinda. In response, Melinda glanced pointedly at her mom before rolling her eyes.
“What’s the problem with your whitelighter?” Piper asked, walking in and leaning on the sink counter.
“He’s a bitter, lonely man. I don’t want to make excuses though,” Phoebe said, standing up and flattening the wrinkles on her pants.
“Don’t make a big deal out of this,” Melinda requested.
“I’m not. I’m making a really small deal out of this. I want to know this; it’s just an inquiry.”<br>“Like I said, Robert is a very bitter man. For years, he’s been alone, and he feels he has to deal with his charges because that’s his job. Not every whitelighter is like Leo,” Phoebe ended softly. Piper nodded, and disconsolation started to invade her senses.
“He’s never coming back,” Piper whispered, before tears came over her and she threw her arms around Phoebe and wept. Melinda watched in silence her mother take comfort in her sister, and she thought about Leo as well. Maybe her mom was right; he wasn’t coming back. Melinda wrapped her arms around herself, and looked at the ceiling. They would never let him back.
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Snuffle! Snuffle! This story just keeps on breaking my heart, CF12! I feel so badly for Piper & Melinda; this just has be *so* hard! I'll bet Melinda feels like she should've never met her dad, so she wouldn't miss him so much, but then, again, you have the lyrics for The Dance which fits this situation so well!!
I do hope you figure a way to bring Leo back for them, and a way of getting rid of Bobby-Boy, too. But like them, right now it feels hopeless!
Great, great job!! I love the relationship between Piper & Melinda!!
Please update soon!!
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NO!!!! *Cries to self* Leo must come back!! Terrific update! Please Write more soon!!! Please!
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*SOB* That was just so sad...poor Piper, at least Melinda told her so she can now know for sure how utterly *strangle, choke, suffocate* that whitelighter is!!! That is definitely how Piper would react...how dare someone criticize who she chose to love, marry, and cherish forever, and then to say her own daughter was 'a thing'...I wholeheartedly believe that if Piper ever saw Bob again, he wouldn't look so great afterwards. Oooo...can you do that scene?! I really want to see it now!
I really hope Leo does come back because this whole situation is just so sad . . .
I miss those *happy* chapters when Melinda finally got to reunite with her father, and Piper, her soulmate.
Update soon!!!! Please?
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Great update, CF12! We really need some hope right about now that Leo can somehow come home to his family, because Up There is definitely not home for this whitelighter!
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oooooh my goodness... i so didn't know you updated..... but wow! that was great..... and yet so sad..... you better find a way to bring leo back , YOU HEAR ME CF12??? lol... oh please update soon so we can maybe get a glimpse of hope that leo is coming back
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CF12, Please update soon. I am on the edge of my seat waiting to see what is going to happen
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you have to update soon. This is just so wonderful. You write emotional stories very well.
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I'm with the others!! PLEASE update soon!!!
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OMG you havent updated since like forever!!! lol UPDATE SOO OR
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I am a TERRIBLE, AWFUL, BEYOND WORTH ANYTHING kind of person. I know. I know. But guess what?! I got my internet working! I don't know how long this will last, because it usually doesn't last more than an hour or so AT MOST, so I knew i needed to update. I'M SO SORRY, SO SORRY YOU WOULD NEVER BELIEVE ME. Ugh. *beats head on clostet object, which is a metal safe box* I'm sorry.
Alright, I'm so unbeliveably close to the void that this isn't that long. But alas! I have been trying to write, and I've been writing a bit in the last couple of days. You know what I've noticed? Well, let me tell you first that I started school again today. Anyway, I'm more likely to write after school when I am tired and I'm on the computer here. But for some reason, I could not for the life of me write during the summer. Well, expect more soon if my internet cooperates.
Three Earth months went by. Melinda and Piper felt so alone, but both tried to keep everything inside. Anyone could see their pain if they only opened their eyes and saw them. A way that Piper and Melinda helped themselves was just simply by being around the people they loved. Phoebe, Prue, their families, Betty, Sarah.
Mike helped Melinda in the simpler ways, with cheering her up or making her smile. Melinda also found having Jamie around made her feel better about herself, as if she’d done something and helped someone who really needed the helping hand. Simple satisfactions come in the smallest places sometimes, and these satisfactions were the things that kept the two of them rolling along each day with a smile on their faces when they needed them. Deep inside, though, in the far places where no one could possibly reach, the emptiness was hardly bearable.
Up There, Leo could feel their pain. As a whitelighter and as a father of a magical being, he could sense their emotions less then they could, but he knew that they were suffering. He didn’t blame them. Leo often paced around the small room, trying to take deep breaths of the cool, moist air to relax himself. His heart did not slow it’s fast pulsing, however, and his anxiety grew each day. Three days he was locked in the horribly lonely room, and during those days sleep was rare. A million thoughts roamed through his head, and he wondered if he would live out the rest of eternity with the echoes of their emotions rolling through his mind.
Piper had the idea of everyone coming to her apartment for a dinner. It was a good distraction from her life and the immortal one that constantly clouded her mind. The only problem was space in her small apartment, but once fold up tables and chairs were squeezed in, the problem was solved and Melinda and Piper could laugh about their furniture arrangement. Piper had appointed Melinda with certain jobs in the kitchen that day, which included cleaning and shaving the skins off vegetables, along with other little jobs.
“Do you think it’s always going to be like this?” Melinda asked, not looking up from the carrots she was chopping for her mom’s secret recipe caramelized carrot dish.
“It being so humid?” her mom asked, looking over at her daughter with a small smile.
“No! I’m not talking about the weather,” Melinda responded as she continued to chop the vegetables.
“So…am I supposed to guess here?”<br>“Do you think it’ll always just be the two of us?” Melinda said, looking up at her mother’s expressionless face. She never answered, and Melinda sighed before finishing up cutting the carrots.
Leo’s head perked up when the door opened to his chamber. He turned around and heard John’s voice.
“Just let me talk to him for a moment before.” John stepped in and looked at Leo. “Hey, how’s it going in here?” John asked, and rephrased his question with Leo’s expression. “Um, how are you?”<br>“I dunno. I just…keep thinking about them.”<br>“The Elders?”<br>“No.”
“Oh.” Silence followed for a moment, before John caught Leo’s eyes once more. “The Elders wanted me to get you.”<br>“What is it about?” Leo asked, as he tried not to get his hopes up too much. He got to his feet.
“I don’t know. They just told me to get you.”<br>“Why you anyway?”<br>“You seem not to struggle so much with me, they say,” John said with a small laugh, which Leo didn’t have the heart to return. Leo’s eyes were dark with an emotionless fog as he followed John to the Elders.
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:44:11 GMT -5
Esmeralda Posts: 1425 (8/13/04 1:15 am) Reply Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- First, before I read the actual update. I think I've said it before, but I'll definitely say it again. You are *not* a Quote: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- TERRIBLE, AWFUL, BEYOND WORTH ANYTHING kind of person -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- You couldn't write so beautifully if you were! I think you're as tortured as you have Leo, Piper & Melinda be, but that doesn't make you any of those things!! To use those horrible feelings that you must have within you to write such fantastically beatiful prose tells me that there's a beautiful, wonderful person deep inside you. I hope the response you get to your stories (have you noticed how many Charmies you're up for and how many you're winning???) will help you bring that person to the forefront. (I've always said a hug will cure all ills, so here's a bunch of them!!) And no need to feel sorry about not updating. We *all* understand writer's block a little too well! And when it's summer and you have all sorts of other things going on...!! Definitely understandable. But if going back to school means more frequent updates, you'll have yourself a bunch of happy readers!!! Quote: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- *beats head on clostet object, which is a metal safe box* -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I think the thing that needs beating is your computer!!! Here's hoping you figure a way of making it behave very soon! CF12'S COMPUTER--BEHAVE OR ELSE!!!!! *casts a spell on CF12's computer so it will behave whenever she wants to update UC!!* *While she's at it, casts a spell on CF12, so she'll know what a wonderful person she is!* *Now casts a spell on Esmeralda, so she stops writing and starts reading UC!!!* Esmeralda Posts: 1426 (8/13/04 1:21 am) Reply Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- YIKES!! What a place to stop!!! What are those !@#$% Elders up to NOOOOOOOOOOOOOW? They better let Leo go back to Piper & Melinda, or I know a bunch of readers who will storm Up There and kick some Elderly a$$!!!!!!!!! I love the way you write all three characters, Leo, Piper & Melinda; you can truly feel all of their pain, and getting the feeling that the pain you yourself feel must be similar just makes my heart ache for you. Please update as soon as we can. I *do* hope you find a way to give them a happy ending, mainly so you'll know that there's hope that eventually *you'll* find one, too!!! charmed2008 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 1780 (8/15/04 11:38 am) Reply ezSupporter Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Yes i agree with ES, what a place to stop!!!!! lol i still have three weeks till my school starts here in Texas. Great update!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!Please update when you can!! silvermoon8705 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 333 (8/18/04 2:15 pm) Reply ezSupporter Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- That was sooo good!!! I love how you write Leo...it's such an interesting perspective on his character and makes you wish that Melinda can see him again. Even if your updates are short, there's just so much emotion and feeling in them that it leaves you waiting for more. Charming PL Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 40 (8/18/04 10:55 pm) Reply Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Great update CF12! I hope the Elders don't come up with some new kind of cruel and unusual punishment for Leo. I love your writing. Quote: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- lol i still have three weeks till my school starts here in Texas. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Are you serious charmed2008? I live in Texas too and my school started on the 16th! silvermoon8705 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 334 (8/19/04 2:17 am) Reply ezSupporter Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- How weird is that! charmed2008 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 1782 (8/19/04 9:22 am) Reply ezSupporter Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I agree with silvery!!! Lol i live near Houston. oddball7 Global User Posts: 2026 (8/19/04 9:25 pm) Reply | Edit ezSupporter Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- wow!.... that was great cf12 and by far worth the wait!!!!!! It sounds like your having comp problems and we understand and yeah we just expect ya to enjoy your summer.... but I can't wait to read the next update so don't worry if its late... we'll understand and yeah i'm with the others..... what on earth are those stinkin elders up to this time?!?!?... we could only hope that.... Charming PL Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 41 (8/19/04 10:35 pm) Reply Re: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Quote: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- i live near Houston. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Me too. You never know, we may know each other and not even know it! Charming PL charmed2008 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 1784 (8/23/04 1:25 pm) Reply ezSupporter Re -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Quote: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Me too. You never know, we may know each other and not even know it! -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- LOL!!! |
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:44:45 GMT -5
silvermoon8705 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 336 (8/23/04 7:26 pm) Reply ezSupporter Re: Re -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- *falls out of chair from laughing too hard* charmed2008 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 1787 (8/24/04 12:09 pm) Reply ezSupporter Re: Re -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Silvery??? Why are you laughing? ? mkp3mom Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 33 (8/24/04 2:59 pm) Reply Re: Re -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Great job charmed 12! Keep up the good work, can't wait to read more. ***This fan fic is popular with Texans - I'm between Austin and San Antonio*** Charming PL Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 42 (8/24/04 10:34 pm) Reply Re: Re -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- This is so weird!! I'm between Austin and Houston along the interstate. Charming PL Esmeralda Posts: 1509 (8/24/04 11:51 pm) Reply Re: Re: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Well, it's definitely not just you rebs down in Texas who like this story! I'm from Minnesota, way up north, and this yankee (although I'm a Twins fan, not a Yankee fan!) loves it, too, dontcha know?? You betcha I do!! CF12, PLEASE update sooooooooooooooooooon!!! charmed2008 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 1788 (8/25/04 12:21 am) Reply ezSupporter Re: Re: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- LOL wow i just went through Austin and San Antonio and Houston and San Antonio. How weird is that. mkp3mom Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 34 (8/25/04 11:36 am) Reply Re: Re: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Ha, esmerelda I have family in the Brainerd area! Just got back from there in July! Charmed 12, we are getting off subject here......update soon please charmed2008 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 1789 (8/25/04 11:47 am) Reply ezSupporter Re: Re: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Yes I agree, CF12 UPDATE before you kill me!!! lol Esmeralda Posts: 1512 (8/25/04 12:24 pm) Reply To: mkp3mom -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Cool! My sister has a lakehome (too big to call it a cabin!) on Gull Lake between Nisswa & Brainerd!! I often go up there for swimming, boating, fishing, skiing, relaxing, etc-ing!! silvermoon8705 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 337 (8/26/04 10:15 pm) Reply ezSupporter Re: charmed2008 -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Quote: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Yes I agree, CF12 UPDATE before you kill me!!! lol -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Oh and yeah, hope you update soon CF12!!! |
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:45:11 GMT -5
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You people are nutty.
“When can we eat?” Chris asked as he looked over the small feast sitting in front of him. Phoebe gave him a stern look.
“Not everyone is here yet, it’s rude to start without everyone sitting down,” she scolded, but turned to Piper. “This does look really good though. I can see why he’s so impatient.”<br>“Sarah should be here soon enough,” Piper told Chris with a small smile. Melinda sat in silence, focusing on something other than anything physically around her.
“You wanna try calling her again Mom?” Piper nodded.
“Sure. Sarah! Sarah!” Piper looked down at her daughter with curiosity.
“I don’t think she’s coming.”<br>“She said she’d come. We can just start without her, she won’t mind,” Piper said, as she started passing around the turkey.
“Hear, hear!” Chris called, graciously accepting the turkey from Betty.
“I still can’t help but wonder about her though, where would she be? I hope it’s not the Elders,” Piper said, her mood suddenly getting dark. Melinda grabbed the corn out of her hands roughly to get her mom back to earth. “I know, I shouldn’t think about it.”<br>“There’s plenty of other things to talk about anyway,” Prue said, telekinetically floating the corn from Melinda’s hands into her own.
“Hey!”<br>“You’re done with it,” Prue said with a smile.
“You still could’ve asked,” Melinda mumbled, and Prue just laughed.
“Anyway, AJ got an A minus on his science test today,” she said, looking at her son. AJ put his napkin over his head to hide his face.
“It’s no big deal, Mom,” he mumbled to her under his napkin.
“Sure it is.”<br>“We are going on a field trip in a few weeks! To Sea World!” Kristen inserted, beaming. “Me and Chris!” Phoebe looked up from her potatoes with a stern look to her daughter. She apparently ignored her grammatical mistake.
“No you are not until you tell me about it. Where’s your permission form?”<br>“Backpacks,” Chris said with his mouth full of carrots.
“Don’t talk with your mouth full,” Phoebe told him, and he swallowed.
“You’re going to let us go, right Ma?” he asked.
“Maybe,” Phoebe told him, with finality. AJ laughed at him in his giggly laugh, taking his napkin off his head. Chris loaded some potatoes on his spoon and readied his shot. “You don’t want to go to Sea World, do you?” Phoebe asked him, and he dropped his spoon, sulking.
Piper watched them with a small smile. It faded though when she looked over to Prue, who was putting potatoes playfully on Bane’s nose, and he was smiling at her, watching her have her fun. Phoebe and Cole had their hands together on the table, and they were both began bickering about the Internet. She then looked down at her daughter, who was quiet, eating, but not thinking about eating. She was somewhere else, as she often was. She sighed, and began eating what was on her own plate, and tried to simply enjoy being with her whole family. She needed to be able to appreciate that, instead of thinking about what she and her daughter didn’t have.
A half an hour later, most of the plates were cleared out except for the twins, who kept going back for refills. They were all on the topic of Prue and Bane’s magazine.
“You don’t think you should sell it?” Betty asked Prue.
“I wouldn’t mind, I guess. I’m just so used to it being the way it was, but I suppose it’ll freshen things up,” Prue responded.
“It certainly will,” Bane commented. “We’ve been losing readers for years, but selling 415 would give it a new start again.”<br>“So you think that you are going to do it?” Kristen asked.
“We still need to talk to the buyer and the owners of the magazine. It’s not a simple process,” he responded. “It might not even happen.”<br>“But-” Phoebe started, but stopped when orbs started raining down behind Piper. Piper heard them, but didn’t turn around from collecting people’s plates.
“Sarah, I thought I told you dinner was at four!” she exclaimed, putting down the dishes and turning around. Her heart stopped when she saw who was in front of her. “Le-Leo?”<br>“Piper,” he started, but was interrupted when Piper came up to him and started kissing him with all the passion she contained. He returned it with as much enthusiasm, if not more.
Melinda watched them, wide-eyed, almost disbelieving. She thought she would never see him again. She could hardly get oxygen into her lungs. The rest of the table sat there in silence as well.
Piper pulled away from Leo to try and catch her breath. She couldn’t believe she was in his arms again.
“I should go away more often, if I come back and get that every time,” he joked, but received a hard hit to the chest.
“That is not funny!” Piper hissed, her chest shaking with the resistance not to cry.
“I know, I’m sorry,” he said, hugging her. She pulled away almost instantly and looked at him seriously.
“Will they let you stay?” she asked, getting right to the point. He sighed. “Will they?!”<br>“I don’t know.”<br>“Then what are you doing here?”<br>“They said that they would send a whitelighter when they came to an answer.”<br>“But they didn’t tell you what the answer was?” He shook his head.
“They sent me after you… and Melinda,” he said, looking at his daughter. Melinda returned his gaze for a moment, before turning and looking at the rest of her family. They said nothing, so she looked back at him and stood up.
“Betty can help you desserts, but we need to go,” Piper said, entering back into Leo’s embrace.
“Don’t worry about us,” Phoebe said, her anxiety showing in her face. Leo rested his head on top of Pipers and closed his eyes. They were lifted to the heavens in the rain of orbs, and Melinda watched them leave before glancing at everyone else one last time before orbing out herself.
As Melinda appeared next to her parents, who were not letting go of each other as though they might not see each other again, she shuddered a small breath at the bright, cloud filled room with the marble floors and stone columns that reached to God knows where, with the purpose of God knows what. The place had haunted her dreams for the past three months, and she couldn’t even swallow when she thought about it. How could a place so…Good, be so evil?
“We should go in,” Leo whispered to them. Melinda looked into his face, and could clearly see his fear.
“Do you know something we don’t?” Melinda asked, before looking through the double doors, though not able to see the Elder’s table through the haze. Leo looked into her eyes; ones which looked so much like his own.
“No.” He wasn’t lying. Leo didn’t know what their fate was, and he was scared to hear the Elder’s decision. He knew them far too well. He dreaded walking through those doors as much as they did.
“Where’s Sarah?” Melinda asked, not seeing any whitelighters around.
“She was told not to go to you.” His eyes turned back toward the open doors, but he didn’t move.
“I don’t want to go,” Piper mumbled, still not letting go of Leo. He looked down at the head she had rested on his shoulder.
“I know.”<br>“Leo!” a voice boomed from that dreaded chamber, and his eyes shot in its direction.
“Come on,” he said, taking Piper’s hand and looking at his daughter, his own flesh and blood, his love and devotion, before leading the way into the Elder’s hall.
As they entered, the Elder’s fierce eyes were falling on them.
“Stand away from her,” Uriel demanded to Leo, and he reluctantly released his hand from his love’s and stepped away. Melinda walked a step in front of her mother and glared up at the people responsible for her family’s pain.
This was another one of those mid-section endings. I want you to know that since school has started I have been writing a lot. Most of my time has been spent on a favorite of mine that i don't have posted yet. Maybe someday. Anyway, what you just read was not old stuff. It had been written in the last two weeks. Shows you how bad off I am. i'm sort of having a little writers block on this story, but I'm not complaining. REVIEW!!!
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:45:39 GMT -5
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GRRRRRRREAT update! Oh I feel so sorry for Melinda Piper and Leo! I hope you get over your writers block and are able to update soon! I can't wait to find out what those evil elders do next! Hopefully they will do something nice and good for the first time!
Until Next Time.
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I really liked the part where Piper realized how much she missed Leo as she observed her sisters with their own spouses. That was nicely written...it was so sad when she noticed how Melinda was quiet, and her mind probably somewhere else as it usually was. That aspect of her character is pretty interesting...maybe because I can relate to that more or less. And I can't believe that Piper got only one moment of happiness with Leo coming back before the Elder's decision ruined the whole scene...
I hope that the Elders will get a taste of their own bitter medicine, but I'm guessing at this point that's just sad wishful thinking. Hey, at least I tried.
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Im with silvery glad you updated!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!And im sorry to hear that you have writers block or is kinda having some!!! UPDATE as soon as you can!!
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WOW!!!!!!!!! YOU NEVER CEASE TO AMAZE ME CF12!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I know im a little late getting around to reading this but wow.... i can't wait to see what the elders have in store for the trio..... *crosses fingers and chants* please be good please be good please be good please be good....
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I'm with the others; absolutely wonderful update, CF12! As always, i loved the glimpse of the rest of the family, since I love them as much as I love Piper, Leo & Melinda. And getting to see her sisters so happy and so normal with their families has to be *so* hard on Piper & Melinda!
At first when Leo showed up, I thought maybe the Elders had already made their decision and for *once* in their !@#$% existences, they had made the right one! But no such luck. Once more they're torturing this family by giving them glimpses of what they could've had, but can't. I'm with Melinda--how can people who are supposed to be so good be so !@#$ evil???
I'm spooked about Sarah not showing up. Those !@#$ Elders wouldn't be cruel enough to take *her* away from Piper & Melinda, too, would they? Oh, yes, they would!!! !@#$%
I have a hunch the news is not going to be good--that just seems to be the way this story is going. But this time I hope Leo doesn't decide to just be Mr. Nice Guy, but does something to save his family! And if he doesn't, I hope either Piper or Melinda do, or, better, they go back, get their whole family and sick *them* on them!!
I hope you get passed your writer's block soon and update soon!!!
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:46:26 GMT -5
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*sighs a breath of relief* Here it is... Not the end, but what you all have been waiting for. I know half of you don't want spoilers, but I can't help it. I just have to say that...god, you are going to hate me for this...the Elders....don't decide that they can be together. *ducks behind monitor like that Dell guy when the golf ball was hit*
The end is nearing! You don't understand how happy that makes me. I know you probably just want to wring my neck after what I just told you...but hold off on that, alright? I know EXACTLY what I did. You'll see at the end of this update.
Did I mention yet that I have already written a little for my sequel? Yep. It'll be about as long as this one, and might take about as long to do, with the way things are going in my head. But I hope that you'll like it as much as you like this one (that is, whenever I decide that I can post it). I'm going to try and really get going on that story once I can finally put "The End" for this one.
Anyway, enough blabber from me, enjoy. I hope.
“We have come to a decision, of sorts,” said one of the other Elders, whom Melinda had only heard speak the one he told them about their prophecy. Before Leo could ask for clarification, he spoke again. “We do not all agree. But majority shall rule.” Once again, he continued before Leo could get out a word. “We all, for the most part, were impressed with your daughter. She handled herself well in front of us, and though she had her moments where her respect ran thin, he spoke well and with maturity we did not expect in her.” Melinda wanted to smile. Maybe this meant that they would give them Leo.
“We never imagined having the Prophesied suddenly appearing before us. We could never imagined that it would come from a situation such as this. This has been a major point in our debates of the scenario. Nonetheless, that does not change what you have done.” It felt as if there were a golf ball stuck in Melinda’s throat, and she could hardly breathe. “Rules have been broken, and knowing of the dangers in breaking these rules the two of you continued with your disobedience. Your disobedience reaches a level that we all have never expected to see in one of our own whitelighters.
“Leo, we gave you immortality so you may help others, but look what your selfishness has done! Look what you have done to your lover, and to your love child! The pain you have created cannot be undone.
“Despite the pain you caused, they fight for you anyway. Why would they do that for you, when you have created for them a life of loneliness and exile? Do they deserve reward for their loyalty? Or do they deserve punishment for their disrespect? These were thoughts that roamed through our minds as we have spent Earth months discussing this.
“I was the one of us who most believed in the Prophecy of the one who would bring down evil. Ever since we have thought that perhaps your daughter may be this person who would spend her life to save the existence of innocence in the world by destroying the Source of All Evil, we have also thought that perhaps there was nothing to be done about your relationship. Of course, if we said over 15 years ago that we would not give you the decision to avoid our wrath, and if we did not need to punish you for your crime and conceal you in our chamber, we would have disrupted Destiny. The fact that your relationship was claimed cursed centuries before you ever came into existence, and you were destined to be together, has been something much discussed. Does that change anything?
“No, has been one of the answers. Yes, has also been another answer. But there are some of us who remain torn. Our ultimate decision, though…”
“I think this deserves more thought,” Uriel interrupted, his voice impatient and demanding.
“I know that is what you think Uriel, but the rest of us accept the decision, no matter what the outcome may be.”<br>“You’re willing to risk everything?!” Uriel shouted at the hooded Elder.
“What are we risking? Lives?”<br>“What about our authority?”<br>“Quiet, Uriel, please, for my sake,” the feeble Elder interrupted. “Let’s get to the point.”<br>“Of course. Our decision is not one way or the other. Instead we have come to one that perhaps may be biased, but honest. We have said to…to let the Prophesied decide your fate.”<br>“What?” Melinda spat out. Did she hear that right?
“Make your decision wisely. You must consider both sides. If you choose as you are planning to, you will bring about some joy, but eventually pain. Your father would continue to be a whitelighter, which means immortality. We will not make any exception to this. You and your mother are not immortal, and eventually you will pass on and create a world of pain and anguish for your father that will last until the end of time. If you choose to save him from an eternity of pain with the memories of what he once had but will never have again, you will only suffer minimal pain in turn.” Melinda turned and looked at her father, and knew what choice he would make if he were the one in her place.
“Why me?” escaped from her mouth as she turned back around to look at the Elders.
“We are trusting the wisdom that you were born with. Our hope is that whatever resolution is made will be the right choice to help you along with your destiny. If you choose their happiness, we will allow Leo to be your whitelighter, as long as they do not distract each other from their jobs, which come first and foremost.”<br>“What about Sarah?”
“We have known that losing Sarah would be a terrible loss for you to face, for she is a very good whitelighter.”<br>“She’s a great person too,” Melinda added, her brow furrowed as she looked up at them. “Robert ultimately was not the best choice to be the Charmed Ones’ whitelighter, this we have known, but accepted that maybe he could teach them to have more respect. Our plan did not work out. Perhaps Sarah may take over as your sisters’ whitelighter, if that were their wish.
“If you choose the latter of the choices we gave you, you will return to your previous way of life, but will have any amount of access to her sisters as you please. The exception will be that Leo will not be able to see you, but he could not have the same pain as he would if they wed and you both move on from this life.
“What is most important is your destiny. Whatever choice you make would be the one that saves the world from a reign of evil that would, in time, spread itself over the world. Choose selflessly if you must.”<br>“You are really making me choose?”
“Yes.” Melinda turned around and looked back at her parents to see them looking intensely at her, hoping, and knowing, that she would make the right decision.
“This will be pretty easy,” she muttered, before she smiled.
Do you forgive me now? lol. REVIEWS ARE MANDITORY. PLEASE TAKE ONE MINUTE OUT OF YOUR DAY AND TYPE AS MUCH AS POSSIBLE, LOL.
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:46:43 GMT -5
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Great update CharmedFan12. Of course Melinda would choose to have her parents together right? I'm surprised the Elders let her pick and just didn't decide themselves. Hope you update soon.
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That was so good. I can't wait until you update again!! Its going to be good. I just know it!
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Wow, CF12, Wow! With all of your fantastic updates, I think this was the best of all, because it truly points out all of the factors in Melinda's decision. I'm with the Elders--which would be the most selfless, the one that shows the most love.
Being the Leo-fan I am, I'd hate seeing him totally out of the picture, but if Melinda is truly the wise person she has shown herself to be, doing what would give her father the least amount of pain (although, personally, if all the Charmed Ones fulfill their destinies, I think they should *all* become whitelighters, which would allow Piper & Leo (and Prue & Bane and Phoebe & Cole) a chance to love for eternity!) would show the most amount of love.
But for her to be able to fulfill her destiny (and I *love* the idea of her being the one who goes against the Source in --who, HOPEFULLY, will *not* be Cole!!!!!!!!!!!!!!--in the sequel! Can't wait!!!), will it be better to have her father there to help her out?
Man, what a quandry!!!
But I do love the idea of Sarah being the Charmed Ones' whitelighter rather than Robert and for the Elders to admit that their experiment failed!!
I can't wait to find out what *you* think Melinda's decision should be, since *you* know her best!!
Please update soon!!!
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:47:15 GMT -5
Prue21 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 425 (9/6/04 7:49 pm) Reply Re: Update -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Great Update CF12! I can't wait to see what Melinda's choice is! Very good job, and I'd write a longer review but I've been away all weekend and I have lots of catching up to do. Update as soon as you can!! Prue21 charmed2008 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 1809 (9/8/04 8:22 am) Reply ezSupporter Re: Update -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- OMG OMG OMG OMG that was really good!!!! WOW what choice would she make? I know which one i would make, i wouldnt want after i died for Leo to be all sad and stuff. Can i say OMG again that was soooo good!!!!!! UPDATE Soon please! CharmedFan12 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 506 (10/30/04 7:04 pm) Reply Do you remember me? -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Do any of you wonderful people remember me, the stupid person who doesn't know how to update? Well, here I am, updating. I'm soooooo sorry you wouldn't understand. I appreciate all of you being so patient and forgetting about my story for this long. I have good news though! I have officially finished this story. I'm estatic right now. A little over a year and a half and I could find a place where I could end. It's not perfect, and later on, some day, I might go back and 'perfect' this. Anyway, you don't want to listen to me, the stupid person who doesn't know how to update! Here you go! (This is not the end yet, but it'll be done soon enough! Yay!) As they reappeared in the apartments with an unbelievable amount of joy in their hearts; the first things that Melinda noticed was that it was completely empty and looked as though they never had their dinner. The family seemed to clean up after themselves, or at least Betty cleaned up. Her parents hardly even noticed the place around them. They were holding on to each other so tightly; Piper was crying with the overwhelming emotions of her dream come true. Leo was whispering his love for her in her ear, and she was nodding slightly, still shaking with silent sobs. Once she had calmed herself down, she readjusted her position in Leo’s arms and put her head against his chest; the slow, steady rhythm of his heart soothing her. “Ugh. I’m sorry,” she mumbled. “For what?” he asked, looking down at the top of her head. “That I went all emotional like this. I just can’t believe this. I never thought that this would happen to me, to us. All of us,” she said, opening her eyes and looking at Melinda, who smiled in response. “You have nothing to be sorry for. I never knew that this would ever happen either.”<br>“What now?” she asked him, and he took a step back. “Now is when I do this properly,” Leo said, before he bent down on one knee. Piper laughed. “You don’t need to do this.”<br>“I know I don’t. I want to do this; I want to do this properly. Now, will you let me do this?”<br>“Sure,” she said, grinning and wiping her face with her hand. “Alright. Piper, I have loved you for almost two decades now, and I will continue to love you until the end of time if that is how long I am going to live. You and Melinda are my life now, and I will make sure that I can make you both as happy as possible. If there is one thing that I can ask you it is to make me happy now. Will you marry me?”<br>“I think I already answered that question,” she said, pulling him to his feet and kissing him. She pulled away and simply stared into his eyes for a moment before stepping away and pulling Melinda into a loving hug. “I love you so much. Thank you.” Melinda chuckled. “Don’t thank me. Thank the Elders, they knew what I’d say,” she said, and then looked thoughtful. “I never thought I would say that,” she said, and both of her parents laughed lightly. Leo walked over and Piper gave him his chance to embrace his daughter. “You’re going to stay longer this time, right?” Melinda joked, while Leo smiled and her mom rolled her eyes. “I don’t see why not.”<br>“Good.” She and her father broke their hug and he kissed her forehead softly. “Now, about the wedding, I don’t have to wear a skirt or dress or anything, do I?”<br> CharmedFan12 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 507 (10/30/04 7:17 pm) Reply  -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- again! I everyone of you! Kowa97 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 166 (10/30/04 10:01 pm) Reply Re: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Wow, I almost thought that this one was done and I missed something. But I am glad you updated,(((AFTER ALMOST 3 MONTHs))) But it is good to see an update. I continue to love this story and can't wait to see what happens Kowa CharmedFan12 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 508 (10/31/04 12:53 am) Reply haha -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- lol, Kowa, I know, and I'm sorry. Summer was a terrible time for me when it came to writing. I'm sure everyone who has ever had a summer break has had the times when they could hardly muster up the energy to move their finger to change the channel. I'm getting back into the groove of everything, even homework (*gasp!* that's right, I have a bad habit of not doing homework), and during this period of time I was able to finish this story. I think I'm done. It's weird, this would be the first story I've ever finished! A year and a half's work finally pretty much done. I've been working a little bit on the sequel. More information on that as I get better at writing this and when you all near the end of my precious UC! I hope you all enjoyed that update, more to come soon! The Blue Flamers Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 40 (10/31/04 9:25 am) Reply WooHoo! -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- OMG! You updated! YAY!!! Uz iz vewy happy!!! And it was a goooood one too!! But... What about your other fic? **hinthint** We want an update there too!! Thankies for coming back and updating! And don't worry about having taken so long... It's worth the wait! Marina & Aida Prue21 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 456 (10/31/04 10:36 pm) Reply Re: WooHoo! -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Ooooh, it's about time you updated!! Great update, I'm so glad Leo is home with his family now! Can't wait to read your ending Esmeralda Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 1851 (11/1/04 12:52 am) Reply RE: UC -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- YAY! You updated!!! I for one don't think you're a terrible person for not updating; just a busy one, and we all get that way. Nor do I think you're stupid--you couldn't be and write such fantastic stuff!! And what a fantastic update it was! I love how you write these characters so much!! Congratulations for coming near to the end of a story, especially after working for so long on it!!! You'd already started it when I first joined the board, and now it's almost done! WOW! I can't say I'm glad it's coming near an end, just happy for you. And I'm also glad that the end of this story doesn't mean the end of the AU! Best of luck with the sequel; I'm sure it will be fantastic!! And please update soon!!! |
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:48:15 GMT -5
CharmedFan12 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 510 (11/2/04 10:25 pm) Reply  -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- A very long update because I love you all! (hehe, that's the greatest face...truly characterizes all of you waiting for me to update... lol!) Blue, you two make me laugh. I'm working on Destiny, I promise! I'll leave a message in that thread just for you. Prue21, thanks. I'm glad Leo's back too. I appreciate your anticipation. Es, Es, Es... You're so nice. You should be looking for the end! You wanna know why? You don't need to be waiting for any more updates from me. You know how I can be. And now your update! A week later, in the green and lush backyard of the Halliwell Manor, Piper and Leo were wed, and all their dreams had come true. The same was for Melinda as well, for she was able to wear jeans, as was the rest of the very small congregation. Leo was simply in a pair of slacks and a button up shirt, with a button undone at the top, and Piper was wearing a simple skirt and top. The wedding was a humble one, conducted by a ghostly Grams, and Piper and Leo were bonded by the sacred ceremony of hand fasting. It was, undoubtedly, the best day of their lives. Leo took them on what could be called their honeymoon on a small, beautiful island in the Caribbean. Melinda could hardly imagine how much fun they were having, and frankly, she really didn’t want to imagine it. She stayed at the manor during the two weeks that they were gone, and orbed to the apartment every morning to get ready for school. She fell behind again with the week that was once again spent Up There, but she couldn’t complain. She was very happy to copy Mike’s notes; or, at least more happy than Mike was to give them. “I PERFECTED those notes. Don’t smudge them.”<br>“Why would I smudge them?”<br>“I dunno. Just don’t.” As she used his notebook to write into her own on the lunch tables, he was sitting next to his notebook on the table with his feet on the bench, snacking on a pretzel stick. “Why don’t you just wave your hands and make it write or something?”<br>“Because that would not only be for personal gain, I would also be at risk of exposing myself,” she said, not taking her eyes off her writing. “Right. I’ll never understand all of that.”<br>“Don’t hurt yourself trying,” she responded, turning the page in both notebooks. “If this whole ‘my parents haven’t seen each other for 15 years and they got married out of the blue’ is difficult and really confusing for me, I can’t imagine how it is for you.”<br>“It’s not that hard. I was there for the whole thing, I kinda get it.”<br>“Well, it’s really confusing from the outside,” he said, taking a chug from his soda. “So you say you’re supposed to kill some dude?” That made Melinda stop writing and look at him. “You know I don’t understand any of this.”<br>“I really don’t like to explain it, because I know how stupid it must sound to you.”<br>“But I’m asking!”<br>“Fine. My destiny is to vanquish the Big Bad. He is known as the Source of All Evil.”<br>“And this isn’t all made up or anything?”<br>“No, even though it sounds like it is.”<br>“So why don’t you do your little white…blue light…thing and just go kick his-”<br>“Because I’m not sure how well I can control my powers, which have been changing the last months. I don’t want to go down there just to have him kick MY butt,” she responded, turning back to the notes. “I’m not in a rush.”<br>“Right… Heck, why on Earth would you be in a rush to kill ‘the Source of All Evil?’” Mike asked, and Melinda almost laughed at his incredible sarcasm. “Because he will send countless minions after her until she does, assuming he knows that she’s after him,” Jamie said, swinging her leg over the bench opposite Melinda and sitting down. “Too true. Last night we had one that sprayed blood and guts all over our clothes. I liked that shirt too. I hope that it washes out.” Jamie started laughing uncontrollably from the expression on Mike’s face, which only became worse when he saw her laughing at him. “What on earth is so funny?!” Mike asked, angrily. What a moment for Hannah and Jenna to come strolling over. “Come on Ricks, did you even look in the mirror this morning?” Jenna asked snottily, and sat on the table in front of Mike, knocking his soda over so that it spread across the table. He shoved her off. “Are you so lonely that you have to come bother us?” he spat, grabbing his notebook off of the table to keep the soda from getting it wet. Jenna smirked at his comment and tapped his face lightly with her hand. “It’s not that we were lonely, we were bored, and we find you very amusing,” she responded with a grin before she climbed off the table and once again stood next to her friend. Melinda didn’t look up from the notes that she was writing, but could almost sense the glare that the Stooges were sending over to Jamie. She sighed. “If you PLEASE don’t mind, will you go bother someone else? I’m trying to get some work done!” Melinda finally said, looking up from her works to the other two girls. “That reminds me Halliwell, where were you when you were gone? We both missed you so much that we wouldn’t leave poor Mikey here alone.”<br>“Ugh. It’s true,” Mike mumbled, glancing up at Melinda from the spot he had been staring at in the table. “So where were you?” Hannah asked again, putting her hands on her hips and shifting what seemed to be all the weight possible onto one leg. “She was ditching! How about that?” Mike spat, very apparently annoyed. “Oh, really? I bet the administration would love to hear that!” Jenna said, the glee shining out from her like a light bulb. “Geez… if she were actually ditching would we tell you?” Mike asked, his eyebrows raised at the obvious logic. “I wasn’t ditching,” Melinda reinforced. “Then where were you? Huh?” Hannah asked again. “Somewhere unreachable,” Jamie mumbled with a grin, and Melinda smiled slightly. She closed her eyes and imagined the moment she set her parents free. “You are really making me choose?” “Yes.” Melinda turned around and looked back at her parents to see them looking intensely at her, hoping, and knowing, that she would make the right decision. “This will be pretty easy,” she muttered, before she smiled. She cleared her throat and announced, so the whole hall would hear, “I wish the punishment be taken off from my parents, and that they be allowed to see each other.”<br>“Are you sure? There is no going back. Your father will live for eternity; you realize this and what he will go through once you both pass on from this life?” Melinda knew that this was what Leo wanted, but the men in front of her made it hard to say yes. She turned around and looked at her dad. “You want to live for eternity in pain and anguish?” she asked him. “I’m going to live forever anyway; I’d rather have the happiness in my memory then the emptiness,” Leo said, sure of what he was saying. 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“Sounds good enough for me,” she commented before responding to the Elder, “Yes. This is what we want.” The feeble Elder leaned forward in his seat so his elbows were on the marble table in front of him. “Leo, Charmed One, please step outside,” he said, and waited until they were out of the chamber before turning his gray eyes back on Melinda. “Tell me, Prophesied, why is it that you choose this? Is it because you have lived your whole life without the whitelighter? Now you have the opportunity to get him back in your life?”<br>“It doesn’t just need to be about me. This is what they want. This is what they’ve wanted since the moment that you first pulled them up here 15 years ago!” The Elder nodded. “What do you think the two of them being together will do?” “What do you mean? What purpose?” The Elder nodded, and Melinda looked down as she thought. “Does it need to have a purpose? They’d be happy. They’d be there for each other, and neither of them would have to hate their lives and their own personal purposes anymore.”<br>“They hated their lives?”<br>“I would if it were me,” Melinda responded honestly. “Do you see love like theirs in your future?” he asked, and Melinda opened her mouth, but closed it quickly. She didn’t know the answer to that question. “Do you understand your destiny?” the feeble Elder asked softly but clearly. “I guess so. The thought is just somewhat overwhelming right now,” she said truthfully. “You mustn’t forget during your journey you will still have family, and friends. Along the path towards absolution you will discover new…” He searched for a word. “Life forces that will help you along your journey.”<br>“What makes you say that?” Melinda asked. The Elder smiled lightly, with a light in his eyes that she had yet seen, and Melinda was astonished. That was the first real sign of Good and Happiness that she had seen from these creatures. It was in that moment that she realized that she was completely wrong about them. “I personally have seen it in your future. I see great things for you.”<br>“You’ve seen my future?” He said nothing to answer the question. “Don’t be hurried. If you hasten, you will weaken yourself. We have realized that ever since the arrival of Leo into your life, and new level of your power has been awakened. Let it grow and form into you. Let yourself control it. If you hasten, you will put yourself at risk.”<br>“Alright,” Melinda said, looking up at the few aged beings with a new understanding. The Elder smiled again. “Go to your parents.”<br>“Thank you,” she replied with a smile, and turned around finally and duplicated the steps that her mother and father had taken only moments ago. She found them holding each other tightly, mixed with happiness and everything other emotion. Leo looked over her mother’s head and caught Melinda’s eyes; eyes that matched his own. They shared a look that made clear that everything would be all right. And it would, for a while anyway. “Yo...Halliwell?” Hannah said with a laugh as she waved her hand in front of Melinda’s face. Melinda did not react shocked, but simply let her eyes move up to Hannah’s smirking face. Losing her patience, she stood up so she could look down at Hannah. “Unless you want to start up more trouble, I suggest that you go do whatever you do somewhere else,” she said. “What kind of trouble are you talking about?” Jenna asked with a grin. “The kind that leaves the two of you in the nurse’s office with concussions,” Melinda said quietly to them. “Don’t think that I’m kidding.” Jenna scoffed. “You don’t need to get all pissy. See you Parks,” Jenna said, glancing over at Jamie before turning around and walking away with Hannah in toe. “Took you long enough to say something like that,” Mike said, using his sweatshirt to wipe the soda off the table. Melinda didn’t say anything, but she smiled, waiting for the end of the day. Esmeralda Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 1857 (11/3/04 1:00 am) Reply Re: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Absolutely totally fantastic job, CF!2! I totally loved it. I love Melinda's reason for her decision; I loved the wedding (and her not wanting to know what was going on during the honeymoon!!), although I hope that Piper's family were able to be there, too (and I hope that the Elders were nice enough to let Patty come down and be real, like they did on the show). I wasn't nuts on the scene with the Stooges, just because I'm not that nuts on teen fic, which that was, but I loved Melinda finally sticking up for herself. I hope she gets a chance to give the Stooges whatfor without getting in trouble for personal gain!! Now i have a question. Is this the end? Coz if it is, I want to be able to write it the review it so richly deserves. I'm so excited about the sequel with Melinda going after The Source with help from the rest of her family (I hope!). If not, PLEASE UPDATE SOON!! CharmedFan12 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 512 (11/3/04 6:46 pm) Reply Re: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Don't worry Es, you'll know when it's the end. Thanks for your review. I can understand how you wouldn't like my Stooges, but I needed to have them in there one last time just to finish them off. You got a pretty good idea of the sequel already, good job. I suppose it wasn't that hard, huh? lol. I want everyone to imagine what happened at the wedding for themselves. Maybe someone could write me their version? That would be neat. I hope some of the rest of you will review soon! I love more then anything to hear from you. The Blue Flamers Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 44 (11/3/04 7:33 pm) Reply Re: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Oooh! WOW! Aaaand.. THEY GOT MARRIED!!! YAY!!! That was a great update! But duh... When isn't an update great? However, we think you know what we meant... Marina & Aida CharmedFan12 Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 513 (11/22/04 10:32 pm) Reply i need one more... -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I need one more review before I can update. That's what I've been waiting for, but I thought I would give you a reminder! Remember, I love hearing from everyone! I mean, that's the reason why it's here, right? So everyone can enjoy my story, and so I can get feedback on how they like it? I dunno, but I love to read those reviews! PLEASE! Esmeralda Charmed Cafe Member Posts: 1945 (11/22/04 11:53 pm) Reply ezSupporter RE: i need one more... -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Why? That's not fair to us who want to read the next part! 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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:49:22 GMT -5
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I'm sorry I'm being unfair Es! I don't want to, I love you guys! Er, girls.
I was wondering where everyone's gone. I'm not around here enough anymore to know that fewer people have been coming. I'm glad you let me know. I'll be more understanding.
School's been busy! I still try and sit down at the computer when I can and write some more goodies for my sequel. It's going alright. I don't have as much written down as I'd hope to after having it started for as long as I have, but it's getting better. I have to warn you all, it won't be so much about P/L, but there wouldn't be a whole lot more to do once they're happy and everything. The only thing left, as the show has shown, is to make them have marital problems, and I REFUSE to do that. It's going to be centered around Melinda, but she's getting to be a better character, I think, more complex with her thoughts and actions. She's fun to write because of it. Anyway, enough about that, on with the original!!! Please enjoy, its coming to that time, a lot sooner then I'd thought. ENJOY!
“Marco!” Melinda called, stepping through the manor, trying to find someone.
“Polo,” a familiar voice said, walking in from the living room. Melinda smiled.
“Hey Sarah! How’ve they been treating you over here?” she asked, getting a hug from the one person who she would always consider her whitelighter.
“Like a queen. How was school?”<br>“School was fine.”<br>“Good, I’m glad to hear it. Everyone’s in the attic. They got a demon trapped up there.”<br>“What happened?”<br>“Demons came by today and paid your aunt a visit. They kept one alive for information.”
“Phoebe’s alright then?”
“Fine, but the demons weren’t. Cole was here for lunch, and well…the demons didn’t get off so well, including their little friend up there,” Sarah said with a smile. “Boy…things are so different now. But not bad. I’m glad I still get to see you all the time.”<br>“I agree.”<br>“Your parents get back tonight?” asked Sarah.
“Yep,” Melinda responded with a grin.
“Looking forward to seeing them?”<br>“Of course!”
“I bet they miss you terribly,” Sarah thought with a chuckle.
“So…demons, eh? What did they want here?” Melinda asked, starting to make her way up the stairs with Sarah right behind her.
“Sent by the Source, we think.”<br>“Great.” They made their way up to the attic; its dark wooded walls contrasted so much with the rest of the welcoming house. The soft heels of her shoes made the aging boards beneath her squeak as she made her way over to the side of the magical cage that the trapped demon was shivering with fear in. A harsh breath was coming through a mouth full of sharp teeth; a mouth that had dark red blood dripping from it. His clawed human-like hands were grasped over a wound in his stomach. The blood blended with the brown and gray like skin that covered half his body, which was accompanied with silvery gray scales that reached over his limbs.
Melinda looked down at him without pity, and could tell that he was once a powerful demon. Across from her were Phoebe and Cole, one who was standing over the Book of Shadows while the latter was crouched near the stones that held the magical cage together. He was shouting questions at the demon menacingly.
“Why did he send you?!” His reply was a groan and a slur from his own language.
“What did he say?” Phoebe asked, and Cole looked at her before he rolled his eyes.
“Nothing nice.”<br>“Hey Mel,” Phoebe said quickly, before looking back at Cole.
“What’s the problem?” she asked making her way around the circular pen.
“He’s refusing to answer anymore of my questions. I think that last shock I gave him was a little bit too much,” Cole said, pointing quickly to the glowing rock near his hand.
“How about I try?” He shrugged and stepped back. She kicked a stone away and walked next to the pathetic form. She held out her hand and lifted up the demon so he was about eye lever with her. His weak legs tried to plant themselves on the ground, but he kept slipping on his own blood. “Will you answer my questions?” she asked, making her question direct and clear.
“Never,” he hissed, spitting blood on her with an evil look in his gray eyes. She moved her hand and let him fly into a wall a few feet behind him. She wiped the blood off her face with her hand and made her way over to the moaning body in a pile near the wall. She held out her hand again and picked him up so she could see him better.
“Answer our questions, and this doesn’t have to hurt,” she said simply.
“I only answer to the Source,” he hissed, while blood fell out from between his teeth. Ever since the large battle in the house, she had no patience for demons, and she threw him back over by Cole and sighed. She glanced at Sarah, who stood near the doorway with her arms crossed over her chest. She said nothing, but simply watched the near death demon attempt to get to his feet once more. She walked over by Cole again, while requesting an energy ball from him. She took the energy ball and held it near her hand with her power so the demon could see it clearly.
“Go ahead, finish me,” he said, his eyes focused on the bright light from Cole’s energy ball.
“I’m not going to. I’m going to let you go, once you answer my uncle’s questions.” Everyone in the room looked shocked at her, including the evil being at her feet.
“What do you want to know?”
“Why did the Source send you?” Cole asked angrily.
“He wanted me to take out her family,” the demon said, turning his eyes towards Melinda to show who he was talking about.
“Why did he want to do that?” Phoebe interjected.
“He doesn’t tell us everything.”<br>“So you went to give up your life to the Charmed Ones without a reason?”<br>“He said she’s strong, and he wanted us to weaken this thing; this girl,” he said in his retched voice, while looking back up to Melinda. Melinda’s mouth became thin as she watched the exchange, and Cole glanced over to her to see if she had any last questions. She had none, and she threw her arm out to let the energy ball fly into one of the demon’s arms that he was using to push himself up one last time. The demon’s shriek filled the attic as he fell back down into his own puddle of blood, and pulled what was left of his arm to his chest.
“Let the Source see this as a warning for the next time he wants to harm the Charmed Ones and their family. Now go,” Melinda said, her eyes glaring down at the demon as he followed her instructions and shimmered away.
“Nice finish,” Cole said, crouching back down again to pick up the magic stones. Phoebe sighed and closed the cover to the Book of Shadows.
“The Source sure won’t be happy.”<br>
In the cold, damp darkness of the Underworld, the Source stood menacingly over a cowering, whimpering form at his feet.
“I-I’m-m sor-sorry, Sir…I tr-tried…” the demon stammered, holding his bloody gray-scaled stump of an arm.
“Who did this?” the Source asked, reaching down and digging his nails into the flesh of the demon’s stump and pulling him to his feet. The screams of the creature must have been heard by half of the Underworld.
“The girl…!” the demon cried, and started sobbing from the pain. The Source’s head tilted slightly as he examined the demon’s face. He looked over the creature in front of him and noticed blood covered most of his body, and a wound in his abdomen was still bleeding severely. “She-she said tha-a-t this is wha- happens when…” He groaned. “When you-you do that…”
The Source dropped the demon and wiped off the blood onto his draping robes. He slowly pulled off his hood and the demon gasped and stammered blessings to the Source in his own language as he saw his face.
The Source’s endlessly reaching black eyes looked down at the demon before he said fiercely, “This…is only the beginning.”<br>
The End, until the Beginning. Await the sequel, "The Prophesied"!
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Post by oddball7 on Jan 9, 2005 22:49:56 GMT -5
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Great finish. I can't wait for the sequal
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Thanks Kowa. As I look at my last update, it ended rather abruptly, didn't it? Sorry. It looks better in my computer. Well, if you have any questions, I'll be glad to try and answer them, including what I've figured out for the sequel. Until then, though, PLEASE leave a note! Longer the better.
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HEY, ALL OF YOU CHARMED FANS OUT THERE, THERE IS A NEW HOT EXCITING CHARMED GROUP IN YAHOO GROUPS, TO JOIN SIMPLY GO TO tv.groups.yahoo.com/group/charmedishot/
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Excuse me? Why on earth is that in my thread? That really is not the place for it to go. Is it possible for you to remove it?
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I agree totally! That is thoroughly rude and uncalled for! CharmedFan12, if I were you, I would write to Andrea in the first forum and let her know, so she can lock that message out.
Also, I could've sworn that I had left a message for you regarding the ending of Unspeakable Consequences, but I don't see it.
So I'll repeat what I said then -- absolutely totally fantastic job with this entire story; it's truly one of my favorites on the Forum. I thought the ending was perfect -- just the way that a season of Charmed (which is what I'm looking at this as) would end.
I'm looking forward to the sequel. I understand why Melinda must be the main character, but as I said before, I *do* hope that you also include your other characters, since I love them as much as I love Melinda. If it's too much about her and her friends and it turns into a teen fic like your other one, I know I won't enjoy it as much. But don't change it just to suite me -- as proven with your other story, a lot of other Fan Ficcers like tht type of story.
BEST OF LUCK WITH IT, and now I'm off to the Fan Fic Review thread to give this story the review it so richly deserves!!
mkp3mom
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(12/6/04 10:27 pm)
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Good ending Charmed 12 - Looking forward to the sequel! Is there something special about the Source's appearance that made the demon start that babbling worship? Just want to make sure I read into that correctly.
CharmedFan12
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(12/8/04 8:26 pm)
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Oh, no. It's just that the Source doesn't show his face really at all. I don't remember why in the show his hood was down in that one episode (it's been a while), but I would imagine that very, very few demons have seen it. If you were a demon like that guy, and you and no one else had seen the almightly Source's face, wouldn't you have a few omgs to say?
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Esmeralda
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Post by Esmeralda on Oct 6, 2008 0:27:02 GMT -5
All of the discussions of who people could end up with in an alternate universe reminded me of this fic, one of my all-time favorites!
So I HAD to bump it to the front!
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? ) seemed very realistic...awkward at first, but then some pillow fights later, it was actually getting somewhere. But probably because the Elders have NOTHING BETTER TO DO...they decided to make them all miserable ALL OVER AGAIN...wasn't 15 YEARS good enough for you?! You know what...I don't care about their "rules" because I really do think they HAVE NO IDEA what being human is actually like. 
