*POETRY SLAM!*

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heres another one ---- Lovefool (i was inspired to write this one listening to country music LOL)

I was riding in my car
trying to catch a dream
a dream so distant so far
that she could not be seen
she was in fourth gear and gone
before i could make her stay
but now that she's really gone
the dream's begun to fade
she thinks i'm gonna cry
she thinks i'll be wondering why
but she's wrong
a lifetime isn't all that long
If she thinks I'll be blue
then she's like the morning dew
that will dissipate
and at any rate
she's wrong
i'm thinking of moving on
and it ain't the same song

I was walking down that old yellow-brick road
trying to find a new way
but the end is nowhere near, i'm not even close
i remember the time she took me down to the riverside
and like the radio says, there was a pair of lying eyes
i'd been seduced into believing my life was something it wasn't
into going somewhere I shouldn't
but i'd turned my back on my friends
i reasoned they'll not be there with me till the end
she will, i just knew
but that sudden hue
ought to have told me everything
but who was i to think twice
it felt so nice
so there I was chugging along
her wish was my command
but it was everything she'd ever planned
and I was a fool
all I did was drool

So there's my story
I fell in all my glory
down the drain and down the hill
I've had enough I reckoned
I'd have to turn it around
but its easier said than done
vacuum don't make no sound
And that was when i saw the rainbow
and fell down all over again
love's such a bitter pill
it was a lofty goal to attain
and a task at that for me to refrain
from thinking about that which had brought me so much misery

But spring is eternal
It will come again
when the ashes of winter have been buried under a feet of snow
and when even the darkest shadow seems to glow
then i'd have come full circle
and she'll be back
i've felt her on my skin
floating in a pool rippling with passion
but when I look into the mirror
all I see is an ashen
face that begs for pity
for she destroyed me where I stood
and even if I could, I cannot help the feeling
and so its a deja vu all over again as a rule
for I am a lovefool

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hey guys i would love some comments ---- check out my poems over the last 2-4 pages and post constructive criticism ppl --- empath, john, P34e, hellfire, kiren, silverlily, holly and evry1 else too!

[P34e aka Jezzy]

isienna10 said:

here's one i wrote sometime back --- kinda drawn from experience --- its a dad leaving behind his son ---- Apple of my eye ....... dedicate this poem to P34e --- love ur child like theres no tomo.

There he was, waving his heart at me
There he was, saying things that were meant to be
He's standing there alone, he will do things right
He's standing there alone, he won't give up without a fight

But I'm leaving on a jet plane today
he's crying
but he puts on his brightest smile
he says he is trying
and he tells me, "its okay daddy, ur leaving just for a while."

But i can't get over this titanic struggle within
i can't bring myself to say goodbye
it hurts me more than it'll ever show
i love him like no other
he's my son -- the apple of my eye

Sometimes there was fishing
then there were the times when we climbed those trees
and then there was the swimming
we'd keep staring at the birds and the bees
we'd go wild out there in the wild
we'd fight and i'd let him win
we'd talk about angels
we'd dance and we'd sing
But now he tells me, "Daddy
don't you worry i'll be fine
i'll take care of myself
and you got to catch the plane on time."

But can't cross this river of pain
I can't bring myself to say goodbye
it hurts me more than it'll ever show
the more i sway, the harder it grows
Night don't give way to the morning light
the tears inside i cannot hide
I love him like no other - he's the apple of my eye

The times i cherish the most
the times spent inside the womb of hope
outside the palm of fear or despair
the times that i really cared

He'd ask me,
"Daddy, why does the sun set?
and why do the birds fly?
Why do the children play?
and why do you kiss me goodnight?"

It took me a while to realize
here was something I cannot deny
he means the world to me and I hope
his love won't fade away
and his bright-eyed grin will stay
till I'm a ghost of my past self, a spectre of my present
till my last hour, till my dying day

But what is this I am about to do
I cannot, i will not, but I should
stay.

So there's no need to say goodbye
I'm not going to go away
Night spawns the morning light
I'll be there come what may
I'll hold him close and I will fight
the tears that threaten to flow
I'll keep all the pain in the world for myself
and give him the rest and I will make it so

and now I look back at all those years
the sands of time that have flown by
wherever he may be, wherever he is
he will always be on my mind

There he sleeps in peace
tears of joy i cry
he sleeps with his hand in mine
I love him like no other ---- he is my son, the apple of my eye

Thank You isienna. I am literally crying right now . You have tapped in to exactly how I feel about my daughter. She is my life, the last drop of blood in my veins is hers, the last breathe in my lungs is hers, the last piece of my soul in my body is hers. I really appreciate you dedicating this to me. You are truly an amazing poet, to take the feelings out of your heart and place them on paper . You are even more amazing to see that in me and send this one out to me.

Thank you again and thank you for seeing how much I truly love , and adore her.

[Miss. Hellfire]

isienna--you know i think you're woderful. you make your words come alive and tell a story. everyone on this thread has their own special gift, and that is yours.

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thx P34e and hellfire --- it is greatly appreciated.

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here are the poems that were created in the MAKE A POEM THREAD by multiple collaborators:

1. DREAMS - by HELLFIRE, HOLLYPOP, SOUL OF THE EMPATH, JMASONII, ISIENNA10

dreams within dreams eating you up inside
so many fears i cannot hide
shadows close in, light disappears
if there is a god, he d@mn sure isn't here
my soul burns forever with a tormented yearning
It seems as though my very essence is burning,
my internal demons i can't escape
their hushed whispers speak of my fate
they speak of whats to come and the path i shall tread
I must possess great courage on that path of dread,
so i can embrace the life that lies ahead
and then the bottomless darkness swallows me whole
with all the pain of life left untold,
till i gather what i have left of my sanity
and from this smothering embrace i will be free
Though this hellish shadow makes me flee
brings me out of space and time, gives me a sublime course that I cannot break, I can't wait again to see your face, no longer, don't make me wait
The darkness of this dream seems to be my only fate,
but hope remains --- the hope that dreams to come will be harbingers of times that are great.
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2. LIVING LIFE TO FIGHT - by HELLFIRE, ISIENNA10, HOLLYPOP, SOUL OF THE EMPATH

Living life to fight, I dwell in the darkness to see the light, but if this isn't right, I guess I'll cry to the night to help me
struggling to face the day
though I cannot put this any other way, I no longer want to fight
but the struggles come incessantly to my doorstep and i can do nothing but try
and try i do, hard as it may be
from this self-imposed hell i'll never be free
so i march upright to the beats of the pain
holding onto the life that keeps me sane
although all my efforts may very well be in vain
I close my eyes, open my soul and with a faint heart set it free to fly
But as I fall to the ground and die, there are no more tears I can cry, so now I see where fighting has gotten me
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3. DISCOVERY - by HOLLYPOP, HELLFIRE, SOUL OF THE EMPATH, ISIENNA10

It was today morning when I found myself
naked, alone, lost from you
all pretenses wiped away, all walls broken down
accepting the judgement of pure beauty of Truth
as i lay motionless, prone in my despair
devoid of thought...
devoid of all pain...
devoid of all care...
devoid of life
deviod of love
I stare in the air and feel uncaring whispers...
can anyone hear me - is anyone there?
but my voice richochets around the room and comes back to me
and will continue to do so until I learn how to break free
free and unbound to chase my hearts' melody
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[hollypop]

isienna.. I'm trying to catch up and read all that you have written. I so like 'Lovefool'.. believe it or not, I was actually catching a tune and picturing images in my head, like a music video. Your writings are wonderful.... but I do want to read more. And I will, I promise

Thank you for putting up our collaborations!! That was very sweet of you

[silverlily]

I usually don't post here, because I don't write. At all (no diary, stories, poems etc.) But isienna wanted some constructive criticism, so here I'm.

p34e said:

*feels blessed to be among such talented and beautiful souls*

p34e just described how I feel.
I love to read your poems, although I don't understand all the words. But I think it's good. I have know a poem I absolutely love and I don't understand the half of it. I just like the sound of the words. Your poems are all like that.

hollypop said:

*UNTITLED*

Through the tears of realization
your hopes and dreams soon fade away

You learn to grow with all the walls
getting higher everyday

And when all your memories and fears
exhaust you through the night

The spirit of your being meets the wind
for one last flight

To the waiting arms of knowledge that
the wise ones have to give

Release the chains that bind your
soul to pain,
set it free to finally live

Hollypop, this one is great! jmasonii, To Be Human, wonderful. Empath, I love Stairway and a This Little Boy Blue. isienna, The Rain was one of the first I read, it's amazing. And I like your last one Lovefool too.

[hollypop]

isienna10 said:

here's another one--

THE RAIN

it rained that night
rain came pouring down
washing away some doubts, germinating some more
i was in a dilemma
is it better to have loved and lost or not to have loved at all
i ran, i walked and then i crawled
it hurt
i wept to myself as i stood on the bridge
the river flowing below me sprayed mist all around
the sky was bleeding
but i had still not found
the answers to my questions
they hovered at the edge of my mind
a little too distant for me to grasp
to comprehend
for i had loved her
loved her so
and all i'd do was think about her
i could not let her go
but she was in the arms of another
there was thunder
and lightning lit up the sky,
freezing the scene in my mind for one bleached-bright moment
i felt raw emotion
i felt pain, i felt anger, i felt despair, i felt desperation
lingering all over me and within
but i just stood there on the bridge on that rainy night
and tried to wipe away the memory that came flooding back
the memory of that brutal attack
on my heart
how could she do this to me
and how could she be
with another
didn't the words we told one another mean something
something to be cherished for eternity
something that could have been wasn't
but i din't want to believe
words din't come out right
and i told her to disappear
to never come back to me again
for she had spawned an ever-lasting pain
that could not be cured
she looked at me, teary-eyed
but they were more than that
the spark in them had vanished long ago
she said i had longed to let you know
that we could not be
and could not have what we wanted
there was pity in those eyes
and as i cried
she walked away
into the rainy and stormy night
and i never saw her again

isienna.. again, when I read this and I read it often, I just want to cry. My heart feels like it's breaking.. your words are so emotionally charged in this poem.

It's one of my favorites of yours, hun

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awwwwwwwwwwwwww!!!!!!!!!!!! all yu guys thnk yu so much ---- hellfire, holly, silverlily, P34e: love u guys!!! thk yu.

[~Empath~]

Here are some song lyrics that I wrote, I hope you guys enjoy!!!

MY HISTORY

My History is my future
My History is my past
My History is something that will always last
My History is something I will never keep to myself
My History is something I can share with someone else

My History
Is something that can help me stand
Something that can help me be a better man
My History
Is something that’ll never go astray
Something that will help me one day

My History is my cause
My History is my effect
My History is something that will help with my success
My History is something I will always have inside
My History is something that gives me everlasting pride

My History
Is something that can help me stand
Something that can help me be a better man
My History
Is something that’ll never go astray
Something that can help me one day

I said my history is the path that guides my way
My history is something affects me everyday
And though the past is not here the future is bright
Because my history is that guiding light
Oh..Ooh

My (My) History (My history, YEAH!)
Is something that will help me stand
Something that can help me be a better amn
My (My) History (My History, YEAH!)
Is something that’ll never go astray
Something that can help me one day… (2x)

[~Empath~]

Let It All Out

I write with this paper and pen
Letting out all this pain within
I have loved you since I’ve first seen you
But now I have to walk away to realize truth

So I let it all out to release inner demons
And I let it all out to heal
I know that you’ll never love me
So I have to move on and deal
Even though I loved you so
What we had wasn’t real
So I let it all out to let you go
Cause it no longer matters how I feel

Letting words flow out of my heart
Trying to release this love so that you may depart
And the healing work can start
Now I know you might never leave me
But this love can no longer be

So I let it all out to release inner demons
And I let it all out to heal
I know that you’ll never love me
So I have to move on and deal
Even though I loved you so
What we had wasn’t real
So I let it all out to let you go
Cause it no longer matters how I feel

Please, powers that be
Release me, set me free
Take the binds away
Let me live today

So I let it all out to release inner demons
And I let all out to heal
I know that you’ll never love me
So I have to move on and deal
Even though I loved you so
What we had wasn’t real
So I let it all out to let you go
Cause it no longer matters how I feel

How I feel…

[~Empath~]

Fire and Wind

Libra. Wind or air is my sign
Aries, Fire. Opposing me on the other side
Compatibility isn’t on our side
So I leave it up to my spirit guide

Fire and Wind
Deep Within
I can feel you power within me
Fire and Wind
Give me reprieve
Leave me here to see
What will become of me

Balance scales, justice peace and harmony
Ram who’s angered, stubborn and in all degrees
Six degrees of separation
180 degrees is our relation

Fire and Wind
Deep Within
I can feel your power within me
Fire and Wind
Give me reprieve
Leave me here to see
What will become of me

The wind blows the fire and sets it ablaze
It glazes nature sweet mystery maze
But that’s why fire and wind can’t be
Destruction is what they leave in their paths

Fire and Wind
Deep Within
I can feel your power within me
Fire and Wind
Give me reprieve
Leave me here to see
What will become of me (2x)

[~Empath~]

Away, Away

Someone come here and take me away
Bring me something new
Cause I can’t live for today
So I need to get away

Away, Away
Take me out of this place
Away, Away
I want to see a new face
I want to see something new
Bring me out of the same blue skies
Don’t lie to me just be with me
Allow me live in the now
And take me away

Bothered by business
Why can’t I get away
I’m tired of living in tomorrow
I just wanna be here today
So please someone come release me
And take me away

Away, Away
Take me out of this place
Away, Away
I want to see a new face
I want to see something new
Bring me out of the same blue skies
Don’t lie to me just be with me
Allow me live in the now
And take me away

Take Me Away
Take Me Away
Take Me Away, Away, Away, Away, Away!!!

Away, Away
Take me out of this place
Away, Away
I want to see a new face
I want to see something new
Bring me out of the same blue skies
Don’t lie to me just be with me
Allow me live in the now
And take me away

[~Empath~]

Saving Me

Confused, used, abuse, and battered bruised
Crying for release, solace and peace
To bring me through the shadows of my spirit
Wash me clean and make me whole

You gave me an answer
Please open up my heart
Heal the confusion
Let ruthlessness depart
Wicked and wretched shall no longer be
Because I’m saved and I am free
I don’t understand everything
But everything will come in its due time
Though there are answers that I seek
Seeking truth is within me

Walking through the Valley of Pain
Shackled down and torn, the acid rain
Came down from the sky and burned me
But his love came down and freed me
Took me from the storm, he heard me call

You gave me an answer
Please open my heart
Heal the confusion
Let ruthlessness depart
Wicked and wretch shall no longer be
Because I’m saved and I’m free
When I cried you answered my call
You saved me from the fall

And I know you love me
Oh…
And I know that you care for me
I can’t explain how you make me feel
There’s only one word to describe you
GOD, your love is so amazing
So pure and true

You gave me an answer
Please open my heart
Heal the confusion
Let ruthlessness depart
Wicked and wretch shall no longer be
Because I’m saved and I’m free
When I cried you answered my call
You saved me from the fall

You saved me from it all…

[~Empath~]

Rain

Drip, Drop, tears fall from my eyes
And I cry
Doves fly to bring me peace
But I lie down in the deepest sorrow
Making my bed inside of pain
Beyond the window I hear the rain.

Rain, wash me clean of this
Rain, release me from his
Touch, his speech and his mind
Take me away from his kindness
Rain, give me power to move on
Rain, allow me to be strong
Mix yourself within my tears
Make me whole and take away my fears

Love becomes a withered rose
The thorns they make me bleed
Blood runs from the sacred parts of me
And the hurt is just too much to bear
I just need to know you’re here
Making my bed inside of Pain
Beyond the window I hear the rain

Rain, wash me clean of this
Rain, release me from his
Touch, His speech and his mind
Take me away from his tender kindness
Rain, give me power to move on
Rain, allow me to be strong
Mix yourself with my tears
Make me whole and take away my fears

Oh this rain flows from my eyes
And I cry
Dove’s fly to bring me peace
Making my bed inside of pain
Beyond the window I hear the rain

Rain, wash me clean of this
Rain, release me from his
Touch, His Speech and his mind
Take me away from his tender kindness
Rain, give me power to move on
Rain, allow me to be strong
Mix yourself with my tears
Make me whole and take away my fears..

Take Away my fears…
Bottled up all these years

[Miss. Hellfire]

empathic said:

Rain

Drip, Drop, tears fall from my eyes
And I cry
Doves fly to bring me peace
But I lie down in the deepest sorrow
Making my bed inside of pain
Beyond the window I hear the rain.

Rain, wash me clean of this
Rain, release me from his
Touch, his speech and his mind
Take me away from his kindness
Rain, give me power to move on
Rain, allow me to be strong
Mix yourself within my tears
Make me whole and take away my fears

Love becomes a withered rose
The thorns they make me bleed
Blood runs from the sacred parts of me
And the hurt is just too much to bear
I just need to know you’re here
Making my bed inside of Pain
Beyond the window I hear the rain

Rain, wash me clean of this
Rain, release me from his
Touch, His speech and his mind
Take me away from his tender kindness
Rain, give me power to move on
Rain, allow me to be strong
Mix yourself with my tears
Make me whole and take away my fears

Oh this rain flows from my eyes
And I cry
Dove’s fly to bring me peace
Making my bed inside of pain
Beyond the window I hear the rain

Rain, wash me clean of this
Rain, release me from his
Touch, His Speech and his mind
Take me away from his tender kindness
Rain, give me power to move on
Rain, allow me to be strong
Mix yourself with my tears
Make me whole and take away my fears..

Take Away my fears…
Bottled up all these years

You are simply amazing.

[~Empath~]

The Power of Me

The Power of Me is diminishing
I have no strength to fight
Allow the blanket of darkness to cover me
And hide me within this night
But there’s an old saying that what you do in the dark
Shall come into the light

Loving Powers reach me
Take me away and teach me
Teach me your ways
Innocence is what we’ll play
We reach in but we don’t see
The Power of Me, can’t set me free

The Power of Me is daunting
I carry this heavy load upon myself
Burdens, Regrets and The Past
The hurt and pain of everyone else
Dropping the load, I start back over again
But I no longer have the strength within

Loving Powers reach me
Take me away and teach me
Teach me you your ways
Innocence is what we’ll play
We reach in but we don’t see
The Power of Me, can’t set me free

The Skies are black and cloudy
Confusion is misty
I can’t see, I’m dying
I fall even though I’m trying
But I can’t take away this pain
So why do I go through this again

Loving Powers reach me
Take me away and teach me
Teach me your ways
Innocence is what we’ll play…

Loving Powers reach me
Take me away and teach me
Teach me your ways
Innocence is what’ll we’ll play
We reach in but we don’t see
The Power of Me, can’t set me free (2x)

[~Empath~]

Bloom

The earth, it brings me harmonious light
As the flowers bloom in this moonlight
Glistening stars find their way into my heart
As I look up at this fiery night

If I could be a flower
I would be a Lily
Or maybe a Dahlia
Oh, isn’t that silly
Though within the earth, ignorance cannot be comprised
While we all bloom, shedding off all of our lies

The earth, it gives me a True Name
I know that through nature things are never the same
We look at seasons as they change
Each year they bring out a different range
Though I feel emotions from each life that’s born
Through the earth’s power, evil is scorned

If I could be a tree
I would be a Weeping Willow
Or maybe a Yarrow
Through will I ever fall below?
Though within the earth, life is eternity
While we all bloom, earth allows us to be

A Rock never moves
So we all know earth cannot be removed
Not by our hand, even though we are destroyers
The earth is like a mother, we are its children who she soothes
Our nature is foul we are not giving
But Earth is always forgiving

If I could be the sky
Would I want my color to be blue?
Why would I want it any other way
We are fragile creatures, in our design, we pass away
Though within the earth, we can speak to generations
While we all bloom, we all through roots have a connetion

[~Empath~]

hellfire said:

empathic said:

Rain

Drip, Drop, tears fall from my eyes
And I cry
Doves fly to bring me peace
But I lie down in the deepest sorrow
Making my bed inside of pain
Beyond the window I hear the rain.

Rain, wash me clean of this
Rain, release me from his
Touch, his speech and his mind
Take me away from his kindness
Rain, give me power to move on
Rain, allow me to be strong
Mix yourself within my tears
Make me whole and take away my fears

Love becomes a withered rose
The thorns they make me bleed
Blood runs from the sacred parts of me
And the hurt is just too much to bear
I just need to know you’re here
Making my bed inside of Pain
Beyond the window I hear the rain

Rain, wash me clean of this
Rain, release me from his
Touch, His speech and his mind
Take me away from his tender kindness
Rain, give me power to move on
Rain, allow me to be strong
Mix yourself with my tears
Make me whole and take away my fears

Oh this rain flows from my eyes
And I cry
Dove’s fly to bring me peace
Making my bed inside of pain
Beyond the window I hear the rain

Rain, wash me clean of this
Rain, release me from his
Touch, His Speech and his mind
Take me away from his tender kindness
Rain, give me power to move on
Rain, allow me to be strong
Mix yourself with my tears
Make me whole and take away my fears..

Take Away my fears…
Bottled up all these years

You are simply amazing.

THANK YOU SO MUCH HELLFIRE!!! your words are extremely kind...